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Carlos Hazday
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about going up against that fourth wall. This is an excerpt from my current novel.
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César nearly collided with his son-in-law. “Ozzie!” The hug was awkward due to the backpack over Owen’s shoulder and the rolling suitcase he pulled. “What the heck’s keeping you guys out here?” “Hey, César. Just talking.” “Well, get in there already. Everyone’s waiting.” César patted Owen’s behind as he walked by. “OZZIE!” The greeting from multiple individuals was cheerful and loud. Once the door closed, silence returned to the garage. “Hey, Dad.” CJ dropped his luggage
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I think my sad chapters impact readers so much because they're rare.
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So much hinged on that little meeting.
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Brad was free of the restrictions in Boston and went overboard.
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Livin' in the Future
Carlos Hazday commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Livin' in the Future
I can't help myself. I recently watched the entire HP movie series, and I may have pilfered a thing or two for an upcoming story. -
A sign fun times are ahead!
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Sounds like something Liebe would say.
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I try to reply to every comment! The comments section's also where I expand on details at times, so readers could miss out on those. But for some the story's enough and I'm good with that too.
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Politicians everywhere are willing to risk lives in war but quickly forget those they put in danger once the fighting's over. For too many, the battles never end.
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Thanks. Aside from a Christmas short story, I took a break from the sprawling saga after this book. There are a few spinoffs and spinins between this and the next full-fledged CJ and Owen story. I hope you enjoy those.
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You flew right through this story, didn't you? All competitive shows are complicated; I barely scraped the surface. But I just wanted to show enough for readers to realize there's more to winning those things than being talented. Luck and internal dynamics often affect the outcome. We find out who won in a future story. As you can tell from the comments, the ending was not universally loved. But I did get readers' attention. LOL
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I ended two chapters in sadness: an election lost and a death. My goal's to have happy endings for all future installments. Happy tears are acceptable.
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But this was a 'happy' chapter!!!!
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LOL Yeah, even though I posted twice a week with this story, I got grief for chapter length. Glad you liked the intro. One thing I've learned about writing is an opening line and an opening chapter should grab readers' attention quickly. The world tends to distract us so a weak opening could mean someone abandoning the story.
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The next book will focus on CJ and a couple of friends. One being Owen. Yep, we're headed back to Australia.
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A positive mental attitude is essential if one's to overcome difficult times. I've tried to show CJ fighting back whenever someone tries to knock him down
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Parents abandoning children because of their sexual orientation is horrific and unfortunately still happening. Hell, you can talk to authors on this site who've experienced it. I hope one day we see less of it.
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Dughlas became attached to Brad for a variety of reasons, so I know this chapter affected him big time. On a positive note, he got his wish; I wrote a Brad stand-alone story.
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Jesus Was an Only Son
Carlos Hazday commented on Carlos Hazday's story chapter in Jesus Was an Only Son
You have to wonder if Owen ever suspected he was in danger of losing his nuts to an over protective marine. Owen's the perfect example of a man CJ can bring home to Dad. -
Take it easy on me. Mann just praised my improvement as an author then proceeded to rip into me on a story. I'm taking it out on the author I'm editing for now. LOL
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Obviously I was familiar with Ellen, but did not watch her show. I binged a bunch of them preparing for her interviewing CJ, and I'm glad readers felt I captured her personality/speech well
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But cliffhangers are so much fun to write! LOL I'm really glad you're enjoying the series. Honestly, some of the earlier stuff makes me cringe, but if readers persevere, they'll notice my writing has improved. Far from perfect, but better.
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Brad returns to the front after his leave, and I suspect his friends will be even more concerned about his well being.
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Sometimes, challenges become opportunities. Let's see how this works out.
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