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The Trial of Jordan Colmar - 8. Epilogue

Yes, here it is, the end of the trial and by extension, it wraps up the loose ends of Second Shot which is finally complete. Enjoy and please leave a review.

Jason

Jason stared at Jordan's back. If looks could kill, his would have burned his one-time friend to a crisp. He knew what Peter was about to say, agreed with it even, but wondered if Jordan would even listen. Probably not.

He felt pressure on his hand and smiled before he turned to face Peter. It was about to be over. Almost a year to the day, Jordan was going to get what he deserved; hopefully. Mr. Hember certainly thought the judge would give Jordan a lengthy sentence.

"You okay?" Peter whispered, so low Jason needed to read his lips to understand.

Unsure his voice would cooperate, he nodded his response. There would be time to talk once they left the courthouse.

"Your Honor." The prosecutor's voice drew his attention. "Mr. Gregory would like to exercise his right to give a victim impact statement in person."

Mr. Pratner motioned for Peter to come forward. Jason gave Peter's hand a quick squeeze before letting go. It hurt to see his once self-assured boyfriend look so uncertain. This setting unnerved them both, but only Peter had to speak.

“Your Honor?” Peter appeared tentative to Jason. “Am I allowed to direct my remarks to Jordan?”

Judge Milton nodded, maybe even smiled a hair. “You may, but you have to remain civil, is that clear?”

"I understand, sir." Slowly, as if unsure he really wanted to do it, Peter angled his body so he could look at Jordan. Shackled, but dressed in a suit, Jordan stared at the table in front of him.

“It doesn’t surprise me you won’t look at me, Jordan. The night of the attack, you distracted me so others could jump me from behind. You were a coward then and you haven’t changed. Whether you want to or not, you have to listen to me now.

“I'll never really know why you made me the butt of your anger. Maybe it was because of my relationship with Jason, I don't know. Even that makes no sense to me, but since you won't tell me, I'm left to guess.

"Despite knowing you don't care one bit, I'm going to tell you what your attack has done to me. Even if you don't listen, you'll hear it at least."

Peter stared at Jordan, as if waiting for him to look up. Jason knew that wouldn't happen, and it didn't. Finally Peter shrugged. "The most obvious consequence is I’m no longer allowed to compete in Martial Arts tournaments. According to my doctors, the broken bones in my face and spine are at risk should I sustain a direct blow. I'll probably be able to teach again, though I doubt I'll try. I have too much anger to instill the discipline needed to be a good teacher. If you wanted to take away something dear to me, you succeeded. Thanks to you, I’ll never get the chance to compete for another State Championship.

Peter swallowed twice. He glanced toward the gallery looking sadder than Jason had seen in a long time.

"As bad as my physical injuries and the lasting effects were, the mental problems you caused me are worse. After the attack I was depressed, angry, irritable. I nearly lost Jason because of what you did to me. Despite all he did to help me recover, I nearly let my issues break us up. If that was what you wanted, you failed. We're still together and we're still happy."

Reliving that painful period, even briefly, hurt Jason and he knew what talking about it in public cost Peter.

"But it doesn't end there. Whenever Jason and I go out at night, I’m always checking to see where I am and who's around me. Where once I enjoyed going out, now I can’t relax enough to have fun. Twice I almost punched a friend who came up behind me unexpectedly. That's a direct result of your attack on me.

“I still have nightmares, the kind were I scream in my sleep. I'm still in therapy to overcome the emotional scars from the attack, and I think I've become a more callous, cynical person. The new me is not someone I like as much as the person I was before."

Peter sniffed hard, but never let his glare leave Jordan. “You don't care about me or what happened, I know that, but we both know you attacked me to get back at Jason. I'll never understand why you set out to hurt him or me, and frankly I don’t care. All I want is for this to be over and for you to go to jail, where you belong.”

Peter turned back to the Judge. “Your honor, I've given a lot of thought to what I wanted to say to you today. What I said to Jordan is the crux of the effects this assault has had on me. Now I'd like to tell you what I think should happen to Jordan Colmar.

“I know the final decision is yours. Unlike me, my family, Jason and my other friends, you don't have a personal stake in what happens today. Were I to base what I’m going to say on my emotions, I would ask you to give him every day you possibly can, but I want you to know that my words are based on more than just emotions.

“There are two things I want to address. The first is the nature of the attack. As you heard during the trial, I did nothing to provoke this attack. Jason and I avoided Jordan as best we could. I was attacked because I was gay and I was dating his onetime best friend. This was a hate crime against a gay person.

“Any sentence you hand out today will send a message to everyone who thinks it's okay to attack gay people based on our sexuality. I’m asking that you keep in mind that a lenient sentence will signal it's open season on gay men and women. A lengthy sentence will tell people you can’t hurt us without being punished in return.

“The other thing I want to tell the court is that Jordan in as unremorseful and unrepentant a person as you will ever meet. No matter what sob story he gives you, no matter how much he says he's changed when he asks you for mercy, don’t believe it. It’s all an act. He'll say or do anything to get his way. If you need proof, look no further than what he did during the trial.

“Jordan, through his high priced lawyers, attempted to save himself by attacking everyone who testified against him. First it was Officer Bennett, then Jason and to a lesser extent me. He and his lawyer tried to make it seem like everyone else was lying except him. He's the same petty, spiteful, vindictive person he was on the night I was attacked. There isn’t an ounce of remorse in him; just a self centered, ‘me first’ person who will never change.

“I don't know what the maximum penalty is, but I’m asking you to impose it. This person should never be allowed to walk freely again. He'll only hurt someone else if you give him the chance. I know what I suffered, what my family and friends had to endure, and I know how much the person I love suffered at his hands. It would be wrong to let him do it to someone else.

“Thank you.”

Jason resisted the urge to leap from his seat and smother Peter in his arms. At that moment, he couldn't have been prouder of his boyfriend. After what felt like an eternity, Peter sat next to him, allowing Jason to squeeze his hand.

Jordan was given the chance to address the court last. Although Jason heard the speech, he didn't remember much of its content. He was too focused on how Peter would react to pay closer attention. All he remembered was that Jordan continued to deny his involvement and played up how he was a good person.

The courtroom felt like it was holding its breath when Jordan sat down. Judge Milton sat quietly, his pen moving quickly across something in front of him. After he appeared to underline something twice, he put his pen down and stared at the gallery.

“Mr. Colmar,” he said, breaking the unnatural silence. “Please stand.”

Noting the dispassionate expression on the face of his one-time friend, Jason felt a pang of guilt that he didn't feel any sympathy for Jordan. To him, this person reminded him nothing of the friend he’d known as a child. The judge spoke again, drawing Jason's attention away from Jordan.

“I've had an opportunity to review the transcripts from the trial,read the letters submitted by the defense on behalf of Mr. Colmar, I've considered the statements made in court today, the sentencing memorandum submitted by both sides, and reviewed the applicable sentencing guidelines. Before I sentence you, Mr. Colmar, I want to review the factors that weighed on my decision.

“There are several principles a judge should consider when deciding on what sentence to impose. The Pennsylvania Supreme Court has said I should ask myself the following questions: does the sentence act to deter future crime, both specifically as to the defendant and generally with the public at large; does the sentence punish the defendant for his crime; does the sentence act to rehabilitate the defendant; does the sentence reflect the mitigating factors, if any, presented by the defendant, and does it reflect the aggravating factors, if any?"

Judge Milton peered up from his notes and stared at the defense table. Trying to read anything from his face was impossible for Jason.

"I've carefully considered each of the questions in my decision. I'm going to address these areas in my remarks and explain why I believe the sentence I'm going to impose encompasses each of these factors."

"Mr. Colmar, I've been a judge for almost twenty years. In that time, I've been asked to sentence many defendants. Some were young, some were older; some rich, some poor. Each of these cases brought with them a unique set of facts. Each case is different, each case requires different considerations.

"Your lawyer tells me that you are a fine young man, from a good family, going to a good school. He says you have a bright future, and that this incident is totally out of character for the person who stands before me today.

"The prosecutor paints a very different picture of you, one that is not flattering in the least. The government contends you are a cold calculating, menace to society. That you are without remorse and unrepentant.

"Often times the truth lies somewhere between the two and this time is no exception. There are elements of truth in what both sides have said; you come from a good family, go to a good school and had a bright future ahead of you before this incident. You also carried out a cold, vicious attack on an innocent person and have no remorse for what you did."

Hearing this, Jason suppressed a whoop of excitement. The judge saw through Jordan's lies. Hopefully he'd give him the long jail sentence he deserved.

"In reviewing the evidence, I am in complete agreement with the jury's decision. It is my opinion that you lied multiple times in your testimony. I did not find you to be a credible witness. Your testimony, in my opinion, was a complete fabrication, one that was designed to mislead and confuse the jury.

"I also have little doubt that you and Warren Berimen conspired to commit perjury. Is my belief that, based on the evidence, you had a hand in Mr. Berimen's willful and deliberate perjury in this trial.

"The evidence of guilt was overwhelming. You, not Edward Portman, or anyone else, organized and carried out the vicious and brutal beating of Peter Gregory. The evidence was also clear that this is a hate crime. The motivation for this assault was based on Mr. Gregory's sexual orientation.

"In my time on the bench I do not believe I have ever had a defendant come before me who had less redeeming qualities than you do. As your lawyer pointed out, you come from a well-to-do family, you were attending an excellent school, and had a bright future ahead of you. There was no reason at all for you to be involved in this type of crime. You had everything going for you and you tossed it all away.

"You maintained your innocence throughout the trial, as is your right. But as I have said, in my opinion the evidence is overwhelming that you were not only guilty of this offense, but you were the most culpable of all the defendants. Without you, this attack would never have taken place. You were the instigator, the motivator, the driving force behind what happened to Peter Gregory on October 7, 2009.

“There are no mitigating factors that I can see in this case. There are several aggravating factors that weigh against you: you show no remorse, you were the one who instigated this attack, you conspired with another witness to commit perjury, and you lied on the stand.

“As has been said before, this was a brutal and senseless attack on a young man who did nothing to deserve what happened to him. I do not believe leniency would achieve any of the goals of sentencing. It would not deter you, it would not deter others, it would not serve to punish you for what you did, and it would not rehabilitate you. In short, you do not deserve leniency.

"For all these reasons I'm going to impose the following sentence. On the first count, attempted murder in the second-degree while armed, I sentence you to the required twenty to forty years in jail. On the enhancement, that this was a hate crime, I sentence you to an additional twenty to forty years to be served consecutive to any other sentence I imposed today. On the conspiracy count, I sentence you to twenty to forty years to be served consecutive to any other sentence I impose today. Because I have already sentenced you to twenty to forty years for the enhancement, I will not impose an additional enhancement on the conspiracy count. On the weapons charge, that you, or one of your co-conspirators used a deadly or dangerous weapon, I sentence you to two and a half to five years consecutive to any other sentence imposed. On the charge of possession of instruments of crime, to whit a baseball bat, I sentence you to two and a half to five years consecutive to all other sentences. It is my opinion that the other assault counts all merge for the purpose of sentencing and as such I will not impose any further sentence on the other counts.

"I take no joy in sentencing someone as young and with as much potential as you had to a minimum of sixty-five years in jail with no chance of parole. But to impose any lesser sentence would be a miscarriage of justice. It would minimize the severity of what happened, and would not reflect the complete and utter lack of remorse I have witnessed in you during these proceedings.

"Because this was a trial, I'm required to advise you that you have a right to appeal the jury's decision and my rulings to the Superior Court of Pennsylvania. Any appeal must be docketed within thirty days. If you cannot afford an attorney to file your appeal, one will be appointed to represent you."

"That is a sentence of this court." Milton nodded toward the deputies next to Jordan. "The defendant is remanded to the custody of the Sheriff for transport to the state correctional diagnostic center at Camp Hill for imposition of sentence. These proceedings are adjourned."

Jason watched the deputies lead Jordan from the courtroom. Before he left, he looked back briefly at where he and Peter sat. The urge to flip him off, wave goodbye, or give him an exaggerated smirk almost overwhelmed his good sense. In the end, he simply hugged Peter.

***

The news conference was in progress before he and Peter reached the courthouse steps. Holding Peter's hand, Jason tried to keep well away from the cameras and reporters. Martin and the District Attorney were addressing the media, allowing them to remain out of the spotlight.

"Why don't you two head out the back?" Amanda motioned with her head to the door they'd all just used. "You won't have a chance to escape the press if you wait much longer."

Peter smiled and kissed his mother. When Barbara nodded her agreement, Jason leaned in and kissed his mother's cheek. With only a quickly glance back to be sure they weren't followed, Jason let Peter lead them toward the exit in the rear of the courthouse.

"It's over." Peter sounded relieved.

"Finally." Thankful for the length of sentence, Jason didn't find the pleasure in it he anticipated. "Are you happy with the sentence?"

Peter stopped, his face scrunched up. "Happy's the wrong word. I think it was the sentence that needed to be imposed, but I'm not happy. I can't feel good that someone our age is going to spend the rest of his life in prison."

Jason nodded. "Glad I'm not the only one who feels like that." He left out his other thoughts; there'd be time for them to discuss it more later.

Peter gave him a thin smile, his body relaxing finally. "C'mon, Soccer Boy, let's get outta here."

“Mr. Gregory!” They both turned around. A tall, slightly shaggy man in black glasses and a media badge around his neck was walking toward them. Jason recognized him as the reporter from the Advocate who tried to get a story during the trial.

“Can I get a statement now?”

They exchanged questioning looks. “Why not?” Jason shrugged.

They talked about the trial and sentence for a few minutes. Just as they were about to go, the reporter asked, “So, are you two doing okay?”

Still holding hands, they smiled at each other. Jason nodded, watching Peter do the same.

"We are now," Peter said, giving the man a small wave.

Walking away, Jason realized it had been over a year since he felt things were good between them. "We are now," he whispered.

Peter turned, winked and squeezed his hand. "I love you, Jase."

Leaning closer, Jason pressed their lips together. "Good, ‘cause you know I love you."

With heartfelt thanks to Nephy for helping me avoid being too legalistic.

Hope you enjoyed this and the greater story that was Second Shot. I really would like for those who have been reading to leave me a review and give me your thoughts since this ends the Second Shot story line.

Thanks
Andy

Copyright © 2011 Andrew Q Gordon; All Rights Reserved.
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On 12/07/2011 11:17 PM, Jammi said:
Andy

 

I finally got to finish reading this and i must say i enjoyed it. First off, i actually enjoyed the legalize lol. I figured it was appropriate since you were telling the story from the pov of the prosecution. I feel like i learned a lot from reading this as to how to do a trial. For example i didn't know victims were allowed to give a statement before sentencing i will have to keep that in mind :)

back to you though, i am glad that Jordan got what he deserved, especially since he tried to lie his way out of it. Glad to see Pete and Jason are doing well too. My only complaint is that i wish there had been more Jase and pete. i definitely enjoyed them in second shot and its sad to see the story come to an end. Its rewarding though too and i think you should be proud. thanks for the great story

One thing to remember about the American legal system is that it is not uniform, each state, plus DC, plus the Federal system, is different. Given the spike in victim's rights legislation of late, I think most, if not all states allow some form of victim impact statements - hey, if the defendant can try to skew things his way, why not the government and the victim?

 

As for Jason and Peter, well, this wasn't their story, but - time permitting [or should I say, baby q permitting], I have other stories involving them. Just gotta get it written.

 

Thanks for reading and especially for the comments. :)

 

Andy

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Andy:

I just finished Second Chance and The Trial and want you to know that I think that it was an awesome story. To be honest, as I finished Second Chance, I was sorry to see it end -- and honestly think that there is more to the story that SHOULD be shared! Like a growing relationship with Jason's grandparents, Pete getting a HUGE settlement from Jordan's family so that money is no longer an issue between him and Jason!

How Barbara's brother and sister deal with their parent's involvement with the boys. How Barbara still struggles with knowledge that Jason is gay. How Dean and Darryl deal with their girlfriends and the fact that they share a house/home with Jason and Peter.

You built a foundation that has the potential of a lot more excellent reading!!!!

Thank you,

Six

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On 12/09/2011 03:24 PM, Six.Gauge said:
Andy:

I just finished Second Chance and The Trial and want you to know that I think that it was an awesome story. To be honest, as I finished Second Chance, I was sorry to see it end -- and honestly think that there is more to the story that SHOULD be shared! Like a growing relationship with Jason's grandparents, Pete getting a HUGE settlement from Jordan's family so that money is no longer an issue between him and Jason!

How Barbara's brother and sister deal with their parent's involvement with the boys. How Barbara still struggles with knowledge that Jason is gay. How Dean and Darryl deal with their girlfriends and the fact that they share a house/home with Jason and Peter.

You built a foundation that has the potential of a lot more excellent reading!!!!

Thank you,

Six

Gracious Six, sounds like already have better ideas on where to take this than I do. :)

 

Honestly, I have ideas for where to take this but not really the time to do it. I need to clean up a few stories, finish some other things I'm doing then I can see about returning here. IF and when I do, the first story would only touch on Jason and Peter - they would be in it, but only as secondary characters. It would basically start when the Trial is over. The other idea is five years after they graduate and would deal with their lives as 'adults' and the issues that raises for them.

 

But the suggested sub plots certainly are interesting and I will file this review in my folder of ideas. :D [No, I don't feel bad 'stealing' your ideas :P ]

 

Thanks for reading and for taking the time to leave your comments.

 

Andy

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I have been reading Second Shot and this sequel to it for the last month or so when I could find time. I am taking a couple of courses that have required reading and have another book going as well as some short stories going. I have really enjoyed these. You tell a good story and develop your characters so well that one cares about them a great deal or one can loath them as in this story in particular. I started Second Shot on a recommendation of a friend and had to read this as well. I will try some of your other stories now also. From the comments and reviews of others you know that your writing is getting to people where they live.

I gather that you have something to do with the legal system. I have been a fan of this kind of dramatic story going way back to Perry Mason stories and then the TV series. Needless to say, I am an old timer.

I'm not a good story teller, but I have done a little writing, enough to know enough that it is difficult to do well. You do it well. Thank you for the work that it took to give this to us, your readers. The feedback that you have received is well deserved.

Bob

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On 12/16/2011 09:00 AM, Bob1010 said:
I have been reading Second Shot and this sequel to it for the last month or so when I could find time. I am taking a couple of courses that have required reading and have another book going as well as some short stories going. I have really enjoyed these. You tell a good story and develop your characters so well that one cares about them a great deal or one can loath them as in this story in particular. I started Second Shot on a recommendation of a friend and had to read this as well. I will try some of your other stories now also. From the comments and reviews of others you know that your writing is getting to people where they live.

I gather that you have something to do with the legal system. I have been a fan of this kind of dramatic story going way back to Perry Mason stories and then the TV series. Needless to say, I am an old timer.

I'm not a good story teller, but I have done a little writing, enough to know enough that it is difficult to do well. You do it well. Thank you for the work that it took to give this to us, your readers. The feedback that you have received is well deserved.

Bob

Bob,

 

Thanks for the comments, I'll been happy to see people enjoyed these two stories, they've sorta gotten under my skin a bit, almost as if they were parts of my life. I remember watch Perry Mason reruns with my Pop when I was young and he'd always ask me if I was as good as Perry Mason after I'd graduated law school. Of course being a prosecutor, I'd always tell him I was better, getting a smile in return.

 

Again, thanks for reading and especially for taking a moment to tell me you enjoyed it.

 

Andy

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i really felt for Peter when he was reading off what Jordan's crimes had done to him. It's horrible that such an awful act had to impact his life. But, I'm glad him and Jason seem to be working things out. I really liked the courtroom drama in this story, and I still wanna know: When are you going to write a romance between lawyers? biggrin.png I really want you to write one! Please??? worshippy.gif

Thanks for the great addition to second shot! I'm glad the characters have their matters settled once and for all.

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On 12/28/2011 04:41 AM, intune said:
i really felt for Peter when he was reading off what Jordan's crimes had done to him. It's horrible that such an awful act had to impact his life. But, I'm glad him and Jason seem to be working things out. I really liked the courtroom drama in this story, and I still wanna know: When are you going to write a romance between lawyers? biggrin.png I really want you to write one! Please??? worshippy.gif

Thanks for the great addition to second shot! I'm glad the characters have their matters settled once and for all.

Romance between lawyers? Everyone knows lawyers don't have hearts. :P I have no plans for a Lawyer Romance - Fantasy is not my forte LOL. That and I have too many other projects I want to do and no time to do them.

 

thanks for reading, glad you enjoyed this :)

 

Andy

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Just finished reading this final chapter, a fitting end to the trial and nice that it was done from Jason's perspective rather than the attorneys. I must say I'm glad this and Second Shot were complete when I started reading them, I don't think I could've handled the wait between chapters lol. Another job well done Andy, I shall have to check out your other stories next.

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On 01/21/2012 11:31 AM, stew said:
Just finished reading this final chapter, a fitting end to the trial and nice that it was done from Jason's perspective rather than the attorneys. I must say I'm glad this and Second Shot were complete when I started reading them, I don't think I could've handled the wait between chapters lol. Another job well done Andy, I shall have to check out your other stories next.
I have to thank Anyta - my beta reader - for suggesting the end be from Jason's perspective. This was really an extension- not a sequel, more like a companion to Sec. Shot and it tied up the one glaring loose end - so it made sense that to wrap up everything, it should return to his perspective to end - end it - for now 0:)

 

Thanks for reading and I'm glad you enjoyed it.

 

Andy

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Well Andy I have e-mailed you several times about your writing the Second Shot was awsome had me laughing crying and very emotional and then you let me know about this companion series and again very very well written and again lost sleep as had to read it all and had me hooked from start to finish and even though its fiction I hated the part of Jordan as he was hate personified and would only be happy in life if he was ruining someone elses life and pleased that Peter and Jason can be happy and also loved the part that the 4 boys now share a house but getting back to the trial very good my friend and im now working my was through your other writings as I believe you are worth reading

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On 03/01/2012 09:43 PM, Dave68 said:
Well Andy I have e-mailed you several times about your writing the Second Shot was awsome had me laughing crying and very emotional and then you let me know about this companion series and again very very well written and again lost sleep as had to read it all and had me hooked from start to finish and even though its fiction I hated the part of Jordan as he was hate personified and would only be happy in life if he was ruining someone elses life and pleased that Peter and Jason can be happy and also loved the part that the 4 boys now share a house but getting back to the trial very good my friend and im now working my was through your other writings as I believe you are worth reading
Dave,

 

Thanks for stopping by to leave a review/comment here. Glad you liked it. I think in someways I might have made Jordan too cliched. I was going for stupid rich kid who always got his way as opposed to just flat out evil. In my mind, Jordan blamed Peter for Jason 'turning gay'. He didn't want to attack Jason directly because they'd been friends forever, but also in his mind, getting rid of Peter would 'force' Jason back to his old friends. Maybe that was too cliched as well. But it worked for the story if you hated him, that was my goal, especially for this story. Thanks for reading this too.

 

Andy

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Thanks for a great series. I had read Second Shot quite a while back and consider it one of my favorite stories. I read it again as a prelude to reading about the trial and went through it over a few days ignoring other facets of my life so that I could keep reading, that is always a sign of an excellent story. As I read it over a few days in my eagerness to continue reading I did not stop to comment on chapters of Second Shot as I should have; I feel quilty about this as you deserve the accolades for your efforts. I agree with Six Guage's comments and ideas above as well as others, there is lots to say and do with the wonderful cast you have created please work on the five year story with these guys and their supporting cast besides you can use your baby experience as part of the plot. Thanks for the great job! I look forward to other multi chapter stories from you.

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On 04/06/2012 05:35 PM, Torontotop said:
Thanks for a great series. I had read Second Shot quite a while back and consider it one of my favorite stories. I read it again as a prelude to reading about the trial and went through it over a few days ignoring other facets of my life so that I could keep reading, that is always a sign of an excellent story. As I read it over a few days in my eagerness to continue reading I did not stop to comment on chapters of Second Shot as I should have; I feel quilty about this as you deserve the accolades for your efforts. I agree with Six Guage's comments and ideas above as well as others, there is lots to say and do with the wonderful cast you have created please work on the five year story with these guys and their supporting cast besides you can use your baby experience as part of the plot. Thanks for the great job! I look forward to other multi chapter stories from you.
feel free to drop back in an add comments to chapter at any time, :whistle: not that I'm soliciting reviews mind you. 0:)

 

This one was very different for me, but I felt writing it from Martin's perspective was the best way to not only convey the trial, but some of the angst all trial lawyers feel whenever they step in the well of the court. Even good cases can't be taken for granted.

 

Thanks again for the comments and check the Comings and Goings topic in my forum for what's going on with me.

 

Andy

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After re-reading Second Shot for the third time I decided to read about the trial (it wasnt done the last two times and I dont like waiting for chapters:P). The Second Shot storyline is easily my favorite M/M romance and I just know I will be dropping by again eventually to read it again, its just THAT good of a read!

There's sappy, there's funny, there's heartbreaking, romantic, suspense and a myriad of other feelings I associate with the story and I just want to thank you Q for sharing this with us, it's simply beautiful!

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On 05/27/2012 09:35 AM, Sympathia said:
After re-reading Second Shot for the third time I decided to read about the trial (it wasnt done the last two times and I dont like waiting for chapters:P). The Second Shot storyline is easily my favorite M/M romance and I just know I will be dropping by again eventually to read it again, its just THAT good of a read!

There's sappy, there's funny, there's heartbreaking, romantic, suspense and a myriad of other feelings I associate with the story and I just want to thank you Q for sharing this with us, it's simply beautiful!

Thanks for those kind words. In some ways, Second Shot will always be like a first love - it was my first and therefore it is always gong to be special to me.

 

I agree with you when it comes to unfinished stories. I'd prefer them to be finished, even from authors I know always finish things. But unlike you I can't sit back and wait. I end up reading chapter by chapter against my better judgement. LOL

 

I've started the sequel, and am about 7000 words into it as of today so we'll see when I get that finished. My goal is to get it done before the current story in Premium end, so I've got about 6 months. Might be a tight time line but we'll see.

 

Thanks again, I appreciate your comments and they motivate me to work harder on the next one.

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Hey!
Your story finally led me to create an account so I could leave a comment.
Just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed this series - it kept me occupied for days. :-)

 

I especially liked that you tackled real, complex issues between them, like that the class differences affected their relationship in so many ways, and didn't have any kind of simple solution, and how Peter's attack left all sorts of psychological damage that couldn't be solved with true love and a hug.

 

Thanks for the wonderful, and incredibly long read!

 

Dr Squidlove.

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On 09/17/2015 07:42 AM, Dr Squidlove said:

Hey!

Your story finally led me to create an account so I could leave a comment.

Just wanted to let you know that I really enjoyed this series - it kept me occupied for days. :-)

 

I especially liked that you tackled real, complex issues between them, like that the class differences affected their relationship in so many ways, and didn't have any kind of simple solution, and how Peter's attack left all sorts of psychological damage that couldn't be solved with true love and a hug.

 

Thanks for the wonderful, and incredibly long read!

 

Dr Squidlove.

Sorry it took so long to respond, Someone needed to warn me 3 nearly 4 year olds are so demanding of one's time. ;)

 

I really loved writing this story (Second Shot and this.) If Memory serves me, I finished this just after my daughter was born. I think this one will always be special and I'll never move it to 'get it published' it would destroy what it was meant to be.

 

That said, I would like to write something similar to the Trial book, I felt like in some ways it was my best stuff. But given it has no romance, no vampires, no shifters, no wizards, no star ships and no butt sex, no one is going to read such a book so I'll keep waiting for the day when I'm retired and can write any old damn thing I want. ;)

 

THanks for reading and especially thanks for going to the effort to leave me a comment. if you get a chance, shoot me an email at andrew@andrewqgordon.com and I'll show you how to get a free book or two from my publisher.

 

-AQG

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Andrew... I worked as a counselor to 'high risk' youth for 20 years... mostly boys. I worked mostly with some of the perpetrators (I know, BOOOO on me). There is not a lot of sympathy for the perps... they get what they deserve, right?

 

I have had before me several wonderful, handsome, otherwise GOOD boys who were simply raised to believe and act as they did. They were raised by bigoted, hateful people, got in with the wrong crowd, were taught to believe destructive things and, as they grew, thought and acted based on what the resulting grooming created them to be.

 

Should THEY be punished for this anti-social attitude and, more importantly, behavior? Perhaps. Ultimately, they did wrong.

 

Kids are not born hateful, bigoted, prejudiced and violent. They LEARN all that. Kids are born amazed by the world around them, exploring, learning, listening to and being taught the right way to think and act.

 

Was Jordon BAD when he was born? NO! Someone taught him to think and act like he did and to feel justified in what he thought and did.

 

Personally, I think that every parent should be charged as an accessory to whatever crime they commit. THEY taught this kid to think and act the way they did. Shouldn't THEY be held accountable for instilling this hateful, bigoted thought process in their child?

 

Unless the parents can show, by their own lives, beliefs and teachings that they are innocent of grooming their child to think and act the way they did, they should be held accountable.

 

Courts deal with facts. Isn't it a relevant fact that Jordan's dad, and maybe his mom, instilled in Jordon this hateful, prejudiced and violent attitude?

 

You're an attorney... I'm just curious where you stand.

 

Neal

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On 03/08/2016 12:30 PM, Nahrung said:

Andrew... I worked as a counselor to 'high risk' youth for 20 years... mostly boys. I worked mostly with some of the perpetrators (I know, BOOOO on me). There is not a lot of sympathy for the perps... they get what they deserve, right?

 

I have had before me several wonderful, handsome, otherwise GOOD boys who were simply raised to believe and act as they did. They were raised by bigoted, hateful people, got in with the wrong crowd, were taught to believe destructive things and, as they grew, thought and acted based on what the resulting grooming created them to be.

 

Should THEY be punished for this anti-social attitude and, more importantly, behavior? Perhaps. Ultimately, they did wrong.

 

Kids are not born hateful, bigoted, prejudiced and violent. They LEARN all that. Kids are born amazed by the world around them, exploring, learning, listening to and being taught the right way to think and act.

 

Was Jordon BAD when he was born? NO! Someone taught him to think and act like he did and to feel justified in what he thought and did.

 

Personally, I think that every parent should be charged as an accessory to whatever crime they commit. THEY taught this kid to think and act the way they did. Shouldn't THEY be held accountable for instilling this hateful, bigoted thought process in their child?

 

Unless the parents can show, by their own lives, beliefs and teachings that they are innocent of grooming their child to think and act the way they did, they should be held accountable.

 

Courts deal with facts. Isn't it a relevant fact that Jordan's dad, and maybe his mom, instilled in Jordon this hateful, prejudiced and violent attitude?

 

You're an attorney... I'm just curious where you stand.

 

Neal

Hey Neal,

 

First, working with the perpetrators is not a boo worthy effort. There is a saying, the best way to bring down crime is prevent recidivism because so much of crime is committed by repeat offenders, so on that score - bully for you.

 

The issues with parents and their kids. In theory I understand what you're saying, "You raised this person to be a criminal, so you need to be punished along with him." But that's problematic in so many way.

 

1st is the theory of notice - you have to be put on notice that what you're doing is a crime. Is spoiling your kid a crime? Not for most, but as the affluenza teen in Texas showed, it can be. So it might be more an issue of neglect - in DC for example if a child picks up 3 criminal arrests before 13 it's an automatic referral to the Child and Family Services to check out what's going on. (Never results in any charges of neglect however).

 

2nd - and more problematic from a prosecution point, how do I prove the nexus? Was it the parenting or the friends they kept? What if they are being influenced by another adult and are really good at sneaking out and hiding stuff from their parents? People work, they can't watch 24/7.

 

3rd - how does a parent defend themselves? How do you prove a non event?

 

4th - Last - what standard do you use? It can't be that you raise the child and then when they commit a crime the gov't asks a jury to review what a parent did and then decide if THEY agree with how the child was raised. Because that is what you'd be doing, asking the jury to decide if the parent had raised the child properly according to their standards.

 

I definitely agree that better parenting in many cases probably would prevent a lot of the crime we see, but how do you enforce that? Any how do you enforce it without it disproportionately the poor and minority parents? Many of whom work 2 jobs and are home less. No one is going to want to charge the rich people who can afford an army of lawyers.

 

Again, you definitely hit on a valid point - children are not born hateful. They're notice things, like Sally has darker skin or lighter hair, or can't walk or weighs more - but they don't make the leap to - I need to berate her, degrade her, call her names unless they are taught that's acceptable. The problem is that might not be taught at home. For instance, despite my job, we never talked about guns with 'lil q. But "Joey" at school, his parents do. He likes to play army and shoot things. One day 'lil q came home and was shooting things. We learned it came from Joey. We spoke to the teachers, they said they addressed it and they don't allow that - IF they see and hear it. Now we've talked to her, but she still does it now and then and we still tell her not to and why not to. But the point is, where you learn things isn't always at home, and even if the parents try to teach something the child can still decide Joey is cooler than Papa and I'm going to do what he wants.

 

Children DO want to fit in, be liked, etc. And if Joey is cool, they want Joey to like them.

 

Don't know if that answered it, but as with so many problems, there solution is hard to identify.

 

-AQG

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Great story, great characters. Very realistic or at least convincing of its realism. Very compelling and touching. You are a great story-teller. Please, though, do get an expert proof-reader to eliminate basic annoying mechanical errors that really are so distracting from an excellent read. Who wants to read "were" when it should be "where"? That will add polish and popularity to your work. Blessings. J.

On 04/13/2016 07:32 PM, Jaro_423 said:

Great story, great characters. Very realistic or at least convincing of its realism. Very compelling and touching. You are a great story-teller. Please, though, do get an expert proof-reader to eliminate basic annoying mechanical errors that really are so distracting from an excellent read. Who wants to read "were" when it should be "where"? That will add polish and popularity to your work. Blessings. J.

Thanks so much Jaro - this was far more autobiographic than I should admit. I've been a prosecutor for 25 years so it's something I should be able to get down. Martin might be the closest you ever get to the real me in writing.

 

Editing - sigh. I keep saying one of the days I'll get to it, but if I'm realistic, I won't be able to do that until I retire (which I'm hoping is soon - I'm pushing for an early one - before I hit 55, but we'll see.)

 

Thanks so much again.

 

-AQG

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On 11/20/2011 at 10:03 AM, Andrew Q Gordon said:
On 11/20/2011 at 4:27 AM, B G said:

It was an excellent story. The only thing I would have liked different . . a paragraph about Colmar's new cell mate and BOYFRIEND -- Bruiser, a tough BDSM master with 13" of super-cock. sword.gif

Thanks BG -

 

As for the extra Paragraph, feel free to write and post it in my forum under the Trial of Jordan Topic - Be interesting to see what someone else has in mind for Second Shot's villain. :whistle:

Will it also include the results of an investigation into Hank Colmar's banking practices? Yes? Please?

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