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The ending! How can you do that to me? Now I need more!

What a chapter! It is ethically questionable whether it is okay to let Luca stab two guards so he would survive, but as you have chosen Luca to be one of the main protagonists I guess ithad to be done.^^ Looking forward to the next chapter.

There are some leftover notes from your editor that you apparently did not take into account, too. You should fix that. Besides that, nice chapter. Your story really isn't realistic even in a fantasy genre, but it's funny.

It had to happen eventually. I am glad Luca is free now, I am sure he will somehow make it to safety. I am also curious about potential new characters to support Alex, the last few chapters have been a little low on action even though I like your descriptions of fighting scenes. I hope to see more of that, maybe in conjunction with the introduction of new characters. Let's see how the story moves on from here.

Nice chapter, though the beginning was a little too stretched out. It was obvious that Josh was dreaming, so I got annoyed cause I thought "yeah it isn't happening anyways so why do you make it so long? I wanna know what happens next in the real story!". Other than that, I enjoyed it a great deal. I hope you'll write a bit faster for the next one. ;P :3

Thanks for the good chapter! You probably pamper us way to much with the frequency of the chapters anyway so I don't see any complains coming. Go take your time for the cute guy, I hope it's going to work out.

Heartwarming. You create a world that consists of horror and injustice and then make my heart melt by a little bit of romance. ^.^

Nice chapter, just the end is a little bit confusing. Will pays Teddy's dad, right? Then why does it say "“Good, good,” he said when he handed them over," that sounds like Will gets paid. Could you clarify that?

Your writing speed is enormous! I enjoy having 1-2 chapters to read per day and for some reason their quality doesn't suffer from that at all, they are still amazing!

All the way through the chapter I thought "So Carlin is straight which means Alex has no chance with him. Maybe Lucas then?" But then that ending scene made it all possible again... As always, great work!

Luca is cute, please keep him! Also really well written, I absolutely enjoyed the tension and the fight in this chapter!

I have to agree with faxity in every point, especially the "I can't wait for more!" part. This is quickly becoming addictive.

A cute chapter, I did not expect that from this story. Makes it all the more intriguing!

I wonder for how long the chapters will come this frequently, but as long as it lasts, I'll like it! That was a tension rich chapter, keep going!

In the beginning you tell a lot of general information about the world this takes place in. While that might be useful to get a good perspective on the story, it is also a lot to keep in mind while not being that interesting just yet. Makes it more difficult to read through. But as soon as the real story started you pulled me into it, I find the main theme really intriguing. The main protagonist's look isn't exactly my taste (which is sad, I like the characters to be attractive) but I am interested in his future nonetheless! Keep going please.

You are really playing with my mind. Come on, move ahead in the story, I can't stand that tension concerning Ethan and Josh much longer. Of course, a nice chapter btw.

Just something I want to mention: "Imagining old naked grandmas helped a lot." That sentence made my day! You know, I thought of that strategy too once, but the image in my head would be so disgusting I'd rather risk others notice my boner instead.

So saaaaad! Reading about bullying always makes me angry. But you've got me hooked. I like the protagonist and can relate to him and there are problems that have to be dealt with, which creates tension right away. I'd say "A perfect first chapter".

Very nice chapter. It creates a good feeling to read it. But we'll need some real enemies soon to get some tension, like with the first mate earlier.

Okey, you got me hooked again. Now stay up with the writing!

I just discovered this story because you updated it and I like it a lot! I hope for frequent updates in the future!

Nice chapter. But as some very important things happened and Konstantin's storyline was pursued, I am eager to hear about the others. Give me a new chapter please, maybe as a christmas present?

The speech that the coach held was really moving. More people than just your relatively little readerchip should hear those exact words. I am sure it would help. Unlike the situation in the detention group that I kinda complained about earlier, I wouldn't be surprised this time if all those jerks were convinced by that speech. You wrote something valuable there!

Ofcourse your story covers an extreme situation, which makes judging peoples actions difficult, but I can't hold it amymore. How fucked up are Andy's and Matts' parents? They react pretty well to the stuff they get to know in the chapter, but overall they seem to have the wrong image of teenagers. They want to know why their sons did never tell them they had sex, well I can answer that question. BECAUSE IT'S EMBARASSING. I like the thought's on psychology in these books. But I don't understand why none of the characters just comed out and tells those hypercurious that sex is nothing you wanna talk about with your parents. If they want honest answers, they should ask more subtle questions. If they are suspisious , they should just convince their children not to have sex in a general discussion, instead of trying to make them admit their sexual activities. (Just my POV as I am a teenager myself.) Still a great story though, it surely has a lot of tension to it!

I liked the discussion. But even though tge empathy might be realistic for most of the boys, I think it went too well. Some people just can not back up and even when they realize that they are propably wrong, they won't change their opion. The bullies acted like they were one of that kind, so it really suprised me to see them empathising in the end. That did just not fit. All in all still a reasonable discussion of the "homophobic" topic and the motives behind it.