Scary

This sounds so beautiful it can't be for long. I have a constant feeling of fear that something horrible happens to get Max back to his old, silent self.

Is it possible we're missing a chapter? You didn't post one last week and I have no idea who the two guys are that helped them get out of the hole.

Aye this is really captivating. Your style is really smooth to read, continue like that!

So I see many possible ways for this to go, which makes it really interesting. I hope that you don't let us wait for too long till the next chapter appears.

A great story, I read it all in one afternoon. And I'll be there when part II comes around. Also I will soon have a look in your other free stories here on GA. :3

Yep, I like this one, too. I hope you get the first chapter up again, as it is not available to me at the moment. Also I wonder how Malachi is pronounced, is it like Malakee or Malatshee?

Well, this Story got less and less funny and more and more serious with every chapter since that camping trip. But you already had all the characters well established, so the tension filled second half was mesmerizing as well. Lord am I glad that I could read it all in one session, not having to care about school the next day or, even worse, lazy authors. ;P So it took me about 5hours to read through this? Actually not quite that much time after all. Anywas I enjoyed it a lot, I am sorry I did already reach the max number of likes to give today.^^ But I will keep an eye on your future stories from now on!

Well there were some hints to Connor being the masked guy, but when he called Toby and showed up at his room a minute later I thought it impossible. Guess he used his mobile then.^^

Wowowow. Hold on. So Connor IS gay? I had my suspicions and was almost at the point to declare them in a review, but then he came up with the story about his brother. He actually convinced me (maybe because I read something very similar to that in another story on GA: The Saturday Boy). Now this becomes even more interesting. I am shipping Coby for the moment. And for that masked stranger: I don't know who you are, but you are creepy and scary as f*k and please stay away from Toby!

Mysterious, mysterious.

While being a good chapter this kind of breaks the story. This is becoming heavy stuff. Though I don't think that's a bad thing.

Lol this was funny to read! I don't know how, but you manage to find the perfect middle between drama and reality, thus creating a light hearted comedy that just captivates me. The dinner scene became just so cinematic to me,incredible.

I often have the feeling that the scene feels unrealistic and just not right when a teen comes out to his parents in the stories I read on GA. Not so here, I think this is one of the best described coming outs I have ever read. Well done!

Oh man this is extraordinary! "I didn't know what to say so I did what I do best. I kissed him." I BELIEVED YOU and freaked out, until I got myself together, read the next sentence and thought "You got me there! " Oh man let's see how many hours it takes me to read through the whole story. I have nothing scheduled for tomorrow. ;D

Sounds interesting, I was surprised by the good writing considering your age and that it is your first story here. So far nothing really that I could complain about. Let's see what the next chapter will hold.

Nicely and realistically written! I stumpled across a few typos lose Ben saying "Thank you for getting be out of there" when he enters Blake's car or you writing "Take me Church" when it is mentioned. The quality of the writing though exceeds the one of the first chapter. And to come back to the "smut" topic: Don't be afraid to post pornographic scenes, many stories on GA include them. If you don't want your story to contain any depiction of sex, that is fine, but if you originally wrote this story because of such, then I suppose it'd be right to include it. Just keep the balance, preferably on the side of non-sex scenes. ^^

A great story so far! It is unusual for a story to be written in present tense and when Blake talks about his coming out to Chris there are slight shifts in time that don't seem to fit (like writing in the present when you are still talking about what happened prior to the present of your story). But especially the ending scene got me hooked, so I am waiting for the next chapter to be able to be posted as much as you are. I just hope the story doesn't get all about the "smut" after reading your comments, as the relationship around it is what I like most about the stories on GA. Anyways, thanks for your contribution to my daily life through this story I will now be able to read from time to time.

Looks like Will's parents are up to something big, like maybe selling him?

That's your first story you tell me? You are pretty damn talented then I'd say! The conversation in the end sounded a bit too smooth, the rest of the chapter created an image of their characters that lead me to believe they'd act more shy about their sexuality instead of being able to give smartass answers on every comment the other would make. But overall this is really good.

It is nice to have you catch up on the story lines that were left out in the last few chapters, like Elia and Nynx, though I am kind of sad that we most likely won't see Elia again. Funnily, her death hurt me more than Carlos' back then. What I don't like is the last part of the conversation between Shay and Ayize, they are only seeing the bright side of having the power of a god, not the danger in it. I don't think that it suits Shay to not even worry about it probably corrupting him to have too much power. I missed that train of thoughts there. Also this was like a relapse for me, I was almost okay with not getting new chapters from you and now I can't WAIT for the next one. This world you created is just to fascinating. Please be quick on the next one. <3

Probably shouldn't have listened to sad music while reading this, now I am in kind of a bad mood. Really moving story, it has quality!

Nice turn of events, nice writing, though you are shifting nanarrators which seems a little unprofessional. So is thia gonna be the last chapter? I think the story could very well be completed with this, but you couls also prolong it and show us how it all goes from there. Anyways, I am looking forward to read more from you as an author.

Ehm are they sure they are not gay? ^^ Kinda sad then. Anyways, nice writing style!

I have to say that was no surprise at all for me. With all the hints you left before I was practically convinced already that Carlin is a very high Tomacian noble (like eg a prince) that is there to sabotage something. But noe I am curious how Alex will react, I suppose he will try to make the best out if it and not denounce Carlin.

This is so amazingly cute, I could feel the emotion! The chapter ended way too soon, can't wait to read the next one.