Cia

I like the blend of modern fantasy. You are able to bend and twist things to your will and yet leave some things the same. Teenagers... ah fun! I get to relive my more uncontrolled years to inhabit the minds of these guys. That's always interesting

And so they meet! River is in lust... then he catches a glimpse of the true Silver. What will it take to catch another one? Love this story!!

I never would have expected this chapter to lead to the story it does. I love River's character. He seems to 'real'. I was so frustrated by the other characters in this chapter with their evasiveness in regards to the new person because you really brought his feelings out. It made me identifiy with the story early on! Love it!

Yay! I'm glad you liked it. I was in a mood for urban fantasy and these characters really are fun to write. I see many stories to come with them! Thanks for the review!

OH yeah, you never write cliffhangers! I so don't buy that! Go ahead, I'm nominating you and Quonus I must fight back! Thanks so much for the review!!!

Well... just cause I have it.

Well thanks for reading and reviewing anyway!! Yes, this story was all about the romantic happy ending type. Plus I added in a huge amount of my own love, photography.

Happy Birthday!!

OMG, LMAO. Feel better soon CJ

Hmm... I've never dated. I met Josh right after I was 'officially' allowed to at 16. I'ddone the typical young kid, oh you're cute, let's go out, thing before him with people I knew and strangers but it was mostly physical back then. As an adult I'd be royally S.O.L. because I have no idea how it's done. Add in the fact that I'd rather stay home and read over going out anyday and I will probably be alone unless I meet a hot librarian. I see a lot of those in stories, so it could happen, right?

For the pics... Andy, you might have your gallery set so that only friends can see your images, you can adjust those settings in the edit profile area under the gallery options. That would prevent Mike from seeing them if he isn't one of your friends As for the news, YAY!! I'm so happy for you! Also dear, remember to give that 5 week leeway. Moms who have given birth before often will go early, 37 weeks is 'term' and yet doctors will also often let them go 2 weeks after the due date as long as everything looks good. This day is the VERY last concrete day you've got in the course of a pregnancy I think it's natures way of getting us used to the absolute wrench a baby throws into our ordered lives. 2 things, researching is great. Reading up on things can help if you've not been around kids a lot before and won't have much chance, classes too. I don't think you should put down your 'style' though either. If you are laid back and calm, often times the baby will calm too. No one will know your baby like you will and parent's advice is often outdated. Then if you can't figure out what's wrong or are still concerned, call the advice nurse. Every good pediatrician's office has one. You can get advice and they are usually pretty good about calming first time parents down. P.S. We'll make sure Mike knows to catch the baby(ies). Pretty much you'll be on your own Try just sitting down.

Aww, at least you see the problem.

I grew up in a small town in the Pacific Northwest, it was all I knew til I was 11. We rode bikes, dirt bikes on specially made trails with jumps and stuff, swam in the river, climbed trees... typical outdoor kid stuff. The biggest risk was drunk train hitchhikers getting off in the town and since I lived near the tracks we usually had to cautious down our long driveway at night. We too were gone all day without anyone worrying about us, though if we didn't show up for dinner we were in big trouble Then I started spending summers with my mom outside of Washington DC. That was a wake-up call! City block after city block! It was my first trip to a real public library (yes, book worm I was that thrilled me almost more than the monuments), the Smithsonians... I was in heaven brain wise with all the things available in the city. Plus my first trip to an actual beach. You can't swim safely on the Oregon and Washington coastline so I'd never been in salt water before. To some extent it was't bad there, I could roller skate 2 miles to the local park and often did on my own, even though large parts of the road were secluded. Then reality set in. My mom took us pretty much everywhere and had to keep a close eye out, I had a pair of guys try to lure me into 'taking their picture' in a rest stop on a road trip, we had to lock doors often times when we drove in the city and the sights of a city you become innured to, street people, sex workers, druggies... those were a shock to me. So I think that part of 'those freedoms' to roam as a kid were not as obvious to my city dwelling times. Now I live outside a larger city but it's here in the Pacific Northwest still. There is country close by but my kids have no freedom. They play in the fenced backyard, never in my front yard. If they go outside to play, so does our doberman. He can get from the back to the front fence in 4 seconds flat, way faster than any childnapper could dream of. There is no 'wandering about' town and if we go swimming they are within arm reach. If we go out in public, say to the zoo, I make my kids stay in my line of sight at all times, if not actively holding my hands. At the park I rarely read or write, most of the time I'm too busy just watching to make sure they stay safe. Part of this is because we pay more attention to dangers now and part of it is that the dangers have gone up. I wonder often if the increased media availability of crimes involving children is not partly to blame. We know more now, because we see it more now. It's not 'an isolated incident' that 'could never happen here' because we see cases online, in the news, fictionalized on cable tv... I for one with err on the side of caution as a parent. My kids can have freedom when they are 18. Well... maybe 30.

I saw that nomination! Good thing I'll be eclipsed by such cliffie writers as CJ and Nephy... (fingers crossed). I am glad you enjoyed the chapter. To some extent you know what happens, now you just get to find out what REALLY happened. 1-3k left to write to get it all down, a trip to beta land and a final read through and you guys should be reading the ending chapter soon. Thanks so much for the review, I love hearing what you think of my stories!!

Yeah, it was a little cliffie, bad me! It won't be too long, I'm deep in the world of Dane and Tap and it's got a hold of my writing bug. I will be posting soon (and no, the last 3 week gap didn't count as soon).

I was so upset at the end of this chapter. It's one of the gentlest build-up chapters I've read but one that has a reader completely anxious by the end. I find it interesting that the one who said they couldn't just watch Bridge die is the one who stayed behind. Sure, I know why now, but still... Can't wait to read everyone's reactions to what comes next. You have a way of completely enthralling a reader with the character's lives and plight. Sometimes I even have to stop reading becaue I'm so anxious over what is doing to happen

I hesitate to say promise, my kids have a way of sucking up my time but I shall endeavor to the best of my abilities to NOT torture you all too much. Don't want my readers to band together and torture me. Did you really end up holding your breath? I do that sometimes! It's like... gah! No!!!! Oh man! moments as I read. :evil grins:

Chapter 20 is up!! Finally at long last the story is back in line. Sorry it took me so long everyone, it's been a crazy few months. Bonus... I already have the next chapter half-way done. I got sucked into the story writing it last night and just kept going after I finished this chapter. Thankfully my beta, Renee, knew how anxious I was to post and did a quick edit on this for me. Thanks hun!! I hope you all enjoy this chapter. Escaping the Pain Ch. 20

Sunday was hot and the infield was dusty. Tap had streaks on his face from the dirt on the inside of his catcher's mask but all Dane could see was the big grin he had as he whooped and joined his team in celebrating their win to take first in Districts. Dane managed to forget his shyness long enough to cheer along with several other people in the stands who had made the drive to support the high school's team. During a break between the games Dave joined Tap and Dane on a trip to the closest

BB427, my hesitation to approve that story would come from the fact that other than a small section at the end it's just about having sex. While having explicit sex within a story with a larger plot is acceptable, having a story that is 90% explicit sex and then a small amount of explanation of why it's being shared doesn't make it past 'porn' for me. I, however, am one of the more conservative moderators.

Happy Birthday Lacey! I thought of offering cake but you're always asking me to make you a sandwich so here you go, just for your birthday!

It's never fun to be someone's dirty little secret. It makes you question your own self-worth at times. I faced that, but because I was white and my boyfriend wasn't. His momma didn't like me at all, not even as a friend. He could barely speak to me where she could see. That really sucked.

Well let's put the insurance into perspective. You're looking at a possible harvest of 18 eggs (yes, that's the term they use) and they will inject each one with sperm. Then they will wait, let the little guys/gals begin to divide and then pick the ones with the most divisions and the healthiest appearance to implant. Also, some of those eggs and sperm could split off and produce a multiple even before implantation which would increase your fertilized egg count. If you are going multiple egg implantation then you have the best of the lot for the first chance and the rest put on the deep freeze. With a possibility of at least 10 leftover that leaves very good odds of having healthy eggs to implant should you need to go a second round, ones that aren't inhibited by being cryogenically frozen. So... the insurance is worth it. Plus, if you only have a single child this go round and pregnancy and the surrogate and money allow you have the chance to provide your child with a sibling down the road, if the fees include long term storage. That's an invaluable bit of comfort for your family, though even having a single child is a blessing when you have to really work at being a parent. Paying the insurance to have those chances means a lot in the emotional costs. That being said, breathe, pick up a stress ball, do long complicated things to keep your mind busy and remember that in time you are going to look back and think of this as when you guys started your family. It's amazing, exciting, and yes, a bit nervewracking. Oh, and don't forget to eat. This is only the beginning of the ride you're in for. Oh, and the best part of it? There's no getting off!

Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: SimsS Loveeeee. Start the next installllllment please! Date: 09/07/2010 10:09 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: adamo I loved your story. the characters were beautiful and real and the writing superb. I really want to know what will happen for Darrell. He deserves a happy ending. will you still be continuing and making it a series? I really hope so. Date: 07/04/2010 10:28 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: iguanacoosbay Well, I must say I'm very disappointed. It has been almost a whole year, and there is still no more story. When a great storyteller gets his audience hooked on a very appealing character, to the point that we really care about him, and then leaves us hanging, it really really STINKS!!!!!! Come on, at least let us know whether you are going to finish or not. Date: 02/27/2010 09:56 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: iguanacoosbay You have written a totally awesome story....I love it so far!! Date: 02/27/2010 09:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: quilz This is an amazing story. It is beautifully done. The descriptions and emotion in this story is so very moving. Are you planning to leave it as a cliff hanger? Keep writing, you're very good at it!!!! Date: 09/10/2009 11:43 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: DragonFire I have just stumbled across this story, and what a great find it was. Fantastic imagery and great story line made for a compelling read. I do admit to throwing something at the screen when I realised that the sequel isn't out yet. But I'll sit here patiently and wait! ;o) Date: 06/04/2009 08:08 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Looby I am new to this site and I have to say I have read two great stories here, and yours is one of them. I cannot wait for part 2 of this series, I am also going to go read your other stories. Great writing, great story. Is Logan in part two, for some reason I keep thinking of him. I enjoyed this story. Thanks again.Author's Response: I'm wondering if you meant Lucas? If so... possibly. I'm not entirely sure yet, as I'm still working on part 2. Thank you for leaving a review. I'm happy you enjoyed it! Date: 04/10/2009 07:46 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: rbfg oooooooo i sense a love match for the future...Author's Response: Maybe. Thanks for leaving a comment! Date: 04/03/2009 12:27 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: David McLeod After being kicked in the gut at least once in each of the previous eight chapters, it felt good to think that things were starting to come together. On the other hand, given what Dion's done to us (Darrell and the readers) before, I look forward to the next chapter with more than a little trepdiation.Author's Response: Probably the wiser course of action, David. Thank you for staying with me and leaving reviews. The new story is looming on the horizon. Date: 04/01/2009 12:41 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: librent A great finish to this part of Darrell's story, its good to see that maybe there is light at the end of the tunnel. Hopefully Darrell can heal at this Uni and find peace from the chaos that his life has become, friendship and maybe love from the people he will meet. I am really looking forward to reading the sequel and hoping like mad it isn't too far of being postedAuthor's Response: It's still in the works but hopefully not too far away from the posting stage. Thanks for leaving a review. Date: 03/31/2009 08:14 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 8 Reviewer: librent I stumbled across your story tonight and I'm so glad that I stopped to read all the chapters you have posted. You can literally see Darrell unraveling before your eye's and the rest of the family tiptoeing around him trying to help stop the slide. Looking forward to reading more of this great story.Author's Response: This one is almost complete but the sequel is well on its way - more a continuation than a separate story, if you will. I hope you enjoy that one as well. Thank you for taking the time to leave a review. I really appreciate it! Date: 02/25/2009 07:02 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 8 Reviewer: David McLeod Can't say I didn't see this coming. Still, Dion hit me in the gut, as usual. The imagery of the dust motes in the sunlight was brilliant [(pun intended ]. Dion is a serious writer, and a serious talent.Author's Response: Thanks for the 'glowing' review, David! Date: 02/15/2009 02:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Steven Keiths One hell of an emotionally packed chapter, Dion. Nicely done. As always I look forward to more. --StevenAuthor's Response: There isn't a lot more for this one and I fear the end will be anticlimactic because, really, it isn't the end. There's another story in the works. I hope you enjoy it as well. Thanks for another awesome review! Date: 02/04/2009 10:35 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: David McLeod Another one-two-three punch in the gut; and watch out for the uppercut at the end of Darrell's conversation with himself mid-way through this chapter. It's still early, here, but after reading this chapter, I'm wide awake. Once again, a great addition to a wonderful story.Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing, David! Date: 01/25/2009 06:41 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Altimexis Poor Darrell has so much emotional baggage - it's going to take him some time to get over the legacy of his father and his past.This is so beautifully written.Author's Response: Thank you for saying so! I only hope that when it comes to the next story I can keep it interesting. Date: 01/23/2009 10:15 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: hh5 Darrell sure does have some issues like trauma and getting over his past especially his dad. I hope Brock and Adam - don't give up on Darrel. They probably won't but its still Darrel that has to face up a bit. He sure does need a close friend but Darrel seems to want it on his own terms.Author's Response: Darrell is not about to get over his stubborn streak. At least not for some time. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 01/23/2009 10:43 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: juliandarling Wow, that was incredibly depressing. I hope things look better for poor Darrell.Author's Response: Not just yet. I hope that doesn't put you off. Thanks for the review! Date: 01/23/2009 12:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: juliandarling Oh noes! Adam! I wonder if they'll patch up. Another great chapter, btw. Can't wait for more.Author's Response: I'm happy to see another person enjoying it. Thanks for leaving a review! Date: 01/07/2009 08:14 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: David McLeod Darrell thinks he's running "away," maybe, running "from." Perhaps, however, he's running "to." It's getting better with each chapter.Author's Response: I'm happy you think so. Thanks for letting me know! Date: 01/07/2009 07:19 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Altimexis A hasty retreat home, a trip to a real diner, a sympathetic ear from a friendly waitress, a chance encounter with the mysterious Brock, and a reunion with a freshman crush. What's not to like?Author's Response: All the elements of a not-too-bad read. I hope you continue to enjoy it. Thanks for leaving a review! Date: 01/07/2009 02:48 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: hh5 Nice darrell came back home and meets that guy and its seems to be a ok family. nice something is happening for him. Good excused from Dallas vacation.Author's Response: Right about now he's pretty happy he came home, too. That will change, though. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 01/07/2009 12:38 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: hh5 I'm glad Darrell is now in a better place without bad papa. Not good grandma outed him. I guess we have to hope Darrell finds his someone and cope with his injuries (physical and emotional)Author's Response: Darrell still has a long way to go but I hope you continue to enjoy it. Thanks for the review! Date: 12/28/2008 07:29 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: David McLeod Wow! Didn't see that coming. Or that. Or that, as a matter of fact. This is getting very, very interesting.Author's Response: I'm glad it still holds a few surprises. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 12/28/2008 03:49 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, How anyone could hate this story is beyond me--even if the genre wasn't to their liking. It is wonderfully written with a great deal of intensity in the telling. It is a superb piece of writing. I look forward to the next chapter. Uh, Dion, I said I look forward to the next chapter. That's a hint. Where is it? Warm regards,--Steven Author's Response: It's in my harddrive. Be patient. Someone hates it? Did they say so? Did they mention why? I like to hear all POVs on my writing. That leads me to my next comment - thanks for the compliment, Steven. I hope the rest of the story lives up to it. Date: 12/12/2008 09:05 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: J_Ross Procrastination is my bff. But I finally caught up. I like it so far and I love Trent. Momma's not to bad either. I really like the way that, even though it'd be completely reasonable if he did, it doesn't really seem like Darrell hates his father yet. Even if he should. His reaction is much more realistic, imo. He'll get through it, though, he's got a good Mom. And a decent brother...did I mention that I love Trent. I do. I look forward to more. Author's Response: Darrell has spent so long trying to please his father and meet his expectations that I don't think it's even occurred to him that he should be angry about it. As he says in chapter one, "I was devoted to my father and if my playing made him happy, I’d do it." I'm glad you like Trent and that you're still enjoying the story. Thanks for leaving a review! Date: 12/09/2008 09:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: hh5 I am happy the father is in jail. I hope he gets the full term sentence. The rest of the family sure needs to heal. Still I worry for Trent and most of all, Darrel. I think he's getting as skinny as me and that be bad for him. I hope he snaps out of it. Yaa he needs a bf.Author's Response: He will - eventually. I'm glad the story still has your interest. Thanks for the review! Date: 12/09/2008 11:09 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: David McLeod Chapter 3 created an emotional intensity that left me drained. Chapter 4 created an entirely different emotional intensity--that left me drained. What a great contrast! Fellow readers: even though you may have read Ch 3, go back and re-read it, and immediately read Ch 4. Six Flags should have such a roller coaster!Author's Response: Roller coasters can be fun.... I'm very pleased that you seem to be enjoying it. Thank you so much for leaving me a review! Date: 12/09/2008 06:50 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: GayUganda I really love the writing and the story in generalAuthor's Response: I'm so glad to hear that. Thanks for letting me know! Date: 12/09/2008 05:37 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, This great! Great dialogue and great story telling and showing. I can't wait to read more. Steven KeithsAuthor's Response: Hey Steven! I was wondering where you'd gone to and if you had a chance to look at this yet. Glad you're enjoying it so far and, as always... thanks for leaving a review! Date: 12/05/2008 09:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: David McLeod Dion has taken a cast of characters from the standard playbook and made them uniquely his through deft character development. The unexpected interests of the two brothers does much to break down stereotypes and cause the reader to think without, however, interrupting the cinema of the mind. Furthermore, the writing is well crafted, making the story easy to read. To quote Oliver Twist, "Please sir, may I have some more?"Author's Response: Thank you very much for the eloquent review. I hope to have the next chapter up fairly soon. Date: 12/01/2008 05:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Altimexis Great story so far. I can't wait to read chapter 4. Trent really hit the nail on the head regarding their father's reaction to his own failures.Author's Response: I responded in the forum first but I'll say it again: Thanks for leaving a review. Date: 11/29/2008 06:59 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Altimexis What a great bro Tret is. What an asshole of a father, but I bet he's projecting his own shortcomings on Darrell. Great story!Author's Response: Thanks Altimexis. As one of my favorite authors it means a lot that you're enjoying the story. Thanks for the review! Date: 11/24/2008 03:02 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: hh5 Wow Trent is really something. Especially for Darrell. Keep up the good writing.Author's Response: Thanks! I hope you continue to enjoy it! Date: 11/24/2008 12:57 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: juliandarling I definitely liked the beginning of this, especially the parts of his character that he said he didn't want to talk about with his father. Fascinating.Author's Response: I hope it continues to please you. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 11/22/2008 10:56 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: hh5 Ok my first reaction, gosh another jock story. But its a GA story thats the point. Jocks do have more fun than dorks or nerds. They are more alive. Any ways you got my attentions with Darrell - he's different (he's not all jock) and I await the other chapters to unravel the story.Author's Response: I think you'll find that Darrell isn't a jock for very long. I hope you enjoy the rest of the story. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 11/21/2008 06:03 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Altimexis Very good start - I'm looking forward to reading more.Author's Response: Thank you for leaving a review! Date: 11/14/2008 11:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: anime_cat A good start, now write more so I can read it lol. =p Always good to see a "new beginnings" style tale, especially when it builds on other aspects of the character that were not apparent to other characters earlier on. Only thing is that it might have been nice to see some of the development of chracters before the accident, not that far back...but a flashback, maybe a mini-chapter (a bit of text inside a chapter) would be great for that...but I still want more of the current storyline, so don't go full flashback if you do any flashback stuff at all. Um, wow, I wrote a lot, anyway, good luck and hope to hear more =).Author's Response: No worries! I like long reviews. This story is complete and will be posted at fairly regular intervals. I don't think I did a flashback though - sorry about that. The WIP is the sequel (although that's rolling along nicely - I'll try to include a flashback or two for you). I'm glad you're enjoying it so far! Thanks for reviewing! Date: 11/14/2008 12:55 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]

E-fiction Reviews as of 1-4-11 Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: iguanacoosbay A hesrtfelt thank you for a truly touching story..... Date: 02/21/2010 12:43 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: RCG2659 VERY GOOD STORY Date: 02/21/2010 12:08 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: Jian Sierra This story helps a lot! Thanks for this! Date: 01/15/2010 10:21 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 Ohh My!!! The boy knew it all, huh? LOL!!! I loved the last sentence! Gave me a good laugh! "I was an idiot" LOL! Sad but true, no one know how the closest people in their lives are going to react with the news you give them.. Good First chapter!Author's Response: Glad you liked it. Thanks for the review! Date: 04/09/2009 09:10 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: PicklePip86 Thankyou for writing this-- its an affirmation that there is always light at the end of the tunnel... Another great storyAuthor's Response: You're very welcome. And thank *you* for reviewing! Date: 01/12/2009 09:28 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: Bill Moretini Hi Dion, I fianally finished "Mind over Matter". You certainly displayed a great sensitivity in your writing. I can empathize with Joey pertaining to his relationship with his father. I liked your story a lot. Very good writing.Author's Response: Sorry it took so long for me to respond to your review, Bill. I try to be prompt in my thanks when people take the time to leave a note for me. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story. I'm equally heartened to find that the emotions I was trying to convey came through successfully. My biggest problems in writing are a) getting everything out of my head and onto the screen; and writing an acceptable conclusion to the story. Judging from the responses I've been getting I think - for this story at least - that I've managed to overcome those hurdles. Thank you for leaving a review! Date: 09/29/2008 11:56 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, It has been a while, but I finally had the opportunity to read the Epilogue. Life's been busy. I can only say that your Epilogue was most in keeping with the rest of your story. I think you captured the psychological nature to abandonment by a parent quite nicely. Your healing process is also nicely formulated and presented. No quick fix or cutsie little phrase heals such wounds--time is the only thing. That, along with willingness for change works. Just a beautifully written story. I, truly, look forward to more of your works. Please, keep me posted when you do. Warm regards,--Steven Keiths Author's Response: I'm very happy that you enjoyed it right to the end, Steven. Once again I'd like to thank you for taking the time to leave an expressive review. I look forward to them. I have another story that I should be posting shortly. I'll let you know when that happens. Date: 09/21/2008 04:53 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: circa_divide Yet again Dion, I love you!!! This was perfect, perfect, perfect!! Please continue to write stories like this, they are amazing. You are amazing! :DAuthor's Response: Thanks, c_d. I'm really glad you enjoyed it! Thanks for taking the time to leave me a review! Date: 09/02/2008 08:39 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: maia A very nicely done story. well-researched and did very well with the structure & grammar. Hope to see more stories from you.Author's Response: Thank you very much. I hope you enjoy my future stories as well! Date: 08/31/2008 07:58 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: steph291 nice story, Dion!Author's Response: Thank you, Steph! And thank you very much for reading and leaving a review! Date: 08/31/2008 05:40 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Epilogue Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Oh Dion, that was wonderful!It was so sweet and romantic and all around awesome! Fantastic job :DAuthor's Response: Thanks Kevin! I'm glad you enjoyed it right up to the end! I hope you like the next one as much. Date: 08/31/2008 05:25 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Awesome chapter! I was really surprised when Adam was kissing that other guy, then I was just stunned when Adam was waiting for Joe back at home! I loved the sweet ending! They've really come a long way! Great job!Author's Response: Well technically the other guy kissed Adam, but I don't think Joe was in any shape to recognize the difference. Thanks for reviewing Kevin! Date: 08/31/2008 03:07 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: emerald this was great. im looking forward to the epilogue =)Author's Response: I'm glad you like it. I hope the epilogue lives up to your expectations. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 08/30/2008 09:03 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, I look forward to the epilogue, but this is wonderfully drawn to a close as written. I, of course, have told you several times how much I liked this story and how nicely it was written. I hope we/I get to read more of your works in the future. --StevenAuthor's Response: Thanks so much, Steven. If I haven't told you before, your comments mean a lot to me. I do have another story that I just need to 'get over the hump', so to speak, and then it'll be posted as well. I hope it's a likable one as well. Date: 08/30/2008 05:08 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: Jey Awwww! Ahahaha, though, I probably would have been highly upset and pissed be it me in his situation... that was so cute and sweet in the end. Jeez. Awesome chapter... like the rest of the story. Duh! Ahahaha~Author's Response: Thanks Jey! I'm glad you liked it! The epilogue should be up within the next couple of days. It'll be a lot longer, too! Date: 08/29/2008 08:45 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 11 Reviewer: circa_divide AHHH! Dion I love you! This story is perfect. I can't wait for the epilogue! :]Author's Response: I hope it lives up to your expectations, c_d. What an interesting way to make friends. Date: 08/23/2008 10:46 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 10 Reviewer: circa_divide Aw, it's a short chapter. T.T I was hoping for a longer chapter but it's still the amazing story as always. Keep it up Dion!Author's Response: The epilogue will more than make up for it. Thanks for commenting! Date: 08/17/2008 11:58 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 10 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Oh wow! I was surprised when Adam cancelled their date. It looks like Joe is really trying to figure out a way to overcome his issues and I'm really proud of him. I hope Mr. Winters can suggest someone.I enjoyed this chapter and I liked the way you incorporated two common experiences in the human condition: waking up and not knowing if it's morning or evening, and having a dream about a sound that's really something happening in the physical environment. Both happen to me relatively often, so it resonated. Well done!Author's Response: Hmm... this comment looks really familiar. LOL. The situation of waking up and not knowing what time it is actually comes from RL. A very unsettling experience to be sure. Thanks for the review, Kevin! Date: 08/17/2008 06:19 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Jey AW PSHAW! My love for Adam just dropped a few measures! I know he's trying to do good and all but ):. Hehe, though I must admit... this chapter made me smile quite a bit at how awesome the pairing was. Of course until that last bit but still. In response to your response to my comment, DONT YOU WORRY! I am here to the end! =DAuthor's Response: I'm very glad to hear it! I hope to have the next chapter up within a couple of days. Thanks again! Date: 08/13/2008 02:05 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, It may have been short, for which you owe no apology, but it was wonderfully written and packed with gut wrenching emotion. Again in that style of writing that is precise and to the point. Great read. Regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: Thanks, Steven! Date: 08/06/2008 10:57 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: circa_divide I love this story, Most definately adding to faves. I love the characters and how they feel so real, it's great. Keep it up! Author's Response: I'm glad you like it! Thank you for reviewing! Date: 08/06/2008 02:06 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Terrific chapter. I find it telling that even though Joey wanted to stop Adam, Adam had to make the suggestion himself.I can't wait to read more!Author's Response: I'm glad you're still enjoying it, Kevin! I hope it continues to live up to your expectations. Date: 08/05/2008 08:57 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 9 Reviewer: corvus I read the last three chapters in one go -- when I last checked this out, it was at chapter 6 -- and quite enjoyed them. There are few stories on GA that I keep up with or read, and this is one of them. I was a bit hesitant about the introduction of Adam's character because it was so out of the blue, as was Joey's immediate attraction. The depiction of emotional trauma is a difficult thing, because it's hard to make realistic. Joe's physical reaction (vomiting) is great and gives his psychological distress a visceral manifestation. DomLuka in his Log Way story used the loss of all physical desire as an extremely effective manifestation of trauma. I find it interesting that Joe doesn't seem to dwell too much on the normal "problems" one would associate with beginning a romance: e.g., this guy's a stranger, I don't even know him, etc., etc. Of course, that's probably because he's trying not to throw up. I also find it both interesting and suspect that Adam isn't trying to forge a strong friendship with Joe *before* initiating a relationship -- I would think Adam should try to get to know Joe better before trying to seduce him. But these points are rather minor, and the story is well written enough that I'm really enjoying it anyway. Update soon!Author's Response: They may seem to be minor points, but they are valid nonetheless and I thank you for pointing them out to me. I confess I hadn't thought of it from that perspective. Thank you for leaving me such a detailed review! Date: 08/05/2008 08:47 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 8 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Awww sweet chapter! LOL, even if a shower is just a shower :-PAuthor's Response: It was probably for the best anyway. Imagine my surprise to find this story got 8 reviews all at once! I was so pleased. Thanks for taking the time to read and review, Kevin. It means a lot to me. I hope you continue to enjoy the story. Date: 07/31/2008 07:58 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Wow! Awesome chapter! Really HOT! :-PGreat job, Dion! I can't wait to read the next two!Author's Response: Thanks Kevin! Date: 07/31/2008 04:39 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Oh my! What a shocking chapter.Really well-written. Really moving.Author's Response: I'm happy you enjoyed it! Date: 07/31/2008 04:19 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace What a wonderful chapter! It looks like everything is falling into place!Author's Response: It's about time things were looking up for Joe. Thanks again, Kevin! Date: 07/31/2008 04:04 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Awwww yay!Awesome chapter, Dion! :)Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! Date: 07/31/2008 03:35 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace What a dreadful town!Author's Response: It is, isn't it? Thanks for reviewing! Date: 07/31/2008 03:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Wow....Author's Response: Is that a good 'wow'? Date: 07/31/2008 03:00 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: AFriendlyFace Wonderful first chapter, Dion!I can't wait to read on...and fortunately I can ;)Author's Response: Glad you liked it, Kevin. Thanks for reviewing! Date: 07/31/2008 02:46 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Tiff OMG! I will say it again: I love you and I hate you.This chapter was amazing. I love Adam and his character, in general. He's so nice and sweet to Joe! Joe totally deserves that. I know Joe isn't out of the water yet, in terms of emotional turmoil, but at least he's slowly admitting his feelings with Adam's coaxing. I wasn't expecting Adam to know George and everyone else. A little interesting twist. Mini-cliffhanger! Although since Joe is a bit fragile emotionally, I don't think anything naughty will happen...yet. It's a bit too soon for that. However I do look forward to them being together in the future, or at least good friends. Making Joe get physically ill at his attraction towards Adam was really good, for a lack of a better word to use. It makes sense, since Joe is so scarred from what happened with his family, that he doesn't want to feel anything towards Adam. But suppressing what is natural can be stressful and cause bodily harm. I love this story and I love all the characters. You have great secondary characters, strong-willed and admirable. I very much adore George and Cindy. Cindy is such a sweet girl. Can't wait for the next update. I will try to hound you more, as I know how much you love it, LOL, but I will be taking a break from GA and will probably only drop in occasionally, if evem. Then again, I might make an exception just for you...since I love you so much. This was the longest review ever...eek.Author's Response: I like your long reviews. They help me focus on what's appealing to readers and what isn't. I wasn't sure if the illness was plausible - this is what stalled me in the first place - but Sharon assured me it would work. I hope you enjoy the next chapter as well. Date: 07/28/2008 04:16 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Jey In all of my honesty, this is an amazing story. Seriously... I'm glad I stumbled upon this by accident when I didnt' even mean to click on it. Totally not what I expected. The first few chapters were actually some of the saddest happens I've ever read in stories I read... ): Argh, I want chapter 8 up now! Still... ugh, his family and "friends" make me sick to muh stomach. In other words, awesome story you have here! =PAuthor's Response: Thanks for leaving a review! I'm glad you like the story - even if you didn't intend to read it in the first place. LOL. I hope you continue to enjoy it. Even if you don't, please let me know what you thought of it! Date: 07/28/2008 03:34 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: corvus *sniffs* Angst! Ahh.... *revels* I very much enjoyed reading this fic. It's well written and compelling. If I were to make a few suggestions, it would be to would tone down the parts a little bit -- i.e. not have Joseph "whisper" realisations to himself, as it's not very realistic. But that's mostly okay. Do update soon! Author's Response: I'll keep that in mind, corvus, although I'm not entirely sure what you're referring to. Since this one's already complete I'll go over the next one with an eye to what you mentioned. I'm glad you're enjoying it and thank you for reviewing! Date: 07/26/2008 11:42 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, You have this subtle way of 'playing' down the tragedy. It's a great tension builder. Very nicely written chapter. And yet another cliffhanger. Tsk, tsk;-) Looking forward to the next chapter. --Steven Author's Response: Ah - sorry about the cliffhanger, Steven. They're a weakness. Thank you for leaving a review! Date: 07/26/2008 11:11 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Tiff Oh, man! Come on. This is so sad! How is his mother so cold? She didn't even care or show any emotion. And when he cried out in pain, the door slammed shut. That small thing was very significant and powerful to me.The whole robbery thing was interesting. Why did Joe seem to have so much compassion for the guy? Maybe he knew what it was like to hit rock bottom and be so desperate to do anything? I wonder if Joe will meet that robber again...romance!!! LOL, I'm impatient. It's sweet that Mr. Dawson cares so much about Joe, and that Joe knows it. When people care, they usually express it in anger, like Mr. Dawson yelling. Then Joe worrying about the old man's heart. GAHHHH!!! I want something nice to happen. Why do you gotta be so evil, man? Stalk ya later, dude.Author's Response: Thank you for another review! Joe's only concern was to get the robber out as quickly as possible - he was worried something would happen and Mr. D would suffer for it. The robber does not return. I'm happy you're still enjoying it, Tiff. ...You are, aren't you? Date: 07/25/2008 06:28 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: MyOregon Just wanted to send you a note to let you know that I'm thoroughly enjoying your story. I love Joe and my heart was breaking with his. I can kind of relate to his situation. Although I wasn't kicked out of my house and I had loving parents, I did finish my senior year of high school living on my own. I rented a room from a cantankerous old woman whom I loved dearly. Most everyone else couldn't stand her. She had lived in the area for ever and everyone knew her. So please, I hope to see more chapters. I am so glad he's starting to heal his heart and get his life back together.DebAuthor's Response: Thank you for your review! I'm glad you're enjoying the story and hope you continue to do so! Date: 07/22/2008 03:39 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: Tiff Heyyy Mr. Polite.Thanks for the new chapter! When I saw you on chat, I had to grab the opportunity to hammer another chapter out of you. I'm shameless. Ready for another long review? LOL. I'm happy to see that Joe's luck is turning around. Mr. Dawson knows good people and I'm glad Joe can finish his education. It sucks that he's keeping to himself at school, but it makes sense since he's scared from his last experience. Nevertheless, he has good friends with Mr. Dawson and Cindy. It's like a nice family, they're close and no one seems to care that hey's gay. So...when are we going to see some romance? Are you planning to injure poor Joe again before his luck turns again? Evil, evil Dion. Hound you later. : )Author's Response: I have to admit I didn't think you meant it when you said you were going to call me that. 'Poor Joe' does have a tribulation or two to get through before he meets anyone. Have patience, my dear... Thank you for leaving a review! Date: 07/22/2008 12:29 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Tiff Excellent chapter! I love the pacing of this story. Joe's background was covered, with just enough detail and description without going on and on for chapters. I'm glad we're back to the present and I like Joe's boss. He's grumpy and cranky, but is ultimately a good person. I have a feeling they'll have a great relationship, a love/hate one as if they were related. I look forward to Joe's life as he goes back to school, and continues working, and rebuilding his life. In very few chapters, you managed to make me feel connected to the main character. Anyway...just curious. Is this story completed and how many chapters are there in total? I'm just super curious and it will gnaw at my insides every time I read an update..not knowing when I will get more...: )Author's Response: Thanks for leaving another review, Tiff! Yes, the story is complete (I don't like posting WIP). As for how many chapters - I'm really not sure. I type my stories as one document and then break a piece off for posting as needed. If it helps at all, as an .rtf document with 9 point font it's 38 pages long. Enjoy! Date: 07/20/2008 04:07 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Hi Dion,Some of my best friends are old curmudgeons; I already like Mr. D. Again, Dion, you have a nice style in your unfolding of this tale without a lot of conspicuous explanation. Your story is very descriptive and it easy to 'feel' your characters emotions and what they are going through.I look forward to the further adventers of Joe.Warm regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: I appreciate your continuing to leave me reviews, Steven. I hope future chapters are just as enjoyable for you! Date: 07/20/2008 10:24 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, This was a wonderfully written chapter. Your portrayal of Joe is so well done. As your previous reviewer noted, he is feeling all the pain and fear of his situation, but has a stoicism about himself or more precisely, his behavior. He has not resorted to being a cry baby. Not that I'd blame him if he did. I am truly looking forward to more of this story. Warm regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: My response to this review didn't take, I'm afraid. Thank you for taking the time to respond and I hope you continue to enjoy the story! Date: 07/18/2008 12:03 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Tiff Wow, I really like this. You have a great style. You don't go into too much emotional detail about Joseph's situation, as in he's not sobbing in every scene, but you provide enough where the reader still feels his pain. Well done. I look forward to reading more, because it's obvious he got that job. Now I want to see how he get there. Great job. Jeez, where have you been? You should have been writing earlier, so I have something good to read, lol.Author's Response: Thanks for the compliment, Tiff! I'm glad you like it so far! Date: 07/17/2008 11:07 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Hi DionDefinitely have grabbed my attention. My heart sank when Joe's parents left the room as you described. That on top of losing his childhood friend is sad. Very nicely written. I look forward to what life becomes like for Joe. Regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it so far, Steven. Thanks for the review! Date: 07/17/2008 01:11 AM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete] Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Steven Keiths Dion, Great start--you got my attention. Joe obviously got the job. Curious as to why/what has Joe in the situation he is in, which I'm sure you're gonna' tell me:-) Glad you're sharing more of your talent with us, Dion. Warm regards,--StevenAuthor's Response: Thanks for reading, Steven. I hope you enjoy the story! Date: 07/15/2008 10:14 PM Admin Options: [Edit] [Delete]