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    Glad Tidings

    peter rietbergen commented on northie's story chapter in Glad Tidings

    I've only discovered this story a week ago. But I really need to say: Bravo. It manages to address a number of problems that, even in 2025 - especially in 2025? - are troubling our society and specifically the elderly, the almost-poor. It also manages to introduce a feel good-"vibe", without which the tale might have become a tract of sorts. And yes, this chapter was particularly good - a Christmas-story that works....
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    Why an "asshat"? A good teacher knows what the difficulties of his subject are, and warns his pupils accordingly. Honesty and fairness go together. I grant you; maybe your schoolboard should have advised your teacher to show a little psychologal insight, and be a little bit more encouraging - but being too optimistich doesn't help. And firing a teacher for being honest is, simply, stupid.
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    A truly delightful chapter. Could have been straight out of Barbara Pym and her likes - but your pen is sharper, and the result that little bit more acerbic that makes it stand out.
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    Why Pride?

    peter rietbergen commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in Why Pride?

    an entire world, encapsulated in so few words. Bravo.
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    The Answer

    peter rietbergen commented on Wayne Gray's story chapter in The Answer

    I've come late to this story. But it seems as if it has been waiting for me. It is, really, a gem: the psycology, the built-up, the wording. Thank you so much.
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    First, Mark's eyes were grey. Now they are baby-blue....
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    A male mistress... Perhaps: a "minion", or a "paramour".
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    I forgot that the threes are, really, the three+two's...
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    dear Robert, between the threes between the trees, and the - perhaps - six between the towers and the marshes, you really are doing a fine job in touching upon a fair number of the many problems gay-ness (still) entails. Again: bravo !
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    Chapter 7

    peter rietbergen commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 7

    it is a good story, but again: sometimes the "I "suddenly becomes Jim. And back again. And sometimes Jon answers Jon. And sometimes Jon even seems to speak Jim's lines....
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    Visitors!

    peter rietbergen commented on Robert Hugill's story chapter in Visitors!

    Simply love it! Thanks.
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    Chapter 6

    peter rietbergen commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 6

    after a few pages, there is a strange, simply not-working change of POV, from Ii to: Jim. And when Jon introduces his once-significant other, the use of "they" simply is not working, either. Acually, I don't think anyone would ever use that pronoun for a person really important to him, or her....
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    alas: size DOES matter....
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    I'm not one to speculate on what's going to happen - it's the author's choice. But knowing him, I'm sure we'll be satisfied. Or, to be less inclusive: for me this story "works".
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    Chapter 12

    peter rietbergen commented on irivera's story chapter in Chapter 12

    Interesting... But yet: given that these kis are supposed to be smart, it seems strange they didn't take pics - which, obviously, they could easily have done. Why would "June" believe them when they tell her her BF is cheating on her? Jonah has as much reason to make things up as V does.
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    Hot, yes. But yet I can't quite follow, psychologically: the (almost gentle) Brandon who now definitely "needs" Tyler doesn't seem the same brusque, closed (and stinking...) person who was introduced to us in the previous chapter.
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    Never Enough

    peter rietbergen commented on Laura S. Fox's story chapter in Never Enough

    I must admit I find the conversations more interesting than the sex....
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    Sorry for the repeat - something's wrong with the/my system... As to: besom. It is: broom (Dutch: bezem) and thus refers to witch which, albeit wrongly, is often equalled with bitch...
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    ... well, I suppose that's what I have to accept for being a faithful follower...
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    ... well, I suppose that's what I have to accept for being a faithful follower...
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    Dear Author, Admittedly, since my own experience of the situation is limited, I wonder if "living in threes" isn't rather more difficult than "living in trees"... Of course, I'm reading your present stories eagerly, though up till now the variety of life in and around the Philpott castle convinces me more. But who knows, maybe eventually you'll illuminate even the emotional consequences of a longer threesome...
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    Good heavens, this reads like an intercontinental cookery book/contest. Putting my dime in: in the Old World, where I live, we feel that banana and peanutbutter and - indeed, banana with anything other than yoghurt - is absolutely stomach-turning...😀
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    This slow change of emotional pace: excellent.
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    Chapter 7

    peter rietbergen commented on Refugium's story chapter in Chapter 7

    Now being officially addicted to you - your stories, that is.. - this one, which I unashamedly "binge-read", definitely did not disappoint, either. Trying to figure out what makes you stand out, I could give many arguments, but, basically, reliance on dialogue rather than long, descriptive/interpretative sections, and of course, so very obviously, lots of wit are, I think, the most important. So - again - thank you very much for writing, and publishing...
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    Koniwing the English - the Brits, even - all this nonsense might well have been (not) invented....
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