Bondwriter

Yes, another fine chapter. Lots of hard facts, but the little couple makes it all the more emotional. And yes, Brian certainly has tough moments ahead.

Another story: Cal. OK, Nexis Pas did it again: he wrote a very short story linked above. It's a fine scene telling of a whole life story of actors. Most excellent writing. Not comedy this time, though there's humor, and not much sex. But this is a lesson in writing. I wish Nexis would join here; I realize I enjoy British writers a lot too.Some weird ethnic prejudice, I guess.

Or run from a mob that wants to lynch a hippie werewolf! (Just kidding, couldn't resist this vicious little attack. I'm hairline challenged myself, and hence need to take a little revenge...)

Damn! Just as we were about to know more from Dex. I hope Eric did not manage to get his hands on a firearm and take his own life. Man, Steve and Chris, review your knots! Didn

We all gather to dance around and wish you a HAPPY BIRTHDAY!

I'd say you'll get readers for a story regardless of the theme. Develop your characters so they are attractive to the readers. If you like these female characters and want to have live in your mind's little theater, it should turn out OK. Flesh them out with habits, mannerisms, phrases... Then focus on scenes. Don't rush into the action as much as you did in The Escape, but think of grabbing the reader by laying out coherent, personal scenes that follow the plot, even if basic.

The best to you in these times of hardships with your mom, Carl. I hope writing a new story will get you in a much better mood, and that you can sustain it for a while before you hit the road again once your wrist has healed.

Not sure all of it works for me, but I like the opening stanza and the last two verses a lot. I really hope to see more poetry from this author.

Some beings cannot pass a pun when they see it. I didn't know hooved ones belonged to this category. I was wondering of the scandinavian/ italian mix was a conscious choice by the author, or if his characters came up as they are.

I didn't see chapter 14 advertised; maybe it's a blessing since I could read chapter 15 right after and see Aaron out of jail. There's enough moving drama in your story not to add more through having to wait! The plot develops well, and I hope Bill Epstein and his old goat of a friend will find out who the reckless driver was. The whole arrest/ jail episode is quite nightmarish. But the adults in the boys' environment are mostly nice people. I'm glad Brian's parents change a bit their minds, but they seem to do so very fast. It's plausible that faced with such a dramatic event they would indeed adapt quickly and see things in a new light, but the conversation between them, with Brian's mom going really far sounds a bit over the top to me. Still a very nice story that says a few things about real life through a cleverly made fiction. We'll see what happens in rehab, too. Keep it coming, especially if the worst is over. I hope I'll smile a bit more later on, since the last few chapters got me to shed quite a few tears.

It was meant as a joke. The three people who have had a look at the excerpt of my story posted here will have realized the fun of the tie-up fetish for me happens i between consensual players, whose aim is not to bring the partner to complete servitude. Of course, for a long fiction, it's difficult to have characters not playing tricks to each other, but what would fiction be without a little drama? But to me, pain is a major turn-off in erotica. It's still a fine piece of writing, but I found it quite disturbing. It is about the twisted relationship between a writer and one of his readers who plays mind games with him. But once again, who's in control? A very unique piece of fiction. I definitely recommend starting with the lighter stories. And yes, if you're underage, DO NOT read Story for Mike and Story for Matthew.

Thanks a lot for your in-depth analysis. The real-life events comment was a shameless marketing trick I learned at Caprine U. It was no lie, but intended to intrigue; glad it worked! The old guy in the poem claimed he was the real-life model for Rambo. He was living in the same motel turned into apartments I did in Iowa City. I found out later David Morrell, who wrote First Blood, had actually been the guy's neighbor. So there could have been some truth to his claim. But well, Rambo had turned into a pathetic flabby drunk. He actually offered to hook me up with the prostitutes he knew! I declined. This whole evening at the laundromat still sticks as one of these weird, uncomfortable moments that also add a little spice to life. It was also quite different from the drunk-in-a-bar encounter a lot of us have experienced all too many times. I got stuck until the whole laundry thing was over, plus I was two or three miles away from home. The very exotic environment with the big TV, the bar, the pinball machines (this was 10 years ago); it was inspirational at least for this.

Adam's Song, by Blink 182. I can't wait for my checks to come in the mail!

Can you be logged under two identities in Live Chat? I really have NO CLUE WHATSOEVER what you guys are talking about.

So what's going on for Steph and Ben? Any news about them coming out to their hockey friends? Is poor Mathieu still forced to glut on starch and fat because the boys leave him on his own, locked inside Ben's room? The readers want to know! They have a right to!

I've heard the people in Montreal were about to launch a surprise attack on Geneva to plunder their stocks of chocolate. Why don't they just stick to maple syrup? I agree to a certain point. It's a kind of chicken/ egg thing: are they an attractive couple because they're put in the middle of some major adventures, or are the adventures breathtaking because they're lived by a cute couple?

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Go check out this guy's movies. Then you'll find AI exciting. My problem with most reality TV is that it seems to exist to format people's brain for a fascist world in which 99 people exist for one to shine. This sucks. Big time.

I didn't see American Idol, but we have an equivalent program. It seems humiliation and scorn are the basic elements that drive this type of show (see Krista's post above). Plus the jury people feuding are also a feature of this show. So using rumors/ innuendoes are just a way to get the show going. Do they avoid making fun of people's background in general?

I got around to reading chapters 2&3. I agree with CJames about Zack disposing of George's clothing. This is not too mean and still he may get his point across. Gio is the liar/ cheater, obviously, so he's the one to be taught a lesson. From the narrative and the very end of chapter 3, it doesn't look like the Zack/Gio situation is going to work out fine and dandy. Gio has the whole "I can't help it, it's in my genes" attitude that prevents him from changing or improving. On the other hand, we've got this wonderfully drawn character Jeremy: a kind, responsible, loving soul. Handsome both outside and inside. Still wondering about his sexual leanings. Raised by two wonderful loving men. Well, well, where can it go from there?

Yes, you're right about the soothing, hypnotic style of the story. Substance and form. Well done. And you're right again about it being for mature audiences. I'd advise starting reading A Dark and Stormy Night, which is lighter though it deals with similar fetishes and obsessions. And Brighton Rock, still having some of the same themes got me laughing out loud many times. Fot those who enjoy British humor. (Now I wonder; three posts in this thread? Is there some subliminal message hidden inside the text forcing me to praise it? )

Yeah, all the important things have been said above. The whole "mood swings" thing is typical of abusers' manipulative ways. You may definitely stop all this without breaking the law. Not saying it'll be easy either.

Switzerland, its banks, its chocolate, home of the Red Cross, a neutral country that always had a great role in dire times of global conflict. A model of direct democracy and prosperity. With its peace-loving, quiet and friendly citizens... who can't wait to see people shot down and nice guys engaging into murder. Has this whole world gone CRAZY! Am I the only one to give a F... about the F...ing rules?* *Walter Sobchak, in The Big Lebowski

Look at it again. Wait for the end. Read the credits. I may also save you three minutes (though it's an entertaining moment), and repeat what I said above: "Yes, irony, as opposed to coppery , was involved in this whole fake trailer. But Nicholas Cage would be a wonderful Richard the Second." "But I'd advise watching Conan the Barbarian which is a great epic. With great pecs. And which is quoted in this spoof's credits." I really didn't know if it was for real until the end. Though I didn't see Arnold exactly in a Leslie Nielsen type role. And the tributes to previous Hamlets kind of give it away. Otherwise it is masterfully done.

I feel your pain about no longer having a ledge... You crack me up, Kevin. And give me ideas for further adventures... I usually put the washcloths with another laundry load, so they might be dry or wet, it doesn't matter. They just don't go through the hamper. I usually put towels in the hamper the day after I used them so they have time to dry. If a towel/ washcloth takes more than 24 hours to dry, your bathroom has a venting problem.