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  1. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 22

    I have my ups and downs with this story. I REALLY love the premise of it and I get that its an AU genre; there are things that in this particular story that would still align with RL. Over all I really enjoyed this chapter! My favorite so far, even though there was a bumb for me during the middle and the whole set up for the love making 'scene'. But i wonder how long this story will be? will this be a multipart story or just one super long one? anywhoo keep up the good work, R
  2. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 6

    Anyone ELSE you could have used other than Cooper? I find that man repugnant. Don Lemon; ANYONE else would have imo...
  3. Beyond the fact that I love historical based stories, this is honestly good! I love the perspective and easy flow of the narrative. I am not sure how many chapters you plan to have but I could see this story ending on a somewhat happy/content note! At least for me it will, lol.
  4. DeroiBlandDavis

    Epilogue

    YAY! I waited for what seemed like years to have an ending to this story... and it had a bit of an unforeseen twist, but I really enjoyed it! Wish it could continue on, but I shall be happy with what i was given! Great work!
  5. YAY!!! This has been a long time coming and Im glad im the first post! I cant wait for more!
  6. OMG YES!!! I NEEDED THAT AFTER MY DAY!!! THIS MAKES EVERYTHING BETTER!! THANK YOU SO MUCH FOR YOU HARD WORK!!!
  7. This was a really good story but is it bad that I am still holding hope for Jonah and Ren?
  8. DeroiBlandDavis

    November Eyes

    I would like to go on the record of saying that... I would like to hump your leg in appreciation for this story! that is all...
  9. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 19

    Lovely ending! I loved the whole thing actually... I cannot wait for a new story to pop from that brain of yours!
  10. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 10

    This was a wonderful read! I enjoyed every bit of it!
  11. MORE!! I sound so demanding This was a really good chapter. I enjoyed it, but as any good author, you always leave your reader wanting MORE! Things are picking up speed, thank god, It has been slow in the begining... now it seems some action and some 'actions' will be played out Raven
  12. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 7

    I really like this... Totally unexpected plot change and I like it!
  13. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 6

    This started off really good and then ended a little on the weak side. Just rushed thats all. Still gets my vote though
  14. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 1

    Wonderful! Nuff said!
  15. Wow... You have a new fan... And damn you for leaving it like that... this is the type of story I could just sit with a bag of chips and a cold drink and read until I finish or pass out. either or is fine, lol
  16. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 1

    I smell something great cooking...
  17. I like to leave comments at the end of a story since I like the whole picuture. And well.... I loved it. Maybe because I am in a simular situation. I am trying give my "bottom", who is really a top, his manhood back after so many have stolen and belittled it. So, I have promised the old vows of marriage. I would be "bony and buxom in bed or board" and that he is the head of a soon to be growing family. We have the dog, grandparents, the house, and looking for a child (or more). First though.... a little ceremony to prove to others and God (whom I believe s/he had a devine plan for us, and especially for me) that we are committed. No matter how many times he or I might have extra "marital" (we live in TEXAS, But we have met some really supportive people, even conservatives) relations, which I hope are few (and there have been... marital struggles are a bitch LOL) and none actually. I just wanted to say, this story really resonated with me Great Job Deroi please excuse any grammer errors... Sleepy on a saturday night, not good lol!
  18. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 1

    Would I be wrong to suggest you might be writing some allegory into the story as well?
  19. I really love this story and this type of plot. It is a plot that has been used for ages but I think you have done a good job of making it your own! It seems many readers do not understand the reason for the rape, but IMO it will probably be the most decisive factor in the story. It is because of the rape that he MUST choose and now the question is who. I think I know who it is but I could be wrong I like to hold all judgements till then end but I think maybe investing in a or another beta wold be a good idea, just to eliminate some of the wordiness. Thanks for the wonderful works, Raven M.
  20. I need more. Like soon. And I love the name Raven... if you couldn't tell
  21. DeroiBlandDavis

    Story

    I LOVE LOVE LOVE this story. I HATE HATE HATE the ebook cover. I am not sure who choose this one (or any for that matter) but they always seem to distort one of the characters. The Top/Seme is always correctly done! Hot, handsome and saved in my special folder hidden in my HD drive . The bttm/Uke however is some sort of freak that does not match what has been described. The description could be of someone soft and of natural proportions but you get a muscle twink next to another muscle twink. Fine; a seme; tall, dark, and handsome with skin that is no where near his purported race (usually white). Great, but if you say the uke is softer and lighter and needs to be protected... he better well look it or you can ruin a story! Specially for me!! This is not a vendetta against you Cia. I have been having this issue with ebooks/book coverings for years and this was the first chance to present itself for me to comment. I know a lot of times the author has no choice for what is used as their cover art, but to those who have OCD and fantasies to live out through these stories I would like a little bit more of the story to come through the art! So please to the artist who make cover art; keep in mind that for a lot, you hold the key to weither or not this author has readers. If I want to read a story about an Alfa and his Beta that has been bullied thorough out his life and cant fight off a fly, he better represent that! Not someone who could take on a bar and all its patrons and still live! If he needs "protecting" make him look like he needs a little protection! In the end what I am asking is... Make the Uke look like Uke. For those who dont know the terms Uke and Seme... god made google for a reason, lol really great story though.... I enjoyed reading it a long time ago! I was just miffed about the cover art for it! ... Oh I am hiding my soap box now... *runs and hides in shame*
  22. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 3

    This is just an amazing story. It is just so well written and the tenderheartedness of the storyline is wonderfully palatable without being an emotional roller coaster. Just makes your day go a little bit better!
  23. DeroiBlandDavis

    Chapter 18

    Great chapter! Love it and Love you! Now I am going to go sit in the corner and rock back and forth as my finals and projects have turned my brain to mush.... (YAY for stress induced psychosis!!) lol
  24. DeroiBlandDavis

    Rexer

    This was such a cute story!! Please keep writing! I really loved this!
  25. I had such fun reading this, lol!
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