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Another good chapter; have to admit it was funny that Dylan, who was suppose to be the pack protector/enforcer, was the one that was freaking out Quinton. Good writing as always, good visualizations as well.
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Really enjoyed this first chapter; thought that the pacing and writing were both really good. Hope we get a little more background on Quinton before he was changed. Did he know about Weres? Does he know that Montana has a large Were population?
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Really enjoyed this whole book; this last chapter just flowed seamlessly and was just perfect, at least to me it was. I like how you ended it; Angus did not have to die; he has lost it all anyway. I have to wonder who all will follow Jon to his new territory.
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Could not take the quote section out... I really like how this is going. I don't think I realized before that Jon was adopted, did I miss it? I thought the pacing in this chapter was a little choppy, not anything to cause a problem but not as smooth as previous chapters. The writing and plotting was very good however.
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Hmmm, is Dylan going to turn out to be something more than he appears? I have a suspicion but we will see. Really well done chapter, can't wait to see where you take this.
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Really enjoyed this chapter; totally did not see the addition of the kid, it really caught me by surprise. I do want to see how Angus handles all of this when he finds out. I do think the pacing and characterizations are first rate.
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A really novel idea, corporate farms for picking the best people to turn into werewolves. This is truly an interesting beginning to this story.
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It isn't unusual for someone that has acted the way Chris has to hurt themselves in some way as they begin to deal with their past actions. Hope the support for him to deal with it all is in place.
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Going away to college is traumatic enough on it's own; but to be exiled from your own pack at the same time you are away from home really for the first time must be really hard to deal with; Chris seems to be doing a better job that I would in his situation.
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Self-reflection like this can be very hard on a person. It can be physically draining as well as mentally. Hope that he has the support to make it through this ordeal.
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The pacing and writing were both really good in this chapter. I do feel that Chris is already more of a fully formed character after the second chapter here than he was throughout the first book. Can't wait to see where you take this.
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Good start to the story; I enjoyed your previous ones and hope this is as good. I do thing it is hard to write in this style; as if someone is writing into a journal.
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Damn, it is just getting so good... I can't tell you how much I am enjoying this story. This chapter just made me feel it all; fear, terror, love, hate, sadness, loss...
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The Seer knows what she speaks of; for it is true that no good deed goes unpunished. That being said, sometimes you have to be the one to take the punishment to make sure the rest survive...
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Damn, what a fight; but the fact that Skold cared that much for Rebecca just really freaks me out. Really good writing with this chapter; the pacing was just perfect.
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Just wanted to say that I know some of my responses were a little short or cryptic but I know I posted feedback on this story somewhere before. I really did like this story. It was really well written and the characterizations and pacing were truly excellent.
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You never see or hear the one that kills you...
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Talk about getting the messenger shot; delivering a message like that to the leadership of North Korea would get him killed, he would be better off just surrendering himself now...
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Well, that will protect him from any civil or criminal charges... And his statement at the end was just spot on; way to many end up being part of the problem when something terrible happens instead of trying to fix it or make it better.
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Village of the Damned
centexhairysub commented on JamesSavik's story chapter in Village of the Damned
I truly despair that humanity will ever survive when I read something like this or see what happens on TV. This was really well written. I feel sick... -
The lady could not have been more right; so often what makes a hero is doing the right thing at the right time and for the right reason.
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I really liked this chapter; partly I think because I really do believe the next war will be because of people like the CIA, and other spy agencies here and abroad going rogue because of the lack of control that we and other governments have over them in reality. So much of what they do; no one knows about or controls but themselves...
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And now the real horror begins; the aftermath would be beyond belief. I cannot imagine how terrible it will be on all.
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the Eagle and the Dragon
centexhairysub commented on JamesSavik's story chapter in the Eagle and the Dragon
The writing and pacing was excellent in this chapter; you really felt the tension and dread from all involved...
