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Re-Verse - 3. More NaPoWriMo Dabblings

More inspiration gleaned from those poets on GA who write for NaPoWriMo every day - as the title suggests, I only dabble.

Old Wilf

 

Old Wilf pilfers skim milk and pilchards as oodles of sky-blue poodles pooter round to his place. He helps a heartless hog swim and swirl, then swish and skirl, squishing one poor cat flat as he does so. At noon, he swoons at the sight of some gormless buffoons, and then inks two twinks with three moons and a sphinx. 'Good god', he groans and sings mean tones, then whets both his wives with the whistle of a bibulous, carolling bat.

 

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I'm sorry!

 

I read

And never fully comprehend

I brood

And over-think such simple things

I analyse

And find meanings where there are none

I look

And dwell on what is present only in my mind

I imagine

And so await that which will never happen

 

I really should remember the

Simplicity and truth of your love.

 

~

 

Eric

 

Feelings deep hidden

Concealed long within,

Time-shrivelled shoots now

Bursting forth, bringing

New hopes, new regrets,

Joy, sadness, healing,

New friends, and maybe

Even now, some love.

 

~

 

More words

 

Words drip from my pen, one by one,

Leaking slowly from a old, rusty tap.

 

Words flow endlessly onto my page,

Telling their story effortlessly.

 

Words cumulate, billowing around my head,

Raining down at the most unexpected times.

 

Words babble and chatter through my mind,

A fast-flowing stream of welcome inspiration

 

Words pool unused, lapping at my keyboard,

Abandoned to their dark, watery grave.

 

Words reflect back my heart and mind,

Giving voice to my hopes and fears.

 

~

 

Haiku

 

Hov'ring falcon swoops

Down, bringing swift murder to

Silent, silvered dawn

My first attempts at haiku and prose poetry.

 

Please leave a comment - good, bad, or indifferent.   :)

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You have a wonderful bouquet here, northie.

 

I'm not sure how i feel about prose poetry .. i don't really get it, i suppose. I don't see the beauty in it myself. That doesn't mean there isn't for some and I like that you tried it. That's cool.  I did like the oodles of poodles, being a lover of that type of pooch. 

 

I'm sorry is nice ... not sure what form that is, but it worked well for this piece. And that's were form comes from, from trying something different. 

 

Eric is lovely.. full of loss and desire and hope.

 

Your haiku is nice also.. but not a fav form of mine. It's a bit too clinical for me. 

 

But northie your Words is truly a wonderful thing. Gosh it is alive with pictures and motion.. i absolutely love it. 

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I don't know the intent, but "I'm Sorry" made me think of killing time between anxiously awaited visits. That, mentally going in circles, examining each remembered touch and word, for no other reason than to fill the void. I don't know if that's me, or if we all suffer similarly :) ... anyway, it was evocative for me, so thank you. "Eric" was lovely, but "More Words" was another I related to... gorgeous... there's a word for you... 'apt' is another one... cheers, my friend... Gary....

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Yes, I agree with the others, particularly in regards to the image of words circling like clouds about the head, and then the unused ones puddling around the keyboard. Thanks for posting these. 

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I am enamored of More Words ... it speaks of and to those who pluck words from an ever changing source.

I found myself imaging the absurdity of your prose looking for a pink baby elephant as I'm sure there must be one lurking nearby.

Nicely done dear lady.

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22 hours ago, Valkyrie said:

Nice!  I especially like the absurdist prose and the haiku.  Great job, Northie! 

Thanks, Val. You and your prompts have been one of my main sources of inspiration. :)

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22 hours ago, Mikiesboy said:

You have a wonderful bouquet here, northie.

 

Thanks, tim. I'm glad you enjoyed them. I was slightly nervous about the haiku - wondering whether I'd got the right tone ...  More words - well, as authors we know that words aren't inanimate objects just waiting for us to bring them alive.   ;):P

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20 hours ago, Headstall said:

I don't know the intent, but "I'm Sorry" made me think of killing time between anxiously awaited visits. That, mentally going in circles, examining each remembered touch and word, for no other reason than to fill the void. I don't know if that's me, or if we all suffer similarly :) ... anyway, it was evocative for me, so thank you. "Eric" was lovely, but "More Words" was another I related to... gorgeous... there's a word for you... 'apt' is another one... cheers, my friend... Gary....

 

Gorgeous is a word I'm quite partial to, but usually giving not receiving. Thanks, Gary. :) I'm sorry in my case relates to the written word but it is certainly open to other interpretations.

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20 hours ago, Parker Owens said:

This is a wonderful April shower of poetry. I thought the Haiku was arresting and quite powerful. 'I'm Sorry' resonated with me as being true to my experience, but 'More Words' was a masterpiece of image and implication. Bravo!

 

Thank you! I was a little unsure about posting them without you seeing them first. The haiku was a case in point and I'm glad it worked for you. More words I thoroughly enjoyed writing and luckily it was more flow than drip. :P

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19 hours ago, AC Benus said:

Yes, I agree with the others, particularly in regards to the image of words circling like clouds about the head, and then the unused ones puddling around the keyboard. Thanks for posting these. 

 

Thanks, AC. More words definitely seems to have received the most votes. 

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11 hours ago, asamvav111 said:

Your first free verse takes the crown. The haiku was a close second. 

Thanks, asamvav. I was a bit uncertain about the haiku - I made sure I read AC's guide, but even so ... 

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5 hours ago, dughlas said:

I am enamored of More Words ... it speaks of and to those who pluck words from an ever changing source.

I found myself imaging the absurdity of your prose looking for a pink baby elephant as I'm sure there must be one lurking nearby.

Nicely done dear lady.

 

Oh, dugh, I'm sorry there was no pink elephant - my imagination is obviously a little lacking ... :gikkle:

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The haiku is fine. AC Benus is better suited for an analysis. But, the first free verse is quite sublime; a broad built like a redbrick shithouse, would be an analogy worthy of its robust mouthfeel. It eclipsed even "More Words". Made me very glad to read them all.  

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1 hour ago, northie said:

Thanks, Val. You and your prompts have been one of my main sources of inspiration. :)

Awww... reading this made my day :hug:  

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1 hour ago, asamvav111 said:

The haiku is fine. AC Benus is better suited for an analysis. But, the first free verse is quite sublime; a broad built like a redbrick shithouse, would be an analogy worthy of its robust mouthfeel. It eclipsed even "More Words". Made me very glad to read them all.  

 

I find it fascinating - reading everyone's differing views on what they liked, what caught their imagination and why ...

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Hey Northie

Well I can see m late for the review but can't help it...

I like all your poems here but the haiku was so powerful...eric has got the feels, I like how u showed the bursting forth of suppressed feelings...

N the imagery for 'more words' were excellent...!!! All in all a wonderful read it is!

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45 minutes ago, Aviana said:

Hey Northie

Well I can see m late for the review but can't help it...

I like all your poems here but the haiku was so powerful...eric has got the feels, I like how u showed the bursting forth of suppressed feelings...

N the imagery for 'more words' were excellent...!!! All in all a wonderful read it is!

 

Thanks, Aviana! Comments are always very welcome. :) I'm glad you enjoyed them.

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I enjoyed all the poems, but "More Words" was first rate! In my opinion the best of the bunch. Thanks. 

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10 hours ago, JeffreyL said:

I enjoyed all the poems, but "More Words" was first rate! In my opinion the best of the bunch. Thanks. 

That appeared to be the general opinion at the time. I'm glad you agreed.  ;) Another poem I really enjoyed writing.

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