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Thanks @Ivor Slipper. Let's hope it keeps heading in the right direction.
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Yes @Cane23, it is starting to look like everyday life for Chris and Andre. Now will Ollie start living his HEA?
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David rounded up Bradley and Ollie and was about to leave when Tyron said, “I was stoked when some of the girls on campus commented to me about the last video. I’m looking forward to hearing their comments about this one.” He then teasingly asked, “Bradley what did the girls at your school say to you after they saw the last video?” Bradley went red and started urging David, “Come on Dad we’ve got to get home”. That seemed to provide an answer the question. There was a round of cheerful
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This is a delightful short story about two young friends who embark on an adventure on the edge of their small country town. It turns out to be more adventurous than they expected.
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Thank you @Mark Ponyboy Peters for posting here and for such a delightful short story. I'm also pleased to see another Aussie writer posting here. Being aware of your great stories from another site I'm looking forward to seeing more of your work posted here.
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She stays late and refuses their offer to drive her home and then gets abducted when she leaves the cab. Yes suspicious. She is shouting from the background. Hmm. Evidence of her real identity is being collected but not yet available. Three against one believe she is fake. Important clues or just red herrings? Will Joe need to call in his associates? The extortion call has been made so time is running out.
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Exactly! And to quote Wilde: "I can resist anything except temptation".
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Another action packed chapter. A rescue and an encounter with a bear. Both resolved because of their skin walker abilities. Devin was very effective as the dog, especially as he drew blood and the wound needed to be seen to. Mac's role turned out to be far more important than he thought. Some concerns over the use of the same or similar large guy disguise in rescues, but there is a solution there. Still an enjoyable lake side break. Now, who is at the door?
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Getting Used to The Routine
Paladin commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Getting Used to The Routine
A great chapter. Life seems to be moving on and a routine being established. Manny is certainly changing from how he was in his previous life and Rocky likes structure. He also responds to "father" figures in the form of Manny and Bass. How will Manny returning to work as a barmen change the dynamic? And a hint at the content of the next chapter. Nice.- 34 comments
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I'm fully with Joe here. I'm surprised she didn't bring the DNA results with her to show Ken. I think Ken is being naive. He doesn't want her to know about their wealth but, she knows his address. It wouldn't take much for a resident of NYC to realize he is living above a NYPD pay scale. Yes let's start with checking the DNA evidence.
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Moving Day, and Multiple Surprises
Paladin commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Moving Day, and Multiple Surprises
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Moving Day, and Multiple Surprises
Paladin commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Moving Day, and Multiple Surprises
Yes that didn't take long did it. Can Bass be trusted? He's employed as a bodyguard and the people he was paid to protect get murdered. Only he answers calls on the landline because they will be from Ivan's partners. Hmm The story is advancing nicely. We learn more but there is still more to learn.- 52 comments
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A New Branch On The Family Tree
Paladin commented on Ticklishboy30's story chapter in A New Branch On The Family Tree
Wonderful bonding and forgiveness between these amazing families. Let's hope that Troy heals quickly and without concussion issues. Now how is Levie going in surgery? -
I agree with @chris191070 about this being an intense chapter. Greg is acting more and more like a noble and importantly one who invites and considers advice from his council and staff. I enjoyed Trevor bringing them into the present by suggesting videoing formal meetings. Greg's family is growing and Greg is learning about being a vampire parent. Great writing.
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Just a Trial Period, or More?
Paladin commented on Lee Wilson's story chapter in Just a Trial Period, or More?
OK I'm hooked on this story. I sense a change in Manny already (happy at work and sober in the morning) but I also sense there is a lot that Manny, and we, are yet to be told. A live in male nanny (and housekeeper?) is interesting. I wonder about the range services Bass provided to Rocky's dad. Manny is about to have a week with Rocky. I suspect it will be a rocky road for Manny to travel. Or, will they rock it?- 37 comments
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I tidy conclusion to an interesting mystery. I'm glad the college boys gained some extra benefits from their involvement. I'm loving this series and and I'm so looking forward to the next mystery.
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A Brotherly Bonding Drive
Paladin commented on Ticklishboy30's story chapter in A Brotherly Bonding Drive
This chapter has provided more information about what, or who (Gamma) initiated the idea for the trip but not about the apparent urgency. I still find it hard to believe that it will just be a lovely social get together. Although that, in itself, would be a nice change. -
It's important to remember that Ollie has to an extent rejected his mother as well. He hasn't shown any desire to go and live with her. One of the things that this chapter revealed was that Andre and Chris are buying the apartment where Ollie lived until his father was killed. He was so happy. “Uncle Chris, when we move here can this still be my room?” Here Ollie is starting to see being with Andre and Chris as getting his old life back.
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I know how to tickle the truth out of you.
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They were all having a very relaxed camping trip and then they are suddenly confronted with a very serious crime. Call the cops or skinwalkers to the rescue? I remember camping with the sleeping bags zippered together. Such fun
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Another loving and tickle fun filled chapter. There has to be drama coming.
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I agree. The three boys are developing a great friendship.
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Thanks @Cane23. I agree.
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Yes @chris191070 with all the historic charges piling up and another current case (the 15 year old boy) he wasn't going to win in court. I agree things are looking good for Ollie. Again my comment to @drsawzall regarding Ollie's mother.
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Yes @Ivor Slipper everything seems to be falling into place now. Thanks for commenting.
