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Lovely ending - Nathan and Bryce next - right? right? I love your stories thank you!

Great story - I have finally caught up! I am particularly enjoying - the little side stories. I hope you have something wonderful in the back of your mind for Jeremy. Keep up the good work and thank you again.

Another great story - thank you!

Jim your story is wonderful - and I just want it to be the best it can be! Not just being a picky old boot. A great story and a great author deserve to be shown at their best!

Love the fightin' chemistry between Paul and Rosarita - laughing as I write this. As always thank you for a wonderful chapter. Okay here we go: God as opposed to god? I may not be right - but I thought when you referred to God it was always capital g. god fearing -- God fearing Brother in law and father in law - brother-in-law; father-in-law. I watched them put those videos cell phone recordings together -- I watched them put those cell phone video recordings together but hell far -- but hell fire (not sure if hell far is a local term) each camera had continuously updating date -- each camera was continuously updating or each camera had continuously updated "It's a wonderful Life" -- "It's a Wonderful Life" with an platter of ors d'oevres should be hor d'oeuvres

Loved this chapter - I think a good knee to the balls would have been in order - but, that's just me! Now for the nit-picking: Jordan, Jordon and Jorden - I tried to find them again to let you know what sentence they were in but couldn't - so maybe I just saw them wrong. Rightchere - rightnow - should be right now Uncle Joe and Aunt Mellie gave cleared - gave shouldn't be there Then lastly should be slimy not slimey.

Hi Jim: great story. Not sure if anyone else mentioned or not it should be cherry pie not cheery pie.

Thank you for the incredible read. I love this story and the characters. Well done!

Very good. You need to consider getting an editor. I love this story but I do agree getting short pieces is very hard. I usually wait until there are 3 or 4 posted and then read them.

You are very bad - you had me liking Gizmo - and then you killed him. Now I am sitting here crying. As my nephew would say "You bad, very, very bad." Wonderful chapter, excellent writing - it's all about getting your reader involved and responding to the characters good or bad.

Jim - it's not ineptitude. I was a proof reader for a newspaper when I was younger. The biggest mistake made by writers is proofing their own copy. Our brains being what they are know what it is supposed to say - so our eyes see it correctly rather than what is actually written. We are all guilty of this!

Love Ilya - very sexy -- him and Raymond perhaps???? I hope. You didn't mention Raymond being involved or I missed it if you did. Grammar - "They new what it" should be the other knew

I love this story. Thank you Just one little grammar issue that I noticed "while i'd stagger" and "i'd throw a fit" should be I'd not i'd

Great start - looking forward to more. Thank you

Finally got around to reading this story. I would see it and then I would get sidetracked - not sure how I got sidetracked for 30 chapters but oh well. It's very good! Love a great romance! I love the story progression so far. A few times you have used the wrong here/hear and a few others such as they're, their and there, passed and past. Thank you for the read!

Well poop - the bad guys just keep being bad. Waiting for next week's chapter - time for some butt kickin'. I hope Trein doesn't get a quick death - he needs an appropriate death equal to his deeds. Thank you

Wonderful chapter - glad to see you back - missed the boys!

Wonderful chapter - thank you. Now the battle starts.

Great start - love the story so far. Thank you.

I love this story - always waiting for Thursdays - thank you!

Thank you - loved this story! Waiting patiently (or not) for the next chapter of CJ's life.

Great story again! I can hardly wait until you start Book 3!

Wonderful start - looking forward to more!

I loved this story - I was reading it when it first started - then somehow I lost it. So glad you started book 2 and I found it again. You are a wonderful author - you need an editor though!

Wonderful chapter! I just found the story today - thoroughly enjoyed it. Wish there had been more chapters, cannot wait to see where you go with this. Thank you.