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Very nice chapter @kbois Considering attention you are giving to details; I assume you are planning 50+ chapters... 🙂 I'm wondering about time parallel between second and third story. We know that Caleb called Sebastian at the end of the second story to announce that cure has been discovered. Elijah and Taylor rescued twins and met Caleb in depression. So, I suppose that this shooting happened somewhere in between. But then, Asa heard the news about child kidnapping (suppose another puppy). Does it mean that puppies are still disappearing in spite of Huntington being on the run?
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You are right, if Dayana lives that should never be told! I can only assume that Kyan is confused and shocked by the revelation. Also, for someone who was oblivious to everything, he, probably believes that knowing truth he would have feel more respected. But, truth is not always good to know. That would be the end of their friendship and it would destroy family. Perry knew that for sure!
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You have to add amnesia, children swap, brain tumor miraculously healed, evil sister appearing eventually alive...still writing?! Oh, you have to change headline Dijotomos des Amores!
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You have a wonderful imagination and ability to shape up complete story before putting it on paper. Problem is you want to tell us everything and you want to tell it immediately. Take your time, focus on details, go into your character (for example I'm not convinced why is Paul selfish prick at the beginning - he is raised in loving family, always accepted...is it possible that his father's advice made such a huge impact on his mind), make it simple (sometime simple solutions are the best), give purpose and meaning to your characters actions. Take step by step, you have great potential. Good luck.
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Exactly!!! Unless you are writing a Latino telenovela. Kyan discovers he is adopted. His real parents were ridiculously rich and died in car accident many years ago! Nevertheless his rich aunt was looking for him all the time. Now, the truth is relieved, Kyan is ridiculously rich and has house in Cancun! 😜😂
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There is one big elephant in the room still - finances! Unless @Mrsgnomie decide to leave money issues for the future to resolve, we might have some more crises in the paradise. Btw, like your comment very much! 🙂
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I see your point, yea it might look like teasing. But maybe Kyan is scared too - mute and clumsy. Isn't it all about insecurities eventually?!
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Which is another big step Kyan made! Asking in-laws for help 👏
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I think you got that impression because most of the chapter is written from Perry's POV. So, we are included in all his overthinking, different scenarios going through his mind (loves me/loves me not...). We can only assume Kyan's intentions that evening, I suppose that he put children first. After all, this is not the first time they were cockblockers! 😁 Can you imagine Kyan saying - Kids, go to bed, I want to fuck your uncle!? 😂 But in the morning: Kyan apologized, Kyan explained, Kyan put Perry at the first place, Kyan declared his love, Kyan gave his ass...I think he is paroled! 😜
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My pleasure! 🙂
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This chapter express in the best way possible one of the biggest virtues of @Mrsgnomie - amazing resolutions. They are so deep and detailed that leaves you completely satisfied and overwhelmed as a reader. That's I was a little bit disappointed at the end of Boss Nanny when complete big resolution was revealed over one barbeque chatting (otherwise, great story).
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Yes, that was a little bit confusing part. First, I thought that he is not for anal sex at all, but then he nodded when Gordon said he will fuck him?!? Anyway, I believe that, as their relationship develop, they will do everything! 🙂
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It reminds me on "Knotts" again. As it was important for Nash to propose first, it was important for Kyan to confess love first! It was important to heal insecurities both Penn and Perry have, due to their everlasting love for, long time oblivious Kyan and Nash! It makes them "equal in love".
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You're forgiven, Uncle Daddy Perry is so hilarious that I almost choke! 🤣😂🤣
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So good chapter that, if you have put the end at the bottom, I would still be satisfied! ❤️
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Well, I'm going to need some time to settle all impressions!!! In one moment, I almost quoted complete chapter!!! Is it just me, helplessly romantic or this chapter is simply...WOW! Kyan "leading the dance"...finally grown up. Complete dialog between them is remarkable...finally, he is the one giving himself to the men of his life, and he is the first one saying the "L" word!!! It is so mature, so brave...it is so important!
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This was fantastic! I almost cried!!! Kyan is determined not to repeat his in-laws parenting mistakes!!! I was really afraid about history repeating but you nailed it @Mrsgnomie Oh, I'm soooooooo happy about this. Bravo Kyan, it is time for strong hand - this agony has to stop, and it stops now!!!! YEA!
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@kbois before another chapter arrives, I just want to mention your writing skills. You have improved your writing immensely! Descriptions, storytelling...you did it really professionally and I'm impressed. Your writing is not shallow, there is depth and literature seriousness in. Bravo!
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Well, that was helluva good conversation! Gordon had a great mentor in his uncle and now, he provided nice gay culture introduction to Brian. After theoretical knowledge, it's time for practical work. 🙂 It will be interesting to see in following chapters how their relationship developed.
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Now, it will be interesting to see direction you will take - happy foursome or two couples or two swinging couples... Oh, so many opportunities with these guys... It's not only Seth, we are all on this road to chaos...
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Bravo, I have the headline: CORRUPTING THE SHADOW AT THE END OF THE TUNNEL
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...and than his ghost becomes mate with Kage's and they unite in universe! 🤪
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Seems that wolves can easily heal physical wounds but it's not going easy with mind!
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