a Glass Floor Underfoot - 20. to the unforgiving sea

Thank You for Posting This and The Stunning Photo of The Circle of Life Sculpture ❤️

6 minutes ago, JohnnyC said:

Thank You for Posting This and The Stunning Photo of The Circle of Life Sculpture ❤️

Thank you, JohnnyC, for the wonderful comment and warm support. They are both greatly appreciated

I feel as if the poet sweeps us along on a steam in full swollen torrent, in a boat hurtling down through rain-sorrowful woods and leas to a place where the current slows and the river spreads out. 

This poem is beautiful, and the analogy was unique The first 4 lines were powerful cultural images of life and death to me.  @Parker Owens described the next four line perfectly.  Why did you chose to describe the ocean as unforgiving.  It fits, but I know you always chose your words so carefully, and I am curious. 😊

1 hour ago, raven1 said:

This poem is beautiful, and the analogy was unique The first 4 lines were powerful cultural images of life and death to me.  @Parker Owens described the next four line perfectly.  Why did you chose to describe the ocean as unforgiving.  It fits, but I know you always chose your words so carefully, and I am curious. 😊

Thanks, raven1. If you speak German, please let me know as I often find myself needing a sounding board. As for the appropriate flavor of trying to render the poet's gewalt'ge in the context of the poem, please see the attached. 

https://www.deepl.com/translator#de/en/Wiesen vorbei in buntem Ungefähr . . . Wann kommt zu Felsen%2C wann zu Trümmer-Heiden wann treibt mein Nachen ins gewalt’ge Meer.

Place your cursor within the word gewalt'ge and meanings will appear below. Violence; force; governance; power; control; commanding; vast; raging; immense; righteous -- these are all carried in the tenor of the word. If one is thinking, as I am, that the poet wishes to convey a sense of hopeless for human life against the onslaught of nature (ie Death), then "unforgiving" may work.

I never think any of my translations are set in stone 

22 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

I feel as if the poet sweeps us along on a steam in full swollen torrent, in a boat hurtling down through rain-sorrowful woods and leas to a place where the current slows and the river spreads out. 

Thank you, Parker. I feel I should post these more often, at least the poems of this Romantic Portraits collection. I try to be true to the color and Expressionistic genre in with the poet conceived these. Thanks for reading and commenting

36 minutes ago, AC Benus said:

Thanks, raven1. If you speak German, please let me know as I often find myself needing a sounding board. As for the appropriate flavor of trying to render the poet's gewalt'ge in the context of the poem, please see the attached. 

https://www.deepl.com/translator#de/en/Wiesen vorbei in buntem Ungefähr . . . Wann kommt zu Felsen%2C wann zu Trümmer-Heiden wann treibt mein Nachen ins gewalt’ge Meer.

Place your cursor within the word gewalt'ge and meaning will appear below. Violence; force; governance; power; control; commanding; vast; raging; immense; righteous -- these are all carried in the tenor of the word. If one is thinking, as I am, that the poet wishes to convey a sense of hopeless for human life against the onslaught of nature (ie Death), then "unforgiving" may work.

I never think any of my translations are set in stone 

As much as I enjoy working with you, I don't know but a few words in German mainly greetings, food and a few swear words. After checking the meaning in the translator, I don't know of an English word that would convey the same tenor.  Gewalt'ge seems to be the best fit, and I like that choice.  I really appreciate the additional insights you provided by explaining your choice and sharing the word.  It makes the poem that much more meaningful.