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    Thanks for the great review Defiance! I'm glad you mentioned the POVs. Originally I was going to do this the traditional way of having them each carry a part of the story. Early on I realized this way is much better, for exactly the reason you stated. Also, so much of their lives is not with each other, it's easier for the reader to suss what's going on. However we have to be careful to realize one boy has no idea what the other one is doing. As a reader, that's sometimes easy to forget.
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    You don't have enough time for me to answer the first of today's questions, but as for the second, naked in church shouldn't make a difference to any God who created you naked. It would make a difference to people. Which means the 'truth' would vary from peoples to peoples. The Romans probably would't have cared, at least during the republic.
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    Oh ...great little story W_L!! This isn't the genre I usually appreciate, but the story transcended that a bit, and it is October. I even changed my thumbnail ...haha Whether you continue the story or not is up to you. This single chapter was perfect, as far as I'm concerned, but it does have the potential of lots more complexity in the relationships. Thanks for sharing with us!
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    Thanks for the review CG! Aw ...c'mon, Twoey's only 15 and under uber pressure from the leader of this group he's trying to be in. As adults we, of course, can see all the outcomes, but the kid's just winging it in a town he knows nothing about. 15 yos make some really bad choices. How they learn from them and emerge is the real test. There's 100 chapters to go!! With David, I'm more curious about this sudden church angle. Is it paranoia or is something going on that he's been suspicious of in previous chapters? Maybe Kathy's not his issue
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    Haha ...yes it does seem that way, unless she doesn't want him wearing brown with her purple You're right about David and analysis. He doesn't seem to know what's affecting him so greatly. But give him some credit, at least he knows something's wrong. That's pretty significant for a 15yo IMHO.
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    Church

    skinnydragon commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Church

    Thank you Parker, for giving us a little hope! So the lifeguard is the other part of "us" from the beginning of the story. It seems their paths will soon cross, unless LG isn't in the same town where Stefan is eating and recovering. A very good description of rural roads and lanes! I've had a few similar experiences of a road I thought was going somewhere suddenly being gone ...haha. The one thing in the back of my head is that Stefan needs some medical attention pretty soon. Those hidden injuries could prove fatal. Great chapter Parker!
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    I shared the anxious feelings with my friend. During the run this morning I complained about Kathy getting hot for us to go to the Homecoming Dance. Gary blew me off! With barely a glance at me, Gary said, “Hey Twoey, you get a date yet for the dance?” I guess my best friend is more interested in finding out who this secret girl is than his best friend being shanghaied! Twoey said he hadn't thought about it yet. Gary jumped all over him saying hurry up and get a date. I was too pissed-off to
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    Advice

    skinnydragon commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Advice

    Thanks AC for all your enthusiasm about these guys! Ian needs to blossom, and I've got this sneaking suspicion that he may be ready. Are we?
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    Advice

    skinnydragon commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Advice

    Thanks Defiance! You bet everyone needs a Shawn ...haha! Maybe this time Ian moves on ...we can only hope.
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    Advice

    skinnydragon commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Advice

    Thanks for the review CG! Yes it seems Ian is finally trying to move on if he recognizes his fears keep Markey in control. Clearly, this has taken him a long time!
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    Advice

    skinnydragon commented on skinnydragon's story chapter in Advice

    Haha ...that's for sure! Somehow I get the impression this isn't the first time, either. Thanks for the comments Parker!
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    Advice

    skinnydragon posted new chapter in Vignettes

    Shawn is my best friend, not counting Miles of course. We met on our first day at college. He warned me about Markey. Advice I too blithely ignored. He rescued me after the catastrophe. I always seek advice from him now. Shawn is my best friend. “Love, you can’t continue on like this! I know what a troubled relationship looks like. Listen carefully Ian: yours is not one of them! God couldn’t build a boy more in love with you than Miles! Honey, you simply need to stop interpreting each hiccup as
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    Eric

    skinnydragon commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Eric

    Probably the best thing he got was experiencing someone praising him. Having the surrogate mother and the love she showed was good, but Stefan knew she was a tad past understanding. No, the praise I think might be better for him with his future human contact. Walk over the mountain?? Poor Stefan. Looking forward, as always, Parker! A great story!
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    Hey shamayne thanks for the review! You're 100% right, but Twoey really has no experience so I guess we ought to cut him a little slack. The irony is he's living with someone who could straighten him out!
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    Hey CG, thanks for the review and great comments! Twoey seems impetuous but forgiving. After Mike, it's like he lets water just run off his back. (It could be the reason.) David appears to be opposite. Overthinking and unforgiving. Could be trouble for Gary in the future. How in hell are T and D ever gonna find common ground?
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    Thanks for the insightful review Defiance! It's good to see Twoey step back a bit and consider things, but he needs to have a talk with his mom, clearly. David is really starting to reel. Wait 'til the next chapter. Danny is the wild card, as I mentioned to Parker.
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    Thanks Parker for the great thoughts. Yes, Twoey seems to be starting to focus as David seems to be starting to spiral. What will ever bring them together? It's beginning to look like Twoey is just a sex toy for Matty and Erik. I hope not. Danny is the wild card in everything.
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    David is sort of static right now. He's really got no where to go. David's in more than one situation where he's beginning to believe other forces are conspiring against him. Monday 9/22 will reinforce something to him which, up to this moment, we suspect as only paranoia. Parker is correct about a panorama of possibilities.
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    Walk Away

    skinnydragon commented on Parker Owens's story chapter in Walk Away

    Good Chapter Parker! And not just because dad is dead. Your description of the day through Stefan's eyes was believable and the wisps of rumors together with the locker scene he observed let us grasp what a third person narrative would normally have provided. Excellent and interesting. This story is very compelling, Can't wait for more!
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    Twoey didn't run with us this morning. He texted Gary yesterday saying he had something to do. Strange, what do you have to do at seven on a Sunday morning? Well anyway, Gary said he couldn't wait for me to get back in school cuz it sucked without me there. Haha ...I guess we've been together for too long. Whenever one of us is missing the other one doesn't feel complete. “So how was the date last night?” “Weird. She thinks I’m her boyfriend.” “Duh! You are her boyfriend. You take her on date
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    Sean's a snake. Even Ariel can see it. It would have been even cuter if it was Ariel who splashed the chocolate on Sean's shirt!
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    Interesting Chapter Gary, in the good way! Nate almost seems to be carving out his desired future for himself, and in just one day! Whatever the Mark & Megan show decides, I think Nate is in Ontario, at least for the next semester. And then if he ends up with Kendall & Mike & Bodie , of course, he'll be there when the baby arrives. That would be interesting. Either way, the guys are gonna be seeing a lot of Nate, I think. They both, especially Kendall, have handled Nate very carefully, I think. It really couldn't have turned out better for the kid, considering how it was in Edmonton a few days ago. We seem to have some interesting twists and turns ahead! Can't wait! Oh yes, and a wedding to plan too!
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    Oh wow Dodger, Somehow I hadn't expected Tom and Robbie had gone this far! That certainly explains the depth of Robbie's separation depression. It also puts into question Tom's orientation, which can cause Robbie problems either way. It makes their relationship's future a bit more dicey. Tom could decide to stay straight, get a gf and that would cause Robbie a problem. If Tom decided to stay gay, and gets a bf, then that causes Robbie a larger problem, I think. I can't see both of them staying single until 18 waiting for the if-come of Robbie's return. By the way, a well written and very entertaining chapter, especially the whole shed scene and aftermath and 'cocktail'
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    RUN Stefan RUN!!! Well written Parker. You could feel everything S. was enduring, unfortunately. Now get him the F**K out of there!
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    Thanks for the great perspective, Defiance! Sorry it was so long, but Ch20 was a watershed moment for each boy. Their paths are now firmly established (until the next one) and I'm sure we'll see some regrouping ahead.
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