peter rietbergen
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I meant, about Owen: who reads a bit, who listens to not terribly non-conformist music. Honestly, I might like him. But I am not a brooding, dark- haired, motor-riding rebel who wants to be entertained...
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Aha. There we go. Of course: DO block me if you cannot accept questions and criticism.
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Well, in my vocabulary being upset because a person loved by a person I love has been killed might mean I'd want to kill the killer to right the wrong . In that vocabulary it doesn't mean I loved the person killed...
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I admit: I have no idea what, in this context, that means ...
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Am I the only one who sees a major problem, here? Ryder, posing as a Rebel without a Cause, has as his motto: "don't bore me". And tells O: "entertain me". But, to be honest: when (if) Owen sheds his shackles, gets out of his silent non-existence, what kind of perso do we believe he will be? Yrs, he''ll be caring and cute - is that, already. Maybe he'll be a Cole-like nice young man. But will he be not boring"? "Entertaining"? Or is Ryder really not as rebellious, adventurous as he likes to think of himself. Is he, secretly, looking for an Owen who, while openly gay, is yet a man who loves to observe children and the wonders they are? Who reads - about. Listens to - well, not terribly conformist gay music. Et cetera...
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The cat-scene works eminently well. So does much of this chapter. Yet, I am confused. Of course, standing over Jeb's dead body, D mourns his love. But you make Alvarez mourn his own love for J, too? How come, given what occurred in the previous chapters. Then D tells Alvarez he knows A hated Jeb. Which we all feel he did. Of course, we know that jealousy (sometimes, often) borders on hatred. And yes, it may included a complicated sliver of love, too. But we haven't been given any inkling of any such developments in Alvarez's emotions since he knew what Jeb meant for D and what threat he posed to his own relation with D.
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I am not given to "what if..." questioning a story. If course Margot has her own agenda. And for the time being Owen's not being out is in her best interest. So we will see not if or when but how the Ryder- introduction will alter her play.
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This tale has several really good things going for it. Convincing dialogue certainly is one of them. In the end, the good points - characters, too, as I noted before - are what makes the story worthwhile - far more so than the "does Owen get Ryder"-question.
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This was very symbolic. O is where people have ended their lives - full ones or not, but yet. He now needs to decide when, and where his real life begins, beyond the okay's, an the noddings and the silent acceptances. One step is already there: O accepts/recognises the value of what his cousin is doing. Precisely such moments help us to determine where we want to go ourselves.
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The description of, and O's simple interaction with the five kids was entirely delightful. As to the dating: I, too, noted the Ryder appearance in the sinopsis. So unless there is a mistake, in chapters to come Cole is out. Might he be too staid to get Owen out of his stasis?
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This chapter perfectly captures the inaneness of dating apps, and their potential dangers for beginners, that is. But, alas, it is a medium (and a phase) we all want through. The increasing amount of really nasty situations that result from them is only now becoming clear....
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This is well-written indeed. If only because the Margot and Owen characters are so lovable
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Actually, the fida'i helped Saladin recapture Acre and reconquer Outre-mer.
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Aha, the gems sown into their travelling clothes. It is what Marco and the other two Polo's did - or so Rustichello wants us to believe. It is, actually, what the last Romanovs did. It did not save them....
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Why didn' t T scream in that backstreet, or when he ran? Any ensuing public unrest would have the authorities believe him, a gentleman and the words of the thief wouldn't have counted for anything. It was a class society....His fear of a scandal is, of course, well-founded, given the structure and strictures of his society. But he really is the only cause of that.
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In all this I realise I intended to forget that, if we are honest, Mme G is, also, a procuress, a brothelkeeper, "using" men ( and girls?) for her own purse....
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I am sure the author can make him see reason🙂....
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At least we now know who D will choose when this tale reaches its finale!
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This is an excellent description of the terrible squeeze a rout party actually was. It conveys the atmosphere better than the images shown by the always a bit polished Regency TV-drama's
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Some very good developments clearly 'sketched'. Though I fail to see why Mother was told about a hospital visit in the first place....
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Perhaps I misunderstand you. Are you really saying the elder Fitzgibbon is allowing his son to indulge in homosexual acts as long as it happens in moderation? I find that hard to believe. Even "moderate homosexuality", if publicly know, would harm the F family. And rereading your text, you definitely write that Gerard pronounced Stanley disagreable.
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Interesting. But I fail to comprehend why Mr Fitzg, Sr, at least according to the disagreable Stanley (not a gentry name, by the way) would have left Oliver alone in the country, knowing that he would socialise with Tim. As to manners: never would someone remark on someone else's close relatives as did Gerard about St. The more so since he is a lawyer, and knows what words can elicit.
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As always I have my doubts about some of the historic (non) usage. But this is undeniably fun.
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Even with Madame's assistance, the question is whether Jedediah will uur win the contest. And we dread the arrival of the two goons.
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An Inquiry into Appetite
peter rietbergen commented on Invnarcel's story chapter in An Inquiry into Appetite
One thing that strikes me - though, strangely, it doesn't seem to make Timothy think at all: Oliver surely has quite a bit of sexual experience - also, apparently, of being buggered himself.
