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  1. JayT

    Chapter Twelve

    You could always make it so that Raymond realizes that he disrespected not only the man, but the uniform that man is proud to wear, and he apologizes. The quotation punctuation has most definitely improved.
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    Chapter Twelve

    Raymond totally approached the situation with Danny wrong. Danny is a grown ass man and Raymond had no right to treat him like that. Especially when he was in uniform. That was blatant disrespect to both the person and the uniform. I've lost a bit of respect for Raymond.
  3. JayT

    The Last Days

    What Brett needs is good old-fashioned butt-whooping. Nothing overly dramatic. Just enough to show him, you eff up, you pay the price....and no, you weren't beat. But we've been told that disciplining our children is wrong and that we should allow them to act like little shits.
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    The Reunion

    Control can only be given. As long as you're consciously aware, you still have the choice whether or not to give up control to another. Logan chose to give up the control to Tilly, who thinks she always has to be in control of what's going on. That's why she spoke before thinking when she figured that Tobyn and Kellar were mates. Subconsciously, she controlled that situation.
  5. JayT

    The Reunion

    Logan was gobsmacked at first, then quickly regained his composure and played Tilly like Charlie Daniels does a fiddle. He totally let her take control. Nice!
  6. JayT

    Chapter 24

    It was nice that the boys got to spend some quality time together doing something Luke wanted. I wonder what Cunty's oops I mean Cindy's reaction will be when Luke isn't at the paintball party?
  7. JayT

    Validate Story

    While we are editing/modifying one of our stories, what is the option to Validate Story for? It's located under Manage Story.
  8. JayT

    Chapter Eleven

    With Jeff being a lawyer and Paul being who he is as you've written him, neither would allow this not to be handled legally and professionally. It was self defense plain and simple. It would be way too out of character for either. Plus I don't think Joe would allow it since two chapters ago he was on his soap box going off about corruption in the public offices and then suggesting friends of these two men to possibly fill those positions.
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    Chapter 3

    Tim the village might be in another time but remember that when the demons use a portal they can go anywhere and any time...if I'm remembering correctly
  10. JayT

    At Play

    Spikey-I got a notification that a review to Predator Prey had been left on Mar 03 so I went to read it. To quote Dr. (Professor) River Song: "Spoilers." So, I knew what was coming. Parker-Great job keeping my cavities going. More sweet stuff!!!
  11. JayT

    June 2015

    Why haven't I heard one single "wicked" from any of our Bostonians? hehehe I guess Ritchie arrives next month huh? Looking forward to more. Jay
  12. JayT

    Chapter 1

    Thank you for the review! I wrote this for the GA newsletter grid and dice game...I was given a character, setting, and a problem...thus Ian was born. I'm thinking about maybe writing more from other character's pov
  13. JayT

    Chapter 1

    He was desperate and needed to feed...the pussy was convenient hehehe...His only plan is to get as much of Marcus as he can and maybe a brother or two...as to feeding, he'll have to find more monsters.
  14. JayT

    Fujshoi Girls

    read EPIC by Dayne Mora she freaking rocks writing althletic guys who fall in love and have massive amounts of hot sex
  15. "My individual tent was quick to pop up, but Ritch wouldn’t let me do it." "He needed something solid." You're killing me with these lol.
  16. JayT

    Chapter 10

    Nice job of progressing the story without trying to do too much all at once. I'm going to email you with some edits if you don't mind. Good Job! Looking forward to more.
  17. Damn Gary...That was hot...mic drop
  18. JayT

    Pins and Needles

    Brett is a spoiled little shit and Jenny is finally seeing it.
  19. JayT

    Chapter 3

    Thanks....chapter four is in process now. Hopefully I'll have it posted in about a week or so.
  20. JayT

    Chapter 2

    I thought that would be a good stopping point. Thanks for the support.
  21. JayT

    Chapter 1

    Thank you for the review!
  22. JayT

    Chapter 9

    Growing up, my family had over 100 acres in East Texas. I grew around guns. With proper education, guns are not dangerous. My cousin's four-year-old son knows to not aim even a fake gun at someone else. I'm surprised Joe isn't running for Mayor.
  23. This is still very emotional to read even the third time and even knowing what comes in the future.
  24. I'm rereading this now for the third time....does that tell you how much I freaking love this story?
  25. JayT

    May 2015

    Hey Carlos, I just started reading this series last week and wanted to let you know how much I've enjoyed it. Great job, looking forward to more.
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