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I'm trying to recall how many times I got a last name and a number of a cute boy after seeing him for the first time... yup, that's right, zero times!

I LOL'd when reading your example of a nice beginning line "I can't help but stare at him." Literally one of my stories starts with "Bus Boy looking fucking sexy today. I can't help but stare." My other opening paragraphs, just for laughs: "I'm gay, Kev," says Torry. "You've been great! Go home and take a shower. We are Black Fox." Cayden, our frontman, spoke his trademark line just like he did after every gig. I was crying. I wasn’t even trying to hold it back. Normally I would but this time, it was the only thing that I hoped could save me from the inevitable. I started teaching myself programming when I was 14 years old. Looking back, they're not bad, maybe except for the last one, haha. A typical "let me tell you about myself for half of the effin' chapter" situation. Awesome article, as always. Usually when I stumble upon a story that starts with a character describing themselves (including their physique, ugh), I just hit ctr+w. I especially appreciate starting story "in the middle" and then revealing the past stuff through conversations, memories and slowly completing the puzzle while simultaneously pushing the plot forward. Amazing tension-building potential!

I won't 🙌 Thank you. All will be answered - eventually.

True that... it looks like it's either him or them. Nothing about it is obvious. You're just connecting facts that may or may not be coincidental. Of course I can not comment. The puma/cat was first seen the next day after Owen first met Alex. It was before they got together, though. Very good observations though, all of them. Can't wait to show you Season 3! I hope you're comfy up there!

The world was coming back to me gradually. The sounds emerged from the void first, before the rest of the brain had a chance to wake up. I recognized the sound of the car engine and tires rolling on the gravel. Then came the pain. My head was splitting. I was laying down but didn't know where. I opened my eyes, but saw only blackness. Did I go blind from the hit? I wanted to feel around myself with my hands but I realised my wrists were tied behind my back. Doesn't matter. I connected

Chapter 9 in three hours 🙀

Good to see Finn was able to look past his second thoughts... At least it won't be only Zack telling Andrew about his experiences. And by the way Zack reacted... sure, he seemed surprised but also at the same time not all that surprised. I think he's more perceptive and analytical that he cares to reveal... Love that!

Yup, I've been seeing this series like a TV show from the start. I think I made it more obvious on Nifty than here. I even have a plan to rewrite it to be Netflix-friendly once the story is finished, lol. So if you guys know any producers, dm me, haha. That was the plan 🤷‍♂️ If you think you hate me now, wait for it... I'm just gonna hop on board though, I know I deserve it.

I’m a mutant. That was my first thought after opening my eyes the next morning. Like if I wasn’t different enough already. The thought was paralysing. Act naturally. Do what you usually do. Ryan’s words rang in my head. Act naturally. How was that even possible? I didn’t feel like the same person anymore. I didn’t remember what that old person even used to be or do. I cheated on Owen. That was my second thought and I had to cover my eyes with my hands.

Thanks everyone, always a pleasure to read the comments : ]

I opened my eyes. I couldn't believe I slept naked on the ground in the middle of a forest. It must've been early judging by the dim light and the morning dew glistening on the blades of grass. I had slept on sticks, rocks, roots and dirt. The air was cool and humid. Yet, I didn't feel a hint of discomfort. On the contrary, I don't remember feeling so rested this early in the morning. Owen… it's been almost two days since we've talked… and it wasn't exactly a friendly goodbye either. He mu

I don't know why this story feels so intense to me... I love it

omg I'm so proud of it... one of the best things I've ever written. Thank you so much

It's not about the number of reactions at all but you know I appreciate them nontheless. mwah!!!!

you all knw I love you though ^^

Guys.. for the first time... I'm disappointed.

I was laying in my bed motionless, staring at the ceiling. I was awake for a while and my bladder was full, but the thought of getting out of bed was scaring me. I didn’t want to start the day. I didn’t want to move a finger. I was afraid anything I do or think will turn me into a red-eyed monster. I wanted to call Owen but my phone was at Ryan’s house. I decided to go there as soon as possible. I finally dared to uncover myself and see my wounds. Before I went to sleep, I had dozens of na

Very well put. All of the best stories that come to my mind have the protagonist facing layers upon layers of problems and fighting them through their own decisions and actions. This doesn't only make a story compelling but also gives lots of opportunities to reveal the protagonist's character by revealing their strengths and weaknesses while they're tackling the challenges. On the other hand, one of my most successful stories so far involves a protagonist who's being manipulated and a great deal of what's happening to him is beyond his control. But then again, he never sits idle and his inability to successfully stand for himself despite his best intentions is what seems to make the story interesting. Now that I think of it, you have a similar thing going in My Only Escape. [spoilers - highlight to read] The protagonist is being pushed around and is unable to decide for himself for most of the story so far. On one hand, he's being controlled by his dad. On the other hand, his boyfriend is doing all the work to pull him out of the hole he's ended up in. For most of the story, he doesn't seem to be able to make a simple choice for himself. But it doesn't matter - the process of getting there is just as important and secondly, the choice of not making a choice is also a choice - just as long as it's clear that it's the protagonist who did not make that choice. Another time, I was forced to rewrite a story placing a secondary character as a protagonist once I realized that my initial choice for POV was too boring to be in charge and to make the story compelling from start to finish.

Okay! I remember reading a book (don't remember the name though) - I liked it a lot but after finishing it, I learned that it was a book 3 of a long series 😂

Thanks for reading! But I wonder... Did you read Book 1? If not, then you're having a pretty unique experience here, haha. If it didn't bother you so far then you can keep going and read Book 1 afterwards. It would be pretty interesting to know your experience. If you already read it, then never mind 🙂

And thanks for getting me past 1000 rep line, y'all!

VERY good questions 🙌 I can't even start to imagine how weird/funny it must sound for native speakers now that I reread it 😂 ya boi gotta deliver, aight?

The next morning, I got up early. Chris and I were hitting the gym at eight which to me was an ungodly hour. At least the morning air felt cool and refreshing before giving way to the afternoon heat. Thank God the gym complex was air-conditioned and it was even cooler indoors. I was a bit nervous at first, but after Chris showed me around some of the basic equipment and I made sure no one else was paying me any attention, I started feeling pretty good about this whole working-out business.

Thank you all ^^