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    Erroneous

    Kileoli commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Erroneous

    There will be more to the cast? That's great. For me psychopath is a positive thing when it comes to stories with the almost main character being negatively crazy. The word reminds me of the anime series psycho pass I watched as a teenager. So, let's see how Gabriel and Co shape the story.
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    Erroneous

    Kileoli commented on Jason Rimbaud's story chapter in Erroneous

    So what do we have here, a psychopath who drives a Tesla, a politician who believes x can help with cyber terrorists, and a data analyst who looks harmless. That looks very wrong to me. 😁 So let's see what comes next.
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    Oh, that would have been real bad for Liam. He would have ended homeless, hopeless, jobless and loveless, I guess. So, he's lucky he's not dating you in real life 😁😅 But Rick is not perfect, he just makes it seems so. For the snow story, I have one written chapter to edit and the end chapter to write. I may take the two to another story, they turned out funnier than I originally planned.
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    Chapter 1: Cold?

    Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: Cold?

    Thanks, it was the best comment I could get right now. It really made my day. At least I can imagine I'm good at procrastinating and might be able to write a story. The idea came from what happened in real life with a bit of exaggeration ( except the train situation since in reality it is worse)😁 I know Liam sounds batshit crazy, but Rick is the real psycho and can I join the batshit crazy club, if you have one?😅 I hope you are not disappointed with the duo, reading the next chapters.
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    He almost has a PhD in it.
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    That was a great chapter with answering a few questions.why do I have the feeling there comes more drama?😅 I agree with the idea of group therapy. Good job anyway with this chapter.
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    The washing machine announced the end of its cycle with a bright, optimistic chime that did not match Liam’s emotional state. He stood in front of it with his arms crossed, head slightly tilted, as if the appliance might reconsider its choices if he stared at it long enough. Behind the glass door, a dense mass of black fabric clung together in damp solidarity. The clothes were clean in the technical sense—no visible stains, no lingering soap—but they were wet, which rendered them useless fo
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    Unfortunately yes. But he has Rick. Rick has his own own moments too
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    Liam woke at 05:30 because Rick had signed a contract with the alarm. The bedroom light snapped on. Not fully—Rick was not a monster—but enough to communicate intent. “Morning,” Rick said. Liam groaned and pulled the blanket over his head. “Is it so late?” Rick checked his phone. “Yep. Snow’s still coming down. Roads are bad. I’m leaving now, to catch the train.” “Good for you,” Liam muttered into the pillow. Rick leaned over and poked Liam’s shoulder. Not hard. Jus
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    The characters are somehow very exaggerated but that makes them funnier to read. So now who picks where their third date is?
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    Luckily, we have already covered the topic. But I might come to you at some point for tips and brochures 😁 Another question, now that the Josh's story is on the winter break, do we hear more from Sky and Co or will you focus on how to open portals?
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    Ok, Im a bit confused. Here it was like Brad knew Alexander really liked Lyn, and also they were debating if Brad should tell Lyn about his feelings. But then the "Lyn is straight" argument from last time does not make sense, or does it? Is Brad trying to say even if Lyn is straight, let us tell him about our feelings and Alexander said"No"?
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    That was really good, more drama was almost impossible. I really like Sloane and Kenzi. They did a good job. And I can totally imagine me giving a similar talk like Sky and his dad's in a few years. I took notes. 😅
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    No some people make it their mission to rescue others.
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    JQ-060109

    Kileoli commented on Jeff Burton's story chapter in JQ-060109

    So that was the end of a beginning. You gave us enough information that could have been enough if only Caleb has behaved himself. Thanks for the story. It was a crazy thing at the end
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    The median has a great influence especially on younger people, the question is how long it takes AI to take over or can we believe it's just a horror futuristic story?
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    Chapter 2: Stuck

    Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 2: Stuck

    I can totally understand your socks, they just keep on landing at places. 😁 Socks everywhere is a no go for Rick, but other than that he has a stronger logic and calmness to encounter the world. Liam tries his best but there are things that really push him to the limits of his world. The truth is I got many inspirations from our daily life. I'm not as extreme as Liam, but I can claim my partner overdoes Rick at times. 😅
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    The roads were worse than Liam feared. Cars moved in slow, shuddering lines. A truck ahead spun its wheels and went nowhere, an enormous beast trapped by physics. Liam pressed the nonexistent brake pedal and glared at Rick. Rick grabbed the steering wheel with both hands just to make Liam feel better. “Holding your backpack hard will not help in an accident, or pressing the ‘air’ brake,” Rick said. “I’m doing all I can, unlike you” Liam snapped. Rick laughed softly. “Thanks f
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    By the time Benedict set his guitar back into its case, his hands were still vibrating in a way that had nothing to do with nerves and everything to do with release. The last chord lingered in his fingers like a memory that refused to file itself away properly, a low hum beneath the skin that made him feel both lighter and oddly dislocated, as if he had briefly stepped outside himself and not quite made it back in yet. Backstage—or what passed for backstage, a narrow corridor that smelled o
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    Chapter 1: Cold?

    Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: Cold?

    Then I hope you survive the storm. There will definitely be a storm episode, but I'll wait to see how things develop so it gets probably posted in 2-3 days. Besides since my lazy muse is back, I gotta let him work a bit before he starts dreaming again.
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    Chapter 1: Cold?

    Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: Cold?

    It's nice that it worked ....but when was it? Because Liam and Rick had that problem yesterday 😁
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    Today I finished the story and it sorta turned out less crime and more drama in the end. I must think of some changes otherwise I don't know what really comes out
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    Chapter 1: Cold?

    Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Chapter 1: Cold?

    Because that's totally me. I'm glad it worked. I wrote it as a short story covering the whole day but it got too long so I decided maybe there's more to them. And that's definitely a skill to be appreciated if you can sleep like that. 😁 I had my inspiration definitely from someone with that talent.
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    Liam woke before the alarm in the way he always did on important mornings, which was to say: with the exact sensation of something going wrong somewhere, and the certainty that it would become his problem by breakfast. The bedroom was black and cold. Not poetically cold—just the pragmatic, resentful cold of someone's decision against heating the bedroom. Liam lay still, listening. The building made its usual noises: the cat snoring, a neighbor banging the door, wind pressing itself against
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    When the whole world turns white and no one is prepared, may be it's just better to turn in bed , pull up the blanket and pretend there's no such thing. Or this is at least what Liam tried before everything went wrong. Warning: Although the whole plot, jokes, scenes and thoughts are mine, I used a lot of help from AI. I might go through the whole story and rewrite it myself for now my apologies.
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