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  1. skinnydragon

    Crisis

    Thanks Defiance! I think it'll work.
  2. skinnydragon

    Crisis

    Thanks AC, especially from someone who knows how to write! I don't understand how, but a bunch of these little scenes came tumbling into my mind. I was going to begin a new story, but determined it might be cuter to let the stand-alone scenes define the characters.
  3. skinnydragon

    Crisis

    It was worse for Ian. He was new at relationships. Ian believed a disagreement predicted trouble ahead. This had been an actual argument! He knew it was finished ...over! He had raised his voice to Miles! Why had he slapped the table? Why had he walked out to find himself here at the corner store buying a pack of cigarettes? He gave up smokes two years ago for gosh sakes! His New Life Resolution as he graduated college. I’d better start looking for a place to live, he sadly concluded, exhaling
  4. skinnydragon

    Vignettes

    Some flash-fiction. A series of brief episodes, captured for your enjoyment.
  5. skinnydragon

    Chapter 1

    That was great! a perfect little story. A wonderful perspective. (You're not part Lab?)
  6. Thanks Lisa. Tommy seems to have all the streets smarts between the two brothers, doesn't he. And you're right, Twoey and David seem to be able to hit it off well. I wonder if Tommy agrees ...haha
  7. skinnydragon

    Chapter 16

    A Good and Interesting chapter, Mark! It shuffled the players a bit and concentrated on the family. In a way, the war with ED had distracted us from this. I'm worried about JP though ...unless he's in there hatching a plot, but I'm worrying.
  8. OMG CG, not at all!. I never meant to imply that sex didn't belong in anyone else's story. In fact, there's plenty of sex in my story and more yet to come. What I meant to say and probably didn't achieve too well, was that this story has lighter feel (to me, the author) and while the sex is there, stopping the flow to absorb a detailed scene would impede the forward momentum that even I felt as the story was being written. Haha ...even that description was pretty clumsy, no?
  9. Thanks Defiance for a really nice review and (blush) that last comment. Danny I'll even overlook your harshness with poor David - after all, he doesn't know the rules for the situation he's in
  10. Thanks for your insightful comments CG! Yep, I'm starting to get worried about Danny myself. You've never been in poor David's corner
  11. Thanks for the review Parker! Yes, Danny and Twoey do sort of connect. First time we've noticed any 'love' anywhere in this story, I think.
  12. “I'm going to Syracuse today with Tommy and his mother to do some shopping. Gonna take your advice Gary and get better clothes to look good for the girls.” “When are you getting back?” “I'm not sure, but it'll be in plenty of time. I'll call you and we can finalize our plans for tonight.” Gary turned to Twoey. “How about you? You want to hang today?” “Nah ...sorry Gary. I've got some shit I have to do.” Gary and I quickly shared a glance--it’s all we ever had to do--and figured he was gonna
  13. A great chapter Dodger! Oh wow, this does put Tom in a slightly different light, doesn't it? That'll put a new spin on the relationship as Robbie continues in Canada. I can't wait for more!!
  14. Thanks for reviewing Lisa! It seems Twoey is moving David to the untouchable shelf, doesn't it. Makes me wonder if they'll ever get together, in that way. Oh well, lots of chapters left. Hey, you're catching up!
  15. Thanks for the review (and correction) Lisa! Yeah, I guess that's the only thing David is consistent with, making a plan ...haha Thanks for the comments about the dialogue tags. Sometimes I try to write as fast as I imagine the kids talking and then need to go back to clean it up. Missed some stuff trying to get this 'to press'. Probably should have someone cleaning up behind me (that doesn't sound good). I promise to do better.
  16. Thanks for the review Lisa! Yeah, it seems there aren't any gay couples around these guys. of course they're only sophomores. Maybe Twoey will be the one who forces a more stable relationship somewhere. SD or Skinny is fine with me, as they say ...just don't call me late for dinner.
  17. skinnydragon

    Chapter 1

    Very good W_L! It was darker than I thought it would be when I began And then ended lighter than I thought it would when I finished So, well done at screwing up our emotions ...haha
  18. skinnydragon

    Chapter 1

    Ich liebte diese Gedichte !! Aber die Übersetzungen waren schrecklich Gebt uns mehr, bitte!!!
  19. I'm not sure this topic is needed. It might sit empty. But the story is about 10% posted and a majority of the characters are present, so if anyone wants to discuss what's going on, this might be a place. DavidDragon [sharedmedia=stories:stories:4898]
  20. skinnydragon

    Aletheia

    Thanks for that Puppilull! Yep, Joel showed a lot of wisdom closing that book.
  21. skinnydragon

    Aletheia

    Ha! Thanks CG! I don't think I've ever been called innocently annoying ...nope never!
  22. Thanks for the in depth comments Lisa! I really appreciate that. Yes, David feels the pressure from his mom, but it only gets worse. Yes, Gary is wrong wrong wrong, but it only gets worse. And yes Erik seems nice, but it only gets worse. Whew! Luckily we have a long way to go
  23. skinnydragon

    Aletheia

    Haha... yeah Coastguard, sorry, if you want more to this story you're gonna have to write it. Wait, you just did!! Thanks for the nifty review!
  24. skinnydragon

    Aletheia

    Aw thanks Defiance! After staring at 122 chapters of Twoey, it was fun to write something this compact!
  25. Thanks for the review Defiance, and David thanks you for the congrats. Do you really think Twoey can resist Delicious Danny, whom he has drooled over since day ONE??
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