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    northie
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Re-Verse - 4. Heatwave

On a day of revoltingly hot temperatures but virtually no sun, these came to mind during a city commute.

Breathing

Recommended

Only if desperate -

Heat, fumes, dust, smog, such a fragrant

Bouquet

Noxious

Vapours catching in throat and lungs

Nitrogen oxide for

All, free of charge

For now

~

Thirsty

Plants droop, gasping

Exhausted, trying to

Survive, desperately waiting

For rain

~

I'm sat in a sauna,

Sweating but still fully clothed.

This heat does not cleanse; this steam

Of sweat, fumes, fast food and people

Makes my head ache and my temper flare.

Sunlight stokes my sauna’s furnace

Until a new high is reached.

I drip, self-marinating,

As I come to the boil.

 

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Awesome, northie. You put me back to those times when I was stuck on a bumper to bumper highway for my own commute, with no air conditioning... and to those times I had to ride the buses and subway... thank god that suffering is over... you paint the uncomfortable stresses and tensions... exasperation... perfectly. Well done... cheers... Gary....

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You're describing my office... :unsure: The rest of the building is comfortable or freezing, but my office is always way too hot.  I'd rather be cold than hot.  And now I'm having a hot flash in solidarity with you.  Great job with these. :) 

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You describe the last concert I had to manage; the bus ride I took from university home decades ago; many, many hot summer nights. You capture the essence of dirty and fume filled August airports, and the dog days of summer. Wonderfully, eloquently put.

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13 hours ago, Headstall said:

Awesome, northie. You put me back to those times when I was stuck on a bumper to bumper highway for my own commute, with no air conditioning... and to those times I had to ride the buses and subway... thank god that suffering is over... you paint the uncomfortable stresses and tensions... exasperation... perfectly. Well done... cheers... Gary....

 

Thanks, Gary. Only working part-time now, commuting every day is something I don't miss one little bit ... 

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9 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

You're describing my office... :unsure: The rest of the building is comfortable or freezing, but my office is always way too hot.  I'd rather be cold than hot.  And now I'm having a hot flash in solidarity with you.  Great job with these. :) 

 

Glad you enjoyed them, Val. Work, fortunately, was quite bearable - unlike our old building where we would've been a puddle. Cool is definitely better than hot. :)

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8 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

You describe the last concert I had to manage; the bus ride I took from university home decades ago; many, many hot summer nights. You capture the essence of dirty and fume filled August airports, and the dog days of summer. Wonderfully, eloquently put.

 

Thanks, my friend. They're sort of universal experiences, aren't they?

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What I like best here is how you painted the image of a suffocatingly hot summer with words like exhausting, thirsty, gasping, sitting on sauna, steam, fumes etc

N the horrific traffic,  the polluted air coming for free!

Very well written...totally gives me the feel!!

 

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42 minutes ago, Aviana said:

What I like best here is how you painted the image of a suffocatingly hot summer with words like exhausting, thirsty, gasping, sitting on sauna, steam, fumes etc

N the horrific traffic,  the polluted air coming for free!

Very well written...totally gives me the feel!!

 

 

Putting you in the moment is the best compliment. :) Thanks, Aviana.

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Been there; done that. And I didn't/don't like it. You did a great job of capturing the feeling! Thanks. 

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10 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

Been there; done that. And I didn't/don't like it. You did a great job of capturing the feeling! Thanks. 

So have most people who commute. Not fun, is it?  

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