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    Aletheia

    Ha! Thanks CG! I don't think I've ever been called innocently annoying ...nope never!
  2. Thanks for the in depth comments Lisa! I really appreciate that. Yes, David feels the pressure from his mom, but it only gets worse. Yes, Gary is wrong wrong wrong, but it only gets worse. And yes Erik seems nice, but it only gets worse. Whew! Luckily we have a long way to go
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    Aletheia

    Haha... yeah Coastguard, sorry, if you want more to this story you're gonna have to write it. Wait, you just did!! Thanks for the nifty review!
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    Aletheia

    Aw thanks Defiance! After staring at 122 chapters of Twoey, it was fun to write something this compact!
  5. Thanks for the review Defiance, and David thanks you for the congrats. Do you really think Twoey can resist Delicious Danny, whom he has drooled over since day ONE??
  6. Thanks CG! Yes it's becoming obvious Danny's in worse shape than anyone thought. Longer chapters??? OMG
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    Aletheia

    Thanks Lisa! As I told Reader1810 it was fun doing it. Now about Twoey: David's getting all screwed up without you there to guide him!!!
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    Aletheia

    Thanks Reader! I never considered doing prompts, but it was fun. I'll keep my eye on them!
  9. Thank you Parker! It's fun putting words into Danny's mouth ...hehe
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    Aletheia

    Haha! Thanks Drew! After reading some neat short stories in answer to prompts I was perusing the prompt section and found this with no stories, poor thing, so I thought I'd give it a go.
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    Aletheia

    It was silly actually. Just a spur of the moment thing. In reality I was only on the ESP website to research some details for a pretty insignificant part of a story I was writing. But as a rule, I don’t like to get caught with any factual errors. It was a weird little announcement too, in a purple box: We’d like to get an idea of the number of those truly interested in this subject, so we’re running a little contest. We asked a passer-by to think of a number between 1 and 1,000 and to write it
  12. My responses to various prompts
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    Entry 4

    A good chapter MrM! I know we're all dying to have this story start to intersect with Billy's, but as you continue to write, it's more obvious that we need Brandon fleshed out. It's really one of the small weaknesses of "Billy" where Brandon is sort of two dimensional, for someone so obviously all-important in Billy's life. Good job ...and I'm anticipating Ch. 5!
  14. After our run and shower, it was shirt and tie time. Coach always insists the team dress on XCountry race days. I decided on a black shirt and red tie. It looked sharp! During our walk to school Twoey seemed to be walking closer to Danny than to me. Thank goodness! Maybe he wanted to join gymnastics! HA ...that would piss off the wrestlers! Terri was all smiles in Math. I guessed the feud with Ron must be over. So I was able to spend some minutes at Kathy's desk until I heard Elcher clear his t
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    Sanctuary

    Sanctuary or Sanctuaries? Either one, a great chapter CG! Of course, I'm always grateful for more Benny But the two non-J&M couples are moving together so nicely, each with one over-thinker ...hehe. I know you claimed not to plan ahead, but there's a parallel, at this moment, which was made more striking by occurring in one beautiful chapter. Thanks for giving this to us CG!!
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    Chapter 21

    This is heartbreaking Comsie. Because it's got so much truth in it. The breakdown was written so well It's all so well done ...but I refuse to admit that! Please give us a happy ending!
  17. writing a review is sort of like being an author in a way you can delve into the psyche of the characters you can speculate about future arcs of the story you really have all this creative potential in front of you. similarly, when responding to reviews I try to get into the head of the reviewer assuage their concerns or heighten them hint at what might be approaching re their comments always appearing grateful ...because I am!! I enjoy this topic because I'm learning so much!
  18. Thanks Lisa. I agree about Sam and think I need to flesh him out a little more because ... well, I can't tell you
  19. Thanks for the nice review Lisa! Yeah, I think our David might be misreading the Kathy thing. Could cause him some problems.
  20. Thanks Defiance! All great points. You know, you've always been a big supporter of David, and he appreciates that. Maybe you can help him pull his head out of his ...well, he's gonna need support, I think!
  21. Good points Parker, and thanks for the comments! A lot of stuff seems to be outside David's experience, hehe. As for the deus ex machina, well yes ...but then there is that nasty law of unintended consequences
  22. Thanks CG! Yeah, I agree with some of your points here and wonder if maybe he would have handled the Kathy thing differently were he not feeling swamped by these other things going on. It'll be interesting to see if he manages to divide and conquer his emotional problems, or if ...ugh I don't even want to think about how bad it could get for him!
  23. A great story and it leaves the reader trying to put a label on Jason. It's perfect as it is. I sorta disagree with Zarek & Puppilull though. Don't you dare add to it!
  24. Yep, can't wait to see JP in action again! After all, it might be the last time he gets to play like that.
  25. “Tell me a little about Danny. You know, what he's into besides gymnastics, family, brothers, sisters, what group of kids does he hang with ...I mean I never see him around school except at lunch.” Twoey was chattering with us on our run. “Danny's father is some military officer. Army. David and I only met him once, a couple years ago when we were at Danny's house and his dad came home unexpectedly. He wasn't happy we were there; he let us know, and we've never been back. Danny has an older bro
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