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    Chapter 20

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 20

    However unlikely: hugely exciting, and making for non-stop reading.
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    This is definitely unexpected. An opening for all kinds of plot twists....
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    "I'm Awake"

    peter rietbergen commented on Nuno R.F.C.R's story chapter in "I'm Awake"

    "All About Eve ' - in some fascinating reverse?
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    This is nice, comforting. Getting together does help coming out.
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    Chapter 17

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 17

    Since on this site one is - I am - not allowed to comment on political parallels past and present: let me just say this is a clever story.
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    Chapter 30

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in Chapter 30

    There is a mix-up of Evan and Nate in the first part. Otherwise: the end we hoped for..
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    Despite my doubts about the premise of these developments, as voiced with the previous chapter: this definitely is exciting.
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    Rough House

    peter rietbergen commented on Boy Mercury X's story chapter in Rough House

    Well done, well told. And yes, some memories do not need to be shared, however much what happened had helped us becoming who we are
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    Chapter 15

    peter rietbergen commented on Topher Lydon's story chapter in Chapter 15

    I love the kusabi. Being in the flow is, after all, the essence of all achievement(s), in whatever field, if it stems from the right aim, to be more than simply oneself.
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    One of the above commentators writes: I did not see this coming. Nor, supposedly, did anyone of us. And, admitedly: I feel that is the problem in accepting this story: for we now see L forgetting/forgiving all the past since he looks at it through his present tear-covered glasses. And of course he'll allow B to act like a dying Cupido - perhaps never even knowing why he goes back to A. In short: I find all this too "pat", too sentimental.
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    Chapter 29

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in Chapter 29

    Miracles DO happen, but only seldom so.. The easiest way out for the story-teller and the reader would be a full recovery. The most painful in the short run would be death. The most painful forever would be a continuing coma, or a 'recovery' that leaves a person permanently impaired, and, with that, those who love him permanently shackled.
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    An emotionally amazing and convincing chapter. That is: the first part. But... Besides not liking the melodramtic turn - I am sentimental - I also wonder if someone as clever as L really would have left a situation develop wherein someone else completely controlled all his finances. It sounds outright stupid.
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    "I almost felt like you were talking about me." I must admit I find that either nauseatingly vain, or incredibly stupid - given that we are to believe he has no inkling of D's feelings. As to the scene between Aiden and Arthur: that is a bit of a repetition of what they both - and we, too - have known since the previous chapter.
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    Chapter 28

    peter rietbergen commented on Tony S.'s story chapter in Chapter 28

    Of course, this chapter is a reminder that, world-wide, every minute accidents like this throw families and friends in worlds of despair and impotent rage. Even if the victims survive, their life, and that of those close to them, may be wrecked. Far too often our fate depends on people who only follow their own lust and desire.
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    Obviously, the author wouldn't thus introduce the Graham/Vernon angle if there wasn't something delightfully fishing in it. We're prepared.
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    Interesting. I must admit I've never met kids of that age who think/speak/reason as these two do. But then: my grandchildren may simply have inherited the mediocre abilities of their grandfather....
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    Obviously, in another chapter Arthur will suffer a stroke. But alas not before he has caused more misery.
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    Actually a lovely episode. What it means for the A, B, L- friendship/infatuation/love- triangle must yet appear.
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    But, by the way: the children. Where did they come from and, more importantly: how old are they? Judging from their character descriptions, and from Julia's actions, words in chapter one, they seem in their late teens at least....
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    A very promising start.
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    I do love the mix of a potentially dangerous Adventure and the yes/no domesticity of this budding relationship. Let them buy lots of lovely second-hand stuff and we'll see how they develop.
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    An interesting tale, well-written.
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    Exciting indeed. So: well done. And if course Drsn and Julian will be together. Read the previous chapters: It has become apparent from Dean'd behaviour ever since Julian returned.
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    I don't remember the Shepherd, but the House is awesome indeed. A nice prop to graft your relationship-development plot on.
  25. peter rietbergen
    But what purpose does all this serve, regarding the sole occupancy of the apartment?
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