You could always make it so that Raymond realizes that he disrespected not only the man, but the uniform that man is proud to wear, and he apologizes. The quotation punctuation has most definitely improved.
Raymond totally approached the situation with Danny wrong. Danny is a grown ass man and Raymond had no right to treat him like that. Especially when he was in uniform. That was blatant disrespect to both the person and the uniform. I've lost a bit of respect for Raymond.
What Brett needs is good old-fashioned butt-whooping. Nothing overly dramatic. Just enough to show him, you eff up, you pay the price....and no, you weren't beat. But we've been told that disciplining our children is wrong and that we should allow them to act like little shits.
Control can only be given. As long as you're consciously aware, you still have the choice whether or not to give up control to another. Logan chose to give up the control to Tilly, who thinks she always has to be in control of what's going on. That's why she spoke before thinking when she figured that Tobyn and Kellar were mates. Subconsciously, she controlled that situation.
Logan was gobsmacked at first, then quickly regained his composure and played Tilly like Charlie Daniels does a fiddle. He totally let her take control. Nice!
It was nice that the boys got to spend some quality time together doing something Luke wanted. I wonder what Cunty's oops I mean Cindy's reaction will be when Luke isn't at the paintball party?
With Jeff being a lawyer and Paul being who he is as you've written him, neither would allow this not to be handled legally and professionally. It was self defense plain and simple. It would be way too out of character for either. Plus I don't think Joe would allow it since two chapters ago he was on his soap box going off about corruption in the public offices and then suggesting friends of these two men to possibly fill those positions.
Tim the village might be in another time but remember that when the demons use a portal they can go anywhere and any time...if I'm remembering correctly
Spikey-I got a notification that a review to Predator Prey had been left on Mar 03 so I went to read it. To quote Dr. (Professor) River Song: "Spoilers." So, I knew what was coming. Parker-Great job keeping my cavities going. More sweet stuff!!!
Thank you for the review! I wrote this for the GA newsletter grid and dice game...I was given a character, setting, and a problem...thus Ian was born. I'm thinking about maybe writing more from other character's pov
He was desperate and needed to feed...the pussy was convenient hehehe...His only plan is to get as much of Marcus as he can and maybe a brother or two...as to feeding, he'll have to find more monsters.
Nice job of progressing the story without trying to do too much all at once. I'm going to email you with some edits if you don't mind. Good Job! Looking forward to more.
Growing up, my family had over 100 acres in East Texas. I grew around guns. With proper education, guns are not dangerous. My cousin's four-year-old son knows to not aim even a fake gun at someone else. I'm surprised Joe isn't running for Mayor.