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On 12/2/2022 at 9:19 PM, Darryl62 said:

This is very slow burn story. I started when it was at chapter 102 and thought it  might be completed by 110. Sadly mistaken,  reading this like a completed story  meant that I was not waiting for a chapter to upload.  By chapter 23, thought its good, but sometimes the sex interfered with the story,  by chapter 76 it was irritating me. A great descriptive writer, but almost an entire chapter devoted to the leads having sex without the story moving forward is not what I had expected.  I want to know about the court case, future employment,  what of the brothers sharing their home,  their lives have moved from centre circle to almost out the door. Seems to me that this promising author needs a strong editor and beta reader to get a sharper and more satisfing story 

I feel I need to correct some of your criticisms.

Firstly, Cia isn't a 'promising author.' She is one of GA's Signature Authors and the title is not handed out lightly. She is also a published author.

It's clear you are looking for completed content to read straight through and this is the crux of your critiques . If the author provided what you ask  for, the story would be over.

We have more than enough completed stories here to read, but many of us (me included) enjoy the immediacy and anticipation of interacting in real time with serialized stories.

28 minutes ago, Darryl62 said:

Well, @drpaladin, thank you for the reply. You are in some details correct and my first apology was to use the word “promising”, a poor choice and on reflection more than a little snarky and unwarranted. Sometimes the Australian in me just leaps out in its directness.

Our paths have crossed in other stories (a Venn diagram would have Korner Krew in its centre) and currently I am reading 3 on the go serialised stores that are not completed, so if I have given the impression that completed stories was my reading style, it is not.

I do not resile from my critique and I also enjoy the immediacy of the serialised stories, I feel I understand how Charles Dickens readers felt waiting for the next weekly chapter to upload / be published. The anticipation is marvellous. 

However, as a reader, (and this is just my opinion) I want more story and less hard core sex. If it helps to develop and move a story ahead then yes, but in this instance and so far into a story, less is more. 

Chapter 111 has been published and my request, by chance, was answered and perhaps if I had been more patient...

On one point we agree. I don't read for the HC sex parts. Mostly I fast forward through them.

Dickens was a superb example and was on my mind at the time.