Dan South

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The jar is not just a jar I suspect. Wonderfully engaging beginning. I’m definitely following along.

Although I would love to read more about JCA and Ethan I knew this was marked ‘complete’ when I started reading it. At no point did I expect this to end with a laugh but, for me, it did. A teen boy is a teen boy and young John is having a tantrum felt around the world! Good for him. An imaginative and enjoyable read. Thank you!

The world’s greatest mind resides in wine country where I’ve only killed brain cells. Great detail in the description of the compound. Looking forward to meeting John.

Your new story is sure to draw attention to this one as well. This too is a very creative and intriguing story concept. JCA is sure to be a test of Ethan’s, well, everything. Patience likely to be high on the list of character attributes tested. Excited to read on!

Henry seems to be discovering the truth in Tomas saying “It never goes well for solo off-plainers.” I’m hooked!

I love the repetition, and resolve, of “time for a run”.

I’m back to having so many questions. Deeply intriguing installment.

“Given enough time, habit always defeated honor.” I have to wonder if that might apply to more than the workplace.

That was an amazing trip with the death magician. Amazing.

Love the dedication on the story home page. My dad and I always counted the number of rail cars as a train passed. A great memory you stirred to the surface, thank you.

Commenting because I chose wow when it is equally haha ❤️

It’s the imagery you create ❤️

Ah, so…um…the intimacy. Josh is more than a work buddy. He has known, knows, Ben is not a throwaway. How do they move forward? Cards completely on the table. Ben laid it out. It’s out there. Beautiful. Bed-in-a-bag. Toiletries! Would have been more intense if mom was aware according to Josh. She’ll know soon enough. Beautiful. School? Gus has it handled from his end. Beautiful! Mom works at the school, yeah? Glad Gavin is close at hand. Beautiful… So. Much. Beauty.

#10! Rest in power kitty kitty.

Benefits of a second reading? You named his manager Karen! You continue to amaze me 😂 Karens are global?

Nah, lol. You know he’ll live in our hearts same place he already resides. What if he has a Gus connection? Can’t ignore Gus catching on quickly, right? Both guys know the system.

Yeah he is. He sure is. I drew a sharp breath when I read that familiar, favorite line then emancipation made it slip my mind. ❤️

I was engaged in my most frequent form of self harm, checking email before bed, when I saw this had posted. I’ll retire with a teary smile. Hopeful and fearful. Beauty can be born from pain. I think, dear Author, you were talked into the Gavin crossover and it suits the storyline well because of how you’ve written Gavin since his first appearance. Maybe you’ll tell Gavin’s story too? Love Ben. Want his happiness to materialize. #teamben

Well…cerulean is my own blue hue I’m told. So proud of you for sharing this, all of your casual wanderings…

Cerulean. The blue gets heavier and heavier. Your word choice is intoxicating, Author.

Deeply impressed by your very thoughtful treatment of Asperger’s. #teamjess

Samuel seems to be arrogant, selfish, and oddly entitled. Keys possessed, pocketed, to lock others out his rooms, his world. He controls entry, access. Not sure I’m really talking about his study at the condo or the same secluded room at the beach house. He controls access. Access to him? I’m pondering what heavy is when it comes to blue eyes. Bright I understand. Cerulean I can picture. Azure? Sure. What comes with heavy blue? Seems an auto accident does. Wow.

I am one of your 41 though this is the first of your work I’ve read. By the time I’d read half of the first installment I knew I would follow you because your talent for writing and storytelling was apparent. A new world was taking shape in front of me. Regarding your question about further education my eyes return to one evocative written word: “stuck”. If that’s what you’re feeling then IMHO it’s time for a change. At age 30 I went back to school, enrolled in community college, continued on to university, unstuck myself while working to pay the bills. You can too. There are so many different learning opportunities available today (distance learning, etc.) to students. This should probably be a DM instead of word pollution in your comments section but you asked! You also asked what we think so far. I think this dark tale is impressive. You have no editor, no beta reader, no noticeable / notable errors. Impressive. You consistently send me to the dictionary and I enjoy that. What do I want? More.