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Thanks @drsawzall for commenting on the chapter being true to life. Yes Ollie was so lucky to be found by Chris and Andre and their life has been enriched by Ollie. Ollie's mother needs to watch out.
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Thank you @Cane23. She is certainly showing her true colours as an unworthy mother.
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I love this chapter. What is unsaid between Scott and Justin highlights what is being said and creates a wonderful tension. A tension broken in one way by Sally but potentially compounded in another way.
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Thank You @Summerabbacat for your thoughtful comments. You commented about Ollie being mature for his age. He's had to do a lot of growing up in a short time.
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Thank you @Ivor Slipper
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I suspect @Al Norris that a lynch mob could be forming. Thanks for commenting.
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Ollie's comment about lying to dad is purely in relation to the grave plaque. A promise made at the time of the funeral and including the basic wording. At the grave, we see something of Ollie's relationship with his dad and he feels strongly that the promise to himself was also made to his dad.
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Wednesday came faster than I expected. Jackson slipped easily into staying with us and assuming the role of big brother to Ollie. I was aware that the awesome4some were planning another video. They were receiving products to review so they had some choices. Jenny completed the electrics for the two shops (we kept calling them shops) and the carpet for mine was laid on Tuesday and as arranged Andre’s would be laid on Friday next week after the painters had finished. Andre had insisted that w
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What we shouldn't overlook in this chapter is that Ed is a doctor. He is torn in deciding what he will do about his father's need for a kidney transplant. His father at this point is also his patient. Ed knows the cure and actually has the cure. If he refuses he effectively kills his father. He would have to live with that for the rest of his life and what about his relationship with Ellen when she finds out. Ed's decision is more complex than just forgiving his father or being altruistic. A good story @chris191070.
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gallinaceous - Word of the Day - Wed Jun 26, 2024
Paladin commented on Myr's blog entry in Writing World
Thanks @Bill W and @drpaladin for giving my your source. There seems to be some disagreement between the authorities. Not unusual I suppose. -
gallinaceous - Word of the Day - Wed Jun 26, 2024
Paladin commented on Myr's blog entry in Writing World
Hi @Bill W, Could you give me the reference for your 1693 date. My searches keep coming up with late 18th Century rather than late 17th Century. The OED for example says: OED's earliest evidence for gallinaceous is from 1783, in the writing of John Latham, naturalist. I'm thrilled that there are other people on GA who are also interested in words and their meaning and etymology. -
A great chapter @Mark Ponyboy Peters that moves the story on just enough, with just enough intrigue as @Al Norris commented.
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More likely a can of worms. Oh wait, they're going fishing so that could be useful.
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gadzookery - Word of the Day - Tue Jun 25, 2024
Paladin commented on Myr's blog entry in Writing World
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Making A New Friend & Meeting New Brothers
Paladin commented on Ticklishboy30's story chapter in Making A New Friend & Meeting New Brothers
Another tickle fueled fun chapter. So much love flowing. I'm wanting the relationship between Airen and Raven to blossom. -
"You Just Haven't Earned It Yet, Baby"
Paladin commented on CasualWanderer82's story chapter in "You Just Haven't Earned It Yet, Baby"
Wow, what a chapter. Oliver and Niko fall deeper and deeper into their intense love only to have Oliver's mother's cancer pull them apart. We pick up again 26 years later. The only thing we know about the intervening years is that Oliver is now a sole parent with a son, and Sophia and Jason are still together with their own children. Niko is still Oliver's only true love. What has happened to Niko? Wonderful writing and still more of this story to unfold. -
I'm finding it hard to comment on this chapter. Having worked with adolescents with suicidal ideology I am very aware of the torment and false thinking they go through. I've also had to work with the family and friends of adolescents who have suicided (fortunately not adolescents I worked with). You are right @Mark Ponyboy Peters that the family and friends go through hell after a suicide or serious attempt. Our hearts need to go out to everyone involved.
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An excellently written chapter that raises the very real issue of adolescent suicide. It is devastating to think that there are young people who feel that their only solution for their "problem" is to end their life. Justin needs help and help doesn't just come from a shrink.
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Yes having visited Perth a few times I'm familiar with the Blue Boat shed which can be seen on the road between Perth and Fremantle. I've seen it while driving past. Like my friends in Perth, I'm a bit bemused by the attention it gets on social media. Lovely pic though.
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Again I'm confirming what @Mark Ponyboy Peters has said. I will agree that the use of "poofter" has diminished since the 70's, along with associated terms like "poofter bashing", but it is still in use today. I have worked extensively with adolescents and I can tell you that "poofter" is still part of the high school playground lexicon.
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A bold claim @Talo Segura. I agree with @Mark Ponyboy Peters that poofter has not disappeared as a derogatory term in Australia. It is, unfortunately, still used. BTW, is your profile pic the Blue Boat shed on the Swan in Perth?
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We're at an interesting point in this story. Johnny and Ed love each other. Ed accepts Johnny as a poor writer, even to the extent of living together to save money. Johnny is now to reveal where he grew up and where he really lives. He has survived the true love test. How will he survive the "I've mislead you but this is the real me" test? I'm keen to see the next chapter.
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I totally agree and didn't suggest differently.
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Valid points @Al Norris. My comment about Scott admitting he's gay was intended to refer to him admitting it to himself. My comment "He saves the boy who saw him kissing Billy" wasn't inferring anything about the actual rescue. It was a statement of fact which the story so far hints will be significant in the future. I agree with you that the family could be holidaying there. After all, it is a holiday area. I haven't read the story before so I'm looking forward to Chapter 2.
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A fantastic start to this story. Scott admitting he is gay. He saves the boy who saw him kissing Billy. He is identified as the rescuer by a teacher. Justin is grateful but has a homophobic brother who probably goes to the same high school as Scott. Enough there for an amazing story.
