Lugh

Jasmin, Your storyline IS your plot. One is just more detailed than the other. There are only so many plots in the world and all of them have been done. You will never write anything new, however you can put a new spin on an old plot. A climax is part of the plot. If you have a plot, then you have a climax. Maybe you need a class in writing, not just a generic English class. Check at your local adult education center or community college; some recreation centers or libraries in bigger cities hold them too. You should also hang out in the writer's areas of this site, there is a wealth of information there. Take the time to check your spelling and grammar, it shows a bit of professionalism, and even if the story isn't the best, it shows you care. As for getting the feedback you want, ask questions. Start a thread, and pose the questions you want the answers to in the correct forum. Ask the readers what they thought of particular parts or the plot in general. Find one or two that you trust and really pick their brains apart. Lugh

I have several stories I do not post on this site because they do not fit for content. Some things will never follow the site's rules, sorry. If you would read the rules, it would be easier for you. That's why they are there.

Maybe you need reading glasses. Go back and try again. YOU don't own THIS Wonderland either, just like Alice, you stumbled upon it. Just proves my point. Can't have a battle of wits when one comes without a set. Let me guess -- lack of grammar, lack of rule reading, lack of reading in general -- you must be an Arbour fan.

Herm, might explain something then... I'm not English. Who is to say it is your Wonderland? You are the new-commer here. I said, if this is Wonderland, that would mean you are playing the role of Alice, the silly twit who fell down the rabbit hole. It's not your Wonderland at all. You are bumbling around and poking into things like a child. Beware.. Beware.. Beware.. Giggles. Maybe I am the Cheshire Cat who is pretending to be the Hatter.

If this is Wonderland, then I call the Hatter -- always wanted to be Mad.

hey Aaron, you old troll: BITE ME. Snickers. Lugh (who is not a BOARD MODERATOR, and is very helpful in CHAT, where he does moderate with a smile)

Dude you need a blog... go find one.

Except this is a writing site not a porn one... look at the title. It says GAY AUTHORS -- QUALITY GAY FICTION not PORN WRITERS OF THE WORLD we do not write porn here nor is porn allowed. If that is what you are looking for please look for it elsewhere.

Well if you are the bottom and you are just laying there, that is your problem... snickers. A bottom has to be engaged too you know. If you just lay there you are a "girl with a dick". Become active. I don't know why self proclaimed tops think of self proclaimed bottoms as second class lovers. It takes two to tango. Where else are they going to play hide the banana? Also, sheesh, we really don't need to know that his dick goes into your butt. I mean... we get the idea. Been there done that, you know. So unless you are doing it different you can lay off on the description if you don't mind. Think of the queerlings.

Well Yang, at least you show the capacity to press the shift key and another key at the same time. So, yeah it is funny. Boob. That always makes me laugh. Boobies. That makes me laugh more. Do people even bother reading the rules here? Ever? Anyway I noticed you skipped the most important part of my post. That's ok. I'll forgive you this time. As to the original topic in the thread (because you know we are getting off topic and that is bad too). I don't believe you are born being a top or a bottom. I think those tastes are developed as you are exposed to people and their behaviors, sexual and non-sexual. I also believe that a person can be a dominate personality but a total bottom in the sack. One does not exclude nor does it preclude the other. Many type A personalities are bottoms, it's the only place they can totally "let go" and be not in control. Something to consider, don't you think?

Heh. I'm sorry. I'm laughing my behind off right now. For someone who claims in the first sentence to be a writer, where is the grammar? Anyway -- tops, bottoms, dominates, submissives -- why must we all be categorized? I prefer to shake it up with my partners. I won't go as far as to say take turns, but unless there is a signed contract between two people why fall into a rut? Discussions about sex are good, and healthy, but please refrain from coarse language and detailed discourse. If you have an issue with word choices please consult the thesaurus. Remember there are queerlings who can read this also... so manners, manners, manners! Happy writing! Lugh.

I guess I really should say something since all of you are posting and such like. I really do enjoy the feedback. Thank you all for taking the time to read and comment. I have been called a comment whore. Ok fine I am. I admit it. I don't care. Comment away! There now you all know. I write for you guys (and gals). Deal with it, or don't. Often I am embarrassed by a story. This one does not end like I wanted it to, it's too abrubt, there isn't enough conclusion, that sort of embarrasses me as an author. That is the primary reason as to why I feel it is unfinished. However, I could not in good conscious "end" it properly. I wanted to continue on to a confrontation wtih the Queen and the pair of kings, the Oaks, and head off to war with the mage and knight... other things were to happen. I have a rough outline. I'm thinking about working it out over the month of November. I will have a deadline then... Cia is good at kicking my ass, anyone else want to purchase a ticket to do so? I really wish you all would talk to each other... feel free to discuss things. I learn so much about what you all think when you do. It helps my writing to become better and encourages me to write more. Anyway, somthing to think about. Thanks for reading.

herm... short, sweet, and wide open to interpretation. keep it up.

hey Emulated! That was a smooth read. I liked the dual use of the theme. Good job.

another art one: eat eggs as per normal, save the shells. when you have several, crush. (I use a wooden potato masher or a baggie with a couple paper towels and the rolling pin) These can then be used in art to make textures. Just add paint. Another one: eat eggs as per normal, add shells to the garden compost. Not very glorious, but they do cause the plants to grow very nicely.

no I meant.... ah never mind.

so... did it work?

ok let me see if I can help you all out here... the new "rules" will broaden the scope of poets able to submit poems to the anthology not restrict them further. The poetry anthology will be treated like a "special anthology" just for poems in this case. I do not see the new rules disqualifying any poem that qualified under the old rules. That help?

ok I'm closing this poll as of now (or as soon as I figure out how) but I have the info I need.... and there is now a theme generation thread over in the anthology forum for the poetry anthology. I'm thinking about the rules. Thanks for your input.

ok Krista... you say more structured... give me some examples please. You can do that by PM if it makes you more comfortable. This goes for all of you. I would like some ideas here. If you want privacy, send them by PM, I don't mind at all.

Hey Guys! I have a question for you... lets say we do make this (annual?) poetry anthology a reality and all of you want to participate cause it's such a good idea... what kind of rules do you think it should have? As it stands now to participate in the anthology there is a word count minimum. Should poetry be limited to one poem per poet or should collections up to a maximum word count be allowable? Are there any any special themes you would like to play with? If we do this, it would be yours from the start, something you all could help to decide. Think about it and leave some ideas/input please. Lugh (who is adding a simple poll for those who like those type of things)

heh I've been "suggesting" GA publish for a while.... no takers yet.

it was a timer to say who was "the one".

Personally I thought the movie was funny and rather appropriate to those who are addicted to using dating services (although this takes it one step further). Anyone who has access (Netflix on demand) should watch it (chickflick usual warnings apply).

heh censored.. yeah right... stop using bad words then goofball