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Chapter 4 - Finding Home
Kileoli commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 4 - Finding Home
Nicely said and disturbingly true, that it needs a very small group to terrorize and destroy something so many people build. At least the group put things back together. -
The story had been on my mind for a long time. Writing down the plot took forever, and I'm not sure if I got everything historically right. In the end I realized if my imagination is half correct, I really have a good life being where I am. It tried to keep it light but at some point it's going to get very dark, I'm not sure I would feel like finishing it. However, thanks a lot for your comment. It helps to know at least the begining worked.
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The apartment was too warm for late October. The radiators had begun working properly only the week before, and now they clicked and hissed as if determined to prove their usefulness. Heat gathered near the ceiling and softened the corners of the room. The windows fogged faintly from the inside, blurring the square shapes of the panel buildings across the courtyard. From the ninth floor the world always looked orderly—rows of concrete, identical balconies, windows lit in disciplined grids.
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An evening, two playing a game of basketball— and the boy coming back alone. What follows is a life shaped by quiet endurance: grief folded inward, desire hidden between careful gestures, love practiced in whispers. Years later, when the possibility of living openly brushes against him like light through a cracked door, he must decide whether it is safer to remain unseen — or braver to be known. Warning: Although the whole plot, jokes, scenes and thoughts are mine, I used a lot of help from AI. I might go through the whole story and rewrite it myself for now my apologies.
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Nice turn of events. So Sean broke up with his girlfriend and wanted to confess something, he also ordered 6 beers. Is he trying to get drunk and confess his secret or is he planning to get Gabriel drunk?🤔
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And now Jack is thinking of biting, he is fast in taking new rolls. The loose noose sound very creepy, so how can Jack save the alpha from his guilt?🤔
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So I finally managed to finish the story. Applause I thought the Delorean was red and will make rainbow gas fumes.... The story of Andrew and Will Carter are missing in my mind, that means I have to go through the other stories as well... And a bit of geography lesson, didn't know there was a new Brunswick in Canada too, Germans are everywhere 🤣
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Thanks. This just happened when I'm left alone with my data and a demanding reviewer who wants to bully me.😆
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That was a very happy ending. We're gonna miss the boys but maybe we can get more of the wolf and his friends now?!🤔
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They are really good at communicating, they should even offer pair therapy.
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Tell me about it. The systems rotten so deep you can't move them anymore without letting the whole society fall apart. But at least in Tarquin's case, there's still hope that he gets what he deserves, and you'd better keep your promise or I'll take your Delorean away.
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Rick hadn’t planned to take the day off; the day had simply decided for him to stay, while Liam decided to fight his way to his office. Their daughter had finally fallen asleep listening to her detective story, fever broken, lungs tight from coughing, sprawled across the bed with the theatrical finality of someone who had suffered greatly and expected to be remembered for it like a war hero. Rick checked on her one more time then closed the door with care, stood in the hallway for a moment,
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::sighs:: good point. I still have the 10 mm wrench I used on Ollie with the results to be observed by his future boyfriend. I can use that wrench again but its too small for Tarquin. Can I get a bit violent against your character? Im thinking of using the 50 mm. And I need to make a hole in Tarquin's tyres.... And the hula girls?! Oh no I thought they were inflatable dolls😅
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I hope nobody shuffles the cards too long.
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I have a few questions, I really didn't get what Tarquin has as backup plan. What is he really planning? What is his selling? I am still not convinced/ not satisfied with the story of Finn and the jail/ crime scene. It has some holes. And I want that T-shirt of Kyle.
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Chapter 3 - Brothers in Arms
Kileoli commented on ChromedOutCortex's story chapter in Chapter 3 - Brothers in Arms
It helps to have an understanding room mate. The question is if they remain just best friends? -
Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Seriously, Rick is human and there's no need he suffers as well, right? And he's not the one going to Japan 🤔 -
Cool, I didn't know about them. I want one anyway.😅
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Do you mean the earlier versions of A-UGVs? I can think of mission master but I guess they are more complex than the MULE. I have no military background but I might be able to help you on the mechanical functions if you are not looking for a certain version. Was there a Delorean version of MULE in the barn?
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It's still annoying how Oliver keeps some data from Orel. Analysis of the environment with half the data is more dangerous than moving carefully because there's no data available. So I might shove the 10 mm wrench somewhere in Oliver's anatomy so he stops destroying himself and helps Orel building a new equation on Grady-basis.
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Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
Kileoli commented on Kileoli's story chapter in Accepted, Absolutely Unprepared
He gets creative but he has to be careful not to overdo it since it can backfire😁 -
Liam found out he was going to Japan standing with bad conference coffee in hand during a poster session, the kind of coffee that tasted faintly of regret and burnt optimism. This was important, because bad conference coffee was where hope usually went to die, with similar people having accepted their fate and just waiting with you to drink from the magical I-am-awake-even-if-you-don’t-believe-it liquid. It was a communal surrender, a shared punishment for having chosen academia. But this t
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It took forever but they are finally together. So who gets the wedding invitations? Do we get to see Brad or Bradina?
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Just 5? I wonder if I should buy new tissues, new stress balls for anger management or come back in a week to see you drank from the magic fountain of Merrickville and added another 10 chapters to let your readers suffer in their Shakespearen misery.
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Oliver can simply die in his self-designed tomb. Has he ever thought about asking Finn and Orel what they want, offering them the whole story?! And Tarquin is given another chance to play with his doll house.
