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This is a very interesting story with compelling characters. I hope you are in good health and have not stopped writing.
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They were found and chased. Nathan skillfully used the bow and arrow, Four of five soldiers died. They let ine unharmed man escape. He will surely report on the fight and location. Nathan and Brohm followed the nrrow path in the cold mountains. Bone tired they stopped to rest. They alternated shifts keeping guard, They are not out of the woods. It turns out the mysterious man has helped others disappear. Brohm asked--“Do you trust him?” “Trust?” Nathan hesitated before continuing. “We didn’t part ways on the best of terms. Regardless, I still think it’s the best option we have right now.” So if they can avoid the soldiers seeking them, the next step to safety is not a sure thing. They better keep flexible and wary.
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All's well that end's well. The boys are in Manchester and will start a new life with Ian and Keith and Granddad OX. So many worked so hard to get to this point. It seems like miracles can happen. Thank you for writing an additional chapter telling us what happens next. Joseph and Benjamin are going to find , I bet, they are part of a larger family and suppportive community and should love it.
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The entance and assembling of the patrons could be a game changer. The guards will be looking outward for defence and inward at the performance area. Hudson could have some more freedom of movement to find Otis and hope for a rescue. If Hudson and Otis are lucky, the mass of high end cars and well dressed people will alert the police that the big event is going to start and a police attack should be made. The fighting will be loud and ferocious and confusing. Hudson can use the confusion to try to spirit Otis away and hide him until the police find them. Keres might run to take his prize Otis away and Hudson needs to be ready to kill Keres. I bet Keres has a secret way out and will run to take Otis out with him. Otis might surprise Keres and turn on him if he see Keres fighting Hudson. We shall see......
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Killan told Lucas he has meet Kandric at a magic school and he is his friend and stood up for him. At some point, if things turn out, maybe Killan can introduce Kandric to his new friends and convey they are decent and honorable and trustworthy. Killian maybe able to help them to not fear each other. Garnet noticed a change in Aegir. It could be due to his spirit experiences. I hope the two of them can meet the four sprits and more. The Seandrans will need the help of spirits and other poweful beings as they take on their next goals. There has been no mention of a very powerful mage,sorcerer or shaman who could transport the caravan to the City of Lucas the Lost. Does Mablin have a transport plan? The potential presence of a green dragon in hiding needs to be checked out. Will Garnet still so knocked from his flight with Xavier that he cannot scan all newly arrived caravan members to see if they are also a green dragon? Who can be the person to look for green dragons if Garnet is not available ?The last minute caravan driver should be a candidate to check out Mablin has to be warned so he will not object loudly and cause any hiddden being to turn into a dragon to fight and kill those nearby.
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Events are moving ahead and the world shifted--- The Seandrans are well organized.Syth was placed in charge by the king if Xavier and Garnet were absent. Syth organzied his friends and helped bring about and communicate what happened and why the two dragons left. Lew was sent out to greet Mablin and the caravan. A group is being sent out to hunt for food. Hontel reported into his watch superior. His leader realized the people he was with were unusual and wealthy. He learned enough that he wanted regular reports from Hontel. I think they should try to get rid of him or leave him behind when they transport to their next destination as soon as possible or the secrets they are holding will be revealed. Hontel is thinking that he can free many of his fellow members in his orphanage by selling his Rovnar symbol, Will he do it? Aegir met a wind spirit and played/trained with him. He later met three more spirits: fire, water and earth. The four spirits played with him and his shaft. Aegir is learning how to fight and be able to take on evil spirits. Perhaps, Aegir will be ready to be tested at the spirit warror school at the City of Lucas the Lost? Mablin felt the need to leave town soon and get to his caravan. He was worried about the youths. Two successive waves of powerful magic pushed him to get going. Mablin took a horse and accepted his new guard LT Ardi and a youth, her son, Slaygo who is a guilded mystic, to travel with him. Madelyn had so much to tell Mablin when he arrived at the camp, but she was distracted by seeing her good friend Ardi and her son Slaygo. Both she and Aegir need to get to know them better. Things went haywire--Mablin and Ardi saw dragons along with others and attemped to take action. Madelyn held Mablin back and Aegir would not let Ardi hurt his mentor. In a brief momen. the dragons disappeared and two news being emerged- Now--this has to be explained and fast and convincinly. How can they keep the story of the Sand Dragons contained? Plus the ability of the green dragons to shift has to be told and the menace understood. Is there a green dragon among the new caravan members?
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“You have lovely feet,” Keres said. “I will kiss them for hours. Before I break each and every one of your little toes.” Everything that came out of the metallic throat sounded even, without any inflection, but Otis already knew his captor better than that. Keres looked forward to doing all those horrible things to him. Keres is just creepy and Otis knows more what he will do to him. Things are not looking good for Otis.
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OMG--the manure has hit the fan! This is so scary and no one is safe. It can get messy and bloody soon Keres is onto Hudson but has not killed him yet. Hudson knows he needs to flee, but cannot. There are too many hired guards. He wants to help Otis . There is somone working against him who is hidden for now. Hudson gets Jackie to take Otis out and run away, However they get caught on the grounds and returned. Watkins kills a guard without a concern. He makes sure Otis and Jackie are tucked away. Otis turns nearly catatonic and withdraws into himself. What will wake him up? Angel lords it over the two in the room. He tells Jackie Otis will be carved up tonight. Angel acts he is on the inside and not one of the first three in the opening act. Angel tells Jackie he was present when hs boyfriend was killed. This hit Jackie hard...Did Jackie just strangle Angel in anger? Meanwhile the patrons are showing up. The show must be starting soon. The youths are going to be prepared for their acting/death scenes? I cannot wait for the next chapter--This is a tense situation with disturbing possibilities--I will look forward to how you craft a battle and victory
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I can understand the need for food from the trader, but as others have suggested, they could have given a false story about their intended destination -- like another farm--or route they are going to take, etc. It is wise to confuse or misdirect. An assassin should know the importance of stealth and being hidden or using false clues. It can be assumed that the king's guard or any bounty hunter would interrogate travelers to see if the two made their presence known. Let us hope, the traveler does not reach the bad guys so soon that they can find Nathan's and Brohm's trail and resting point easily.
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It looks like Benjamin will be joning his"brother" on the flight to the UK. Ian and Keith are going to be "fathers" and have new partners in their firm, Tom and his colleagues are working skillfully to prepare the documents in time for the flight. Tom is very impressive and efficient and works well under pressure. The pups and their mother are staying with the twins. Aaron and Asher. If the mother Ariel can later fly to the UK it will happen or ,if not, she will be with her pups and well cared for in Isreal. This is a complicated, sensitive, international process. It is a marvel to see the moving parts and that promise to be eventually successful.
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They had a very good time in bed in a room not trying to get it on outside. They learned of the need to talk about their sexual likes and what works for each other. They were not judgmental, but supportive. It was all so new to Keith and talking through really helped him out. The glow and intense joy brought about successul sex can open people up. Keith said his girlfriend preferred silence. Thomas was talkative and encouraged Keith to say what was on his mind. Keith asked Thomas about his Africa work and why he left. Thomas said he approached a breakdown over the pressure and the feeling of being a modern day colonist who wanted to impose non-native values on the populace. Thomas is a sensitive, insightful person. What he went through is common in missionary work. He was lucky his brother knew of an opening in the UK. He told him their are serious problems at home that needed help. Thomas has learned his brother was right. It was encouraging that Thomas mentioned having Keith meet his brother and his wife.This is a new experience for Keith. He is willing to the meeting. They had opened up to each other and are growing closer and more well known. I loved the ending----"They cuddled up and enjoyed the intimacy, the feeling of flesh on flesh." I am sure they are ready for more alone time.....
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Meet the Clients, aka, A Trip to Rosharon
akascrubber commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Meet the Clients, aka, A Trip to Rosharon
That went well--Fred met his key client and after a brief tangle won him over by being honest and making to the point legal statements. The guy he replaced was prejudiced and sloppy and had poor work habits. Fred has none of those qualities and this shone through. He should be bringing a copy of the appeal to his client within two weeks or so. The former lawyer said it would take 6 months to file an appeal. Fred met his five other prison clients that were termed lost causes. One was Mo. They had a heartfelt discussion. Fred told Mo he would resesearch thoroughly his case. He would look for errors or a basis for appeal. Mo was not hopeful, but Fred said he would try. The other lawyer gave up. Fred has a great deal to do and is under pressure to perform. He is motivated to be a very competent, aggressive lawyer for his clients.- 15 comments
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lawfulneutralmage-- Have relaxing, fun vacation. You will be missed and welcomed back
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They have a plan and a long way to go. At least they have warm clothes to help them get through Dead Man's Pass. Thanks for the map. I agree with Brohm that is was a mistake to contact the trader. I bet the king's guard will talk to him and he will report seeing them. The king's guard will have an idea where they are and will be in pursuit. Will they be safe when they wake up sleeping in the trees?
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Totally Avid Reader--The story does not have any restrictions as to reading. It is open to all to enjoy.
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Chapter Seventeen: Cascade
akascrubber commented on drown's story chapter in Chapter Seventeen: Cascade
So confusing and revealing at the same time. Chronos joined the three in the real world and then Edna who was actually one of the 7 constructs --like Chromos-revealed herself and surprised them. Grey and the others have to stop The Theodore and remove the curse from the Belcore pack. What are they to do? More needs to be revealed. Chronos speak up, please. Meanwhile, Dave turned into his wolf and ran off to feed. Grey followed him to also feed and have sex with him. Will they be confronted by an unwanted adversary--Theodore or maybe Grey's father? -
Wonders of wonders--evidence worthy of a Daniel Silva spy novel has been found and created that solves the problems concerning Joseph. He can travel to the UK and can eventually get UK citizenship. JKeith and Iam will be his guardians. He will own part of the family business. Just as things are turning out great, the boys do not want to be separated.How can Joseph and Benjamin be kept united? How can it be possible at this last moment for Benjamin to travel freely to the UK? Let us hear what the lawyers say. Time is short. Can something workout with Jacob helping? BTW, I do not see how the adult dogs can travel to the UK in the near future. I know the all boys will be concerned.
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They needed the sex and it was intense and real and renewing
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Back on Strawberry Mountain after a mysical , unreal trip in the labyrinth and then to see the constructs. Theodore is a curse. They have been expelled to the real world to handle him. But how? What role will Chronos play now that he is accompanying them? Does Grey have to remove the curse on his pack? How? Too many unanswered questions....
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Benjamin has faced great difficulties and the loss essentially of his whole extended family to violence by evil people. He still can be happy and can relate very well to Joseph who seems like a lost brother to him. Jacob also has fallen for him and does not want to see him lose his life, too. Plans are underway to save him. We will see what turns out? I hope he has a better future and might be able to become a doctor. BTW, how easily will it be to transport dogs from Israel into the UK?
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A Murder Is Announced
akascrubber commented on lawfulneutralmage's story chapter in A Murder Is Announced
Oh Jamie, Who are you going to call? Ghostbusters ! I wish he could. I am worried that in this scenario, things can easily spin out if control. Jamie can face a super powerful entity.- 113 comments
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I wonder if Ian's fascination with Stef and reading three of his biographies has a hidden meaning. Ian is in the closet but he sees a powerful, successful role model who is gay. Stef inspires him. Gay people need role models. Ian can dream of a better future, too.
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Colin 13: Pictures & Gardens
akascrubber commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Colin 13: Pictures & Gardens
Owain and Colin and Joe are becoming more comfortable. Colin has not reconnected with his mother though he has tried. He realizes Miles is the favored son The three go to a garden center to get things to expand Owain's garden. They needed better advice but fumbled along OK.At home they made slow progress on the garden.I bet Owain might do better setting up his garden with the young man who is helping Colin's mother. Joes asks the others about his father having sex with an underage girl from church. He wonders if there are more.They suspect there maybe but have no idea who. If Joe's father is charged, it will be messy. Joe knows the church paid off the girl's parents so they should be quiet. It might have had to be a large amount of money. Could the church have sufficient funds only due to the money diverted from what was owed Owain and Mhari? When the investigation and any trial starts bring out the diversion and cause a scandal? Will the church have enough funds to pay what is owed to Owain and Mhari? -
Ok--they were almost caught by the King's guard. But they hid in an underground area entered using a hidden a trapdoor. They are going to have to flee. I am thinking they are being deceived. The commander of the forces is wiley. He could not find them, but will get them to reveal themselves. He spoke forcefully and said they are riding away. But, I bet they are hiding expecting Nathan and Brohm to leave their hiding place and make themselves known. It is good Nathan found a bow with tipped arrow that can pierce armour. Life is going to bemore risky. They are trying to avoid the king's guard whike dealing with new personal emotions. Nathan has told Brohm he likes him sexually. Brohm says it is all new to him. He does like Nathan and is not rejecting him. I hope they can escape. Who or what is causing Nathan's nightmares?
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I can see this is going to be a good samaritan story. They will help a perspn in need. It is wonderful how the love for puppies can bring people together.Benjamin saw the people on the beach and thought they would be good for the puppies of his dog. He was unable to care for them and is leaving school to get a job. The twins felll in love with the puppies and each puppy found a twin to favor. Jacob and Keith went out to find the owner, Benjamin, who had left registration papers for the puppies with their food and carrying box. After a decent conversation, they brought Benjamin and his dog with them. He shared a meal with them and is staying with them. Isaac is arriving tomorrow. I am thinking they will find a way to help Benjamin.
