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Critiques from Mom, Dad, and Blobbo


Drak

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My parents were English professors. When I was a university student, I showed them my prize science fiction story. Mom refused to comment. She was always of the opinion that if you haven't anything nice to say, don't say anything at all. Dad used diversion. He said my talent was clearly in non-fiction, and he praised the A+ papers I had written for my classes. "But Daaaaad! What about the story?" "I've got to grade some papers, son. Maybe another time." I asked my best friend, Blobbo, to give an utterly ruthless line-by-line critique, telling him I wanted nothing but honesty. Boy, was he honest!

 

From my friend's helpful line-by-line critique--and yes, he remained a dear, dear friend--I discovered to my dismay that every single line in my story was bad. Nothing was right, absolutely nothing! Although the grammar checker and spell checker were satisfied, those things are elementary mechanics, which all writers must master first of all, but they represent a low level of skill. There were errors in logic, far too much passive voice, horribly common cliches, airy verbosity, lazy disorganization, outright contradictions, and other blunders of style, taste, sense, and clarity.

 

My ego was slain. Buzzards circled. Years passed. Ego is a funny thing. It just keeps getting resurrected somehow. If one enjoys doing something, one is likely to find an excuse to do it. Writing turns me on. I purchased some books on the art of writing, practiced, and possibly improved a little bit. I may know nothing, but at least now I understand that writing is a difficult art that takes time to master. I take comfort from reading Mary Renault's early works. Wow, did she improve! Well, there's some hope for us all, perhaps.

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I had a story like that. Everyone that read it thought I was really disturbed. They were probably right.

 

Until the right people read it. Turned out it wasn't half bad. It even ended up in an anthology.

 

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My last novel, finished spring of 2014 and sent on to Dreamspinner, entered into edits mid-December. The first edit that came back had only one suggested scene expansion/change, but included 629 comments (about 100 were 'formatting' for the eBook creation team, but that still leaves over 500) with 958 insertions and 639 deletions JUST on the basic sentence writing, for the most part. This editor went over my story with a fine-toothed comb, and it took me 3 days of 8 to 12 hours of editing to go over everything. I ended up accepting or rejecting all her insertions/deletions, but once I was done with that, my own insertions/deletions were 1039 and 896 respectively.

 

Yet, I've already been through the publishing process once with Dreamspinner and twice with RFP. I've been writing for 5 years, improving all the time. Even so, I still had that much work to do on the 90k novel. Writing is an evolution. You learn new things so you can write and edit better, all the time. You tweak and change your style, all the time.

 

IF you care about the craft.

 

Take your ego out of it. Ignore those who give you crap just because they don't 'like' what you write, and focus on those who give you helpful advice so you can improve. Critiques shouldn't make you feel incapable and worthless an author--they should encourage you to stretch and grow as an author. No man, or woman, is an island, and that applies just as much to writing as to life.

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Interesting. You are so internet-savvy, I assume you must be familiar with Piers Anthony's critique of online publishers. If not, do visit http://hipiers.com/publishing.html, press ctrl+F and find your "Dreamspinner." Nowadays some of these outfits, like Torquere, want me to submit a marketing plan and flog my book myself on social media. I would not know how to begin. Writing is hard enough without mastering sales and marketing too. I mean why not self-publish, if one must do all that?

I listened carefully to all critiques and treasured them. Obviously they haven't stopped me, only made me aware of the pitfalls awaiting a novice writer. You know what I am talking about. Once the ego is dead, it rises again like the phoenix, a more resilient entity than before.

 

I'm tempted to offer other writers critiques or edits, but I don't know whether that sort of thing is appreciated. It is pretty common for writers to perceive their work as their babies. I notice most reviews on GayAuthors are of the polite praise variety.

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