Bondwriter

I meant "write other stories", but apparently you've got fans of L.L.L. (had you ever realized it was a three-letter acronym? )

I agree with what was already said. It's a good short story, exploring a mental condition. Maybe a few "he" should be replaced with the actual first noun, since it doesn't seem to be the purpose to confuse the reader, but whether Laurie is real, a ghost or an "imaginary friend" is better left untold. Get an editor. It helps a lot to get rid of all these minor problems. Otherwise, well, just go for it and write!

In the light of the latest goat feuds, what about "the Capricious"? Mwahahah!

:lol: Think twice before voting for a goat name; it seems these two are gonna be head-butting soon. Graeme had warned against the high risk of a misleading title. I'd say it should take three or four more chapters for Brandon and Chase to find out they're mutually attracted. And three or four more before they do something about it.

This is indeed a very good story. Nice plot, masterful narrative, beautiful language. A pleasant read. By the way, your site looks great, I hope we may read some of your stories soon. If in doubt, get an editor here.

It would make Shadowgod some sort of Charles Manson... Cool!

I should be in. *scratches his head and moans at the amount of writing that's still left to do, quite jealous of those who knock out a 1,000 words in one hour*

Uh, shouldn't this be CJ's Kids?

Goats! Again? They're everywhere, about to take the world...

A flood of chocolate... And good wishes! Happy Birthday, girl!

Chocolate is good, even the day after one's birthday... Happy Birthday, Kevin!

This thread is indeed going to Hell in a Hand Basket, isn't it? Good news: this means the next chapter will be posted soon. You know, the one entitled The Kiss.

Well, yes, but it turns out he's the victim of the vicious campaign launched by the Goat. And should I remind you his name means "Lamp of the Gods"? Just saw Return of the Mummy last night (with Brendan Fraser ) and I don't feel like messing up with them Gods...

Do not fret too much over this. CaptnJack's heads up wasn't an accusation of plagiarism, at least I did not read like this. Now, all you've got to do is post the other chapters that have nothing to do with the afore mentioned soap.

This awfully looks like a spoiler to me.

Being in hospital always sucks. Get well soon, Bard!

Happy Kick-ass Birthday, Ian!

Personally, if it's a starting point for a totally different story, I don't mind it being borrowed. Of course, giving credit wouldn't have hurt, and the writing is still quite good and BSK's. And if BSK never saw Dante's Cove, then we're in the realm of the truly bizarre.

A good conspiracy will always manage to point out a good scapeperson, won't it? That's interesting, because I felt like it did change the tone dramatically, but that it worked OK, because the Scar's episodes were really short. They're quick and give a little info about the spy story that develops in parallel. Were they equal in length to the rest, maybe they'd be boring or distracting, unless of course the Russian railroads were the scene of hot romance. What do other readers think? As for the goat erotica, I hope it won't get Conner's and CJ's hormones boiling...

Happy Birthday, though a bit late!

Well, Well, the minion is turning against his master... Haven't we seen this before? So, chapter 5. No hot sex scene in the derelict hotel, no attack in the seedy part of town (I was fearing this when the car stalled), and a cool property in Bel-Air. It all is shaping up well. I think CJ should beware of the Russian railways he happily scorns, because next time a goat with glasses boards the Trans-Siberian, it is quite likely to be sheared, tarred and feathered! (BTW, Conner, thanks for bringining me into your explanations of the abbreviated version of the old Wild West treatment. Masterful way to put the blame on someone else. )

The implied message is that students are becoming stupid, the level is going down, and the curriculae are based on a liberal ideology (the 2000 one). When I said "this kind", I should say "the exact same" joke twenty years ago, that my grandfather, a college professor, had as a photocopy. It missed the last one in Spanish, but did end with the "liberal/ left wing/ bleeding heart reference". The last one is "A logger sells a truckload of lumber for $100. His cost of production is $80. How many tortillas can he buy?" There are indeed evolutions in education, fashions and fads, but saying it's going downhill (and usually cutting down on financing) has been a fixture of our various governments. The self-fulfilling prophecy stuff. So, IMO, humor can also have messages. I'll stop there, this is the Games and Humor forum after all, but I just wanted to say that this joke is old, and the 2000 and 2006 things make me cringe.

Actually I've seen this type of jokes for over twenty years. I find them dubious and reactionary, not speaking of the 2006 one, which totally crosses the line for me.

Hi, and welcome, Drake. There aren't that many XXX stories here, but I think that just being a member of legal age allows you to read all that's available in eFiction. Just login there too. If you post, do use the ratings to preserve the eyes and minds of the youngest ones/ Otherwise, there are tons of good stories with erotic content, but not as the major focus. And tons of other fun to be had.

All my best to you for your future writing.