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Chapter 13 - Volcanologists
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 13 - Volcanologists
Our heroes are on the volcano ridden planet. They have received an offer to help them find what they need the next morning. The substance is considered a waste product and has a short life span when it is discharged from a volcano. I hope the person who is offering to help them is being truthful and does not have any harmful intentions. -
Oscar cannot get away from the trauma he felt was caused by Rizen. Seeing Hugh brought the story back when he asked what happened. Hugh did not know the story and Oscar did not want to report his experiences and then relive them. Luckily, friends banded togther to help Oscar as he went to sleep to calm himself. I think he needs much more therapy. He is trigered too easily to be able to have a balanced mental health outlook.
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The two main couples have partners that support them, center them, build them up, love them, and enable them to have great, fulfilling sex. Will has the harder time and the more tempetous relationship. Travis has to be told again and again that Will is in his corner and he will not push him to get togther with Taylor. Will spoke honestly to Zach. I loved his suggestion that if Tayor wanted a raproachment with Travis she should return $25 million to him. He did not ask for any money for himself. Travis showed Will his email from Taylor, Will insightfuly saw it was not a real appolgy for hurting him. She played the victim card and expressed woe is me. Travis saw the truth of Will's analysis and is reinforced in his position. Will told Travis that until he is ready and able to forgive Taylor, he will he hurt. Taylor is in therapy. I am surprised her professional has not told her that she as to make a real appology to get acceptance. Kris is just right for JJ now or J as he calls him. He consoled him and then they had hot, energetic sex--Tasmanian sex?? They are ready meet his relaltives. I bet the flushed look will win the admiration of them and start the conversation off on the right, positive note. Kris is very wise.
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Roger Rabbit is an older normal plus cartoon segment movie. It was very popular. It maybe shown someplace on cable. I will let drown decide what to do about Mark. We can speculate if he will not give us hints...I betting he will bring him back to life to connect with his other two gods and find love. He is too missed to be gone for long. Besides, Theodore should not win and will be defeated, I expect.
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Will the magical eggs quickly hatch and be able to be used by an animal adept to help in the coming battle identified by Rovnar and may be able to destroy the snakes, scorpions, etc, threatening their lives? I look forward to finding out what is hatched from the magical eggs. Adga and crew might really need more help. "As the voice within Gordech took a deep breath a nest with several very warm, reddish-orange eggs appeared next to Vendra. “Wow, I didn’t know any of Zerris’ spirits could act so fast. Yet another reason to gift Keweenaw with something. However, be careful, for my guess is the eggs if done correctly, will hatch quickly. Nonetheless, a quick reaction by an animal adept could score a pet of the ages.”
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But, Zuri, this is not Who Framed Roger Rabbit. The characters have to stay in the lanes written by drown. He has his own ideas, but does listen to his readers so make your case to him directly, not indirectly, please. As I heard when I was younger and in school--you get an A for a effort, though.
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Chapter 12 - Alliance
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 12 - Alliance
Much better--- Quigley and Phentrom smoked a peace pipe and it worked. Quigley is confused that this android loves a person he knows about who is a hero to his planet. Quigley will think about it. Also now he knows his family is staying with his wife's sister and is not in danger. Quigley is taking his ship to the planet where his sister on law resides and wll hope to be able to find her. He might even try to find a home on this planet since it now free of pirates. But, Quigley does not know why Phentrom is being sought. He is not defective as he has found out. But, Phentrom is becoming humanlike. Somehow a tracking device allowed him to find Phentrom. The android did not know he could be tracked. This capability needs to be investigated and neutralized. -
Chapter 11 - River City
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 11 - River City
I bet Quigly is on the way to River City and he and his family and their friends are going to have a serious talk. Can he be convinced to give up Phentrom and his retirement security? He family is really not threatened. When we last read about Quigley he had 12 hours till the deadline and would need 2 hours to get to the medcal ship. Phentrom told his who had his family. His ship must be heading for where they are. -
What a hideous father and terrible, debilitating experiences that had to have shaped or warped Thomas in painful ways. His father's sudden rages and beatings when he saw any possible male sexual interest or expression in his son had to painfully restrict Thomas. No wonder he was forced to have a girlfriend. He needed space and time and a good man to evolve naturally to be himself and not be limited by what others might think. It is a wonder he was not neurotic and bitter. It is a testament to his good character and human qualities and decency and ability to love that he was not completly held back by his childhood in his adult years. Keith and Thomas will be good for each other.
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I share the hope that this terrifying scene of Nathan being captured by a winged demon and seeming to kill Brohm is a terrible nightmare. Will Brohm wake him up and end his nightmare? Lord Hemsley has gotten his revenge many times over on Nathan. The imagined danger and bad dreams caused by the magical ring are suppposed to fade. But it is still hurting Nathan.
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The crew cannot sleep so the story will be told to the end and discussed. Garnet and others need to be ready and aware of a potential green dragon sneaking in as a new hires with the new wagons brought by Gradon. Gradon is supposed to show up with others in the morning. The new hires need to be checked out with precautions if a green dragon emerges
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Oscar's first school mate from New Zealand was Hugh. Rizen was from the UK. “Really!” I asked, “Yep,” Rizen said as he loosed his grip around my waist and grabbed hold of my dick from outside my shorts. “Yep! A real pain,” he added, “Hey, cut that out, that is private property,” I said to him as he squeezed a little harder, and I jammed the brakes on, forcing him to let go and grab around my waist again. “Do that again and you are going to be walking back,” I said to him angrily, as I turned and frowned at him. Oscar left him to walk back and stayed out for a long time. He said nothing but was traumatized. Rizen was very uncomfortable afterwards at the farm and left early. Oscar was hospitalized for weeks and received counselling. He has moved to a new location, but cannot escape. Rizen must not have told anyone at school what he did or that Oscar was upset with him. Oscar's absence was not explained so Hugh did not know why he left the school. Can Oscar respond to Hugh in a neutral or pleasant way? Is he still going to relive the past and talk about the hospitalization or will he just move on and make a general comment about other family priorities. This might be a one time meeting so he will not have to go into depth and smile and wish Hugh well. Hugh might have a good impression about Oscar so he should continue that attitude now--even though he was pushed to the ground
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Chapter 10 - Acceptance
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 10 - Acceptance
So will Phentrom tell Quigley who has his wife and child and will he believe him? Does Quigley have time to reach his family? Can he save them against who is holding them? Who is going to get hurt? -
Yes, Rovnar made the offer to Tur, Tez, Nuk and Adga to turn them into Sand Dragons, if the find the Sand Dragon Vault. At this point, they do not know that Royal and favored Sand Dragons can turn into a second shape or skin., They might be able to keep their orginal form and turn into a sand dragon. Also, note Rovnar's qualification for help--“Any God or Demon Lord can directly come to the aid of his or her first three and only the first three original channelers, once every hundred years, for half the span of a bell chime, divided by the order of the Channeler to enter service, with non-uses to be held back for use in perpetuity!” The voice went back to a higher pitch. “I should know, I am the one who added said line moments before the blood signing! It is not my fault none of the others used said stipulation before this.” Garnet is Rovnar's first priest/channeler. Rovnar can aid Garnet if asked and he made need to do so.
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Chapter 9 - The Scientists
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 9 - The Scientists
They are going to have to go to strange and dangerous places to find the needed parts just to assemble them in the hopes a functioning device can be made. If the device is constructied, will it be able to find the missing ship? So much uncertainty.... -
Oh Yes--the battles were realistic and intense. You could feel the powerful actions taken by the combatants as they used their weapons to destroy pure evil. I guess they need to press on. They are seeking to recover and save a valuable hostage that has to be fed. Chapter 15--"As all eyes turned to Wyger, the Halforc gulped, “Me not know, really! All me knows is Gojiness say gots somethin’ a big wig noble from Eaglecrest was gonna pay for big time. Not know more. All her say is we be gettin’ big pay soon.”
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Heck, we know Jack Ryan Jr will fight and win against great spies and be around for more Tom Clancy books. He is needed. We are looking forward to your sequel. Your alert helped us keep up our mood as Brohm and Nathan faced the possibility of death. The lord is not going to give up as long as they can be found. I guess you might be considering faking their death?
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What a massive, ferocious battle with death walkers and evil spirits and shaddow spirits. The combat was intense. Adga's troops fought bravely and effectively. They called upon Zeris for help and the falconing called upon Rovnar who aided them and gave them very useful advice. The grandaughter of Electoroma fought aggressively and lost her existence in the end. We learn that Tur is on ther way to be trained as a Shaddow Slayer. They learned more attacks can be expected and they need to be prepared, At the end they were healed by an elf as Rovner left. Rovner now embodying a halfling said provocatively...The hand of the red-scale armored Halfling touched the handle and Tur’s fingers while laughing, “Ah, I love you four. You should be in my order! Find the key to the Sand Dragon Vault and I will be able to provide you with a gifting allowing you to become one!” Wow!
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Chapter 8 - Weapons
akascrubber commented on Adam Andrews Johnson's story chapter in Chapter 8 - Weapons
Qigly is fully armed and ready to seek his revenge. His attacks will not be pretty, but devatating, I expect. -
I, too, bet they will get out of the keep and safe. How they do it will be fascinating and enlightening. I am expecting drama and hopes being fulfilled in the next chapter. They have strengths and skills which will help them stand up against any enemy when they act in unison.
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Starting in the middle
akascrubber commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Starting in the middle
I like them. They met again after a break and just smoothly fit together. They had lots of sex and loved what they did. They found things in common they enjoyed. You have me wanting to know more and wanting to see them grow as friends and lovers. I suspect there will be challenges and unexpected problems. Thank You!- 20 comments
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After a long and scary search in narrow passages, they may have found the amulet. But they also found a rotting body and are hopelessly lost. Is there a being ready to kill them? They do not know how to get back. They are wet and cold and they are in the dark. The torch no longer works. Will some evil force kill them? Or, will they simply die unable to get out of the lower keep and caves. What a desolate, hopeless, sad ending . They have each other and need luck to get out. "Even now, the big man dauntlessly stood his ground against the all-encompassing knowledge that they were dead men. Nathan allowed that courage to seep within his own self, to accept his end with the man he loved."
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The Paranormal Hits Home
akascrubber commented on lawfulneutralmage's story chapter in The Paranormal Hits Home
BTW, drsawzall, I think you pointed out a deficiency in the author's references. What British adult ,like Jamie. would not find many Dr Who examples among the paranormal beings he sees? Let's hope Jamie has better sci-fi insights next time in my opinion. -
The Paranormal Hits Home
akascrubber commented on lawfulneutralmage's story chapter in The Paranormal Hits Home
I found it fascinating that Jamie brought unreal experiences he faced into comprehension and focus by connecting the actions and beings to the movies he had seen. His professional training and super skills saved them till the minister broke the egg and closed the portal. Now they have a few days respite--supposedly. Will the next attack be even more deadly since this one failed? -
Very poetic and mysterious--Mark , the real son of Beatrice turned as a baby by Luis, can heal his family from the curse. Mark has pushed Grey away. But Sebastian reaches out to him and is pulled to him and they kiss meaningfully. How can Sebastian do this given his attitudes and opposition to Grey and his affection for Mark. How does this influence Sebastian? Please, I need more answers! I hope the next chapter or two will bring more clarity. We think Grey in the present has to remove the curse. Can he also with others bring Mark back?
