Andrew Q Gordon

Wayne, First you are free to watch Mike and I kiss anytime. Second they sound like assholes, so don't feel bad. They sound like stuck up A list wanna bes who when they are your age will hate themselves because none of the 'other' young people - a label they will apply to themselves - give them the time of day. So there are two ways to look at this, one - some stupid twits with the IQ of cabbage - insulted you, or, they haven't a clue who you are, what you are, or how well liked you are so who gives an F' bomb about them. Either way, it doesn't matter, they're assholes unworthy of your time. Andy

Dude, you're getting old From one old head to a slightly younger old head - Happy Birthday! Enjoy and have fun.

Thanks Mr. C, I'm always glad to hear folks 'see' what I'm trying to show. As for Jordan, well yeah, he'll get his, but I wouldn't have much hope he'll learn anything from it. He'd have to admit he did something wrong first. As for the 5 years hence, well it's started, in rough form, that will be next year's project I think.

Thanks for the feed back. I tried to infuse each of the characters with a bit of life, so I'm pleased you felt that. I agree that no one is better for Jordan getting 50 years, but at least he won't do it to anyone else. I hope to get to a Jason and Peter sequel 5 years later, but not sure I'll get to it anytime soon. Hang in there, it may come sooner than I think. Andy

George, Thanks as always for the feedback, as a fellow lawyer, I get the sense you'd know if I were trying to BS folks. I'm glad you picked up on the 'no one really's better for this' part. Many victims think a guilty verdict will wash away all anger and scars, but rarely does it do that. There is closure, some satisfaction, but you can't remove the feelings and the why, the attack will bring up now and again. As for another trial, I think I've tortured the Colmar's enough, time to move on to other stories. [that and I have no experience with a tax fraud case so I'd be pulling it out my ass for sure. ]

Whew, I guess I can unload the shotgun and put it away for a few years - until baby q is old enough to date -Glad to hear you were able to visualize the court room and proceedings. There were times I just skipped over things then had to go back realizing most folks wouldn't 'know' what was happening. As for the many years from now - yeah, no. I have in mind a few years later story with Jason and Peter, but by then they've both put Jordan out of their mind and wouldn't think of going to visit, not even to gloat. Why open an old wound? Thanks again for reading and giving me your feed back.

Jordan's age would likely have no bearing on the sentence he receives, but it would be hard for anyone with any kind of compassion to not feel something when sentencing him to what would likely amount to the rest of his life. There is a Judge I appear in front of often who tells the kids when they are on probation or on release pending sentencing that he doesn't want to lock them up, but if they don't follow the conditions he'll do it. He tells them, I feel bad, but I'm going to keep my word and lock you up because that's what I have to do. And he always does when they screw up. The point I was making was Milton might be a crusty old curmudgeon, but he is not a heartless jerk. Yes Jordan will deserve whatever he gets - every day of it - but I don't know too many judges who take delight in doing that to someone who's 20 years old.

Thanks Dave, Yes, I doubt Jordan is prepared for the rest of his life. County jail is nothing like Prison time, nothing. And while the state correction institutes do their best to not send a lamb into a lion's den, the truth is his crime wouldn't qualify him for less than a medium to maximum security facility. He's definitely in for a rough 'ride'. Thanks for reading and for taking the time to always leave me some feedback.

Have a fabulous birthday, my dear, full of fun and memorable times. - if they're really memorable, maybe post a picture or two?

Conner, Glad to see that I didn't disappoint you, I know you and several others were keenly interested in how this unfolded. As always, thanks for reading and thanks for making sure to let me know what you were thinking. Andy

Hey Dan,thanks for the review. Glad to see you enjoyed it. I won't say that all verdicts go in this manner, but it has been my experience that goes something like I wrote. Good to see that people who are not familiar with courtrooms could 'see' the verdict unfolding. I tried to make it as visual as possible. Thanks again for all encouragement while I wrote this.

Hey Kevin, in my experience, even when you win a case like this satisfaction isn't complete. Justice served can only ease but so much. As I said in my forum, one has to expect that Jordan is going to do a substantial amount of time more than Warren Berryman and he got 25 years. Berryman pled guilty, which at least at the time, indicated he had some remorse and that he took responsibility for his actions. Jordan did neither. I would imagine an attorney in in Rankin's position would be telling his client and his family at the sentence is going to be extremely harsh so I doubt it will come as a surprise when he gets slammed by the judge at sentencing. Thanks for reading and for all the encouragement along the way.

Hey Wayne,in my experience, there is no such thing as I can't lose Jury trial. a case like this, anything less than guilty would be a loss for the prosecutor, and for the victim. As much as you and others would like to see Hank and Rebecca Colmar pay for the sins of their little angel Jordan, there would be no cause of action for Peter and his family against the parents of an adult defendant. You and everyone else will have to be satisfied with the knowledge that Rebecca Colmar's little angel is going to spend the rest of her life in jail. Thanks for reading and for all the reviews.

Martin tried to focus on the mountain of work that had piled up during the trial. Same as always; trials caused a backlog. One way or the other, he'd have time to catch up soon. Pushing aside the deliberating jury, he began assigning new cases. No matter how busy he was, he never let this part of his job go more than a couple of days; it wouldn't be fair to the assistants to get them two weeks late. Thankfully, nothing serious came in that would need his attention. After this, he wante

Billy, With the exception of my pet peeve no no - I'm this tall, this build, this color hair - this was a good start, you've got the players set out, the hint of the conflict and more than enough tension to keep us going. The flash forward worked, so now we need you to catch back up.

Welcome L-EX. Enjoy you time and we look forward to seeing your work. If you need help, just ask, someone probably knows the answer

Sadly no, there is not time to right much in this story. That doesn't mean things can't change in the future, just that the trial story only has a few days left in it's time line. don't forget too that Peter is a Senior now, and will look for work when he graduates. His days of teaching were probably going to end soon anyway. Not to say it doesn't suck to have it taken away, but this job wasn't going to be his full time career. Next chapter will be up soon, promise.

Well no way I can compete with THAT birthday wish, so Happy Birthday Mark, Love Q, Mike and Baby Q

Nephy, you're very evil, ending the story like that. Not that I am surprised. Perfectly apt for the day and holiday. Hope you have a festive time and find as much happiness as you bring the rest of us.

Pipo, you act like I have any say in this - it's in the jury's hands now. But personally, IF I had a say, if he got off, I think we'd sign him and Peter up for Thunderdome - Two men enter, one man leaves

No way, our little Bee is 16 Happy Birthday Bee!!! You have a wonderful birthday and enjoy

Sorry couldn't resist one last review. First, you don't need to change the Bryce part at the end, that there is a bit of question is good, because it makes us think and frankly it was there, I just wanted to be sure. Okay so for the story as a whole, this is definitely one of my favorites on the site. I loved how you took us through the various stages to bit by bit introduce us to the characters and the world. We've 'discussed' my comments before, so I'm going to focus on why I loved this story. The way you wrote it, we got a real sense of Kynan and Alan and - at least for me - I really felt attached to them both. Bryce went from dismissible rogue to perhaps the most likeable of the supporting cast. And the way you distinguished, Azil and Karadur from Xeran gave us a sense that Demons, weren't evil by nature, just different. THAT, might be the best part of this, how you had us Hating the demons until we met Karadur and Azil, then you showed us that Xeran and his ilk were just evil not because they were demons, but well because they were evil. Last, the various twists and turns were imaginative and original so it was fun to read. Great job. So what's next ?

Happy Birthday Tara, Hope you have a great day

Wow! great chapter - though I'm not sure what happened with Bryce. Am I right that in the end he did not join 'Waylon' because Alan didn't need saving? Beyond that- just a wonderful story and so well told. I hope in time you give us an epilogue, maybe tie it into a short story with Alan and Kynan. Kudos an thank you or sharing this.

I think I need to take a poll - it might change the ending - to see how many think Jordan gets convicted and how many think he's found not guilty. Then based on the numbers, I decide if I flee the galaxy or not. Thanks Wayne,