FanLit

I’m sorry if I upset you, 😟 I still think this story is very, very good.

Hearing one child (Deidre?) had problems with the law and a number of children with different fathers (who had custody of the children and not her) did give the impression that there were challenges in her life (and thus her parent’s life) but that didn’t have to mean she was without compassion. (At least I didn’t think so from that) It was the homophobic attitudes of Robert and Deidre, (not that all homophobes are cold) as well as the conversations they had with their dad that gave me the flat impression of them: Robert: “Well, I think you’re being stupid and stubborn.” “Gee, thanks, son. Your support is underwhelming.” Deidre: “I understand Mom’s,” she retorted sadly. “I know you believe so, I’m just not sure as after having been with your mother for twenty-seven years, I see it differently.” “So I guess we disagree.” “I guess so. Still love you though.” “Me too. Love you, Dad. Sara: “Maybe Cheryl will treat you better than Annie did.” I understand (all too well) the issues children can have with their parents, maybe they are sparkling examples of humanity when not dealing with daddy.

Paul’s kids are....interesting. The biological gene pool can produce a vast array of individuals. While I know Paul and Annie couldn’t be perfect, their children seem to lack the warmth of their parents; I get a rather soulless impression of them. Looking forward to Chicago and this next act in Paul’s life. 🎹 🎼 🎶

Aiden truly loves Jordan, Jordan got lucky with Aiden’s reaction. I rejoice in any luck Noah and Jordan get because I have a feeling every reaction will not go so well; knowing some important people are in your corner will help cushion those blows for those who may not be. Yay for exploration in their sex life; It is special to be able to indulge in fantasies with the one you love (and trust).

I’m glad to see another Don and Louis adventure, yay!! At the beginning of the story, I feared the victims of the accident were Louis’ sister and brother in law and the child in the wheelchair was their nephew but was glad to later read on that they were fine (and there is now a niece and nephew. 🥳) I must admit tho, that I’m a little annoyed with how the foster situation was handled; I feel Robert should have approached the both of them with such a momentous change to their lives to give them the chance to discuss it from the outset; by the time Louis was informed, it seemed the decision was already made....by Robert and Don. Yes, Don can be emotional support to Max, but Louis will be the one doing all the physical work for now two disabled people and I wish he had more of a say. With that being said, lol, I know there would be no story without this situation and I’m buckled up for the ride. 😊 Your writing is so vivid, tim: “I pulled a deep violet and white checked tablecloth out of the bottom drawer in the kitchen island, and put it on the table. Atop that, I put Rena and Robert's flowers; it felt like spring.” “I hung up my jacket, washed my hands and went into the kitchen. Our guests were up, the air smelled of cinnamon, fresh sweet bread, and coffee.” “We each served ourselves one of the generous slices of the pecan coffee cake, and spread on dollops of sweet butter. We chatted and drank some more coffee. It was a wonderful breakfast.” your turns of phrase paints a very clear picture, like the story is from your reader’s POV, as I can imagine myself eating that coffee cake!! 😄 A very good start....

This is hot and beautiful, touched with the erotic and the sensually romantic. (Morning sex is the best!!) What a lovely love letter. Thank you for sharing, tim.

I agree that Paul should take the piano gig temporarily long term, lol. Interesting that Jared will be there too, for a time. Paul. and. Jared. Paul. and. Jared. “Rah. Rah. Cis. Boom. Bah.”

Thomas is a diva mental case; He has no couth or grace and is acting fatally attracted to Paul. “I hate you” Really?? (Did he really think he was going to get away with smacking a man twice his age?!?!) and psychobitch better be on his best behavior when Paul goes to the gym or little Tom Tom will be out of a job. I want Paul and Jared together.

This chapter was the best one yet. “Then Rory grabbed Rick’s right fist, and with all the power surging through him, he broke Rick’s arm.” With the strength of the town, the tide turned on the fight and exposed all the secrets the town needed to know. The exposure of Rick’s evil will ensure the town is whole once again. Seems there should be some type of rule in place to assist an Alpha if he loses his mate; Johanna Morgan’s death disabled Connor’s ability to hear the voice of the town, which essentially disabled his ability to lead. Ilaria & Ayu’s devotion to Milan should not be rewarded with finding him gone when they awake but it is that devotion that made Rory have to sneak Milan out, lol. The Takedas don’t trust anyone else to look after Milan properly and that may have been true, before Rory. There are now four people who are “Team Milan”; He can’t help but get better now, especially when he mates with Rory; It’s always been my belief that the right um, “infusion” can make anything better. 😉. Very much looking forward to the next chapter....

I also wondered why the other wolves couldn’t smell him being sick. Could his illness also be heightening his ambitions for leadership, making him megalomaniacal, or was he already that way? Whichever came first, I feel he’s battling both physical and mental problems.

The chapter title was a good tease-first I thought Paul was going to start up with Cheryl again; Then when I saw how awesome Jared was being to him throughout the chapter and called him to hang out, I thought something might kick off between them, (even without being sure they had a sexual/romantic past). Instead, it wound up being a lovely chapter detailing Paul’s progress in mourning, while showing he still has a long way to go. I hope Paul relies more on his music for healing; I loved the atmosphere you created with the jazz night, wished I was there.

I was sad at the start of this chapter but you sure know how to make things up to someone, LOL!! Happy New Year, Goldie and thank you for how “Unmoored” ended, I can’t wait for next week. I am still curious about Alex’s turn, tho. He could’ve kept Simon on the side and continued what he was doing, did he get bored with him? I mean Simon is better off without him but Alex doesn’t seem to be following mommy dearest’s advice about having more than one guy around; The twisted fuck has me scratching my head. The reunion sex between Carter and Aron was way hot (as reunion sex should be of course, 😉). The only thing left to happen after ponytail girl clears up the events around the accident is for C&A to admit they love each other and get married once Aron’s free (no, you are not waiting 15 years, Carter.) Does Carter know ponytail girl? I got the impression he was remembering her as well as the accident. Great installment. 👏

I remember reference of an affair in Paul’s marriage to Annie in the first chapter but I thought it was with a guy when he mentioned to Jared something about not going on that side of the street in a long time in another chapter; I’m surprised the affair was with a woman. Tommy is majorly butt hurt over seeing Paul with Cheryl, he’s acting a bit too possessive in my opinion; Paul “unintentionally” flirted with Tommy, not picked out china patterns, what’s with the attitude?!?! Jared is right tho, Paul is going to be up in some type of romantic entanglement sooner instead of later.

You can’t fix people who want to stay broken, in the end, he fixed himself the way he chose to and that isn’t on you. I think you made him see whatever better self in him still existed but he rejected it, punished you for it, in a way. I’m actually put in mind of Headstall’s story “The Tree” when I think of you and Jeff, except you saved yourself. That you chose to stay with him speaks to how open you were to love and acceptance after the ruthless rejection of your father....how I wish you had stumbled upon a priest when you got off the bus. As you say, it is the past now and a testament to your present is how you are able to revisit it to purge it. 👏 Happy Saturday to you.

I sit, arms around my knees while staring up at the stars. And I wonder which of them is ours—our witness— the holder of our history. I loved this phrasing!! ❤️ ❤️ Such a unique way of looking at the stars; Such a knowingly beautiful way to describe love. Thank you, tim.

Happy New Year, tim. I know in a past story you explained the rough life Jeff had as a way of justifying his treatment of you but when I read things like this, it’s a reminder to me there isn’t any. There are many, many victims of abuse that do not victimize, That you were innocent and fresh upon meeting Jeff should have been incentive enough to help lead you away from the path he instead ruthlessly pimped you on. He fed off your purity for his own survival in vile, horrific ways, I’m thankful you still have it. My mother’s heart aches when you share these tales but I’m glad you do; besides helping you, it shows how you broke the cycle, you are still sweet and loving and talented. I hope you know how strong you are; I wish you and Mike an amazing 2019. 🎉🎁

Wow. Do I need to get a stamp on my passport to kick someone’s ass?? Sometimes we never know the power the past holds until we are confronted with it again. A scab forms over a wound after it’s healed, when recovering from a deep injury, we may not be aware the scab is there until someone picks at it. Recognizing you’re stronger than you thought you were is a good way to start the New Year. To quote Alicia Keyes 🎤 🎶“It’s called karma, baby and it goes around” 🎶. People will have to wipe their emotional feet at another hearth. 🍻

Well, I guess we know who’s foot was stroking Trout’s leg under the table. 😳 Is Trout pinging on every sexdar within a hundred mile radius? How does Amanda's “friend” Gina and her boss Donald thinks it’s okay to hit on her man, or is their relationship really that hard for people to believe? I hope he tells her about these passes because they are not cool. Then again, Amanda might tell him to sleep with her boss if it gets her the promotion. 🤔 (Seems Bryan with a “y” wasn’t aware he was in an open relationship) 😯 The plot thickens, intriguingly so. Oh and Happy New Year. 🎉🎊

I’m not jumping on the whole “Jordan is a douchbag shithead” bandwagon. The timing for that discussion could have been better on Jordan’s part but he had no idea how neurotic Noah’s mom could be (As a mother, it offends me to call that female that....Biologically, I guess she is but she smothers Noah way too much.) I don’t get her having that intensity with her other two children. Tho I understand Noah’s love for that woman, the best thing that could happen to him is for her to be out of his life, she doesn’t respect him at all, being the adult doesn’t mean you’re absolutely, automatically right; After that scene with the movie, she would NOT have been getting an apology out of me....maaayyybe if she gave one first. Dictators will dictate, I guess. The issue of finances has broken many a couple and it was a legitimate concern for Jordan to bring up once his mother pointed it out to him; Frankly Noah’s mindset about finances seems a bit naive and concerns me with how he would live in the real world, does he expect his parents to foot his bill indefinitely? Noah could have been more supportive with Jordan’s concerns, not excuses because Jordan and our esteemed author is technically correct, Jordan never said he didn’t want to move in with Noah. Honestly, these were things that should have been discussed even before the Aiden issue came up, regarding that- Noah wasn’t supportive to Jordan at all, considering he was in the same boat a few months prior and received unconditional support. In a partnership, if one person has a problem, they both have a problem until it gets addressed. Noah has book sense but seems to lack common sense and that is why he needs a friend like Jenn, not a team of Jenns, just one Jenn, who was totally within her right as his friend to step in, knowing what she did. I’m glad this only derailed but didn’t end them, now they get to have make up sex, 😁 🧨 🌡 and deal with whatever bullshit Sebastian has in store for the new year.

I’m really not feeling Noah’s mom and I think Jenn is a pretty awesome friend, I will wait and see on Jordan's last statement. Noah may want to look into some grants or scholarships for the rest of his education, with his father basically saying that they will pull funding if he doesn’t do things their way. It may also free him to be more true to himself, not being tied to their purse strings. There may be love in Noah’s family but it seems conditional; I was waiting to see if Noah’s fears were unjustified (surely someone in his immediate family must suspect he may be gay) but his fears do seem legitimate, with Noah being as sensible as he is, I shouldn’t be surprised. Waiting....oh and Happy New Year 🎊🎆🎈

Indeed; I forgot about that little nugget during our exposure to the rotten, putrid core of our local mini celebrity sociopath....that makes me amend my statement to Carter definitely being physical competition for Alex. That poor fucker knows his beauty is only skin deep, while Carter’s beauty is deep in the marrow of his bones. I gather you are a busy little bee 🐝 yet you make it part of your schedule to fit in the telling and sharing of your amazing stories. Thank you, Laura, thank you so much. I know a major part is following your muse (can’t ignore it when it starts talking to you) and putting it where others can read also “feeds a need” I imagine but you take the time to answer back to your reader’s comments, just as soon as you can and your responses show that you really pay attention to what your readers say. My handle is “Fanlit” because I’ve been a fan of literature since I was eight years old (and I’m a lot older than that now, 😂). The gift of amazing stories come out of varied vessels, the custodians of our stories need not always be kind or interactive but your readers are fortunate that you are....the commentary part of your stories are allllmmmoost as good as your stories themselves. ☺️ You share with us the gift of your talent and of yourself and you inspire me. Thank you, dear, dear Ms. Laura. I wish you the very best in everything you do, in 2019 and way beyond. 🍾 🥂 😘

And I L❤️VE how everything and everyone (except Carter) points to Carter being a major hottie; An unfashionable hottie according to Alex but a sexy hottie nonetheless, definitely one capable of getting his own considerable attention and dare I say, legitimate physical competition for Alex, in his own way.

I “loved” the chapter because of all the progress Carter and Aron made in their new life together. They were going to move in to a new home together with a yard big enough for Taz❣️❣️(roomies....HAH!!) What exactly is Alex's motive for forcing Aron to come back when he was the one who kicked him out? Did Simon wise up and Alex can’t be alone? It’s also interesting Alex would blackmail about the accident and not Carter and Aron sleeping together, does he know? We know Alex is miserable and can’t let anyone be happy around him but he ended things with Aron, after life with Carter, there is no way Aron’ll settle for life back with Alex; I’m quite curious of the game he’s playing. 😕😳😠 Me thinks the ponytailed girl with the backpack will be making an appearance soon (I hope?) Happy New Year, Goldie!! 🎉🎊🎁

Welcome back, hope you enjoyed the holiday season and Happy New Year. 🎊 🎉🎁 Thanks for the latest installment; How’s Nan doing with her loss? I know the next installment may touch upon her and other missing family members but she’s stuck in my mind ever since her widowhood and her unNanlike reaction. May the new year bring better things for her and you, too.

Beautiful. The power of self hate, the power of hurt, the mystery and power of love in many forms and the power of self acceptance and forgiveness were captured beautifully in this narrative. Beautiful. Thank you.