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Sounds like the shamans so far gathered the bait. And our merry band is the prey....

What a great start! This story is already helping me with Ryder withdrawal symptoms!

Hmmm, until now tattooing the names of loved ones I considered to be on the other side of corny. And don’t ask me about the nmber of guys I’ve met, embarrased by those feminders of some ex or the other (yeah, some even had two names and “forever”, “endless love” and the likes inked. But then WE know, our heroes would NEVER split. Ever. The southern Cross is a nice touch though.....and a ringed aussie is a very nice visual.....

I want a detailed report in slow motion of how I he Turners go down. Their deals and dealings meticulously dissected, their world crumbling, see them frantically clutching for straws....losing all. It’ll be cathartic to watch for many of us. Of that I’m sure!

Our vests share some sentiments then....

I was pretty sure she would have been! Were I to live in the states, most likely I’d get me a hefty handwarmer too. And being pasty white, I might even survive routine police traffic stops. Just last week I got my hunting and thus also gun license renewed. - which only allows for rifles, but not for semi automatics. But hey, what more does a hunter need? Guys like our young fellows are not the problem anyway! Lola is ok! I just don’t want CJs pretty face scratched in case of a spill on the road....even though I know the thrill and the liberating feeling of riding without firm cover.

Owen is such a sweet and SENSIBLE guy! I can relate to a few of his ideas...guns, helmets, bikes - but then, you knew all that! I wonder why there si no interest in the new 2018 HD BREAKOUT? If I were looking for a new HD this season I'd definitely give that one a serious trial run! Oh, and when the guys come to the UK I might run into them on one of my old iron horses. I'd recommend a tour to the welsh mountains via the Cotswolds.....seriously. Bike country big time! ...."There’s a food truck selling breaded, deep-fried pickles stuffed with a hot dog. I had one Saturday and they were awesome!".... I don't want no pickle - I wanna ride my motor sickle! https://www.google.com/url?sa=t&rct=j&q=&esrc=s&source=web&cd=1&cad=rja&uact=8&ved=0ahUKEwiEp7Xb56jbAhWDdCwKHe0oD1sQyCkILzAA&url=https%3A%2F%2Fwww.youtube.com%2Fwatch%3Fv%3DBvLtNBm1yyA&usg=AOvVaw3FFdQHAJUhY-3eY7ffj_7d

...and then there's the patch reading: If I wanted a bitch I'd get a dog....

A nice messenger does not make a message true or right....that being said, I'm all for father Chance and all the faithful that adhere to humanity, humility, charity, compassion and empathy, as any decent human being should! I respect all that strive to make the world abetter place by trying constantly to improve themselves, and the lot of all those their ever widening circles. Nice chapter setting the tone for the wedding. I always keep my fingers crossed for Brad to return in good physical and mental health. Let the Heroes' Haven episode here not be be of dark foreboding....

....´. There was no internment planned; Juan was to be cremated...´ Thou shalst not foist internment upon the deceased! An interment would be so much more fitting! *endofwisecracking*

Oh yeah? I’ll be happy to offer design suggestions! I’ll even hold their hands in the tattoo parlor! 😜

...and I guess the kit had challenging cymbals rather than symbols.... darn spellchecker, eh?

But a very special and thoughtful gift, even if just imaginary! I guess today I’ll just have another birthday without something as personal and beautiful..... *wallowinginselfpity*

And wouldn’t I like to see those gorgeous saddlebags! Should take up leather tooling myself!

For my taste a bit overly dramatic. teddy in this chapter as much irrational and over the top as Ryder was in the last one. But hey, for a dramatic twist of the plot.....

WOW

Just for the record, there’s NO temperature BELOW absolute zero.. or else it wouldn’t be absolute. But I understood the sentiment.I vividly remember taking two floridian teenagers to see their first snow. It was a hoot. But I had them outfitted for the cold in time. The reverse happened to me when I first traveled to Alaska, expecting some forty below - which incidentally is the same in C and F scales, onl to find out it was warmer there than in the much further southern place where I boarded my plane. Had to take two layers off! I got my forty below experience a bit later on in a windy night in an outhouse in the wilderness....but the northern lights made up for the shrinkage! And yes, fur and feathers work like a charm in the cold! For a blanket I’d recommend rabbit....

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First, English ist NOT my first language. I've been reading english for fun and relaxation since my school days. In my professional life a lot of literature also is in English. I work with lots of people from different nationalities, English being the common language, be my opposites native speakers or not. In a story cannot discern by dialect where a character is from. Sure there are trigger words that would indicate GB, AUS, US origins, but that's it. That said, I seem to get a different feel from Canadian, AUS-NZ, GB or US stories. At times I want something aussie for example. I wish I could search stories by nationalities of their authors. What I skip are lengthy sex scenes. I have read plenty from smut to high literature, done it all myself, so there is rarely now a description that can hold my interest. In particular NOT with fancy/silly/flowery... words for the involved anatomical parts. Unless specific acrobatics or kink are involved it's the same old anyway. So rather describe specific emotions/feelings involved, that are new and move the character and story along. Just recently I read a spin-off story of a few chapters - and at the end asked myself why? I even got the feel the author himself l did not know where to go with it. A few chapters of repetitive, over descriptive declarations of undying love and an endless over the top loving fuckfest.... skip it. Poor grammar. as others have stated here before, an error riddled story description is a sure harbinger of a poor story. It is so easy to have the mere spelling checked - if the author cannot be bothered to have that done by his software, how much attention then will be awarded to coherence, flow of story, character development and the like? Also, the quite common mistakes of homophones (waste-waist, there-their-they're, its-it's...) are quite annoying. Are you guys dictating without checking? Some overused tropes/plots. The orphan. parents died in car/plane crash. Sudden vast fortune. Teenagers wise beyond years, with the business acumen of Soros/Buffet dimensions, accumulating millions and doing good deeds shaming every charity and NGO before they even reach twenty.... Preaching. I stopped reading the stories of at least one author here, because the constant praise of the superior qualities of the catholic faith in all his stories became to much...(nothing to do with catholicism in particular, but don't get me started on the topic) Detailed body descriptions. I do not care about the character's color of hair or eyes, I don't give a whatever about their size - unless it's some extreme and important for the story. Just mention these facts eventually, if they are important to YOU. But don't expect a reader (even if it's just me here) to fall in love with your hero because he happens to be 5'11" - and not 6'. Inconsistencies in a character or in the storyline. Changing/confusing names of characters In fantasy - stick to commonly "known" and agreed upon features of various creatures. E.g. vampires DO NOT breath fire; werewolves in human form do not howl, nor do they do magic.... If in doubt - ask! There is so much talent here, so many pages of faq, forums, blogs.....get beta readers, if you cannot find an editor. And PLEASE, just read your story/chapter after a good night's sleep - before posting!

Sphincterman, really? LMFAO.....

One gotta support altNPS these days! altnps.org right?

Thanks for the cameo! I so want to ride there now! Of course I had to search for pictures of moss laden trees, forming tunnels of shade....

Oh Wesley, ain't that grand, that you were able to already have a fave character out of the multitude of......two people? ;-p But yes, I concur, an awesome chapter setting now the scene after that ghastly preamble. The room comes live in my imagination. Makes me want to re-decorate here! Merry solstice to all!

Did I laugh when the guys drove home at processional speed! Typical overprotective young parents.... Whatever end Ann will meet, she'll end up as one of those white, shimmering wraiths haunting New England coastal captain's houses....

...and Khan ever the perceptive one!