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A good resolution showing growth for both Corey and Jason. Another thank you for this enjoyable story. I am anxious to see how you wrap it up in the epilogue. Jeff
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OMG! You have really upped the stakes on the tension level. And then a cliffhanger?! You'll have us all on pins and needles until the next post. This just gets better and better! Thanks. And I hope your surgery goes well. Looking forward to the next installment. Jeff
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One more time I'll say it. Good story. Good characters. Moving forward in mostly good ways. Love Emmett's family. Based on an earlier response to one of my comments we readers will have several more chapters before there is closure. So I have to ask what roadblocks are you devising to keep these two apart. My thought is Jian's family. Hmmm. I'll try to be patient and avoid name calling, but it will be difficult.
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I am enjoying how this story is progressing. Kip is a very appealing character, and the supporting cast is terrific! Even Jon is a good villain. He and his motivation are realistic. There are jerks like him in the workplace, unfortunately. And I assume there is still time for him to mess things up. I hope you don't get tired of hearing it because I don't get tired of saying, "Thanks for a great story." Jeff
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Looks like the boys are about to turn a corner in their relationship. Maybe if they can become friends, things can go from there. I'm glad Ryder shared a bit of himself with Shawn (and us). Keep up the good writing. Jeff
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Oh you are so evil. Another cliff hanger. Saw this misunderstanding coming and wondered how you would set this up. Good job! The villain you love to hate. I am still holding out for HEA. Thanks. Jeff
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More good story. I was surprised about the women and children. Still anxious about the next group coming, but these people are OK I think. Can't wait for more. Jeff
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I am sad to see Toph's year come to an end. I really came to care for Toph and his friends due to your skillful writing. Thanks for such a good story. I will look for more of your stories to read. Jeff
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I am curious if you have experience being part of a football team? I have never understood the harshness you often see in coaching. I wasn't even close to being an athlete, but my daughter played soccer and basketball. I was always interested in the different approaches by different coaches. Your story is sucking me in. Can't wait for more. Thanks. Jeff
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I don't know a thing about football, coaches, or their families, but your first chapter rings true to me. I like Ryder and Shawn already. I expect Dad to be a hard ass, but maybe not part of the problem. Guess I'll just have to be patient. A good start. Jeff
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Emmett. Emmett. Emmett. It's time to let go. Give in. And Sasha, what's the big idea? First you have Zeke move on and then you throw up more road blocks? Tsk, Tsk. But you get big points for the rabbit in the moon story and the tiger hoodie. Was the hoodie something you've seen or something you made up? Still waiting for HEA and still excited for Christmas with Emmett's family. Love this story! Thanks. Jeff
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The muses must be tap dancing on your lap top. You have been prolific lately, and every one has been a winner as far as I'm concerned. This story was another great snapshot of a bit of time and a couple. I got to know them a bit and enjoy the moment with them. It never ceases to amaze me what you can do with a short story. Thank you. Jeff
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Your skill at writing realistic conversations is amazing. There are other authors here that do it well, but you always seem pitch perfect. Good conversations between Owen and Carlos, and between Brett and CJ. Also loved all the familial interactions. Will Lourdes ever realize all the damage she's done? It seem sad that she is so self-centered she can't see what she's done/is doing to her children. I liked the comment from Richie about CJ. It makes me think he won't influenced by his Dad or Mom in a negative way. And will you please give Olga a big hug from me. What a loving grandma. I hope I am always so caring and supportive with my family. Thanks Carlos for more good writing. Jeff
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Just read chapters one and two, and it brought back memories. My baby is 31 and it's been awhile since I've dealt with young children. My heart goes out to Alan and Peter. They're about to experience a big learning curve. Thanks for a good start to this interesting story. Jeff
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Just read chapters two and three. Now I have to be patient for more. I like the way the story is progressing, and how the characters are developing. Your writing has made me care about Dave and Jae and what's going to happen. More good writing. Thanks, Tim. Jeff
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Sound like another misunderstanding is imminent. How long does it take for HEA with these two? I like both of these guys and would like to see them really work as a couple. Thanks for this good story. Jeff
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Just found your story, and the introduction hooked me. This doesn't seem like it will be a typical dystopian society story. I like your main characters. Both are feeling pretty real already. Being a generation removed from farm life (my Dad wanted to be a city boy) I also like the farm angle. I look forward to reading more. Thanks. Jeff
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So first off: its labelled chapter one. Can we hope there will be a chapter two (maybe even three)? Your muse must be speaking, hugging, kissing, or whatever muses do. And we, your readers, are benefitting. I am really enjoying these tattoo stories. Maybe it's time for me to think about getting another one. Thanks, Sasha. Jeff
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Well knock me over with a feather. Having read many of your stories I should have seen it coming. Who would have thought Zeke would turn out to be a good guy. Guess he saw more than you were letting us see. Can't wait for Christmas. Thanks for a little bittersweet and a lot of romance. Jeff
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Nice job using an odd list of words. I liked Jacob's likes. And I know it's a short story based on prompts, but I'd enjoy visiting Jacob and Devon again sometime. Good story. Jeff
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535 - A Champion Failure
JeffreyL commented on Sasha Distan's story chapter in 535 - A Champion Failure
I tend to prefer your contemporary romance and were-creature stories over the demon ones, but this was a lot of fun! Are your gods based on "real" gods of straight out of your imagination? Good story. Nice job. Another good example 8f a short story well written. Thanks. Jeff -
Binged chapters one and two yesterday. Just finished chapter three. It feels so good to be back "hanging out" with these kids again. I think I'll be revisiting 18 Weeks to refresh my memory some. You're off to a good start. Looking forward to reading more. Thanks. Jeff
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