It's lust. John C? I worked with a John C once... didn't like him very much because he was annoying, but I drove him home a couple of times because his father is an asshole. One time he got off of work before me and daddy-o never showed to pick him up, so my supervisor asked me drive him home, didn't even have to clock out, just hurry back. Haha almost hit a deer that night, but the Durango in front of me got it. Good times.

Dom? Weren't you just now utterly floored by the possibility that your sisters could have such a feeling as lust?

Dom, don't be silly. You don't want to slash your tires, you want to unplug something relatively unimportant in the engine. Watching a mechanic squat down in front of a tire...not so thrilling. Now watching them bend over the hood to get a better look at the engine...that's a different story.

Regardless, hope you have fun watching Mr. Mechanic play with his tools. ;-)

Dom? Weren't you just now utterly floored by the possibility that your sisters could have such a feeling as lust?

Yes, I did. But she's my sister. I don

ewww eww ewwwwwwww Lucy!!!!!!

sisters do not have sex, both my nieces and my nephew were delivered by a stork

mechanics are teh mm mm good

You guys are like my daughter, who just warned my son off a young woman he was interested in because she is a friend of hers and she didn't want to hear about her brother's love life in the gossip mill. Grossgrossgross, she said.

Poor guy, I think he decided to let it go.

Dom..i have just finished re-reading the 1st chap of TLW.. Frankly speaking, i think the sentences are kind of too well-polished and i personally feel it somehow lightens off your Dom writing style. Actually, i have always found your writing very comfortable and it definitely does not seem like what you mentioned before as one with alot of grammatical errors. I went to read the 2nd chap of TLW again and i'm sure i meant what i said i was feeling earlier..You always have a style in your writing that does not seem way too perfect but to me, it was comfortable, down-to-earth and captivating. I would say it somehow made me feel more like i was reading some kind of diary that was reflecting on other people's life stories and this is ,in fact, good as i feel that it can help readers "connect" with your story in a easier way.

Cheers

Your die-hard fan

tarantio

Dom..i have just finished re-reading the 1st chap of TLW.. Frankly speaking, i think the sentences are kind of too well-polished and i personally feel it somehow lightens off your Dom writing style. Actually, i have always found your writing very comfortable and it definitely does not seem like what you mentioned before as one with alot of grammatical errors. I went to read the 2nd chap of TLW again and i'm sure i meant what i said i was feeling earlier..You always have a style in your writing that does not seem way too perfect but to me, it was comfortable, down-to-earth and captivating. I would say it somehow made me feel more like i was reading some kind of diary that was reflecting on other people's life stories and this is ,in fact, good as i feel that it can help readers "connect" with your story in a easier way.

 

Cheers

Your die-hard fan

tarantio

I agree. I started reading the rewritten version, but was put off because it didn't have that "Dom" feel to it. I think a lot of the appeal of these stories is how you tell them, in your own words. I personally think the first version is the better one.

I concur with Raz and Tarantio. I think Jim has done a very adept, light-handed job in smoothing out the rough edges of DD, but the revision of TLW doesn't ring true. It's a bit too staccato, and lacks that certain Dom-ish rhythm. Trust your writing skills, Dom. A million Domophiles can't all be wrong.

Thanks guys. I really appreciated that. But, I

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While you are doing all of this rewriting, it might come in handy if you reconsidered your spelling of the word 'Long'. It might just get Vic off your back about it.

Dom,

Going back and rereading earlier works can be a tragic experience for many writers. When I first went back and looked at the Mists of Fate series, I literally cringed. Even with someone helping to improve my grammar and spelling, there were still several mistakes that had me nearly disgusted.

Looking at the second book of the series is proving even worse. I'm finding myself debating doing some major re-writing to make it better.

What it boils down to is how much we, as the author, want to re-do our earlier works. Sometimes it is worth it, sometimes it isn't. Folllow your instincts and make what changes you feel are necessary. People will either like it or they won't.

When I first went back and looked at the Mists of Fate series, I literally cringed. Even with someone helping to improve my grammar and spelling, there were still several mistakes that had me nearly disgusted.

 

Looking at the second book of the series is proving even worse. I'm finding myself debating doing some major re-writing to make it better.

i still love it!

ahem, but back to dom. i'm an edit-crazy person when it comes right down to it. i can't write anything without editting it like 50 times...per chapter, so i totally understand going back and wanting to fix mistakes. though personally, i can't go back and reread it all to see it improved. in my eyes you're bettering it for the newest fans who've seen nothing yet. and they're worth it, i'm sure. everyone else can shut up about it, cuz they're not the author.

 

 

i still love it!

 

i'm sure. everyone else can shut up about it, cuz they're not the author.

Well..you made a point..you can shuddup urs too then

anyway, i understand that Dom is trying to make the story better. It's just that some of us really do find the new edited chapter losing abit of its Dom-ish rhythm. We just want to voice out this to Dom, that's all. Whatever Dom decides, we will be totally pleased and respectful as well. We care for Dom greatly, that's why we bothered to voice out those opinions. It's definitely not complaints but suggestive thoughts.

Have a nice week ahead

Cheers

tarantio

I kinda like the new version of TLW_1. No more "anyways". If Dom wants to say "anyways", that's cool, but I'm pretty sure that Owen prefers "anyway". I know it's Dom's storey, but I see it as Owen's story, because he's speaking. "Anyway" sounds like Owen; "anyways" doesn't.

It's definitely not complaints but suggestive thoughts.

 

 

Suggestive thoughts can be fun, too.

While you are doing all of this rewriting, it might come in handy if you reconsidered your spelling of the word 'Long'. It might just get Vic off your back about it.

While I would love to be in that position, I am not on Dom's back about Lo(n)g.

Anywhoo...

I caught the same thing that Ann did (with Dan saying "I'm gay, are you?", it was too cute as it was).

I had mixed feeling about TLW Ch1 v2. It's a similar feeling as to when they re-did Star Wars Episode 6. I probably spent more time looking for the changes, and I mistakenly thought he made changes when there were none.

TLW is still my all time favorite Dom story with TLW Ch 1 still being my all time favorite chapter. I like the 'light' handed approaching...the fixing of the spelling and grammatical errors.

Take Care®,

Vic

P.S. - PLEASE, PLEASE, PLEASE don't remove any uses of the word 'grateful, smirk, incredulously, or eye rolling'.

Well..you made a point..you can shuddup urs too then

 

anyway, i understand that Dom is trying to make the story better. It's just that some of us really do find the new edited chapter losing abit of its Dom-ish rhythm. We just want to voice out this to Dom, that's all. Whatever Dom decides, we will be totally pleased and respectful as well. We care for Dom greatly, that's why we bothered to voice out those opinions. It's definitely not complaints but suggestive thoughts.

 

Have a nice week ahead

Cheers

tarantio

first off, i was joking. second, i wasn't even taking either side. it doesn't make any difference to me whether or not dom edits his past work, since i don't reread stories. when i said "i still love it", i was referring to dk's story (dk as in "not dom"). before singling me out for something, you should read more carefully.