SolarMaxx

WOW! This is beautiful, but it's so melancholy it hurts to read it. I'm hoping this dosen't reflect your current state of mind. If it does, I hope things get better for you really soon. I've felt like this before in my life -- so I think I get it!

I don't know why I waited so long to tell you that I really love this story. I almost never read unfinished stories, so I'm really hoping that you'll finish this one. Your characters are great and you're creating a very engaging plot. Great work! PS. Hope it dosen't end too soon

I broke my steadfast rule of "not reading any more unfinished stories" when I started reading your's. I'm not sure why I started! One of my GA buddies recommended it, and I think I'm drawn to longer stories anyhow. I have to say, your's a sensitive and beautifully written odyssey through the adolescent mind. Your characters are interesting and three-dimensional, and the plot line is definitely a roller coaster -- just the way I like em!

Great chapter Ace! It was really nice to see Jamie and Eli get some intimate time together -- and probably appropriate that they chose the back seat of a car for their first time. And thank you for not making me read through a dozen paragraphs of gross detail. I get how gay sex works, and I was kind of relieved to skip the anatomy lesson, hahaha! I know, I know! I'm probably in the minority on that one. Love the story! Keep up the great work! And welcome back

I really like the way the relationship between Jamie and Eli is developing. But Eli is starting to seem a little bit like a prude, or even worse a tease. No wonder Jamie is so torqued up! But it's very cool that Jamie's father is coping so well with the boys new relationship! I wish every father loved his child enough to be that understanding ...

Great chapter! I guess sometimes you have to risk getting into a bit of trouble in order to do the right thing. I think the football player should have been suspended too.

I really love the characters in this story; the way they support each other and interact with their environment. What an amazing bar! I wish we had one like it around here! Great writing -- I look forward to every new chapter, and I will really hate to see this story end.

I personally love the idea of a chapter told from Eli's perspective.

I have to admit; this is the most callus "first-person" narrative I've read since someone gave me the book "The Ice man!" And although it's sort of unsettling for me to personally admit, I can actually understand Jamie's cold-hearted objectivity and drive to be the best at any cost. I really hope his better half, and basic humanity will prevail in the end.

I almost forgot how much being a teen can be like driving in a frenzied race -- heart beating like crazy; just barely in control; and never really knowing exactly what's going to happen next! With every split-second-decision poses unforeseen consequences around every turn -- to yourself and to others -- both terrifying and exhilarating at the same time. I really loved my teen years, even though they definitely weren't as exciting as Jamie's. For all its intensity, I'm not sure I would ever want to repeat my adolescents. Once was enough and I'm happy I survived, hahaha! I hope Jamie is as lucky!

Jamie is definitely facing the classic "success dilemma" success at what price? Seems like a defining moment in his character development. Even though he's making reckless choices, I still get the feeling that he'll find his better side over time, and eventually and take the higher road in his life.

The plot thickens -- and I really like the direction the story is taking. -- Maxx

This story keeps getting better! I love the way the characters relate to each other, and you're doing a really nice job of making them more three dimensional. I can relate personally with Jamie, partly because I lost my own mother to cancer last year. But also because I kept my own bisexuality a secret at his age, and I was often afraid that someone's gaydar are would out me. Nobody ever did though! There's a lot of terrific plot-possibilities here. What a great start! Thanks for posting.

WOW! Great first chapter -- and a really great story setup! I like your characters, and especially the setting. Can't wait to see what happens next! Thanks for posting this.

Happy Birthday Krista!

Hahaha -- there is no escape!

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Welcome Alberto -- some of the best people I've ever had contact with are here. Best of luck.

I've actually had weird dreams like the one you described so eerily in this chapter! The use of a party-house with windows but no doors is an inspired device! I could feel Billy's pain as he watched Brandon effortlessly enjoying life without him! I think the spiraling pain of sensing that someone you love is slipping away must be primal! It's definitely universal -- and the experience was sensitively portrayed! It actually chafed a few tender spots of my own! Billy is certainly paying a steep emotional price for his infidelity. Reality is a sometimes cruel, but always forceful teacher -- and I continue to hope that, having learned some important life-lessons, both Billy and Brandon can find a way to rekindled the passions and intimate trust they once shared. I've often wondered if I could forgive cheating -- hope I never have to find out!

Happy 21st Birthday William!

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Doesn't seem like smut at all -- it's beautifully expressed. Stop ironing out wrinkles Ashi, it's wonderful just the way it is. You should write more!

Not having an obscenely torrid sexual encounter with a really hot guy at least once in my life! I've only dated women, and I've have been lucky enough to have had some amazing girlfriends -- but I can't help but sometimes wonder what it would be like to explore the other side of my sexuality! If you could choose a sexual superpower, what would it be?

That's a cute kid -- I hope someone is looking out for him before he ends up swimming with sharks!