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The Cardmaker and the Caretaker - 21. Chapter 21 A Day of Surprises

…and a few secrets too.

Wednesday went by rather quickly. Michael clung to Patrick until he left for the shop around 11am. They spent time practicing English words while Peter and Grethe filled out forms and made other preparations for going to the hospital. Grethe had visited Mr. Archibald the day before, and she said he was actually feeling positive about the move. “He’s been clinging to the memories of his wife and their life together. When I told him about moving into a flat soon after Ivan died, Arthur said he could see the advantages of making a new start.”

Patrick exchanged looks with Peter, who smiled and told his aunt she’d probably made a good impression on their neighbour. “I’m glad you’ve already made a friend here, Moster.” No one mentioned the potential of more-than-friends, but of course it was early yet.

They’d talked about his meeting with Fiona over breakfast, and Grethe told them she’d spoken to Kim and Alice. They required regular bulletins about Michael, whom they considered almost like a nephew. She promised they would be the first to know, after her sister who had first priority as Michael’s grandmother. Peter more or less ignored the mention of his mother, which Patrick found strange. On the other hand, he knew his fiancé’s focus was on Michael.

The cleaners had called the day before and they were fine with dropping by around seven to discuss hours and price. That meant Patrick could join Peter and Grethe at the hospital around four and spend a couple of hours with Michael, before he went home. He used most of the afternoon to prepare his shop for being closed for the next week, including asking the shopkeepers next door to keep an eye on the premises, the way they did when he took a month’s holiday in July.

When he arrived at the Bear Ward and asked for directions to Michael’s room, in case he was in a different place, the face of the nurse lit up.

“You’re Lizzie Kern’s son, right?”

“Yes, I am. It’s nice to meet people who knew my mum.”

“She was an amazing nurse, with a great instinct for relieving our patients’ pain. Especially the babies who can be difficult to assess; they always did better on her watch.”

“My mum loved working here. She said everyone were devoted to helping the patients and their parents. The possibility of aiding sick people and especially children was the main reason she became a nurse.” Patrick had heard his mum say this many times, so he was certain enough to express this view. The pleased smile on the nurse’s face was a nice reward.

“Well, here you are; Michael is in here. I guess I’ll see you again tomorrow.”

“Absolutely, thank you for your help and the kind words about my mother.” They parted with mutual smiles, and Patrick knocked softly on the door, before opening it.

“Papa, Papa,” was the enthusiastic greeting from Michael, and Patrick hurriedly shed his coat and used the provided ethanol on his hands before he went over to greet his new son.

“This is for you – den er til dig,” he said and handed the boy a large envelope as he sat down next to Peter, who patted his back. Patrick didn’t feel he deserved much congratulation for recalling the Danish phrase, which was one of the first the boy had said to him. Every time he looked at the decorated egg by his desk in the shop, the cardmaker could hear the sweet voice as the boy presented the gifts to Peter and him.

“Yes, Spiderman, cool!” Michael exclaimed and held up the laminated card he had extracted from the envelope. The adults smiled and expressed their pleasure over the picture and his reaction. The Spiderman figure seated in the huge web wore the boy’s face, and the silvery strands radiated out in a network of support and caretakers. At the top Peter stood with Patrick and Grethe on either side. At the bottom the hospital was represented by a bear doctor flanked by flamingo nurses. To the left the Star Wars Lego figure of Obi Wan Kenobi guarded him with a raised light sabre, surrounded by various other cartoon favourites.

The boy pointed to each character and named them with glee. But he paused when he got to the guardian on the right side of the web. “Hvem er det?”

“He wants to know who the angel is.” Peter translated.

“So do I,” Patrick muttered. He was still confused about the image of a blond, barefooted protector clad in black leathers which had flashed into his mind when he was contemplating what to put in the last spot. Transparent wings hovered around his broad shoulders, and the badass attitude clearly said he'd deal with anyone and anything trying to mess with his charge.

“Patrick?” Peter nudged him gently.

“Uhm, yeah, that’s his guardian angel. He’ll protect him against harm.” He did his best to sound casual.

“Patrick siger, det er din skytsengel. Han passer på dig.”[1] Peter relayed the explanation, and Michael grinned and bounced a bit in excitement.

“Cool. Han ser sej ud, Papa.” Patrick could hear the approval in the bubbly voice and returned the grin as Peter told him their son thought the guardian angel looked ‘tough’ as well as cool.

They attached the card with magnets on the board opposite the bed, where he could see it all the time. Michael settled down for a quick nap, while the adults chatted. When the boy woke half an hour later, he, Patrick and Peter worked their way through one of the ward’s colourful books about the tiger with a bad heart, who got saved by a helpful bear. Michael grumbled about it being for babies, but he liked the fact he knew and could pronounce most of the words. A nurse came by occasionally to check his temperature and make sure he drank the juice and water set out.

At six o’clock Patrick said goodnight to Michael and hugged him, Peter and Grethe before he made the journey home. The cleaners arrived promptly at seven which boded well for their future reliability. He was surprised when the man introduced himself as the owner of the cleaning company and the two shy young women as his daughters.

“This is Neeta and Sonia, my oldest daughters. I hope they meet with your approval.”

“Of course, Mr. Kumar, and thank you for bringing them here yourself. Happy to meet you, Miss Neeta and Miss Sonia. Would you like some coffee or tea?” Patrick was pleased to see the girls answering for themselves, with Mr. Kumar eyeing them with fatherly pride. They all sat down at the kitchen table with mugs of tea and Moster Grethe’s wonderful Danish biscuits.

“Neeta and Sonia are studying, but would like to earn some money. I want them to be in safe place, and they will work hard to keep your home clean. Their mother taught them well, and I explained why you need exceptional standards.”

“I’m studying to be a nurse, Mr. Kern, so I understand why,” Neeta explained with a shy smile. She had a kind, but homely face framed by two long plaits of beautiful black hair. The younger sister would have been a stunning beauty if not for a fresh scar on the left side of her face. She wore a scarf over her short hair, and the loose folds hid most of the puckered tissue. Her brown eyes only met his briefly, before focusing on her tea or her sister.

“My fiancé Peter’s aunt, who’s staying with us, is a nurse. I’m sure she’ll be interested in hearing about your studies. Peter’s son Michael will have surgery tomorrow, which is why they aren’t here.”

Neither of the women showed any surprise, so their father had probably briefed them on this too. Patrick had decided to be candid about the household when he spoke to Mr. Kumar on the phone, in order to avoid any misunderstandings or awkwardness. He didn’t want to employ someone like his neighbour by mistake.

“I will be honest, Mr. Kern, and tell you why I want my daughters to work here. I asked around and I know you are nice man, who will not harm innocent people. Also, I have men like you working for me, and they show proper respect to my wife and daughters, and to lady cleaners. I can trust them not to assault the honour of women. Neeta and Sonia agree this is perfect place for them to clean.”

Patrick blanched and had a hard time keeping his composure at the devastating wave of anger and hurt from all three family members. He knew Sonia must have been sexually assaulted recently, and the trauma also affected those who loved her. He felt the incident had made her parents and siblings protective and supportive, but there was a thin bitter sliver of hate and self-blame cutting into Sonia’s proud soul. It made him want to help her, though he had no idea how.

“Thank you for your trust, and you should know it’s mutual. Letting strangers into my home has never been easy for me, but I’m confident this arrangement will work. My only worry is whether there will be enough to do for two people.”

“Why don’t you show us what the cleaning jobs are? Then we can discuss hours and pay, yes?”

“Certainly.” Patrick began with the kitchen, took them on a tour around the house, and explained how often he wanted cleaning done. Mr. Kumar took notes and seemed pleased. Sonia asked a few questions, and Patrick was surprised but relieved to notice her genuine interest made the earlier pain recede.

“I think you need two people for five hours two times a week,” Mr. Kumar finally pronounced. “You have tidy house, which makes cleaning easier. Vacuum cleaner is almost new, and we will bring special cloths to remove dust and wipe down surfaces and door handles. If five hours are too much, later we can reduce to four, yes? Or when little boy no longer needs extra clean home.”

“That sounds good, but I doubt I will need fewer hours even then. I’ve bought the house next door, and the old man who lives there, hasn’t been able to keep up with house-keeping matters. His children will help him pack up during the next six months, but I’m sure they’ll be happy to pay for the cleaning. This will probably mean extra hours during the summer, if you have time? And I’ll need cleaners for the joint place, both before and after various renovations. In fact, I guess you’ll both be finished with your studies long before I’ll be able to do without your invaluable help.”

Sonia seemed to brighten at the idea of extra work during summer and the prospect of being needed long term. Her father was positively beaming, when she spoke up with quiet confidence.

“My business studies will hopefully enable me to take over Kumar Cleaning when Father wants to retire. I’ve only just started, so you can count on me for several years, Mr. Kern.”

He wanted to tell them to call him Patrick, but sensed the formal address made them comfortable.

“Do you have any preferences on weekdays? And what time of day can you be here?”

“Fridays are good and Mondays or Tuesdays are fine too,” Sonia replied after a quick glance at her sister. “We both have the afternoons free on Tuesdays and Fridays, but Neeta has lessons scheduled on Mondays until two pm, so we wouldn’t be here before three.”

“I can take this Monday afternoon off, so we can arrive by noon as you wanted, Mr. Kern,” Neeta assured him.

“No, you don’t have to do that. Three o’clock on Monday afternoon will be fine. We’re having a hospital bed installed in the guestroom I showed you, and the whole room needs to be cleaned as well as the bathroom, because we hope Michael will be able to come home on Tuesday.”

They nodded, and Mr. Kumar produced a contract and explained about his wage demands, which sounded reasonable. Tuesdays and Fridays from one to six pm were chosen as the normal schedule. They filled out the form and signed it, and Patrick got the duplicate with the information he needed, including Sonia’s phone number.

“I will arrange for an automatic bank transfer every month. If for some reason the hours are more or less than agreed, we can deal with that by adjusting the subsequent months, right? The extra work in summer will be paid separately, once we find out how much it’s going to be.”

“Yes, very good, Mr. Kern. Sonia will keep track of hours and hand you invoice at the end of each month. It will be good way for her to learn the system.”

“I’ll be here on Friday and Monday to instruct you, but later on you’ll be given a key and your own code to the alarm system, so you’re not dependent on anyone to be here. Although I guess Michael and Aunt Grethe will be at home most days at least for the foreseeable future.”

“We will burn incense and say prayers to Dhanvantari[2] for successful surgery of your son, Mr. Kern.” He clasped Patrick’s hand in an earnest goodbye and his daughters nodded and added their best wishes.

“Thank you. We’re hopeful he will be fine, but nothing in this world is certain. I will let you know if plans change, and in this case no news is good news.”

After a few more polite farewell remarks, Mr. Kumar and his daughters left. Patrick indulged himself with a rare glass of whisky as he tried to forget the heart-breaking hurt he’d sensed in Sonia. But for some reason it kept nagging him, and he decided to listen to his instincts. He dug out his cell phone and made a call. Half an hour later he was finally able to relax and fix himself a quick sandwich while he waited for Peter.

When the doorbell rang at ten past eight, he left the kitchen to answer. He was a bit surprised Peter didn’t let himself in, but happy he was home earlier than expected. When he opened the door, he was taken aback to see a tall, beautiful woman with long blond hair smiling at him. She looked vaguely familiar, and the moment she opened her mouth he knew why.

“Hi Patrick, I’m Alice. Is my mother here or at the hospital?”

“Uhm, hi Alice, Moster Grethe is at the hospital with Michael. She’s staying there overnight. I don’t think she’s expecting you?”

“No, I know that. My modelling gig in Wales got postponed due to unexpected bad weather. I decided to jump on an airplane to London, so I could be here for my cousin. Is Peter at the hospital too?”

“Yes, but I’m expecting him home within the next hour. Please come in.” He backed up to let Alice into the house. She only had a small suitcase and a purse, so he assumed most of her luggage was still in Wales or wherever she was staying. As soon as she had gotten rid of her bags and coat she headed straight for him to deliver a hug and a kiss on the cheek.

“I’m so glad to meet the guy who’s making Peter happier than he’s ever been. I hope you don’t mind me arriving unannounced.”

“No, that’s fine, but you’re lucky I was at home. We were all at the hospital this afternoon.”

“Oh, I saw there were lights on in both houses before I sent the cab away. I would have gone next door to ask Mum’s new friend to put me up for an hour or two, if you hadn’t been here.”

“I’m sure Mr. Archibald would have been surprised but more than happy to offer you a cup of tea. Would you like one, while we wait?”

“I’m dying for tea, and a couple of Mum’s vaniljekranse.”[3]

“Those are the biscuits with a hole in the middle, right?”

“Yes…åh, sikke et hyggeligt køkken.[4] I’m not surprised Mum likes your house and the kitchen in particular. She sent me a few snapshots, but they didn’t do this room justice.”

She settled on a chair and looked around while Patrick made tea and dug out the biscuit tin. Alice was as relaxed and straightforward as her mother. He suspected she might come across as ill-mannered or pushy to a lot of Brits, but he found the lack of inhibitions refreshing. And the brief hug had shown him there was a tender heart and bright wits behind the classy and flawless exterior, all of which would probably ensure Alice a lucrative modelling career.

“How is Michael?”

“He was fine when I left. A bit bored with being in the hospital, and he’s surprisingly calm about tomorrow.”

“And Peter is trying not to freak out, right? Michael means everything to him. Well, you and Michael, I should say.”

“Right now, all of us are focused on Michael. But the surgeon was positive about the outcome when we spoke with him. There’s no guarantee though.”

“Yeah, that’s why I wanted to be here. Hopefully to celebrate the success, but if the worst should happen, I want to be there for Mum and Peter. Kim is going to arrive tomorrow.” She let the news slip out with a casual wink.

“He is? And he hasn’t told your mum or Peter either?”

“Nope, because they would have insisted it wasn’t necessary. But Kim told me there was no way he was going to be half a world away, when his family needed him. He’d already made sure his calendar could be cleared in case Michael got approved for surgery. As soon as the date was set, he bought the flight. I think he’s organized a few business meetings in Copenhagen, Berlin and London for the end of next week and the week after, in order to prolong his stay as much as possible.”

“Wow, that’s fantastic. I know Peter will be pleased, no matter what he says. How long are you able to stay for?”

“Unless the weather miraculously clears before Friday morning, I can stay until Sunday afternoon. But the shoot will commence on Monday morning, as the forecast is sunny for that day and the next. And that reminds me, can you book rooms for me and Kim at the hotel Mum stayed in?”

“There’s no need for that. The guest room is empty, because Grethe is staying at the hospital. I think she changed the bed linen this morning, so it’s all ready for you. The beds move apart, so if you don’t mind sharing with your brother, Kim could sleep here too. At least until Monday, when we have to reorganize the room to prepare for Michael coming home.”

“Are you sure, Patrick? I mean, Mum told me you’re unbelivably… uhm gæstfri[5]…uhm I don’t know the English word, but she said you opened your home to total strangers in the most amazing way. I guess I can see what she means.”

“Peter and Michael are my family now. Grethe, Kim and you are his closest, dearest relatives apart from his sister, and I hope you’ll be mine too. I don’t really have any relatives I care about, except for one cousin, and this house has been much too empty since my parents died.”

He paused to compose himself and take a mouthful of tea. A warm hand found his other hand and squeezed it in sympathy, but she didn’t say anything.

“To be honest, the house feels terribly empty right now, without Michael and Grethe’s presence. She’s the kindest, most warm-hearted woman I’ve ever met, apart from my mum. And I miss Michael’s voice and even the noise of his silly cartoons which make him laugh. Having you and Kim here would help, and I’m sure Peter will feel the same.”

The sound of the front door opening made them turn their heads, and moments later Peter called out.

“Patrick, I’m home. Why is there a suitcase… Vent lige lidt, jeg kender den frakke.[6] Alice?”

She started giggling and got up to face her cousin as he strode into the kitchen. “Hi Peter. Surprise!”

The delighted smile on his fiancé’s face confirmed Patrick’s decision to ask her to stay with them. Peter would need all the loving family support he could get for the next couple of days.

 

[1] Patrick says it’s your guardian angel. He looks after you.

[2] Dhanvantari is the Hindi god of healing.

[3] Vaniljekranse – traditional Danish butter cookies with vanilla.

[4] Oh, what a cozy / comfortable kitchen.

[5] Gæstfri = hospitable

[6] Wait a minute, I know this coat.

If you want to find out who the guardian angel is, please read my contribution to the Unintended Consequences Anthology.
Copyright © 2018 Timothy M.; All Rights Reserved.
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1 hour ago, Timothy M. said:

 

:gikkle: trust you to remember that. :rofl: 

I’m really not a Size Queen. If it’s really big, what do you do with it? You want to touch it, stroke it, and maybe lick it (to taste it). But no way is it going to be stretching any of orifices of mine out of shape!

 

Stop trying to shove that thing in my ear! Normal sized penises won’t fit in there! What kind of a kink freak are you? Just because I love having your tongue in my ear doesn’t mean I want anything else there! Stop that! Forbudt! Forbudt! Stop! Holdt! La' vær! Slut! Hjælp! Politi!

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8 minutes ago, droughtquake said:

I’m really not a Size Queen. If it’s really big, what do you do with it? You want to touch it, stroke it, and maybe lick it (to taste it). But no way is it going to be stretching any orifices out of shape!

 

Stop trying to shove that thing in my ear! Normal sized penises won’t fit in there! What kind of a kink freak are you? Just because I love having your tongue in my ear doesn’t mean I want anything thing else there! Stop that! Forbudt! Forbudt! Stop! Holdt! La' vær! Slut! Hjælp! Politi!

 

:lmao::rofl:  I did a small edit on your Danish, but that was hilarious (slut means end). However, you'll have to recall Kim is straight, so unless he finds a tiny wife or he's into anal sex, there shouldn't be a problem. I remember my sex ed book back in 7th grade pointing out that no matter a man's size, a baby's head would be wider, so a woman could adapt to anything. :o  But yeah, in M/M sex size can be a problem rather than an asset.

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1 hour ago, Timothy M. said:

 

:lmao::rofl:  I did a small edit on your Danish, but that was hilarious (slut means end). However, you'll have to recall Kim is straight, so unless he finds a tiny wife or he's into anal sex, there shouldn't be a problem. I remember my sex ed book back in 7th grade pointing out that no matter a man's size, a baby's head would be wider, so a woman could adapt to anything. :o  But yeah, in M/M sex size can be a problem rather than an asset.

I was using translation software.

 

 

With a woman, width isn’t a problem, but extreme length might be.

 

With a man, width could cause problems.

 

With oral sex, either or both could cause problems.

8 hours ago, droughtquake said:

I was using translation software.

 

With oral sex, either or both could cause problems.

 

Yes, but translation software cannot see the difference between infinitive and imperative form if you write single words. Stoppe is infinitive and Stop ! is imperative.

 

Unless you insists on deep-throating (something I've never done), length is hardly a problem, but I guess width might be. I've never had that problem, but perhaps that's another reason I sometimes  go Me and my big mouth :facepalm:  :lol: 

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7 hours ago, ColumbusGuy said:

I gotta give you a big :hug: for pointing me to Cupid Central...I never would have found it otherwise.  I love the whole concept, and hope you guys will write more in that world!

 

Velbekomme, min ven. :hug:  I'm glad you found Cupid Central, and I hope you read it before the A.I. story spoiler. I shall no go and see what kind of comment you left there. I also hope Aditus will tell more stories about Theliel and Sablo and the other angels.

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44 minutes ago, Timothy M. said:

 

Yes, but translation software cannot see the difference between infinitive and imperative form if you write single words. Stoppe is infinitive and Stop ! is imperative.

 

Unless you insists on deep-throating (something I've never done), length is hardly a problem, but I guess width might be. I've never had that problem, but perhaps that's another reason I sometimes  go Me and my big mouth :facepalm:  :lol: 

 

LALALALA--got my fingers in my ears--not hearing this, Tim!  You'll ruin my vision of you as a heroic half-naked Viking!! 

I guess I've been lucky, my first full-on sex was with a friend and his 9" penis...he took his time, and it was fine, but I think I was lucky that it wasn't thick also.  :P   I always tried to be as gently with my later friends.

I read your story first, since I couldn't track down Aditus' right then, and I enjoyed it just as much since it was the same 'world' you wrote about.  I'd not read any of his stuff before, so my friends' stuff always comes first.  Will be checking more of him out later!

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4 minutes ago, ColumbusGuy said:

LALALALA--got my fingers in my ears--not hearing this, Tim!  You'll ruin my vision of you as a heroic half-naked Viking!! 

 

I read your story first, since I couldn't track down Aditus' right then, and I enjoyed it just as much since it was the same 'world' you wrote about.  I'd not read any of his stuff before, so my friends' stuff always comes first.  Will be checking more of him out later!

 

LOL, I'm not a Viking because I don't deep-throat? Or because I have a big mouth ? :unsure:  Not quite sure what the problem is here...

 

@aditus main story is of course Red Running Shoes, for which I did a blog review which I now realize you've never seen. Maybe read that first, before you take the plunge into that roller-coaster of a story. ;)  Or you can start with the sweet cat story Promise stars.

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16 hours ago, Timothy M. said:

 

LOL, I'm not a Viking because I don't deep-throat? Or because I have a big mouth ? :unsure:  Not quite sure what the problem is here...

 

@aditus main story is of course Red Running Shoes, for which I did a blog review which I now realize you've never seen. Maybe read that first, before you take the plunge into that roller-coaster of a story. ;)  Or you can start with the sweet cat story Promise stars.

Purr, did someone say 'cat'?!  A long while back, I remember looking at RRS, but don't recall why it didn't appeal to me, so I never read anything else except that Advent calendar...and I don't know which of those he did.

The Viking image was damaged by you hinting that you might not have a large Viking axe.  :P   Deep throating is another thing we share--not done it either, thanks to not knowing how to overcome the gag reflex.  Most of the guys I knew were just about right to make it work fine.

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What a wonderful chapter!  So many things happened that I'm hard pressed to decide what was my favourite.  It was great to hear more about Patrick's mom and see him interact with his new son.  You can see how much that little boy has come to mean to him.  It's great to that Peter's cousins have decided to come visit and be there for him and their mother.  I already like them more than the majority of Patrick's family combined.  I have to admit, i am a little worried about the surgery.  I think Michael will be all right in the end, but it's going to be stressful for his family. 

 

The side story of Neeta and Sonia was a definite sad point in the chapter.  I can't imagine what Sonia had gone through.  I've known survivors of sexual assault and it can haunt them for a very long time  Luckily Sonia seems to have her family's support, which sadly isn't always the case.  I wonder what call Patrick made to make him feel better after feeling that young girl's pain.  I imagine Moster Grethe will be a motherly influence on both young women sooner rather than later :) 

 

Another great installment to this story, Tim :)  I'm sorry it took me so long to leave a review. :hug: 

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6 hours ago, ColumbusGuy said:

The Viking image was damaged by you hinting that you might not have a large Viking axe.  :P   Deep throating is another thing we share--not done it either, thanks to not knowing how to overcome the gag reflex.  Most of the guys I knew were just about right to make it work fine.

 

LOL, I didn't say anything about my Viking equipment, I just said I'd never encountered one which scared me off due to size. It's only in stories every guy has a 7+ inch tool.

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6 hours ago, LitLover said:

What a wonderful chapter!  So many things happened that I'm hard pressed to decide what was my favourite.  It was great to hear more about Patrick's mom and see him interact with his new son.  You can see how much that little boy has come to mean to him.  It's great to that Peter's cousins have decided to come visit and be there for him and their mother.  I already like them more than the majority of Patrick's family combined.  I have to admit, i am a little worried about the surgery.  I think Michael will be all right in the end, but it's going to be stressful for his family. 

 

The side story of Neeta and Sonia was a definite sad point in the chapter.  I can't imagine what Sonia had gone through.  I've known survivors of sexual assault and it can haunt them for a very long time  Luckily Sonia seems to have her family's support, which sadly isn't always the case.  I wonder what call Patrick made to make him feel better after feeling that young girl's pain.  I imagine Moster Grethe will be a motherly influence on both young women sooner rather than later :) 

 

Another great installment to this story, Tim :)  I'm sorry it took me so long to leave a review. :hug: 

 

Not to worry, LL, I only just remembered yesterday to comment on your latest Choices chapter. I'm glad you enjoyed the chapter. I did worry a bit about the long section with the girls, but Kitt assured me it was fine, and I needed it as background for the (mysterious) call. More on that later. I think you're absolutely right about Grethe's reaction to them. :hug: 

Same with your observation about Michael, he has definitely worked his way into Patrick's lonely heart together with Peter. More on the nice cousins soon. Thank you for a lovely long comment. 

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I was reading and thought, 'why is this so familiar' and then I remembered I read about a third of it one night before my eyes stopped focusing :) . What a great chapter, Tim. I loved Alice, but poor Sonia... I'm curious about Patrick's phone call :huh: . I guess we'll find out. I was okay, surprisingly, with the scene with sweet Michael in the hospital room, but Patrick, at the end, made me cry... it's so nice his home is filled with family again. You did a wonderful job here... I chuckled at the guardian angel bit :) . Sorry I took so long to get here... I really am, but it was worth it when I finally read the whole chapter... well done, my friend... cheers... Gary....

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On 5/21/2017 at 3:07 PM, ColumbusGuy said:

A long while back, I remember looking at RRS, but don't recall why it didn't appeal to me

I recommend reading everything except the epilogue. I was happy and satisfied until I read the epilogue. It felt like the story arc ended appropriately but the epilogue then took a weird hop in a completely different direction that did not feel organic.

1 hour ago, droughtquake said:

I recommend reading everything except the epilogue. I was happy and satisfied until I read the epilogue. It felt like the story arc ended appropriately but the epilogue then took a weird hop in a completely different direction that did not feel organic.

 

Alas, drought, I read it shortly after posting that comment, and I did like it...except for the epilogue.  :)  Same with the last book of Nick Brady's Marco books.  The very last chapter of the last book did a quick rush to wind up the lives of all his characters, and left me far from happy--it felt like he was itching to move on and dump this batch...I'd have been happier with him doing it over the course of another few chapters to make it a similar length to the others.  Still, those books are worth the read--except the last chapter.  :)

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7 hours ago, droughtquake said:

I recommend reading everything except the epilogue. I was happy and satisfied until I read the epilogue. It felt like the story arc ended appropriately but the epilogue then took a weird hop in a completely different direction that did not feel organic.

 

6 hours ago, ColumbusGuy said:

Alas, drought, I read it shortly after posting that comment, and I did like it...except for the epilogue.    

 

LOL, it's sort of funny you discuss @aditus's RRS in my story. Maybe I should check over there (like in Cupid Central) for comments on my story. :rofl: 

I have to admit I'm much too chicken to write the kind of 'provoking' stories like RRS and @LitLover's Choices. It's bad enough to be chased with pitchforks and torches for NOT writing, so I don't want any fights among my readers or :angry: faces for what I do get written. :o  :lol: 

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12 hours ago, Headstall said:

I was reading and thought, 'why is this so familiar' and then I remembered I read about a third of it one night before my eyes stopped focusing :) . What a great chapter, Tim. I loved Alice, but poor Sonia... I'm curious about Patrick's phone call :huh: . I guess we'll find out. I was okay, surprisingly, with the scene with sweet Michael in the hospital room, but Patrick, at the end, made me cry... it's so nice his home is filled with family again. You did a wonderful job here... I chuckled at the guardian angel bit :) . Sorry I took so long to get here... I really am, but it was worth it when I finally read the whole chapter... well done, my friend... cheers... Gary....

 

Not to worry, Gary, I love getting these 'late' comments. I just wish I could work out how to set my notifications so I'll get told when anyone comments on my stories. :(  I'm glad you liked Alice, and I'm not surprised you feel sympathy for Sonia. I promise to get back to Patrick's phone call.

I'm a little bit proud at making you tear  up over Patrick loving his house being filled with his new family. :hug: That was an important part for me too. 

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13 minutes ago, Timothy M. said:

 

 

LOL, it's sort of funny you discuss @aditus's RRS in my story. Maybe I should check over there (like in Cupid Central) for comments on my story. :rofl: 

I have to admit I'm much too chicken to write the kind of 'provoking' stories like RRS and @LitLover's Choices. It's bad enough to be chased with pitchforks and torches for NOT writing, so I don't want any fights among my readers or :angry: faces for what I do get written. :o  :lol: 

I like a 'little' controversy... like 'Tobyn the dense' caused, because it means readers are connected in a deep way, but I can feel just a tiny bit defensive for my characters... I think that's a good thing too... I have a lot invested in them. On the other hand, I do not, like you, want to cause my readers unnecessary angst, or drama for drama's sake... it turns me right off as a reader :) 

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