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@Seraph28 @akascrubber Yes. At least Josel now knows the other side of Zdain's secret. Hopefully Zdain will feel a bit more relieved now. Dareis and Elyssa certainly don't listen to warnings. At this rate, they'll be committing themselves to dangerous plans. Personally I like this chapter and the next one is quite interesting too - in my opinion 🙂
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Elyssa "Venni, my sweet boy!" Elyssa Monteilon cried out and fell on her firstborn's neck, tears in her eyes. She had planned this meeting to be quite different. Elyssa had imagined herself gently stroking Venr's arm, saying a few caring words about how the boy needed to eat more, and then giving him a tender embrace. But when Venr had suddenly appeared before them, in his military uniform and more handsome than ever, Elyssa had been unable to contain herself. Months of longing and mother
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@Seraph28 Thank you. The change of narrators will continue and there will even be new point of view characters. @drsawzall Jolanda is used to getting what she wants. She is probably more obsessed with Josel than truly in love with him. It's not that easy to get rid of Renn😄 Plink may be many things, but maybe this time she was telling the truth.
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@akascrubber The boys will be able to discuss this in the next chapter. There will be two narrators: first Zdain's mother and then it's Zdain's turn. There are different reasons why some individuals are interested in Josel. In the Shadow Cross, for example, Jolanda has her own plans for him.
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Thank you for your comment😊 I agree. Zdain should do so, but it is not easy for him 😓 Perhaps the next chapter will tell us more.
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There were as many as three narrators in this chapter. Maybe not everyone likes the fact that the narrator changes so often, but I personally think it makes the story more interesting, so that's why I have done it this way🙂 Anyway, I've tried to write a story that suits my taste. But I hope you readers like it too🫠
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Josel It was still dark and several hours before dawn when Josel Sandkan awoke in his bed. Their room in Castle Cache was completely silent. Josel decided to keep quiet, not wanting to wake Zdain, who must still need a lot of sleep after being sick for so long. It still felt strange to think of Zdain as a friend. But without a doubt, they were. Josel just couldn't quite place Zdain in the same league as his other friends. Somehow the two of them had a different kind of relationship. It
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Very good points. The Blue Moon has lost its grip and forgotten what it was founded for. And indeed - we shall hear more of Doptus Salvort later. If you ask Melgy, certainly not Josel and Zdain 😁 Faceless' plans are as elusive as its appearance. At the same time, it fears Zal, but is also drawn to kill him.
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"Brothers and sisters! The Gods have placed our people on this barren continent because they sensed fiery faith and humility in us. We biyranths are the harbingers of holiness, the selfless servants of the Darkness. Soon a gate will open for us righteous ones, beyond which lies eternal abundance. The time has come. The old world must die so that a new and better one can arise from within. But this time only for believers! The sinners will meet their end. Grozavok will impale them and dish t
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Yeah. It's easy to guess that the group dynamic would change with Zdain and Danae around. 😎
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I think people will start asking more questions about Ben and where he comes from. Ben will play a very important role in this fantasy world, but I don't know what it is yet. Maybe we'll hear more about what's bothering Nari soon.
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Glad to know you've been waiting for the boys to get together again. I have a few thoughts on that, but I'll leave them unsaid for now. Let's just say that everything has a purpose. 😉 Darren's song somehow broke the ice and even more important were Danae's words afterwards. We'll see how things develop between them. They come from such different worlds, it won't be easy.
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Danae Five Hills, Andiol Empire The hotel they were staying in was immaculate in every way, and even a quality-conscious Aunt Anibella would probably have accepted it as a place to stay. Danae's problem was not the hotel, but the fact that she was bored to death. It had been two nights since Berron Rigailon had left, and Bartos was beginning to worry. Danae - and probably Darren too - had done their best to reassure Bartos and come up with sensible reasons why his father was taking l
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Chapter 4: Through the Forest
Lupus commented on PrismaFox's story chapter in Chapter 4: Through the Forest
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@akascrubber @drsawzall Thank you for your comments. Let's see what happens. Sometimes even the bad guys' plans go wrong. Let's hope so. 🧐
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Beautiful boys like Zdain hardly get any breaks. At least not from eager men 😁
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“The mythology of the Darkurian gods is undeniably rich, breathtakingly interesting and downright creepy. No other known religion is based on the assumption that the deities they worship are inherently evil. Grozavok brings the war, Blahaazsa is the lord of disgusting sexual rites, Nalvajda has the virtues of intrigue and villainy. Halbadah's followers draw their power from nightmares and delusions, while the disease-spreading Chatramar bathes his devotees in sewage. Perhaps the most outrag
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Chapter 2: The Boy from Nowhere
Lupus commented on PrismaFox's story chapter in Chapter 2: The Boy from Nowhere
I've been looking for a good fantasy adventure to read. I think I've found it now 😉 A very intriguing start, I really like the atmosphere of the story. Hopefully this will be a long story. -
A good guess. He certainly has plans in that direction too, but we'll see how it goes 😉 By the end of this second book, we'll know more about what's going on in Dimalos.
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@akascrubber Rezak's actions will have an effect on this story. And indeed, Zdain's brother is his adjutant. This is where more political intrigue comes into the story. But I won't forget Zdain and Josel.
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Rezak Marshal General Rezak Vondau winced, cursing his carelessness. He had allowed himself to get lost in his thoughts again, in the distant past of life in Camp Eighteen and on the fields of the Never-Ending War. A time when he had been a mere Rezak, not the mighty marshal general. It was long ago and everything had changed, including him. There was not much left of the shy and humble boy from the Wintry North he had once been. Rezak had not only changed himself, he had been transfor
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At least there is no hatred between Josel and Zdain anymore.☺️ But how far things will go between them remains to be seen. Friendship is precious, but Zdain clearly wants more. But as we've seen with these boys, things are often not so simple.😄
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@akascrubber @drsawzall Exactly. Zdain is very insecure about everything right now - himself, his situation in Castle Cache, and his relationship with his parents. Luckily, he has Josel for a friend. And yes, Plink deserves a lesson. It's a tricky situation and I don't know how Zdain will get out of it - or do I?😉 In the next chapter, we return to Marshal General Rezak Vondau in Dimalos.
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Zdain "Josel! Zdain!" Andreuz Sandkan's exclamation was not only one of surprise, but also a clear rebuke, as the guards sent by Lugas Bahrall brought the eavesdroppers before the council. Zdain was mainly pushed by one of the guards. Josel, who struggled against them, was dragged between them by the collar of his shirt and by his arms. The blond boy raged and wriggled in the men's grip, but there was nothing he could do about it. They had been caught very soon after the sneeze, a
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@akascrubber @drsawzall The council has shown its arrogance and inflexibility. The situation does not look good for Zal, and soon it may not look good for the boys either. At this point, there is more than a third of this second book left, so there is still a lot to come. And after that, of course, books 3, 4, 5 - and who knows, maybe a couple of sequels after that, if there are readers 🪶🫶
