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Chapter 19 Back on Dry Land
sandeman commented on Grayson Rose's story chapter in Chapter 19 Back on Dry Land
The young men have been rescued. Their families had never stopped looking for them, with love and hope. The reunion via tv was as affecting as if it had been in person. Perhaps more so. One week apart and the pull of Jamie and Oliver's need and love for each was so strong they could no longer be parted. And their parents in their love accepted this. After 18 months on the island their future will be different to what they might have expected before the shipwreck; the love that grew in adversity will be there always to guide them. A great chapter. -
Five years on and Nos and Cal have grown in maturity. Becoming the next generation teachers and leaders; and planning to start their own family. A delightful epilogue to their love story.
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What a wonderful chapter. A few lines in and you are subverting my imagination. Shakespeare's Richard 3 "A horse a horse my kingdom etc."has been replaced by Gremlin " A spoon a spoon my kingdom etc". Exit Isaiah stage left laughing in the corridor. Immediately followed by Gremlin in the body(? ) of a Dalek with spoons instead of death rays "Exterminate Exterminate". Gremlin "Are we there yet?" Mickey "No". "How about now?" " No". Oh my god!! Mickey is becoming Gremlin"s dad. Mickey loves Isaiah. Isaiah " You made me wear clean underwear." "We're going to be okay," Isaiah said. "Yeah," Mickey said, "We are". Quote of the day "EVERYTHING NEEDS BEANS. BEANS ARE THE FOOD OF THE GODS". And here I thought it was Ambrosia. Well, we live and learn!
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" The knowing would always be partial. That the partial knowing might be all there was...and he didn't know how to decide whether it was enough....". Oliver is changing and his feelings for Julien have grown but can he escape from his need for control and completeness? Julien too if only by look and touch seems to be developing feelings for Oliver. But Julien appears to have suffered some kind of loss associated with his climbing. Will this have an effect on any relationship that might develop? Another lyrical chapter.
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Chapter 33 ~ Welcome Home, Moon Child ~
sandeman commented on Vcs's story chapter in Chapter 33 ~ Welcome Home, Moon Child ~
Life doesn't always throw straight balls. Sadly abuse comes in many forms, physical mental emotional. And in varying degrees of strength. A sharp word or a constant belittling. A slap or a constant beating. And it happens to all ages; children adults the elderly. How the abused react also differs. One may become an overprotective parent ; another a brutal abuser of his own children. But ALL are scarred. Abuse should never be forgiven, and should be punished. But our society seems to work only on dominance - one person over another, one country over another. And without understanding..... Two Spirits Ranch is the Utopia we would all like to live in. But it IS cloud cuckoo land. Another unsettling yet inspiring and beautifully told episode. Thank you. -
Now each of our heroes has found his inner wolf and true self. Sadly for us the end of THIS adventure has arrived. Leaving us wanting. And waiting? Thank you for a tale intriguing engrossing and wonderfully told.
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What a lovable quintet! The Gremlin - priorities "SNACKS" "LUNCH" "PAJAMAS". Dmitri - student scientist hair sticking up in "seventeen" yes "seventeen" directions. Isaiah - engineer and peacemaker keeping them all together. Mickey - captain,boyfriend, dad, lovable idiot, taking pleasure in his new family. And Hughie - making a note of everything presumably for the end of term report.
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Both young men have gained greater maturity and found a committed love for each other in the space of a few months. And so to a leavetaking. Ingomar back across the Rhine to a future with the victorius Arminius and his tribe ? Marcus on his way to Rome and his family and whatever reception a ransomed survivor of an inglorious defeat could expect ? Not so many years previously, the poet Horace, who had become a friend of Emperor Augustus had written in one of his odes " Dulce et decorum est pro patria mori". But whatever the outcome for him, it seems as if Marcus has taken to heart another quote fom Horace "Carpe diem quam minimum credula postero".
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Chapter 32 ~ Echoes in the Mind ~
sandeman commented on Vcs's story chapter in Chapter 32 ~ Echoes in the Mind ~
A disturbing but not unexpected development with the trauma our newly named Young Eagle Feather is experiencing. I hope that Jaciah and Kahlid will be instrumental in helping Young Eagle Feather's recovery. From the description of them they seem to project a calmness of spirit and an all enveloping love. Jaciah "seated in the old ways and traditions of Native American beliefs", may well provide the kind of therapy, spiritual therapy, that Young Eagle Feather needs so much at the moment. It will complement the powerful love that Jake has for him. And the eagle that Mannly (as was) heard above him has reappeared as part of the new name given to him by the Longfeathers. A powerful totem in native American belief. -
Chapter 11- Nos's Gift
sandeman commented on BendtedWreath's story chapter in Chapter 11- Nos's Gift
Delightful chapter for all concerned. -
A safe return to his own people for Titus; a ransome arranged for Marcus; and hopefully a safe passage for both. For Ingomar a warning and an unenviable choice: to ride away with Marcus to where he might be regarded by Rome as a traitor; or return to his own family and face a similar condemnation.
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Chapter 31 ~ No Porcelain Doll ~
sandeman commented on Vcs's story chapter in Chapter 31 ~ No Porcelain Doll ~
Perhaps subconsciously Jake realises that despite his show of cheerfulness Mannly is still suffering from PTSD. But is smothering him in a way Mannly might feel is denigrating. Mannly's recovery has a long way to go. He is still ill. Eagles have an association with native Americans for wellbeing. Perhaps this one is a spiritual guide. A protector. -
And so the end is near, and we must face the final veil. Without a doubt they did it their way.
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Whilst I hope sometimes I can make a humorous comment because your writing fills me with joy , this chapter gives me pause for thought. I can sympathise with those caught in a cult or sect because at age 18 after a late adolescence breakdown I was involved with JWs. At that time some 65 years ago I needed the emotional support they gave me. For me I could not deny to myself that I was gay and so I moved on. I admire the way you have handled the meeting of Dmitri with his dad and Isaiah. The thoughtfulness of Isaiah and the way he seeks to smooth the path between Mickey and his son is wonderful. Dmitri is a perspicacious boy, who has retained his precious love of life, who has not been brainwashed and will accept the growing closeness of his dad and Isaiah. " I want to see the stars," Dmitri said.
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I'm waiting for the " too comfortable" pilots chair to be put to a more interesting use! And where can I download or obtain a video of the goat episode? And don't let the gremlin out!!
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Your gremlins are always entertaining. But when one is found imprisoned in a crate and starts off with feed me or calling for food .......
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Dmitri is a resourceful boy and will love the freedom of the Vega Vixen being with his dad and another cult escapee. I'm sure Hughie will absolutely adore him.
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"Isaiah tackled him, the two of them crashing to the decking as Isaiah covered him with as many kisses....." Chapter1 perhaps of a revised edition of Mickey's Manual of "Percussive Maintenance" ???
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Isaiah selected a cream puff. It was the best thing he had ever tasted. Well he is in for a different taste. Cream to Milk?
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Late to this story. And I must remember to check the Falcon reference. But already loving the developments. Or should that be "cautiously optimistic".
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The devotion Titus has to Marcus is truly wonderful, saving his cithara and more concerned about fetching his master's cloak than his own safety. Ingomar may also have put his own life at risk for his love of Marcus. And Marcus is in an unenviable position. Ransome, rescue, escape, slavery or death.
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Another fantastic episode. Love how each has found a thrill which exhilarates yet scares each other. And Connor, who earlier had faced down a boar, provides a romantic bower of flowers for his "date". That's both an aaaw! and a wow! And the verbal sparring is a delight. Not sure whether to hope for a rescue at this point or for them enjoy their Eden for longer.
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Chapter 13 Under the Wyoming Sun
sandeman commented on Grayson Rose's story chapter in Chapter 13 Under the Wyoming Sun
Marcus is going to find it difficult to choose one brother. Sex with Cameron is instant and hot. With Ryan its more teasing slower but just as hot. A high octane life in the city which will suit Cameron to a T? or a settled ranch life with Ryan who will support Marcus' dreams? -
Chapter 30 ~ Finding His Place ~
sandeman commented on Vcs's story chapter in Chapter 30 ~ Finding His Place ~
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A guerilla attack so early on the baggage train would also on the narrow road with dense? forest on either side provide a road block of carts dead oxen horses and people. If the main body of soldiers were to turn back they would be slowed down to clear miles of road and have to enter the forest to fight against people who know the forest . Varus is in a predicament. Will he retreat or fight where he is or continue onwards to find a better battlefield. All the maps and discussion of strategy proving as pointless as all the information given him by Arminius.
