A day in a Life of Misery

[Skylights]

So if you're here, you've probably (hopefully) read the story. I'm not too sure if people make threads for short stories but i'd like some feedback so say what you thought even if it's painful. I can handle it, I eat healthy.

[Fishwings]

Hello! It would be helpful to include links to your stories -- some of us stumble upon discussion threads before we read the story.

 

I like your story, you're a really good writer Skylights. I can definitely see some sorta connection with Loving Sam Lynch, the coldness and cynicism, but this one is darker. I'd be cool if you continued this further though, as I felt the car accident jumped out at me rather suddenly.

[Skylights]

<br />Hello! It would be helpful to include links to your stories -- some of us stumble upon discussion threads before we read the story.<br /><br />I like your story, you're a really good writer Skylights. I can definitely see some sorta connection with Loving Sam Lynch, the coldness and cynicism, but this one is darker. I'd be cool if you continued this further though, as I felt the car accident jumped out at me rather suddenly.<br />

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Thanks for posting a reply, FishWings. You always do!

 

Anyway,thanks for the suggestion, I WILL add a link. Having some connection issues atm.

Thankyou for your compliment as well. Abut the car-accident being abrupt. I totally get that and perhaps it seemed out of place but I've only briefly entertained the idea of continuing it further. I do know what would occur next in my mind, but not sure it's good enough to be put into a story considering this was more of an abstract sort of piece. The character isn't even given a name and he's not very likable. I might go back and smooth it over some, since I did write this just today.