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  1. BDANR

    Chapter 4

    This was quite a heartwrenching to read. Feeling like you're trying not to drown sounds like a very painful place to be. I'm very sorry to hear you've been going through a great deal of turmoil and I hope that the help you need comes your way. Sending love, Imloline.
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    Friends

    Woah. This hit very close to home. I'm sorry to hear that you had a good friend that you lost :(. Poetry was very cathartic when I needed to put my anguish for the loss of my own good friend in words. Thank you for sharing your pain, and hugs to friends !
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    The Night Before

    Yes he is! Not someone that I would want to be around w/out a ten-foot pole! Unfortunately, this was a one chapter story :(, but I hope to use this storyline or some ideas from it in a future work!
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    The Night Before

    Most certainly, Gandalf. Yes, there are myriads of reasons others have used one another or disregarded another. I'm glad to hear that I have written this truth well for others to read and digest. Thank you!
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    The Night Before

    You know, it's really strange to think about. I've unfortunately been on the receiving end of someone's racial animosity and ignorance prior to and subsequently after sex, and it seems like a common experience for non-white people in the places I lived. It's a difficult road to navigate for sure, but I hope writing this story can shed some light on what that experience might look like and maybe others might find some relation to it in their own lives. I'm happy to hear that you thought this was written well ! Unfortunately, this was meant to be a one chapter thing, but maybe I can introduce the topic or storyline in a future work of mine? Thank you again :D!
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    The Night Before

    It's messed up! I don't know where people get off using someone like that.
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    The Night Before

    I've unfortunately been in situations where I have been used for sex before. This was likely written during a time when it was so obvious that I had to get the feelings out in writing. Though I appreciate you were touched by this story, I'm sure it's not easy having to relive something like that. Hugs!
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    Thin Blue Line

    Thank you for a thought-provoking and emotionally triggering read on a difficult and divisive subject. You did it with warmth by including the whole family, but you also didn't shy away from the gravity of the subject matter. I'll make sure to read more from you, Carlos!
  9. Thank you Dmrman! Wine would go really great with this piece lol.
  10. Thank you, Timmy! I hope to create more fun songs for you all to hear :)!
  11. Thank you! Yes, the sweet sounds of poetry have been pleasing as of late .
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    Chapter 1

    This was well done! The ending was quite hard to swallow for sure. Your dialogue and the blossoming romance between Nate and Brian was particularly realistic. Excellent Defiance!!!
  13. I'm very forgetful about writing my replies! I was gonna say thanks haha. Yeah, I've noticed how using syllables can create a good flow to my pieces. I enjoy poetry more when I'm mindful of these things, and yes, it adds to the message!
  14. Talk to me like it’s poetry Make it into a melody Let it take us high like we’re planes Or wash over us like autumn rains Let it flow like we are rivers Its execution gives shivers Our bodies move like we’re rhythm We spoke in rhymes like we need them Our metaphors and similes Drawn together like harmonies Let it mend what has been broken Our words become interwoven Let’s ride this poetry fever
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    Chapter 19

    Thank you, Parker :)! Yes, Jade is quite lucky to have an uncle like Devan who she could be open with.
  16. You looked ill. I could see the sickness reflected in your face when you woke up next to me on your queen size bed. There weren’t any words, just an urgent rush to the restroom. I laid there contemplating your reaction and thinking about the night before, staring at the ceiling and wondering how it got to this. We met each other in that club. Liquor on our breaths, playful flirting. We danced, your hands on my ass and mine touching your face. My fingers brushed through your crew cut, j
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    The Night Before

    A short story about a young college student who has a one night stand with a man he didn't know. Lesson: You never know who you're taking to bed with you.
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    Chapter 18

    I'm so glad you enjoyed this, Remijay :)!!! This was one of my favorite chapters to write, gave me a nice warm feeling that I hope others felt too . I really appreciate you following my story!
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    Chapter 18

    Thank you!! It's good to write about Jesse transforming and redeeming himself for his past wrongs. Cuz he sure was hard to like at first :P! It is sad that the two have been separated for so long and have experienced hurt from the same people. The two have a lot of lost time to catch up on.
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    Chapter 18

    Thank you, Parker! I enjoyed writing this and giving my readers a more touching and heartfelt chapter despite the adversity they experience. I'm glad it was received well !
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    Chapter 18

    Thank you for reading! I'm glad you liked the chapter :)!
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    Chapter 19

    Jesse and Filiberto spent some time walking around the James Street Mall. Shoppers were spilling out of stores in this outdoor mall that a great deal of the town occupied from morning to sundown. As the two wandered its corridor, they would notice some eyes on them, studying them. Even after all the time that’s passed since Jesse has even stepped into the club scene, his reputation still followed him. Filiberto was taking the heat as well. “You see them looking?” Jesse asked. “Don’t they go
  23. That sounds like a cool idea! I like the idea of using a child's pov to tell the story. Challenging, and it'd be a good read :). Thank you for that!
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    Chapter 17

    Thank you, Parker! I'm glad you enjoyed the action scenes. That is not something I imagined I'd be very good at, but it's good to hear I did it well! It'd be nice to create more "action scenes" in future writing . Thank you for your comment!!
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    Chapter 17

    That's right !!!!! And thank you for commenting on this chapter :).
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