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Just like @Seraph28 and @Philippe said, I don’t think Noah is a bad person either. Honestly, I feel sorry for him; we’re kind of getting to the point where it’s starting to look like the others are bullying him.🧐He’s definitely made mistakes, but what 14-year-old hasn’t? I wonder if he even has any friends left at school if Nick decides to break off their relationship. Maybe I’ll join Team Noah.🤨
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@drsawzall It wouldn't be fun if the rest of the journey were uneventful.😉Just wait and see...
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@Seraph28 True, Josel has some difficult personality traits. Nevertheless, Zdain likes him❤️ @akascrubber Good observations. Unfortunately, Renn can be very charming when he wants to be, and even Bartos doesn't understand the danger. Yes, now it's easier to understand why Marl is the way he is.😟
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Yes, Bartos is perceptive. Franz would certainly notice Zdain's infatuation, too, but he wouldn't take it so lightly. Josel, on the other hand, is quite self-centered and doesn't pay much attention to other people's gestures or expressions. Of course, no secret can last forever😉
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Bartos Somewhere in the Grand Duchy of Malkania Setting up the tents took time, and by the time they finally sat down to eat, evening had already fallen. Fortunately, the meal Melgy had prepared was as good as one could hope for under camp conditions. After eating, the whole group sat in a circle around the campfire, bellies full, soaking in the quiet solitude of the open land. It had been a long ride, but for some reason Bartos wasn't tired yet. It was as if settling into sleep requ
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@Philippe Thank you for your comment, and in such a fun poetic form! It's nice to have new readers.☺️
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The world and story were built in a fascinating way. Even though the ending was dark, I really enjoyed it. It's a shame that the main character and his beloved died, because I think you could have continued the story and made it into a multi-chapter adventure. I'd love to read more about the world of the story😊
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That character description is very accurate. We will see more of that side of Franz as the story unfolds.😏 Thanks.🙂 Just a few more chapters and we'll reach a turning point in the book, where events will truly shake things up.
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😅I asked him. He said Franz is naive and full of himself.😃
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My husband / co-writer doesn’t like Franz at all—he finds him annoying.😄 You’ve described the boys’ personality differences really well. That’s exactly how I've tried to create them. In that sense, it’s believable that they’re close friends despite their differences, because as you said, their personalities complement each other. Unlike in adulthood, as children it’s easier to connect with people who are very different from you—and still become friends, often for life.😺 Here’s the answer to whether Darren will become a point-of-view character. I’ve hidden it for now, in case any readers want to avoid spoilers entirely:
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Thank you very much @Seraph28! Comments like these encourage me to continue. This chapter marks a turning point in Franz's story. He may not be the most likeable character, but he is one of the most important for the story as a whole. The next chapter will be released again next Thursday.🕊️ Then we will return to the expedition with Bartos as narrator.
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I also wrote a short explanatory chapter about how magic works in this world. If you didn’t notice and you’re interested, here’s the link: https://gayauthors.org/story/lupus/the-world-of-the-legend-of-the-red-star/3
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Franz Eastkeep, Andiol Empire Eastkeep was nothing like Franz had imagined - not at all. In his mind, Andiol's eastern center had been a majestic stone fortress, its walls reaching for the clouds beside mist-shrouded mountains. The only part of that vision that held true was the mist, which hung thick as pea soup over the ragged town. And ragged Eastkeep truly was. The houses rose no higher than two stories, and stone had only been used for the first floor - if even that. There seemed to
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Well said. I don't really like Nick in this chapter either. We remember how earlier he demanded that Noah take responsibility for his actions and insisted that boyfriends should support each other in a relationship. But when Noah sends a message saying he's been feeling down, what does Nick do? He turns off his phone. Still, the chapter is once again very interesting and well written - thank you @LittleBuddhaTW
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Various observations on Might
Lupus commented on Lupus's story chapter in Various observations on Might
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Various observations on Might
Lupus commented on Lupus's story chapter in Various observations on Might
That's true 😊 I hope this groundwork will be useful throughout the long story, since readers have so much to remember. -
I was afraid that Jack's visit would be a complete disaster, but it actually seems to be going really well. This chapter was fun to read☺️ Nick could have sent a message to Noah himself. So not all the blame for the problems lies entirely with Noah.
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By Laftakom Greyhand The Ksingis call it the Gift, while in parts of the Southlands it is spoken of as the Force. To my ears, the term Might has the most majestic ring to it, as it carries an association with strength. Undeniably, one who wields Might can do things the weaker ones can only dream of. Or - I am being imprecise - most ordinary people do not even dare, in their sleep-bound imaginings, to crave what is everyday to those like us. Our world is beyond their reach. Prevalence
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Although Krahh could carry the message, it would be impossible for her to find the expedition in the distant wilderness. She cannot locate other people in the same way she can locate Zal.
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True. Unfortunately, Zal is now far from Renn and the teens.😬 In the next chapter, we'll catch up with Franz after a long time.
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Taihan Ift Province, the Vassal Kingdom of Afamat It was a beautiful day, as summer days in sunny Afamat usually are. The other seasons also favored the land of dozens of valleys: winters were so mild that they were hardly distinguishable from the long springs and autumns. But summer - those months of growth and flowering - was the season Taihanelik Qo-Meunoonkuu Qo-Xo'jox loved most. Afamat's summers brought back memories of her childhood under the scorching sun of Qoi-Tenqee. Most of al
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I also really love stories where the main focus is a romantic relationship between two young men — full of passion and intense emotions.💘 However, GA already has a lot of great ‘boy meets boy’ stories like that, so my goal is to write something different. Maybe this story won’t gain as much popularity among readers, but I’m fine with just a few people who stick with it to the end.😊 The main pairing... hmm. How about Zal and Ragart?😅
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Rough experiences you've had 😟 Hopefully Nick avoids something like that. In a way, I hope that Noah is just a mistreated teenager who doesn’t understand the consequences of his actions. And that he would develop in a better direction towards the end of the story.
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@RainbowPhoenixWI Thanks for your nice and funny feedback 😄 This is indeed quite a slow-paced series. Most of the plot threads are now starting to move forward, though some are still in their early stages. As the story progresses toward the end, the plots begin to intertwine. For now, it might still feel like everything is scattered and there are too many characters. But everything has its purpose in the overall storyline — or at least I've tried to write it that way. @Seraph28 Thanks! 😊There are certainly plenty of villains in this story — some of their plans connect directly to our heroes, others in ways that are less straightforward.😶
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This was a really good chapter. Noah seemed more believable here than in the previous two chapters, where I thought he was a bit too skilled at manipulation for a 14-year-old boy. In any case, the story is really interesting, and I’m looking forward to the next chapter.😊
