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Actually, Jules asked the question Owen should have been asking himself, however tentatively: what do I need? Even so, Jules does not tell Margot that their relationship cannot be based on as many lies as Own has told, and definitely not on a construction that forces Owen to remain in hiding.... And yes, Ryder should, might have asked that question - what do you want - too. Maybe he still will - and, at the same time, ask himself...
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I am sure you'll not let your aficionado's starve.
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Well, this is great indeed. A moment of fundamental emotion in a context of epic violence. Bravo.
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I agree with Tris and Jhef... Ryder's reaction, though ostensibly about Owen's lack of honesty, has a far deeper core/cause. Actually, I forgot how old he is. But even if it were not for his own problems, he is more immature than the image he tries to project. He should have understood Owen (a cute kind, in his own words...). It cannot be too difficult to accept that an 18year old boy without, as R should have guessed, any experience, would have been hiding most of himself. As, in other ways, R did, only talking about the superficialities of his own life ...
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At the barbed fence: a filmic scene, worthy of the story.
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Somehow they seem to have fallen for each other through mail and phone. And yes, the author has me convinced about Owen: not only that he is cute)kind, but, also, that he desperately needs a male friend - which, strangely, he doesn't seem to have. And yes, he also needs to fall in love - for the first time. as to Ryder : am I too critical if I say nothing he has said, yet, gives me the impression he is a potentially interesting man...? Given the story, obviously, the in-person meeting will not disappoint either man. But will we, the readers, be convinced that they are "made for each other"?
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Ryder says goodbye to an " overthinking kid". Which is what O still is, basically. Actually, Ryder's questions and remarks sound like the ones a well-intentioned adult therapist would ask/make when dealing with a lovable but insecure young adult. How can this ever be a communion of equals? There has to be a moment when Owen stops being R's 'entertainment' and, if only momentarily, shakes R out of his own convictions - his own rutted existence.
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We'll miss this unlikely quartet.
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Father's Day Strip-Off, Three of Three
peter rietbergen commented on Boy Mercury X's story chapter in Father's Day Strip-Off, Three of Three
Even though we somehow felt the end coming, it was fun when it did. Yes, a good tale. -
Father's Day Strip-Off, One of Three
peter rietbergen commented on Boy Mercury X's story chapter in Father's Day Strip-Off, One of Three
Amusing indeed. Though one cannot think what one would (like to) do with a parent who so obviously refuses to grow up, and doesn't give a damn about his sons 's feelings. -
I meant, about Owen: who reads a bit, who listens to not terribly non-conformist music. Honestly, I might like him. But I am not a brooding, dark- haired, motor-riding rebel who wants to be entertained...
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Aha. There we go. Of course: DO block me if you cannot accept questions and criticism.
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Well, in my vocabulary being upset because a person loved by a person I love has been killed might mean I'd want to kill the killer to right the wrong . In that vocabulary it doesn't mean I loved the person killed...
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I admit: I have no idea what, in this context, that means ...
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Am I the only one who sees a major problem, here? Ryder, posing as a Rebel without a Cause, has as his motto: "don't bore me". And tells O: "entertain me". But, to be honest: when (if) Owen sheds his shackles, gets out of his silent non-existence, what kind of perso do we believe he will be? Yrs, he''ll be caring and cute - is that, already. Maybe he'll be a Cole-like nice young man. But will he be not boring"? "Entertaining"? Or is Ryder really not as rebellious, adventurous as he likes to think of himself. Is he, secretly, looking for an Owen who, while openly gay, is yet a man who loves to observe children and the wonders they are? Who reads - about. Listens to - well, not terribly conformist gay music. Et cetera...
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The cat-scene works eminently well. So does much of this chapter. Yet, I am confused. Of course, standing over Jeb's dead body, D mourns his love. But you make Alvarez mourn his own love for J, too? How come, given what occurred in the previous chapters. Then D tells Alvarez he knows A hated Jeb. Which we all feel he did. Of course, we know that jealousy (sometimes, often) borders on hatred. And yes, it may included a complicated sliver of love, too. But we haven't been given any inkling of any such developments in Alvarez's emotions since he knew what Jeb meant for D and what threat he posed to his own relation with D.
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I am not given to "what if..." questioning a story. If course Margot has her own agenda. And for the time being Owen's not being out is in her best interest. So we will see not if or when but how the Ryder- introduction will alter her play.
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This tale has several really good things going for it. Convincing dialogue certainly is one of them. In the end, the good points - characters, too, as I noted before - are what makes the story worthwhile - far more so than the "does Owen get Ryder"-question.
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This was very symbolic. O is where people have ended their lives - full ones or not, but yet. He now needs to decide when, and where his real life begins, beyond the okay's, an the noddings and the silent acceptances. One step is already there: O accepts/recognises the value of what his cousin is doing. Precisely such moments help us to determine where we want to go ourselves.
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The description of, and O's simple interaction with the five kids was entirely delightful. As to the dating: I, too, noted the Ryder appearance in the sinopsis. So unless there is a mistake, in chapters to come Cole is out. Might he be too staid to get Owen out of his stasis?
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This chapter perfectly captures the inaneness of dating apps, and their potential dangers for beginners, that is. But, alas, it is a medium (and a phase) we all want through. The increasing amount of really nasty situations that result from them is only now becoming clear....
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This is well-written indeed. If only because the Margot and Owen characters are so lovable
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Actually, the fida'i helped Saladin recapture Acre and reconquer Outre-mer.
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Aha, the gems sown into their travelling clothes. It is what Marco and the other two Polo's did - or so Rustichello wants us to believe. It is, actually, what the last Romanovs did. It did not save them....
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Why didn' t T scream in that backstreet, or when he ran? Any ensuing public unrest would have the authorities believe him, a gentleman and the words of the thief wouldn't have counted for anything. It was a class society....His fear of a scandal is, of course, well-founded, given the structure and strictures of his society. But he really is the only cause of that.
