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The story seems to be developing really nicely. The pacing and development are both first rate. I have to say the fact that Ethan was aware enough to have seen the change is a factor that I had not thought about, but can see why secrecy would be a major issue for a society like this...

Not really a complaint but why in these stories is the son or daughter of the Alpha always such a little shit-disturber. Why can't they ever be responsible and ready to help out??? LOL, of course if that was always true there would probably never be any drama...

Interesting second chapter, can't wait to see where this is going...

Interesting first chapter; the story is really compelling and seems to be well thought out. It is an interesting premise and can't wait to see where it goes...

Oh but what a tangled web we weave when at first we practice to deceive.... Well, guess we know why daddy dearest wants Kel dead but this leaves so many questions open about Kel's past... Is his conditions genetic and if so does his mother's family share the trait???

Have to wonder if Kel isn't the one in control of something that his father doesn't want him to control. Dad went to court to keep control but if Kel shows up and proves he is in charge then it reverts back to him? So many twist and turns...

Would have thought that Mike was steadier than that... LOL... Interesting path we seem to be heading down...

Well, Noom actually handled that better than I thought he would. I guess I was hoping for a little more explanation on the background of the cat shifter paradox but maybe that is still coming...

Well, my guess is that all hell is about to break loose now.... I think everyone is about to find out a secret or two...

Getting a little stranger by the minute; so much seems to be just below the surface...

Different POV seems to take the story in a whole different direction...

Well, damn it; I was just positive that Zach had taken off and beat the hell out of Trevor but now a little itch in the back of my brain says maybe not... Thought Will handled everything as well as could be expected with Clara being around and glad to see Brent there trying to help out. Will knows something is wrong but I am not sure even he is sure what at this point. Really worries be that Wade is this worried. Glad that JP is going and hope that he can get Will to show up as well, but would not bet a fortune on it... Great chapter that seems to be setting a the scene for a whole lotta drama... Great work, Mark...

This story could go dark very quickly, I think... Have to wonder about Noom, he seems more than a little bit scary.

If he is a shifter, why not shift and just deal with Mohawk guy? What kind of shifter is he?

Interesting start, hard to figure out exactly where this is going; and that is actually a good thing. Interesting persona being developed and plotting appears good.

WOW, what a great chapter; I really enjoyed how Granger's feelings about leaving his ship was laid bare. I would think he was in an almost impossible situation. I understand why Daventry needed and wanted it to play out like this but still hard for Granger to deal with losing his ship and crew, even if it is just for a short while... I think it is really interesting how Granger views his relationship with Daventry. Granger has never had many real friends that were not bedmates at some point. Not sure that Granger is going to think Clifton being the one to take charge is all that fine and dandy. Wonder if Gatling is in the boat below as well? Can't wait to see where this leads to next, keep up the great work, Mark...

Great chapter and such a thoughtful gift on Thanksgiving, great way to end a long day and a half of my own drama... Glad to see that Brad is starting to fully recover his balance. I have to wonder how long it will last. Glad to see that his connection with Scott/Lark is just as strong. Really surprised that Wade would have thought that Will did not keep his word. Sort of disappointed in how Wade has handled some of this but we all have to cut him some slack. I am quite sure we all know who beat up Trevor, it was clearly Zach. He flew out under an assumed name and flew back and probably did the wreck on purpose to cover himself. Luckily, Will covered the one obvious mistake he made in cleaning up... Can't wait to see where you take us next, Mark... Great work...

Great new chapter, all the sections were excellent but I did enjoy the one with JJ the most... The writing and pacing on this chapter was just perfect. I loved how JJ handled Bellona and then how he dealt with Ella. I think even with his age, Bellona really does not underestimate JJ. I know part of this is because of his family but I think some of it is because how well he truly seems to understand both fashion and the business of fashion. There would not be a lot of people his age or even those years older that have that gift. I thought JJ's handling of Ella was just perfect. While JJ doesn't view family in quite the same way that Will does, I would not want to have to deal with him if you hurt one of his brothers. Ella and Patrick may find it harder to get by with JJ around than before... Stef and the family buying the parent company to Mode could be a very interesting side line to this and future stories... Will is the BOMB... It is just so amazing what he is trying to do with the land in Hawaii. His and JP's view of family match up so well and the fact he is trying to tie his generation together with something like this says so much... You could just feel the pride and love that was flowing from JP, Stef, and Brad after he got through explaining what he was trying to do. You could tell how impressed they all were with the fact he had thought about alternatives to what he wants to do if it is not something the rest of the family is interested in... So glad to see Darius; he is such a great supporting player. I wonder if his new friends has any idea of what he did for him? Can't wait to see what happens next... Great work, Mark, thanks for the new chapter...

So glad you are back and that we have a couple of chapters coming down the pike... Loved how Will dealt with Zach, JJ, and Darius. Really excited that Ryan is going to be around but would love to have a visit from Alistair... Still not sure about Buzz, sometimes those that seem really easy to trust are the ones you really have to watch out for...

Just wanted to let everyone know that Mark is okay; he just has additional responsibilities this semester and has not been able to write consistently. He will resume both stories when he is able...

Okay, just wanted to let everyone know that Mark is okay... He has some additional responsibilities this semester and has been much busier than in the past. While he has been able to do some writing, he just has not been able to do so consistently. He wants to thank everyone for their patience. He will resume both stories.

Great chapter, Mark, this was so well done and really seemed to be setting up some of the future not just for this story but this series... Loved how Claire and JJ interact and how JJ handled himself at the fashion preview; but did anyone think he would do anything else... Can't really see him with Zac Posen as anything other than friends, but who knows... I am assuming that you have created a caricature of Anna Wintour in your creation of Bellona. This is a story line that I find fascinating and could really see it leading somewhere really interesting... Liked how Brad handled everything except his confrontation with Marc, although I do find Marc's behavior more than a little childish... Can't tell where you are heading with Buzz; but then sometimes that is half the fun... Keep up the great work, Mark...

Fast turn around on the posting of this chapter, and what a chapter it was... Great battle scene, really enjoy Granger is able to understand the weather and other conditions around him and use them to his advantage. Fire at sea, but this time it was advantageous for Granger. I would think that the Bey lost a large number of men during this encounter. Eight xebecs and one small battleship would have had a pretty large crew, of course a large number of those on the xebecs rowing would have been slaves, probably chained in place... Horrible for them, and Granger being the person he is feels for that; but after the interview with the Sultan and this latest disaster; maybe the Bey has learned his lesson, but I doubt it... Found the scene at the small hotel with Granger and his memories very meaningful. Felt sad with the mention of Travers, as I always do... So strange for Granger to feel out of place, even if it is just within himself. He is usually so aware of himself and his place and position... Can't wait for the next leg of this voyage, keep up the great work, Mark...

Really enjoyed this chapter of Black Widow, very well written and plotted. I thought the scenes were all so well done and really moved everything along in one way or another. The scene with Brad and JJ and then Brad and Marc were so spot on. I do find it funny that Brad, who always tries to be in control; rarely is in the last few stories. I do feel for Marc, he had no way of knowing that the issue with the condo was Will and it must have really stung for him to have received it right after Brad left the way he did. I am not sure that finding out that the offer was from Will is going to make Marc feel much better. Even if he takes it and has a place that is his, Marc has some serious insecurities that he needs to work out and Brad pulling this on him will only make some of them worse... I actually could see Brad and Marc being friends with benefits if they could both work past some of their issues. Will was right and Brad needs to leave the issue of Carullo to him to discuss with JJ. I don't think that JJ would even be able to have that conversation with Brad and not be forced to kill him when it was over... While I think that JJ and Carullo might be an interesting pairing, I still am not sure they could over come some of their differences. Although, for some, it is those very differences that make the relationship work; I always thought JJ and Alex and Wade and Alex were just too much like each other. I loved that Claire is doing this for JJ. It will give him an entry into this world and I have a feeling he will grab and sashay with just perfectly. Claire is so much like JP in some ways, family is everything. Can't wait to see where this all is going, keep up the great work, Mark...

Really enjoyed the latest chapter, it gave me an excuse to stop and take a few moments to enjoy this wonderful story and relax. I found the scene where Nelson was being so telling. It must have been hard for senior officers to find themselves in the shade of junior officers, even though Nelson could hardly be called junior at this point in this career. However, his brilliance and reputation made it easy for as many to hate or be jealous of him as admire him. Granger was excellent aboard the captured ship. His behavior showed why most of those he faced admired and respected him even if they did want to beat him in battle. He was also able to gain a new insight and understanding of how the new French government was going to function or not function as they case may be as they moved forward. You would have thought that the Bey of Oran would have learned by now not to mess with Granger. Even with the long odds, I don't doubt that Granger will emerge victorious even if not unscathed. Can't wait to see how the upcoming battle plays out. Keep up the great work, Mark...