Complications - 12. Chapter 12

A little quick ending...so now I need to compile your feedback.  1. Should I list the other version of this story OR should I draw out so maybe Glenn isn't as easy to win back?

I’d love to read the other version!

While I liked this version, I think Glenn caved a little too quickly. If I where him I'd hold out.

Good ending.  I like that you ended the story here.  Though it wasn't long and some of us (myself included) have been critical of Josh I think many of us have experienced the same emotions in the past.  Falling in love with someone who was not attainable because they were already in a committed relationship or straight brings up all kinds of emotions in us and we don't think rationally.  The "rejection" is hard to deal with.

Thanks, Stephanie

Great story, and i think the ending was right. Adding to the story by making the "reunification" longer with added drama, would imho, have just seemed like padding. 

The only complication would have been for Greg to come out, Josh think that all his summers have come at once, but having tasted the fruit, realise that Glenn was his true love. Improbable, and probably not an improvement on what you have already.

Thanks.

1 hour ago, Terry P said:

Good ending.  I like that you ended the story here.  Though it wasn't long and some of us (myself included) have been critical of Josh I think many of us have experienced the same emotions in the past.  Falling in love with someone who was not attainable because they were already in a committed relationship or straight brings up all kinds of emotions in us and we don't think rationally.  The "rejection" is hard to deal with.

 

Thanks, Stephanie

IThank you, Terry! 

i loved this version. as for Glenn "giving in" i think he knew Josh better than Josh did. it happens. if i read another version, this one would be come less than the great story it is. i'd rather have  more to this one as their life goes on.

Thank you to everyone who helped me shake out the dust from this story. Written so long ago, I wasn't sure if modern eyes would go for it...but all good.

Next for this beauty is the pages of Amazon.

I'd love to read the other version! 

I like the pacing and writing in this version.  I don't really get wanting to put out two versions of the same work; you were not happy with how you did this?  I agree that Glenn was a little quick to forgive; but he did come through a major trauma and Josh was there for him through it all.  I don't know, it seems to cheapen the original story when a different version is put out or major changes are made, at least to me.  But as the writer you need to do what you feel is best, in the end none of us have to agree with it.

15 minutes ago, centexhairysub said:

I like the pacing and writing in this version.  I don't really get wanting to put out two versions of the same work; you were not happy with how you did this?  I agree that Glenn was a little quick to forgive; but he did come through a major trauma and Josh was there for him through it all.  I don't know, it seems to cheapen the original story when a different version is put out or major changes are made, at least to me.  But as the writer you need to do what you feel is best, in the end none of us have to agree with it.

Thank you and I am not planning on two versions, just one. I was curious about feedback of one vs. the other...which a few of you have given me   I plan on polishing this up a bit more and then putting it out there for the world  I have a swanky cover I designed myself all set to go.