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EPISODE 3: THE QUID My jet-black fringe draped above my eyebrow. I blew the darn thing and eventually swiped my hair back. I said to Ryan, "I can’t take that.” We were in his bed, in this room that’s cluttered and slightly damp from all the fucking we just did. The blinds were closed, and only a smidge of sunlight entered through the slits, while the sweat of sex was all over the bed, along with the smell of carnal pleasures that had gone rank and rancid. Normally, w

Cause I said so. He's also going to die in the next episode. In fact, this is the final chapter. Thanks for reading guys. 😂 I'm kidding. I'm not going to spoil the story. All I can say is he'll get a different job.

London weather is always on crack. 😆 The end-of-year trip for year 7 students (my nephew's trip), which included a bus journey to Paris and four nights spent in a youth hostel, cost more than £500 per child. Given that the majority of the students were going, it would have been very difficult to refuse. However, £500 is a significant sum of money, particularly if you have many children. My sister wasn't having it. She did send him on that trip, but she was so pissed at the school for springing it on the parents without much notice.

Thanks mate. 😁 Yeah. I really love Brady as a character. As for Greg, you'll love him more in the next episode. 😂

Awww. 😢 Do you need a hug? I'll give you a hug to cheer you on. And yes. Greg's not getting that job. I'm kidding. HAHAHA.

EPISODE 2: SOMEDAY Rain poured in, and a blanket of grey enveloped the entirety of London, where the skies continuously wept. While waiting under the shade of the gable ends and the ridge where two sloping sides of the roof met, I noticed the mansion across this house, as I was leaning on the wall, waiting for the heavy downpour to subside. With the property having occupied at least four apartments, there were two middling-sized London Plane trees in front of the main entrance.

I'm not really versed in American politics. But from what I gathered, the government in power should care—and I think on the sidelines, they do. The US needs to salvage whatever it can from its weak negotiating position. When it signed the first deal, the US was able to leverage a strong position formed by working with not only its European Allies but with China and Russia. The US also had a more tenable and credible military position in the region with bases in Afghanistan that it could leverage to put pressure on Iran from Afghanistan and the support for Saudi Arabia that it could also leverage. It now has none of those things and is in a weaker position for it.

If you're editing it because it sounds wrong, then it you know fully well that your readers will know it's wrong. If you wrote: The stage has been set that will allow Scott and I to finish high school and get a four-year degree. Scott said, "You think we're going to graduate?" OR: "The stage has been set that will allow Scott and me to finish high school and get a four-year degree," I said to my dad. Grammatical errors are more acceptable if it's part of the character's dialogue. Readers are more forgiving if a character is speaking intentional dialogue with badly written grammar. If it's part of your narration, then you better do a stop and check to assess if it's right or wrong because your readers will notice.

"The shambles of the wreck left me disjointed. When the (proceeds to enumerate the events)... That's what they told me—the doctors and the medic who found me." There are so many ways you could weave a narrative into a scenario without sounding like the characters were forced at gunpoint to retell the events. You could even combine telling and showing briefly in a single paragraph. It just takes skill to do it seamlessly.

Regardless of your character's age, bad grammar shouldn't be an excuse to deposit it into the dialogue unless it's madly done with intention. Because purposefully adding grammatical errors into the dialogue adds perspective to the mind of your character. For example, adding slang or certain jargons to your character's dialogue script, makes him/her sound informal, thus giving context about the character's personality. For example: "Hey chika, how yous doin'?" "Hey girl, how you doin'?" "Hey ma'am. How are you doing?" "Hey mate, how're going?" The dialogue itself reflects the mindset of your character. Huckleberry Finn is an example of this. It's very informal and speaks in the vernacular of the characters, which makes it really hard to read. It's colloquial, very distinctive, and very very intimate. His illiteracy, in my opinion, gave the book more depth since it helped the reader understand him better. He detested school, which was evident by his illiteracy, and detested Widow Douglas' attempts to civilise him. The lack of literacy led to the novel's informality. He was uneducated, thus there were no fancy terms or large words. The writing style wasn't an effect of the author's lack of grasp in the English language. In fact, it was a masterful way to make a point about education, adding a moral to the story. Now the question is, is your character illiterate? Uneducated? Informal? Hung out on the streets, therefore, imploring him to use street language? Is the character fancy, lived in big mansions? Rich? Wealthy? Stuck-up? Humble? Or simple? Those questions should be clearly answered in your writing style.

Can you cite examples? I'm confused by this statement. First person POV is already limited, so the expectation is the narrator wouldn't know every detail unless he/she experiences or gets informed about such knowledge of the situation.

Book 1 is 58k words, and it's already finished. I'm planning this novel to be around less than 300k words, around 4 books/acts. So yeah, I'm just being lazy altogether. I'll post the first book. But I have no plans of NOT finishing this...this novel is really spicy. Plus I like my writing style on this one. 😅Don't say that. Don't kick the bucket yet. You still have to finish reading this novel.

I know right... it's something special I have in stored in the final act/book of this series.

I'll think about it. Cause if I post Book I, I'll be forced to write Book II and I've been procrastinating lately. Fine. I'll start posting the rest. You might hate me. 😂

Next chapter's going to be posted this December. This was an accidental posting. I'm still writing Book II. Or being lazy about it. 😂

😂 Er, well, yes. I'm an editor first than a writer. That's why I write very slowly, and lazy. And as for Greg going to be zeh nanny for a rich family... Well, YES and NO. Why? Because YES. And NO. 🤣 I don't want to spoil things. And as for him being an escort, and where it comes into the picture, certain situations propel him into that career path. But yeah, this story is probably my most complex story yet.

🤭 But I really wanted to save the date, along with a bottle of red wine (two bottles) and several packets of lays. Haha.

EPISODE 1: PITT STREET Wealth coursed through its streets as the neighbourhood’s upmarket artery of West London life, packed with shops, eateries, and an easygoing vibe, beckoned a stream of tranquillity this damp Saturday morning. For people-watching at its best and the luxury retail therapy that's largely unrivalled found in Kensington High Street, the more chill and composed quality settled in the neighbourhood of Pitt Street was an intimate change I welcomed with open arms.

When's the posting of the final chapter? I normally binge-read stories in a single day, like an addict. 😅 I'll save the date on my calendar and prepare a day of reading with wine and crisps. I'm just finding an excuse to drink. A good excuse. Haha.

Thanks for the feedback! This really warms my heart. 🥰🥰🥰

Yeah, the first one is around 290k+ words so it's a really long book. The sequels are around 300k-500k. No wonder it takes years before she publishes. It's an erotic reading, but the details of Scottish history are really on-point and I like her style of writing with a bit of sci-fi, romance, and drama tossed in the mix. She’s definitely expanded my vocabulary, and my knowledge of medical procedures, obscure sausage-making processes, colonial history, herbal medicine, corsets, and much more. Plus, who wouldn't want a redhead Scotsman lathering up your loins for a good read? I certainly would.

Diana Gabaldon's second entry to her Outlander series is a good example of that. She switches from 1st Person to 3rd Person PoV. It's done excellently.

But he's not fat. More like the chonky electrician. 😍 (Lays a plate of food to trap bear). (After feeding the bear, cuddles with bear accordingly)

One suggestion is past daily/weekly story recommendations. If we can get a list of 10+ or 20+ completed stories posted years ago or recently finished ones, then this will revive the readership of some authors, both new and old. Daily recommendations could be recently finished stories. Weekly recommendations can be dated from years ago. It's like, once a story is completed, it's relegated to the back burner until someone happens to stumble on it. Unless the story is popular, lesser-known (active/inactive) authors are forgotten, and their stories are lost in the thick of the postings. It's just sad, if you think about it.

Aww. Thanks heaps. I also wrote this while I was mad drunk and posted it raw. I'm here now, having edited this. I think I'm funnier when I'm sloshed. I swear. 😆