Linxe Termoil

He lay there in confusion as everything around him seemed to be flashing blue and red in continuous intervals, the low squabble of voices squawking over radios as people around him kept talking to him, trying to tell him something important. He just couldn’t figure out what it was that they were trying to tell him, or why he should care, when all he so desperately wanted to do was escape the pain. He didn’t really care about the physical pain, his body had become numb quite some time ago, it

Pat screwed up, and now he has to fix it. Not only for his heart's sake, but for the love of his life's sake as well.

My Heart’s Desire Written by: Linxe Termoil Scotty was, to me, perfect, in every way, shape and form. The jeans clung perfectly to his 20-year-old well-shaped ass; the tight shirt defined his V shaped torso perfectly, from the broad shoulders to the narrow waist. He didn’t drink, smoke, or keep a messy apartment. He never argued with me, which, in my book, was a major plus. Yet, I was annoyed with him, and a tad bit angry, as well. This led me to my current situation. His ass musc

Okay, so, read the story and all that. Now what i want to know is, where zee 'ell is ze story with Jeremy. I want to hear his story. I'll even edit it and help you brainstorm it...Hrm..... ::squints::: Maybe I'll just write it if you don't get to it anytime soon. Hurry up Linxe

Ben has no secrets. It's not his fault that his mom doesn't believe him.

Deceptions of the Heart By Linxe Termoil What What…In the butt.. The words blasted from the speakers spaced around the basement where the boys were practicing their dance moves. Pop! The noise made the boys stop what they were doing. Three of the boys suddenly doubled up in laughter. The fourth one was doubled up with his hands cupping his groin; a look of panic on his face despite the fact that he was wearing a tight pair of boxer briefs for protection during rehe

I didn't even wait. I went right to 17 when it all happened, and then right on to 18. I will, however, be reading the series from the beginning, when the epilogue comes out, and it better be a long one. I won't want to see Jake and Shane come to an end, so maybe there's like... a continuance or book 2 or something, but anyways. I'm glad you're back, and no matter what, I hope you come up with another story to tell. It will, I believe, be at least as good as this one has been.

Happy Birthday

As of 14 December 2010 at 12:22 A.M. Central Standard Time, the following reviews were in effect for Sparkling Combustion Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: jhol7689 I loved this story it was awesome read it twice just for fun I hate when great stories end Date: 09/30/2010 03:02 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: adamo Such a beautiful and intriquing story. This and Loving Sam Lynch are two of my absolute favorite stories on gayauthors. Lots of twists and turns that made for an very original, intense but charismatic and funny, sexy, sweet story. The characters were wonderful and the writing superb. Date: 07/24/2010 07:04 PM Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: acht-acht I loved the story. A little angsty and a little kinky, but not overmuch. All of them were crazy but loveable kids. IMO the only flaw was that you left Jeremy hanging in the breeze a little after he´s done his purpose, and he was an intriguing character. Cheers, Clara Author's Response: Jeremy was left hanging because i'm writing his story seperately. That's coming soon. Date: 03/26/2010 10:05 AM Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: theQzone30 ok, not bad, not bad :-) now you just can't leave it like that. you HAVE to go on. it's such a great story. i can tell you're just itching to continue. i know i would be. there HAS to be more. PLEASE CONTINUE!!??!!! p.s. i gave this a 9 for ALL the way through the story because i want it to go on :-) from here. to be continued??? Author's Response: I don't HAVE to go on. There isn't anything left for me to say with regards to Kyle and Ryan. I'm actually thoroughly glad to be done. There is MORE but it's Jeremy's story. That's why i left that hanging. Thank you for rating and it is TBC but jeremy's story is the next part. Date: 03/24/2010 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: Caedus Good ending, I really like the way you finished the whole Kyle/Ryan arc of SC. A little disappointed at the lack of Jeremy in the conclusion, maybe that means your considering a spin off?? I hope you consider it because he seems to a more complex character with a TON of issues (Which I think his friendship with Kyle only made worse). Love your writing, it's been so fun reading SC and I can't wait to read your newest project! Date: 03/24/2010 06:37 AM Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: Nephylim Nice ending. But it's so sad that it's over. I have got to know these two and am quite fond of them. Maybe a sequel one day? Or something new? I like your writing very much and hope to see more posts soon. Date: 03/24/2010 03:08 AM Title: Chapter 28 Reviewer: mcnc1966 Well done! I'm so happy they ended up together after all the strife. You've done incredibly well with this one and I'm excited to read more of your work in the future! Date: 03/24/2010 12:37 AM Title: Chapter 27 Reviewer: theQzone30 oops! something went wrong with the upload of chapters 27 and the epilog. i have no story on my screen to read the ending :-( Date: 03/23/2010 11:40 PM Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: acht-acht Ah! The dialogue between Ryan and Kyle in the end is so adorable. Love! Finally! And of course Kyle HAD to panic after he heard what he´d wanted to hear for so long. Author's Response: Of course:P Date: 03/03/2010 03:57 PM Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: mcnc1966 The story is wonderful as usual! As someone who's edited your work before, I have to congratulate you on consistently catching errors. Don't sweat the small stuff and keep up the great work! Can't wait to see how it ends. Author's Response: Thanks a lot Mc, means a lot Date: 03/02/2010 08:30 PM Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: Fastreader Aw...they finally told each other they're in love with the other!!!Author's Response: yep Date: 03/02/2010 08:01 PM Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: taina1959 GRRRR!!!! Where thee hell is thee kiss!!! LOL! Well, at least dumb ass Ryan finally admitted his feelings to Kyle! It's about damn time! LOL I just wanna open a can of woop ass on the boy! LOL! This was an intense chapter indeed! Author's Response: XD. Haha, you make me laugh. Date: 03/02/2010 06:04 PM Title: Chapter 26 Reviewer: Nephylim Oh god. You had my heart in my mouth for most of that. Gods they were awful but they were beautiful too. That ending was perfect. I so don't not have feelings for this story ; )Author's Response: Nephhhhh i WASSSS Going to end it there but unfortunately that WASN'T the ending. i wrote another chapter after because i felt it hadn't concluded everything. An epilogue and everything to boot! read that and THEN tell me if it's perfect. I wasn't sure about whether to end at this point. Date: 03/02/2010 03:47 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: lashrac absolutely loving this, good going :Dread this through twice now, but UUUGGGH, such an evil cliffhanger to end on!can't wait for more! Author's Response: Glad you like it and more is coming soon! Date: 02/27/2010 11:36 PM Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: taina1959 AHHHH!!! You left me here pulling my hair off!!!! You EVIL ONE!!! LOL That was sooooo good girl!!! You better hurry up and feed me the next chapter... PRONTO!!! Pretty Please? Author's Response: Haha, awww! Well it was a good place to begin another longish chapter!:PP I'll put it up very soon don't worrrry Date: 02/27/2010 07:01 PM Title: Chapter 25 Reviewer: Nephylim Occasionally different tastes.. I like that phrase for some reason. So Kyle doesn't remember then... awww. Author's Response: D: nopeee. Date: 02/27/2010 04:53 PM Title: Chapter 24 Reviewer: Nephylim Oh and me too, I llike it too. What an awesome ending. I like Kyle drunk and I like Ryan honest and I'm glad Rob and Jeremy got together because I really really liked Jeremy and if he couldn't have Kyle I'm glad he found someone. What an awesome story. Thanks. Author's Response: I like Kyle drunk too. Jeremy is a whore. believe me when i say that he's a long ways away from being alright. Date: 02/21/2010 06:12 AM Title: Chapter 23 Reviewer: Nephylim Well... as I am reviewing the whole thing again I have to say that this is really an awesome story. It has more twists and turns than a valley road and the characters charm even when they are doing things you really don't care for. Ryan is an absolute beast but I can't help but like him a lttle. And as for Kyle although half the time I want to slap him I still empathise. Author's Response: Haha, great description! It's almost over though. Date: 02/21/2010 06:05 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: shatterheart hi, I just wanted to say i loved your story from the beginning and it just gets better every chapter.Author's Response: thanks!! Date: 02/20/2010 11:30 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 Glad to see you posting the story once again... You already know how much I love it!!!Author's Response: :DD yep. thanks!! Date: 02/20/2010 06:35 PM

Spider Webs Chapter 2: Dangling by a thread By Linxe Termoil * * * * * * * What a mouthful, Kitsap County Juvenile Detention Facility. You try saying that crap. I guess most people called it juvie. Deputy Hayes had given me over to one of the staff members. I found myself looking back at the door that I had just come through. I guess it was because I wanted to be on the other side of that door. The man I had been turned over to pulled on my

Micah's ran away from home and a drunken father, kidnapping his younger brother and taking him along with for the ride. Little did he ever suspect what his actions would bring.

Spider Webs By Linxe Termoil I winced, limping as I took another step toward the one-story, one bedroom house that we called home. We, as in: my little brother, me, and our dad. My brother skipped ahead of me, stopping when he came to the stairs, his tattered back-pack sitting high on his shoulders. I watched him grab the rail and slowly make his way up the steps. A moment later, he came to a stop at the door, waiting for me. I grabbed the keys from my pocket and moved across the colla

Ben is a quiet boy, loves living life in his imagination more than anything. He has a sister who protects him, a mother who doesn't understand him, and a grandmother who perhaps understands too much. So then, who is this new boy in his life that seems to intrude more and more on his fantasies, perhaps even making some of them reality.

Ancient Times, Somewhere in the British Isles Artorius gazed around the throne room of his castle thoughtfully, studiously ignoring the body that lay on the stone floor in the middle of the room. The sun was just starting to set, coming clear through the western windows. It would be twilight soon, which meant that their time in this part of the world was coming to an end. The light sound of feet padding quietly across the throne room interrupted his silent contemplation. “

Ben wants to go to the high school dance.

The Dance by Linxe Termoil This is a work of fiction. All characters belong to the author. Do not post this anywhere without the author’s permission. You may contact him at LinxeTermoil@gmail.com Ben stood in the doorway of his basement; watching his boyfriend and their friends rehearsing for the talent show. But he wasn’t really paying attention to their dancing; he was just admiring how snazzy they all looked in their suits as they strutted from one end of his basement to the next. Th

as of 08 December 2010, the following reviews were copied over from E-fiction: Title: Chapter 7 Reviewer: Nephylim WOW that was some powerful chapter. I have no idea how either of them are going to get out of this, but if I know you Cia it is going to be explosive and imaginative. Very nice work Author's Response: Thank you. It's definitely going to be a very interesting couple of chapters coming up. I hope you enjoy them, being all Mistress of the Dark and all that jazz :grins: Date: 12/05/2010 06:35 AM Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Rixal24 Oh no! I don't even want to imagine whatever kind of torture those kidnapper's have planned. I feel really sorry for Natham because of what he went through. I hope karma goes after his so-called "Father" > It's also nice to learn a bit more about the Carthera (new clans, subsections. etc.). Can't wait to read more Author's Response: I think I have to put up a warning for the next few chapters posted. Whether or not Natham will get a chance to be happy before he passes will be something I can't reveal. Velaku will do all he can though. For a fantasy world I've kept it a bit vague. The true tale is in the interactions between Natham and Velaku and their personal bond. However, when this story ends the world will go on. I plan to write a few more stories with these characters and involve more aspects of the Carthera clans. I've a short story from this world in a published short story anthology and I've found it is great fun to expose different facets of the culture in each story to create a whole society. Thanks so much for your review! Date: 11/30/2010 01:42 AM Title: Chapter 6 Reviewer: Nephylim That was heck of a shock. I didn't expect it at all. I feel quite chilled at this point. I have an idea that the future is not going to be all sunlight and roses for these two at least for a while. As usual I love the way you write and this story is shaping up to be a fabulous one. Author's Response: Oh, you thought all the bad stuff was over? That the death of Velaku's father was the really bad event and now things would become pretty and shiny and full of new love? I thought you knew me better than that! Things shall be going very... well, dramatic is the best I can do without giving things away. I am pretty sure you'll enjoy! Thanks for the review Nephy! I love how dedicated you are to giving them, it gives me a real boost to see your comments! Date: 11/27/2010 01:38 PM Title: Chapter 5 Reviewer: Rixal24 Hey long time reader, first time reviewer I've got to say, I am really enjoying this story. When I read that they were bonded, I first imagined what their fighting style together would be like. I can't wait to read more :) Author's Response: Thanks for taking the time to join so you could give me some feedback, that's a great compliment to any writer! A small hint without letting the cat out of the bag too much; you will get to see what they fight like together. I wonder how it will measure up compared to what you've imagined... sorry, that's teasing but I can't let out any spoilers. Thanks so much for reading, I hope you continue to enjoy my story. Date: 11/24/2010 08:59 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Darkstar I have been reading.. this site for a min... this is the 1st time I really wanted to write a review...... This is good... real good.... Please keep it commin... And think you.... jus for being you....Be good.... Peace. Author's Response: Thank you for reading! This is pretty much complete, other than my revising as I get each part ready for posting. So you won't have to wait for the story to be posted to the end, it'll be there! I really appreciate you taking the time to review, it means a lot when someone who ordinarily doesn't review feels strongly enough about a story of mine to let me know what they think! Date: 11/21/2010 10:52 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Phoenix Really good story. I can't wait to see what happens. Author's Response: Thank you so much! I am glad to hear you are enjoying the story and I promise, it will be continuing. There will not be any long pauses on this one so you will not have to wait long. Date: 11/16/2010 11:24 PM Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Nephylim That was awesome. Of course I knew at the end of the last chapter who the lynx would be, before that really... not becuase you were lax in the suspense department but I just knew. I loved this chapter I really did. Mind you, you know what I'm like for violence and hospital beds. Author's Response: I don't think I do 'mystery' very well. You always know who the characters will be in my story for the most part. Violence and hospital beds... well, not to give things away but you will like this story I think. Thanks so much for always reviewing. Getting to see comments from you always gives me a boost of encouragement. Date: 11/16/2010 11:56 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Nephylim Wow, how exciting is this... wow wow wow. me want more, more more. It's weird too that I am working on something that has flavours of this... oh it isnt anything like the story but it involves a boy who is a cat but not a cat I recognise the emotional thing... you'll see. Anyway it is giving me a deep appreciation of your work which I suspect is much better thought out than mine. Author's Response: Fortunately I have more for you It is funny how great minds think alike *preens*, jk. I felt like returning to some the fantasy story genre when I started this. It's so much fun to write. I can't wait to read your story!! And I may 'plan' my stories out a bit more than you, though I expect your spontaniety yields greater story counts than mine. I think it's a rare writer who can come close to your creativity and pure devilish writing skills Thanks so much for the reviews!! Date: 11/15/2010 04:35 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Nephylim That was fun. It was a good balance of emotions.... sorrow, hope, fear, embarassment and many more. I am loving this story Author's Response: This chapter filled in a bit more of the background. Much as I would like to I can't write action into every one, though I try to balance it by including a lot of emotional content. Thanks for the review!! Date: 11/15/2010 04:29 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim Wow that was some explosive chapter. You description of how the wings came was totally captivating and the dreams are itriguing in the extreme. You, madame, are a wordsmith of the highest order. Author's Response: Thank you! I wrote this story before I tossed off my competition story that was set with the same type of characters. For those interested the other site has a description of how wings are 'supposed' to come, but I know you've read that The contrast is marked, this story is more modern and is overall much darker. The way Velaku gains his wings is a big part of that. Thanks so much for the compliment Nephy, coming from you that is high praise indeed. Date: 11/15/2010 04:24 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Clovis Goodness... powerful stuff. does it take place in the future or another dimension? Author's Response: It's more alternate reality. The technology level I've written is equal to what we have now in reality but in this story another race developed alongside the humans of the world. The Carthera live more simply and often violently according to their animal natures but with the same mental capacities the humans have. That of course creates conflict. The Carthera now live near the humans with an 'accord'. In order to maintain the peaceful balance Velaku's father protects the humans in his territory from predation to avoid sparking more conflict. In return they can participate in the same society, humans and Carthera equally, for things like school, healthcare, businesses. Anyway, I'm glad you liked it. Thanks for the review. Date: 11/09/2010 02:45 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: raj Great start cant wait to read more. Author's Response: Thanks so much! I personally like to think the story will stay just as intriguing, action packed and entertaining as this first chapter. I appreciate you taking the time to review, thanks again! Date: 11/09/2010 06:00 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Rilbur Wow... a strong start. To what will probably be a very, very strong story! Author's Response: I hope so. I really like the story but it was just getting way too long for an anthology as I hit the 14k mark and still wasn't done. I actually used this world for a basis for my short story I used in the competition last month. I wanted to finish and share this story with GA since the type of characters I came up with seemed so well received in the other story. Honestly I like this one even more. Velaku is someone I really got into writing. Thanks for the review! Date: 11/09/2010 01:34 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Benjim Whoa!!!! Author's Response: Did I set you back a bit? I'll take that Whoa! in the best sense possible. Thanks Benji!!! Date: 11/09/2010 01:15 AM

As of 08 December 2010: Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Change Me Great story, and I agree with previous reviewers that you managed to keep the focus and pacing of the story spot on. I, too, would have to walk away. If something this important, this monumental, is being concealed and lied about... how many other secrets may Brandon harbour? On the other hand, if he also does not feel that this is important, nor monumental, how much more does that say about his character; and would you (one) want to stay with someone whose ideals and morals seem antithetical to your (one's) own? Thanks again for a great story. I like it when I'm 'asked' to think by an author, just by the very nature of the storytelling and the way you've ended it. Date: 10/05/2010 05:16 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 What would I do? What I've done in the past. Kick Brandon to the curb. Once a cheateer, always a cheater. The heart will heal but the mind will never forget. Once he leaves, down the road he'll realize it was the best gift he could've given to himself. By experience, I truly believe that no matter how many years you spend living with someone you really never get to know them deep inside 100 percent. Great little story babe!!!! It is really so wonderful the way you've created the story without dialog since it's just the one person's thoughts... and done on paper to boot! Author's Response: Thanks! Well I find that at times writing things on paper helps me, why not my characters? I really wanted to get into this characters head and expose his thoughts and feelings but not just have him tell the story. The flashbacks presented a little bit of a challenge, I really wanted to add in dialogue but I figured it out. This was great fun to write and I appreciate the feedback. Branching out into a new style is sometimes scary but this has gotten a good reponse. Thanks for the review! Date: 09/15/2010 10:07 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Louis Astounding piece. Every word of the narration moved the action increasingly to its organic conclusion. 1: The characters are real. This kind of thing happens so this reader easily identified with the narrator. 2. The point of view is consistent, it doesn't leap away like so many writers have the habit of doing. I most certainly got a clear picture of the principle character's inner drama. 3. The development of the story is such that it didn't allow this reasder to let go. It develops organically. 4. The pacing has a depth that drew me into the narrative. You didn't take long to set up the story and hooked me from the first word. 5. Mechanically, the story flowed into a sad tale of drama and loss. Personal observations: Well, let's be honest, the narrator caused his own conflict, didn't he. After all, he knew he was dealing with a bisexual Brandon, he knew he could and would be hurt, I mean, the narrator isn't a simpleton. However, love is blind. It is able to destroy or create. In this sadness, the narrator is on the verge of self destruction. The best thing for him to do is to let go. Don't clutch at empty promises. If it were me, and if Brandon ever came back, I would give him another chance. However, not many people would do that. But the narrator is a caring, loving giving person, and these are the very people whose balance is hurt not once, but many times. If I was someone else, I would tell Brandon to take a flying F*&k, chiefly because I refuse to give energy where reciprocation is not forthcoming. I loved this story. At the end, the emotion got to me and I wondered if this is one of those tales taken directly from experience. You simply must find a publisher, it is that good, and it begs for ther question to be answered. Thank you Cia - with hugs and respect. Louis Author's Response: Thank you so very much for the resoundingly positive review! My first person pov stories tend to be very focused, as I usually use third person omniscient for longer ones. I'm still working on keeping pov static for that and not jumping from character to character too abruptly to confuse the reader. I've been really writing for less than a year now so GA has been so very helpful to me in refining my technique and reviews like yours that give feedback, not just opinions are especially helpful. That's not to say that every single review does not give me a happy little glow that keeps me writing, because they do. It is always much appreciated when a reader takes the time to really let me know how the story impacted them. I would like to think I would have more self-respect than to stay with someone who would lie to me and sneak around but as you say, it is so hard to make a choice such as the character faced because it is a deeply personal issue for both the people in the relationship. Fortunately, no, I have been with the same man for 13 years now with no inklings of any 3rd party inteference so while there was an emotional issue driving this story it was not through personal experience. I am flattered that I brought such realism to the story that you would think that, if that makes any sense to you Again, thank you so much for taking the time to leave a review of such depth! Date: 08/30/2010 04:25 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim What would I do? I would respect myself and walk away from the bastard. How can there ever be balance when every time you kiss him you think of him kissing someone else? Every time he leaves for a business trip you will not sleep wondering who he is with. Every time he leaves the flat you will wonder where he is? You will look for signs ofhis cheating and you will find them and with everyone you find you will lose a part of yourself. Walk away NOW. Find your balance within. Author's Response: So many people when faced with this choice experience this indecision. The idea came to me one night and this story was the result. Thank you so much for your comment. I think I'd be the balance within type as well. Self-doubt and a lack of respect for myself would overwhelm any love I could find left in a relationship with a cheater I think. Date: 08/30/2010 01:58 PM

As of 08 December 2010, the following reviews were in effect: Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim You know how I feel about this story. It's beautiful, sad, exciting and tragic. I love the whole premise of the story and it fits in beautifully with Honour. You write wonderfullyAuthor's Response: Thanks for leaving a review Nephy! You helped make it that way being one of my beta readers Thanks for that again! I really did want to write a stand alone story but tie it in to TPoH, so the changed POV and going back in time gave me that opportunity. It was fun to write and I've even included some of it into the present story in TPoH. Hugs for one of my favorite reviewers!! Date: 05/06/2010 01:50 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Renee Stevens I absolutely love it! I haven't read Honor yet but plan to start soon!! The Lords Sacrifice was exceptionally written and full of intrigue. Awesome job!Author's Response: Thank you so much! I had this story pop into my head and it is a great supplement to The Price of Honor but also stands alone. But if it gets you reading my long story, yay! I'm glad you enjoyed it. Date: 05/05/2010 11:49 PM

As of 08 December 2010, the following reviews were in effect for Paper Trail. Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Nephylim Ooh. I wonder what it was. In my mind it's one of three things and I'm hoping it was the first THis is very different to your other one and I love them both. You clever girl .Author's Response: Thank you, thank you! I love reading what you think about my stories, I really appreciate you always leaving reviews and comments, it's very encouraging. I was slightly evil leaving a multiple choice cliffhanger but it just was too perfect a setup to not use it We'll just have to see what happens in the next chapter! Date: 04/25/2010 05:34 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Wyndham I love the way this story is developing. Thank you.Author's Response: This one is slower to have action develop than Double Down but I really wanted to let Nat and Marc flesh out their characters a bit. I like stories that are busy but having some time to let the personalities of the main characters out is important since I hope to continue these characters as a series. Thanks again for leaving a review, it's really encouraging! Date: 04/25/2010 04:48 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Wyndham Intriguing story. I like it.Author's Response: Thank you! I really appreciate you letting me know you are reading the story and liking it! Date: 04/25/2010 04:18 AM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Clovis Getting interesting. You put in a lot of domestic details...Author's Response: With Double Down it was mostly about the plot/action with Mestrick, not the characters. With this story I want a bigger focus on the characters as I try to develop them a bit more. Never fear though, the plot will start to develop more in the next chapter. Thanks so much for the review!! Date: 04/25/2010 01:37 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: mcnc1966 WHEW! Awesome job building intrigue, Cia. I'm glad you decided to revisit these characters. Can't wait to see what they come across as things move along.Author's Response: Thanks! This story might be a little long than Double Down but I want to explore Nat's case and the characters more than in the first story. I'm glad you're enjoying it! Thanks so much for reviewing!! Date: 04/13/2010 08:42 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Nephylim Dangerous indeed. Aha... now I understand the story name. Fabulous chapter. It's very very thought provoking. I can't wait to see where this is leading. And it's lovely that Marc is finally loosening up ;)Author's Response: The first chapter didn't quite give you the explanation of the title but it's pretty unmistakable by Chapter 2. Paper Trail is about this case of Nat's but it is about him and Marc as well. They are two of my favorite characters. Thanks for the review!! Date: 04/12/2010 11:14 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim Why am I so nervous now? With everythig that's been going on I get the sense of something big in the wind. anything that is odd at this point is scary and the way the chapter ended makes me think that Nat is in for a shock in the next one. Ooohhh... delicious shivers :)Author's Response: I don't know, why are you nervous? I wouldn't be mean to my characters would I? Nothing bad could possibly happen, could it? Wink.. Wink... LOL. Things will happening, of course! I'm glad you liked the chapter, thanks so much for reviewing!! Date: 04/04/2010 05:35 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 Cia! Wonderful first chapter! Dear Marc is so messed up in the head with that asshole P.O.R.K.E.R ( LOL) messing him up! Wait til I see him, I'm gonna beat him up to next week! And Nat!... WTH is he thinking trusting someone to just send a car for him? Can't he think how odd it is for them to know he was out of the area? I smell a RAT! Can you tell I'm already enjoying this? Fantastic! I love the way you write girl!!! Keep 'em coming!Author's Response: Thank you!! Nat is a mixture of smarts and naivete that can sometimes be amusing. He is a very trusting person I think but he uses the brain he was born with. Marc is well, Marc is a mess but he has an inner strength that will see him through. I'm glad you are enjoying this, I promise to keep writing. I am very much enjoying their story so even I can't wait to find out what happens as I write it! Date: 04/03/2010 01:26 PM

Reviews for "Double-Down" as of 08 December 2010 Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Clovis Ahhhh those kisses... so beautifully described. This is the sort of story I love... fast paced, plenty of action, just enough tension to make me squirm, and then the goodies win... and Nathan and Demarcus find true love..... Great, thanks!!!Author's Response: I am really glad you liked it! I had never done modern or a short story before so it was an interesting process for me. If you liked Nat and Marc I'm continuing their story in Paper Trail, which is still first person pov but switch over to Nat instead of Marc. And good kisses... hmm, those can be better than a sex scene sometimes in my mind. Thanks so much for reviewing! Date: 04/14/2010 02:27 AM Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Wyndham Absolutely delightful. What a storyteller you are :)Author's Response: Thank you Wyndham. I appreciate you taking the time to review! Date: 02/23/2010 01:37 PM Title: Chapter 4 Reviewer: Nephylim All I can say is that I am desperately disappointed that it's finished. This was an awesome story hun. The only good thing about it ending is that now you can get back to writing the other one again... I dont like the way you left poor Bel'locAuthor's Response: Well, I'm not planning to come back to this soon, but I am thinking of coming back to explore Nat's life some more. He has a very interesting job and life, one I think that would be fun to write about. Time for Honor for a bit though Date: 02/22/2010 12:02 PM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: taina1959 Oh Sh*t!! What a way to leave us hanging!! Full of action and mystery, just what I love! Plays like a movie in my mind! Excellent!Author's Response: Yeah, I'm mean Luckily ch. 4 will be out soon. I appreciate the excellent review, the stories I like to read come across as if I am watching them as well, I'm happy this has that quality for you! Date: 02/20/2010 12:22 PM Title: Chapter 3 Reviewer: Nephylim Niiiiccceeeee You had me on the edge of my seat AND you gave me some blood at the end. Fabulousity.Author's Response: Aww, I love your reviews! Fabulousity, lol, great word! Gotta have some blood, it's a story full of criminals Thanks! Date: 02/20/2010 11:05 AM Title: Chapter 2 Reviewer: Nephylim Wow this is getting tricky in more ways than one. Can't wait to see what happens after the game. I am getting tense just thinking about it.Author's Response: Oh yes, tons of stress, lots of action. Finally the tables are turned, I'm stressing you out Thanks for the review Nephy, it's wonderful to hear from you on my story, as always! Date: 02/18/2010 08:58 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: jhol7689 Money is the route of all evil in this crazy world of ours great story i'm liking it so far and great writing flow!Author's Response: Thanks for reviewing jhol, I'm glad you like it!! Date: 02/17/2010 07:46 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: johnathan_colourfield_writer AHHHH! Cia! That was really good So easy to read and follow, such an interesting story i look forward to chapter 2 :DAuthor's Response: Thank you! And, per your request, please see Chapter 2, now posted!! Date: 02/17/2010 05:22 PM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: taina1959 You've done it again! I love the amount of mystery in the story, the action going on, and definitely Ry for not giving up on Demarcus and bringing hunky Nat to the scene. Where's the next chapter???? Hurry, Hurry!!! ~Rush~ Author's Response: Thank you Rush! I'm glad you like it. Double Down doesn't have a lot of characters in it but the ones that are important have very strong roles in the story, with very vital interactions. They all NEED each other, though they may resist and not like it Course, some of them may. The next chapter will be out soon. I don't want to post the next ones too quickly and then have too long of a wait for the conclusion. I stink, don't I? lol Date: 02/17/2010 10:20 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Joshpdx Great first chapter. You have a strong sense of plot, and your writing is smooth and engaging. The only concern I have is that you will not have much time to work on this story, because you will be devoting all your free time to finishing 'The Price of Honor.' Ahem.Author's Response: Well thank you! I have been writing this story off and on, while keeping up with posting a chapter of Honor once a week. Never fear, I will not neglect Cale and Bel'loc. I don't intend this to be another long story, plus I already have a few chapters done Thanks so much for taking the time to review, and the oblique appreciation for TPoH. Date: 02/17/2010 01:01 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Nephylim You've done it again girl. There's so much promise here I am bursting. Loved it to bits. Marc is in a right pickle and at the moment it's hard to see how he's going to get out of it. I can see that it is going to be one hell of a ride for them all. Love Nat.Author's Response: This story started with an idea, one I thought would stay small and compact. Oh no... Way too much story to tell for that. You know me, I love to torture characters in dangerous situations. Thanks so much, you always leave me a review to encourage me along!! Date: 02/16/2010 04:00 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Endymion1978 Well this sounds promising and interesting. Can't wait to read how he gets out of that mess.Author's Response: It's quite the problem. Marc is in deep with some very dangerous men and the way out isn't very safe either. I appreciate you taking the time to review!! Thanks! Date: 02/16/2010 02:53 AM Title: Chapter 1 Reviewer: Rigby Taylor This is a real story, excellently written. this sort ofprose is outstanding: - "... the thought that the very last person in this world who meant anything at all might grind the leftover bits of my heart into dust and let them blow away was overwhelmingly painful.I had left to protect what was left of that heart, the pieces lying broken and unused in my chest. Sometimes it felt as if the ragged edges were cutting into my flesh from the inside as I lay curled into a ball, sobbing dejectedly over the remains of who I used to be and never would be again."I'm impatient for chapter 2.Author's Response: Thank you for your review! I often struggle when it comes to using comparisons or prose poetically but in this case they sort of flowed into the story on their own. Chapter 2 will not be long in coming. Date: 02/16/2010 12:34 AM

Reviews for "The Sword-Sworn" as of 08 December 2010 Title: Chapter 1: The Test Reviewer: darkfirewolf It is an interesting good written story and i hope there are more chapters soon ... and more frequently Date: 05/29/2010 02:38 AM [Respond] Title: Meddling with Fate Reviewer: David McLeod Garrett may have found friends in Jeb and Caol, but Lauris is almost certain to turn up, again, as an antagonist...and a jealous one, at that. Garrett's almost certainly on a quest, guided (or manipulated?) by person or persons unnkown. Nor does ne know the objective. Laerenz promises to be an interesting character, and it will be rewarding to see how the two stories fold together. Date: 03/27/2010 11:08 AM [Respond] Title: Meddling with Fate Reviewer: Nephylim More and more interesting. This really is a sweeping saga isnt it. I'm getting less confused and more interested.Author's Response: I hope to make it a sweeping saga; of the kind that I like. A good mix of fantasy and reality, power and just life in general. Date: 03/25/2010 03:00 AM Title: Meddling with Fate Reviewer: Cia Intriguing... I sense that Lauris is one of THOSE types of women. LOL. Poor Caol. Garrett seems to be going by "instict" quite a bit, can't wait to see what happens with all the water. That was such a cliffhanger in the middle of the chapter, tsk! And you really have me wondering who the youth is, hmm... can't wait to read more!!Author's Response: LoL. Don't you love those types of women? And cliffhanger? In the words of the goat; I don't use cliffhangers. Ever. As for the youth, he's rather important. Can't wait to find out who he is either. heheh. Date: 03/24/2010 09:54 PM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: Phoenix Wow dude. What an amazing story. I can't wait to see what happens!!Author's Response: Thank you. Your kind words are thrilling to me and much appreciated. Date: 03/23/2010 11:29 AM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: Elezbed Well this chapter is better!!! I think I understand more than the first! Good chapter and write more!Author's Response: That's good; I'm glad Date: 03/22/2010 04:05 PM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: Cia Wow!! Finally a little bit of illumination! We now have some glimmer of an idea of where this story is going and what exactly is going on. You weave a very intriguing tale in this story, it's great!Author's Response: Thank you Date: 03/22/2010 10:38 AM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: Nephylim Gods that was a roller coaster ride. To be honest I have to admit that there are parts of it that I don't understand but i am rolling with it. I am hoping that things will start to become clearer soon and in the meantime i'm going along for the ride.Author's Response: Sorry for the confusion; I hope the rewrite helped clear things up and I hope the parts that it didn't clear up sooner or later. Date: 03/22/2010 03:58 AM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: David McLeod Very powerful imagery gives us a glimpse into a complex world. The protagonist is uncertain of his role. Indeed, he may be uncertain of just who he is, promising a voyage of personal discovery as well as an adventure in magic.Author's Response: He very well could be. Keep watching and we shall see. Date: 03/21/2010 04:10 PM Title: Answers from the Past Reviewer: Elezbed Well I don't understand everything.... So I am going to wait for the next chapter! It seems a little confusing.But good luck and write more!Author's Response: I hope the re-write helped clear things up some. Let me know, eh? Date: 03/21/2010 03:49 PM Title: Chapter 2: Time to Go Reviewer: David McLeod It's refreshing to see so many new and interesting concepts woven into such a complex beginning to what promises to be a superb story.Author's Response: thank you. There will be more complex twists within the story, I hope. Date: 03/04/2010 09:59 AM Title: Chapter 2: Time to Go Reviewer: Nephylim How exciting. I'm glad about what happened to Winslow... but where did Garrett go and why did he take the others with him? And which side will he be on in the war? And who is the woman in the room? So many questions and I have a feeling that at least some of them will not be answered soon.Author's Response: Keep watching. Answers will be questioned sooner or later. I promise. Date: 02/22/2010 11:20 AM Title: Chapter 2: Time to Go Reviewer: Elezbed Well it looks like fun ^^!Good chapter and I can't wait to see what you are going to write after!Author's Response: Thank you. Hopefully you don't end up waiting for forever. Date: 02/22/2010 12:32 AM Title: Chapter 2: Time to Go Reviewer: Kanaye Interesting first two chapters. Looking forward to more.Author's Response: Thank you. More is on the way, I promise. i'm enjoying writing this story; though it's hard trying to keep parts of it semi realistic. Date: 02/21/2010 11:32 PM Title: Chapter 2: Time to Go Reviewer: Cia I like this soooo much! It's an amazing story, each new scene I read makes me rush on to the next. I love the batty prophetess type...Lady Demonte, she added a voice of doom to the story that was quite dark and shivery. I hope you don't take too long of a time getting out ch. 3!Author's Response: Lady Demonte is really great. I can't wait to write more scenes with her. Date: 02/21/2010 09:27 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Test Reviewer: taina1959 Very nicely done Linxe. Was wondering when you were going to post your first chapter, glad you did now. I enjoy everything you write, dear one.Author's Response: Thanks Mum Date: 02/21/2010 03:47 PM Title: Chapter 1: The Test Reviewer: Cia Oh wow! This is a story rich with detail and imagery and fascinating characters. You've laid down a detailed groundwork for the characters to live in and for the story to progress from. I LOVED this first chapter and can't wait to read more!Author's Response: Thank you Date: 02/21/2010 10:34 AM Title: Chapter 1: The Test Reviewer: Nephylim Bloody hell. Poor Garrett. This is an interesting start and makes me want to know what happens next.Author's Response: Lots of interesting things are going to happen. I'm wondering if I'm making the chapters too short though. Date: 02/21/2010 06:28 AM

Reviews for Sunny's Angel as of 08 December 2010 Title: 9: A first date and the day goes to hell. Reviewer: Morebern Seriously! Where did the rest of the story go??? I just sat here and read it all in the last 2 hours and you STOPPED WRITING IT! Grrrr!!! --Amelia Date: 05/09/2010 09:15 PM [Respond] Title: 9: A first date and the day goes to hell. Reviewer: anordwell I was really confused when I started reading this story. You had a couple of "main" characters that had pretty complicated histories to fill in. But the writing flows really well and you got the back story out in a way that I understood without a bunch of flashbacks which tend to be distracting. I am not sure whether or not I like Devin, you totally have me on the fence about him. You seem to be able to bring out so many different facets of his personality, I am never sure what he is going to do or how he is going to react next. I sympathize with his parents, lol. I hope you continue this story sometime. Date: 10/17/2009 11:48 PM [Respond] Title: 9: A first date and the day goes to hell. Reviewer: taina1959 Oh boy! Sunny needs some anger control treatment! And Ian needs to back off a little bit. After all, he's been missing from Sunny's life for most of his life. Great Chapter Linxe!!! Can't wait to read 10! Date: 07/30/2009 10:30 AM [Respond] Title: 9: A first date and the day goes to hell. Reviewer: David McLeod Linxe has created a complex world populated with complex characters, yet he offers up every moment, every incident slowly, carefully, deliberately, giving us a chance to savor every subtlety. That the characters are fallible makes them even more real. Date: 07/30/2009 06:03 AM [Respond] Title: 9: A first date and the day goes to hell. Reviewer: Nephylim This is a really awesome story. Shame Devin is gay because I am in love with him. I really hope that whatever he's up to it turns out alright in the end. I like that way that all the relationships are developing so naturally with all the ups and downs, misunderstandings and epiphanies of real life. I also like the fact the none of the characters are perfect. They all have their doubts and neuroses. I love Devin. I want to have his babies. :PAuthor's Response: I'm glad you're enjoying it too....and....hrm, I want his babies too LT Date: 07/29/2009 11:07 AM Title: Chapter 8: The Awakening of Demons Reviewer: Cuba Libre Looks like Sunny has a bit of a temper on him, which no doubt makes him & Devin a perfect match. Really like this story.Author's Response: I didn't really consider Sunny having a temper, just not being grown up. Could that childishness hinder the fostering of a true partnership between him and Devin? Keep watching, we shall see, and I'm glad you enjoy the story. Date: 06/13/2009 08:19 AM Title: Chapter 8: The Awakening of Demons Reviewer: hh5 Its great that they found each other. Just hope each others demons don't get in each others way. Hope love gets fostered. Author's Response: One's demons are helping to awaken the others. Will it destroy Devin or will he finally respond and fight back? We shall see. Date: 06/12/2009 11:29 PM Title: Chapter 8: The Awakening of Demons Reviewer: David McLeod The characters, already three-dimensional, are becoming so real that they nearly step from the page into your room, just as their emotions move from the page into your heart. One cannot read this story without aching for Sunny and Devin, and wishing that they will be able to exorcise their demons.Author's Response: Demons are slumbering lightly, and more are about to awaken. They shall be exorcised and released, and love will be found. Date: 06/12/2009 06:01 AM Title: Chapter 7 The Greatest Reviewer: DragonFire Excellent story so far; with so many questions unanswered and more being asked every chapter. Devin is indeed a mystery and it seems very adept at mind games and manipulation. Will Sunny be the one to break down the facade? No clue, but am certainly tuning in again to find out. Date: 06/04/2009 05:06 AM [Respond] Title: Chapter 7 The Greatest Reviewer: acht-acht God, that´s one hell of a story. I just read the 7 chapters and to say I´m desperate for the next update would be an understatement. I love all the characters you introduced so far (except coach & the doctor and they´re gone), and I loved how the boys bonded right away ... Devin really is a dark horse, but I believe in some sort of positive outcome for his plans (whatever they are). "He didn’t want to remember the last time he’d laughed or had so much fun around people." - That sentence almost broke my heart in ch 6 - I´m so damn intrigued to what happened to him exactly ... Clara (I´d rate you with 10, but I just gave you a 9 to leave a some allowance for future plot twist I might hate ... Date: 04/08/2009 08:06 AM [Respond] Title: A strange afternoon, Some plans Backfire. Reviewer: hh5 Wow big take on the story then followed by another mystery. Date: 03/10/2009 09:43 PM [Respond]

Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Morebern Definately piqued my curiousity. Is it just the death of his Mom that made him completely freak about the blood and the car accident or is there something more? Who will start to crumble his walls first? Elizabeth? Ken? Avery? Reece? Patrick (my personal pick)? What will happen if their Dad comes back into the picture? Interested ... Date: 04/02/2010 10:02 PM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Cia Micah is evolving before our very eyes. He is losing some of his anger and gaining back some of his pain. Perhaps because he somehow knows that he is in a safe place despite his struggles to deny it? I am sure he fears getting attached to anyone or anywhere after the death of his mother. I can not wait for the next chapter, I want to know the reaction everyone has to his outburst, what is in the house, how it is going to become significant later on... Great chapter, I love a story that leaves me with questions! Date: 03/19/2010 01:01 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: David McLeod A very smooth, polished chapter through which echoes Micah's angst. The deep drone of interior monologues at the beginning and the end wrap around notes of rapid-fire conversation and shrill action. Micah's affair with the dishwasher is both sad and funny, and cleverly brings the reader back into the boy's mind. Micah is becoming a solid, logical (despite his own illogic), three-dimensional character. He's still not quite a human being...there's too much sadness and anger...but, there is hope. The metaphor of the boarded up house was both brilliant and tantalizing. Great job! Date: 03/17/2010 05:28 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Nephylim Awesome chapter. The emotions were very raw and had me on the edge of my seat the whole time. i am very intrigued about the house. I wonder how Micah will come to terms with what is going on inside him. At the moment it feels like he's locked up so tight he;s either going explode again or implode. Date: 03/17/2010 05:23 AM Title: Confrontations Reviewer: Elezbed Ok now the cat is out of the bag ^^! A new mystery, I wonder what this house is... Good chapter and write more! Date: 03/17/2010 01:30 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: David McLeod A rich and complex chapter that brings new issues to an already rich and complex story. The metaphor of the cat is brilliant. (It is a metaphor, isn't it?) Date: 03/02/2010 07:14 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Cia The cat scene and the changing room scene had me laughing my ass off. Too funny, it was great! Plus, I could just imagine the look on Micah's face when he saw Elizabeth holding up the Pokemon boxers, lol. The end scene with the car accident scene was so sad, I just wanted to hug Micah. Can't wait for chapter 6! Date: 02/26/2010 11:38 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Nephylim That was an intersting chapter. It's cool knowing what's going on in Micah's head. I would personally have killed the cat. No cat EVER hisses and scratches at me without consequences... my own have learned.... and I have never laid a finger on them... well except to stroke them. The whole thing was perfect, although how they managed to get all that done in such little time I don't know. I loved the way that Micah, with his adolescent sense of logic and disregard for rules just took the trolley without thinking becuse he needed it and got huffy at the mere suggestion he might have stolen it. Avery is a good guy... and what an awesome ending. Date: 02/26/2010 02:51 AM Title: Crossing the Bridge Reviewer: Elezbed Poor Mika, he doesn't want to be here... And now a car accident... You are really bad to your characters... Good chapter and write more Date: 02/26/2010 12:34 AM Title: The First Night Reviewer: David McLeod Micah is so delightfully frustrating! I want to smack his head and tell him, "grow up!" But then I realize that he is. Growing up, that is. Slowly, deliberately, Linxe is showing us how Micah is gradually waking to the reality that surrounds him, and learning to deal with it. Date: 01/21/2010 07:24 AM Title: The First Night Reviewer: Elezbed So Micah wants to go again? I think that Joel is not going to come in four hours... I wonder if he will oversleep, he seems so sleepy ^^! Good chapter and write more! Date: 01/19/2010 03:55 PM Title: The First Night Reviewer: Nephylim worth waiting for. I like Micah. Date: 01/19/2010 03:03 PM Title: The First Night Reviewer: anordwell I love the "she tried to poison me" part! This chapter was full of bits that made me chuckle. The visual of Micah sniffing his pie with a suspicious look on his face had me in stitches! Great chapter! Date: 01/19/2010 02:14 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: domluka waiting to see if Patrick has what it takes to handle Micah... and if Micah has what it takes to handle Joel... Date: 01/14/2010 08:35 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: domluka waiting to see if Patrick has what it takes to handle Micah... and if Micah has what it takes to handle Joel... Date: 01/14/2010 08:35 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Linxe Termoil Thanks everyone for the reviews so far. Date: 01/08/2010 02:29 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: Nephylim He's such and ass... it's awesome. I really like Micah. Patrick is a pussy thought.. would be nice to see someone who was up to him. What were the suspicious looks for?... I suppose well find out. I know you had trouble with that chapter but you couldn't tell. It flowed nicely and I am still hooked Author's Response: I'm assuming by ass you meant Micah. Yes, he is an ass, and he has a nice ass. lol. Patrick is kind of a pussy; we'll see how that works out with Micah and him later on. The suspicious looks were because Micah was laughing out loud, that means his vocal cords work. Though, I may not have played that right. chapter 4 is in the works. Already got part of it written too Linxe Date: 12/12/2009 12:27 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: David McLeod A nice addition to the story. It's moving briskly but smoothly. There was some much needed comic relief in a couple of places...and it appears that there is a chance that Mikah will turn out to be a human being, after all. Oh, and Patrick...well, Patrick really needs a friend. Author's Response: Hrm. Patrick does need a friend, i'm trying to figure out his personality and its hard because the story isn't really about him, so I don't think much about him, I need to though. Because if I don't the story will fall apart. Thanks for the review Linxe Date: 12/12/2009 05:58 AM Title: The first thread Reviewer: Elezbed the suspicious looks for what???? Because he was laughing? Don't stop here^^!If he want to go will he go with Joel? Good chapter and write more Author's Response: The suspicious looks were for the laughing. I can't answer the second question yet. We'll see what happens Thanks for the review, Linxe Date: 12/11/2009 11:38 PM Title: The first thread Reviewer: anordwell Loved it of course Linxe...I really can't wait to see more interactions between Micah and Patrick! Bring on Ch. 4!!! Author's Response: Chapter 4 is going to be rather long and very interesting, I hope. Thanks for the review, Linxe Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: JamieD Wow Linxe this story is amazing! LOOVE IT Author's Response: Love you too Jamie Date: 12/01/2009 05:57 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: JamieD I'm crying already... Date: 12/01/2009 05:11 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: JensenC I am well and truely hooked now and i really can't wait for more. I was hoping it would go this way and Avery Hayes was a nice surprise, i'm wondering why Patrick didn't want him living with him though, will be intersting to find out. The hospital scene was very amusing, i think Patrick has a crush. I really felt the scene when they see his bruises for the first time, his confusion on why they look at him different is very realistic and I enjoyed how you wrote that scene as i could feel each of teh characters emotions even tho it wasn't overly done, very nice.Love how the story is developing and want more, so please get writing. Date: 11/24/2009 04:54 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: JensenC I got drawn into this story instantly and I really like the characters, i love the bond between Micha and Joel and how they have their own special way to communicate. The end part of this chapter was very sweet and amusing and sad but it was a nice balance not too much of anyone. I like how you don't over write anything, the angst is there but it is real not dramatic. I have worked with kids like Micha and they tend to be a lot like him in how they deak with things, so I love that part. I like how fast paced the story is too. I am looking forward to seein the brothers so i'm hoping they are reunited soon and I have afeeling the new chracters are going to be a big part of the brothers lives. I am very excited about this story as it has lots of potential to be a great story, I'm sure you will deliver. Anyway i will stop going on as i will get boring and i need sleep although i am very tempte dto just read more. Keep up the great writing. Date: 11/23/2009 11:15 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: Fastreader Well, Jon, it's shaping up and the holes have been filled in...now for more excitement! Date: 10/28/2009 02:54 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: David McLeod Deft characterization and a breezy narration make this a most enjoyable story. The interplay between Micah and the deputy, between Micah and Patrick, and between Micah and Joel is delightful. The "skinny pumpkin" was wonderful imagery. The story arc is solid. You've got a winner, here. Date: 10/27/2009 07:30 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Mykal I really like this story! It is not your typical abused teenager finally finds happiness and THAT exactly what makes this so appealing. Now I'm conflicted by which of your stories I like best this one or Sunny's Angle. Maybe I'll just have to have 2 favorites. Oh my, that's going to f**k up the balance of the universe. Please continue to write, you have a great gift. Date: 10/24/2009 01:01 PM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: acht-acht Okay, I´m hooked!! I love the boys and Deputy Hayes. What´s the deal about the Windletons? Cheers, Clara Date: 10/24/2009 05:44 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: librent Great start to this story, really looking forward to the next chapters. Date: 10/23/2009 07:08 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: anordwell See, I'm reviewing. Okay, first, so I don't get into trouble, I have to say that I really enjoyed this chapter. It was fast paced with plenty of action going on without being overwhelming. I have to say, aside from those typos, lol, I only noticed one thing besides how much I want to read more. You call the Judge, he midway through the chapter but it turns out to be a woman. We both know in a small town in Kitsap there is likely only to be one judge that does juvenile court. LOL. Okay, so now I feel guilty, so I have to say all good stuff. You really flesh out Micah, seeing new facets of his personality is very interesting, he never reacts the way I think he will. I agree with Nephylim, I thought he would talk for certain at the end when Patrick lies. Either that or bite him, Trying to ignore things I overheard about Ch.3 I remain in anticipation to find out where Michah, Joel, Patrick and Dpt. Hayes, who I think could have so much more to say. Also, I like the switch to italics for the ASL, you just might want to watch using it as well for Micah's thoughts if you want to use it exclusively. Keep up the writing. I'm waiting on tenterhooks.... Date: 10/23/2009 03:03 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Rizan Amazing story so far Linxe, I especially like the humor that's visible in the story while still making it serious and really...amazing?...I guess is the word I'm looking for. Can't wait to read the next chapter. Oh and remember what I said, if I don't get a happily-ever-after ending, I have a razor and I know how to ensure you never have children Date: 10/23/2009 02:57 AM Title: Dangling By a Thread Reviewer: Nephylim Well things are moving on a pace. I am liking Micah a lot but he's one hell of a mixed up kid. Kudos to him for keeping his mouth shut though, although I thought he would have said something when Patrick lied about what he said. Looking forward to the next installment Date: 10/23/2009 02:23 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: anordwell So you made me feel guilty for not reviewing your story. I really like the realism you bring to each story you write. Your characters are proposed very authentically. Their interactions, emotions and situations are very believable. I grew up in a small town in WA and the jail/DHS situation you showed was eerily similar to one that I knew in real life. A good story for me always follows something I could actually believe would occur. If you have any WA questions, look me up. Oh and totally off topic, but if you start a new series and need another beta, totally willing, I really like your writing. Cia Date: 10/18/2009 12:05 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Altimexis Excellent start to a story I will definitely want to follow. My only complaint is that the flow is a bit disjointed, which is likely a consequence of Micah's jumbled mind. I might suggest erring more on the side of readability. Otherwise, I'm impressed by how quickly the author has defined the characters' personalities, from Micah's 'consequences be damned' rebellious attitude to Joel's use of mutism, rationalization and adult-like dialogue as defense mechanisms to shield him from all the bad things happening in his life. Nice job! Date: 09/28/2009 05:58 PM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Nephylim Fabulous. The characters are so real. Poor Micah. I feel for both of them but it seems that Joel is getting by far the better of the deal, although he has lost his mother and now his brother... I don't count his dad as he is no loss to anyone. I hope that things improve... before Ronald gets involved. Date: 09/28/2009 11:48 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: David McLeod Once again, Linxe has demonstrated a perfect rapport with his characters. Realistic, gritty yet compassionate, the first post is a strong setup for what promises to be another superb story. Date: 09/28/2009 06:01 AM Title: Leaving the nest Reviewer: Fastreader Well, Jon...Since I didn't ever get back to the final on the beta version: This actually turned out much better than I've seen so far...it's very, very good...but the system didn't handle your italics for the signing back and forth (darn it)...but you finally got all the way into the reason for him sitting in that jail cell! A good reach about child neglect, and while this is just a story, situations like this DO happen in real life, all too sadly. Date: 09/28/2009 04:00 AM

These are the reviews for "Spider Webs" Copied over from E-fiction as of 08 December 2010